Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMMCZ3MFVF4T3GMVX3XZEBW

Run Details

Model:: GPT-4o, May 13th (temp=0)
Test:: Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:: Fantasy: entering an ancient ruin
Duration:: 14.2s
Cost:: $0.029805
Provider:: Azure

Evaluation summary

Score	Evaluator	Details Link
100.00%	Adverbs in dialogue tags	(details)
82.30%	AI-ism adverb frequency	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism character names	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism location names	(details)
0.00%	AI-ism word frequency	(details)
100.00%	Cliché density	(details)
78.70%	Emotion telling (show vs. tell)	(details)
83.33%	Filter word density	(details)
100.00%	Gibberish response detection	(details)
100.00%	Markdown formatting overuse	(details)
100.00%	Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)	(details)
54.96%	Name drop frequency	(details)
69.35%	Narrator intent-glossing	(details)
100.00%	"Not X but Y" pattern overuse	(details)
100.00%	Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)	(details)
100.00%	Paragraph length variance	(details)
100.00%	Passive voice overuse	(details)
78.79%	Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse	(details)
100.00%	Em-dash & semicolon overuse	(details)
94.00%	Purple prose (modifier overload)	(details)
100.00%	Repeated phrase echo	(details)
100.00%	Sentence length variance	(details)
47.45%	Sentence opener variety	(details)
48.31%	Adverb-first sentence starts	(details)
63.48%	Pronoun-first sentence starts	(details)
17.97%	Subject-first sentence starts	(details)
0.00%	Subordinate conjunction sentence starts	(details)
12.99%	Technical jargon density	(details)
53.57%	Useless dialogue additions	(details)
1.85%	Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)	(details)
72.9021%	Overall

Model input

System

You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue.

You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex.

Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.

User/Human

<codex>
<character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist">
  <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor>
  <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair>
  <height>5'6"</height>
  <age>25</age>
  <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar>
  <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description>
  <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card">
  <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor>
  <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height>
  <age>ageless</age>
  <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form>
  <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice>
  <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description>
  <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle">
  <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor>
  <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair>
  <height>5'5"</height>
  <age>300 years old</age>
  <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance>
  <speech>speaks in riddles</speech>
  <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints>
  <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion>
  <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description>
  <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory>
</character>

<location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony">
  <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler>
  <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor>
  <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description>
</location>

<location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)">
  <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation>
  <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones>
  <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior>
  <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora>
  <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description>
</location>

<item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas">
  <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor>
  <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial>
  <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size>
  <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior>
  <glow>faint inner glow</glow>
  <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description>
</item>

<item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts">
  <material>moonsilver</material>
  <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape>
  <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature>
  <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow>
  <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power>
  <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo>
  <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description>
</item>

<lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology">
  <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect>
  <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance>
  <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring>
  <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description>
</lore>
</codex>

Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre.

A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition.

Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore.
Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

Aurora Carter, known to her friends as Rory, stepped cautiously into the hidden clearing of the Fae Grove. The ancient oak standing stones that marked the boundary loomed behind her, their gnarled surfaces whispering secrets of ages past. She glanced back at Nyx, the Shade, who moved with an eerie grace, their form a shifting silhouette of living shadow. Beside them, Isolde Varga, the Seer, glided forward, her silver hair flowing like liquid moonlight.

The air within the grove was thick with enchantment, a heady mix of wildflowers and ancient magic. Time moved differently here, and Rory felt a strange disorientation, as if the minutes were stretching and folding in on themselves. She tightened her grip on the Heartstone Pendant around her neck, its deep crimson gem pulsing faintly with warmth.

"Stay close," Isolde murmured, her voice a soft melody that seemed to blend with the rustling leaves. "The grove can be... capricious."

Rory nodded, her bright blue eyes scanning the surroundings. The wildflowers bloomed in a riot of colors, their petals shimmering with an otherworldly glow. She could hear the distant hum of unseen insects and the gentle babble of a hidden stream. It was beautiful, but there was an underlying sense of unease, as if the grove itself was watching them.

Nyx moved ahead, their faintly glowing violet eyes flickering with curiosity. "This place is... different," they whispered, their voice like a breeze through the trees. "It feels alive."

"It is," Isolde replied, her pale lavender eyes distant. "The grove is a living entity, connected to the Fae realm. It breathes, it dreams."

Rory shivered, not entirely comforted by the Seer's words. She had come to the grove seeking answers, but the place felt like a labyrinth of mysteries. She glanced at the Fae-Forged Blade at her side, its slender, leaf-shaped form cold to the touch. Isolde had given it to her as a gift, a weapon forged in the Fae Courts, capable of cutting through magical wards and particularly effective against demons. She hoped she wouldn't need to use it.

As they ventured deeper, the grove seemed to shift around them. The trees grew taller, their branches intertwining to form a canopy that filtered the sunlight into dappled patterns on the forest floor. The air grew cooler, and Rory could feel the weight of centuries pressing down on her.

"Look," Nyx said, pointing to a cluster of mushrooms that glowed with a soft, bioluminescent light. "Fae fungi. They only grow in places touched by the Fae."

Rory crouched down to examine them, marveling at their delicate beauty. "They're incredible," she said, reaching out to touch one. It felt cool and slightly damp, like touching a piece of the night sky.

"Be careful," Isolde warned. "Some of them are poisonous, even to mortals."

Rory withdrew her hand, a sense of caution settling over her. She stood up and continued walking, her senses on high alert. The grove was a place of wonder, but it was also a place of danger.

They came to a small clearing where a pool of crystal-clear water lay nestled among the roots of an ancient oak. The water shimmered with a faint inner light, and Rory felt an inexplicable pull towards it.

"Is this...?" she began, but Isolde nodded before she could finish.

"The Heart of the Grove," the Seer said. "A place of great power. It is said that those who drink from it can glimpse the future."

Rory hesitated, her mind racing. She had come seeking answers, but the idea of seeing the future was both tempting and terrifying. She glanced at Nyx, who was watching her with an inscrutable expression.

"Do you want to know?" Nyx asked, their voice barely more than a whisper.

Rory took a deep breath, her heart pounding. "I don't know," she admitted. "What if I see something I can't change?"

Isolde stepped forward, her ethereal presence calming. "The future is not set in stone, Aurora. It is a tapestry of possibilities. What you see here is but one thread."

Rory nodded, her resolve strengthening. She knelt by the pool and cupped her hands, scooping up the cool, shimmering water. She brought it to her lips and drank, the liquid tasting of starlight and ancient secrets.

For a moment, nothing happened. Then, a vision unfolded before her eyes. She saw herself standing at the edge of a great chasm, the Heartstone Pendant glowing brightly around her neck. Across the chasm, a figure stood shrouded in shadow, their eyes burning with an otherworldly fire. She felt a surge of fear and determination, knowing that this was a pivotal moment, a choice that would shape her destiny.

The vision faded, and Rory found herself back in the grove, the pool's light dimming. She looked up at Isolde, her mind reeling.

"What did you see?" the Seer asked gently.

Rory took a deep breath, steadying herself. "A choice," she said. "A moment that will define everything."

Isolde nodded, her expression thoughtful. "The future is always in motion, Aurora. Remember that you have the power to shape it."

Rory stood, feeling a newfound sense of purpose. She didn't have all the answers, but she had a direction. She glanced at Nyx, who gave her a small, encouraging nod.

"Let's keep moving," she said, her voice steady. "There's more to discover."

As they continued their exploration, the grove seemed to open up before them, revealing hidden paths and secret glades. They found a grove of silver-leafed trees that sang softly in the breeze, their branches swaying in a hypnotic dance. They discovered a circle of standing stones etched with ancient runes, their surfaces glowing faintly with residual magic.

Rory felt a sense of awe and wonder, tempered by the ever-present undercurrent of unease. The grove was a place of beauty and danger, a reminder of the delicate balance between the mortal world and the realms beyond.

As they reached the edge of the grove, the ancient oak standing stones marking the boundary once more, Rory turned to Isolde. "Thank you," she said, her voice filled with gratitude. "For everything."

Isolde smiled, a hint of sadness in her eyes. "The path ahead will not be easy, Aurora. But you are stronger than you know. Trust in yourself, and in those who stand by your side."

Rory nodded, feeling a sense of resolve settle over her. She glanced at Nyx, who gave her a reassuring smile, their form flickering like a shadow in the twilight.

Together, they stepped out of the grove and back into the mortal world, the weight of their journey pressing down on them. The Fae Grove had given them a glimpse of the wonders and dangers that lay ahead, and Rory knew that their adventure was only just beginning.

Evaluation details

Result

Evaluator

Details

Meta Data

100.00%

Adverbs in dialogue tags

Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs

totalTags

adverbTagCount

adverbTags

0	"the Seer asked gently [gently]"

dialogueSentences

tagDensity

0.519

leniency

rawRatio

0.071

effectiveRatio

0.071

82.30%

AI-ism adverb frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)

wordCount

1130

totalAiIsmAdverbs

found

adverb	"cautiously"
count	1

adverb	"slightly"
count	1

adverb	"gently"
count	1

adverb	"softly"
count	1

highlights

0	"cautiously"
1	"slightly"
2	"gently"
3	"softly"

100.00%

AI-ism character names

Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

100.00%

AI-ism location names

Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

0.00%

AI-ism word frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)

wordCount

1130

totalAiIsms

found

word	"loomed"
count	1

word	"warmth"
count	1

word	"scanning"
count	1

word	"otherworldly"
count	2

word	"sense of"
count	5

word	"could feel"
count	1

word	"weight"
count	2

word	"crystal"
count	1

word	"shimmered"
count	1

word	"racing"
count	1

word	"whisper"
count	1

word	"pounding"
count	1

word	"tapestry"
count	1

word	"resolve"
count	2

word	"newfound"
count	1

word	"dance"
count	1

word	"etched"
count	1

word	"reminder"
count	1

highlights

0	"loomed"
1	"warmth"
2	"scanning"
3	"otherworldly"
4	"sense of"
5	"could feel"
6	"weight"
7	"crystal"
8	"shimmered"
9	"racing"
10	"whisper"
11	"pounding"
12	"tapestry"
13	"resolve"
14	"newfound"
15	"dance"
16	"etched"
17	"reminder"

100.00%

Cliché density

Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window

totalCliches	0
maxInWindow	0
found	(empty)
highlights	(empty)

78.70%

Emotion telling (show vs. tell)

Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling

emotionTells

narrationSentences

matches

0	"y with warmth"
1	"a surge of fear"
2	"a sense of awe"
3	"a sense of resolve"

83.33%

Filter word density

Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words

filterCount

hedgeCount

narrationSentences

filterMatches

(empty)

hedgeMatches

0	"seemed to"

100.00%

Gibberish response detection

Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)

analyzedSentences	85
gibberishSentences	0
adjustedGibberishSentences	0
longSentenceCount	0
runOnParagraphCount	0
giantParagraphCount	0
wordSaladCount	0
repetitionLoopCount	0
controlTokenCount	0
maxSentenceWordsSeen	27
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Markdown formatting overuse

Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting

markdownSpans	0
markdownWords	0
totalWords	1130
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)

Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks

totalAttributions	13
unquotedAttributions	0
matches	(empty)

54.96%

Name drop frequency

Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words

totalMentions

wordCount

947

uniqueNames

maxNameDensity

1.9

worstName

"Rory"

maxWindowNameDensity

worstWindowName

"Rory"

discoveredNames

Carter	1
Rory	18
Fae	4
Grove	2
Nyx	7
Shade	1
Isolde	11
Varga	1
Seer	4
Heartstone	2
Pendant	2
Fae-Forged	1
Blade	1
Courts	1

persons

0	"Carter"
1	"Rory"
2	"Isolde"
3	"Seer"
4	"Pendant"

places

0	"Fae"
1	"Grove"
2	"Nyx"
3	"Fae-Forged"

globalScore

0.55

windowScore

0.667

69.35%

Narrator intent-glossing

Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns

analyzedSentences

glossingSentenceCount

matches

0	"melody that seemed to blend with the rustling leaves"
1	"felt like a labyrinth of mysteries"

100.00%

"Not X but Y" pattern overuse

Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words

totalMatches	0
per1kWords	0
wordCount	1130
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)

Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses

thatCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"knew that their"

100.00%

Paragraph length variance

Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts

totalParagraphs

mean

34.24

std

18.04

0.527

sampleLengths

0	74
1	57
2	22
3	60
4	28
5	24
6	78
7	49
8	27
9	34
10	12
11	37
12	37
13	11
14	26
15	34
16	14
17	21
18	29
19	36
20	69
21	23
22	8
23	17
24	21
25	30
26	12
27	57
28	38
29	33
30	35
31	29
32	48

100.00%

Passive voice overuse

Target: ≤2% passive sentences

passiveCount	0
totalSentences	72
matches	(empty)

78.79%

Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse

Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs

pastProgressiveCount

totalVerbs

165

matches

0	"were stretching"
1	"was watching"
2	"was watching"

100.00%

Em-dash & semicolon overuse

Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons

emDashCount	0
semicolonCount	0
flaggedSentences	0
totalSentences	85
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

94.00%

Purple prose (modifier overload)

Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking

wordCount

952

adjectiveStacks

stackExamples

0	"slender, leaf-shaped form"

adverbCount

adverbRatio

0.028361344537815126

lyAdverbCount

lyAdverbRatio

0.015756302521008403

100.00%

Repeated phrase echo

Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)

totalSentences	85
echoCount	0
echoWords	(empty)

100.00%

Sentence length variance

Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts

totalSentences

mean

13.29

std

6.07

0.456

sampleLengths

0	18
1	20
2	21
3	15
4	17
5	21
6	19
7	17
8	5
9	9
10	15
11	17
12	19
13	11
14	14
15	3
16	9
17	15
18	9
19	17
20	17
21	27
22	8
23	11
24	22
25	16
26	16
27	11
28	11
29	9
30	14
31	4
32	8
33	11
34	11
35	15
36	21
37	16
38	11
39	8
40	18
41	5
42	17
43	12
44	14
45	8
46	5
47	8
48	7
49	22

47.45%

Sentence opener variety

Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers

consecutiveRepeats	8
diversityRatio	0.3411764705882353
totalSentences	85
uniqueOpeners	29

48.31%

Adverb-first sentence starts

Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb

adverbCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"Then, a vision unfolded before"

ratio

0.014

63.48%

Pronoun-first sentence starts

Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun

pronounCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"She glanced back at Nyx,"
1	"She tightened her grip on"
2	"She could hear the distant"
3	"It was beautiful, but there"
4	"they whispered, their voice like"
5	"She had come to the"
6	"She glanced at the Fae-Forged"
7	"She hoped she wouldn't need"
8	"she said, reaching out to"
9	"It felt cool and slightly"
10	"She stood up and continued"
11	"They came to a small"
12	"she began, but Isolde nodded"
13	"She had come seeking answers,"
14	"She glanced at Nyx, who"
15	"She knelt by the pool"
16	"She brought it to her"
17	"She saw herself standing at"
18	"She felt a surge of"
19	"She looked up at Isolde,"

ratio

0.391

17.97%

Subject-first sentence starts

Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject

subjectCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"Aurora Carter, known to her"
1	"The ancient oak standing stones"
2	"She glanced back at Nyx,"
3	"The air within the grove"
4	"Time moved differently here, and"
5	"She tightened her grip on"
6	"Isolde murmured, her voice a"
7	"Rory nodded, her bright blue"
8	"The wildflowers bloomed in a"
9	"She could hear the distant"
10	"It was beautiful, but there"
11	"Nyx moved ahead, their faintly"
12	"they whispered, their voice like"
13	"Isolde replied, her pale lavender"
14	"Rory shivered, not entirely comforted"
15	"She had come to the"
16	"She glanced at the Fae-Forged"
17	"Isolde had given it to"
18	"She hoped she wouldn't need"
19	"The trees grew taller, their"

ratio

0.884

0.00%

Subordinate conjunction sentence starts

Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction

subConjCount	0
totalSentences	69
matches	(empty)
ratio	0

12.99%

Technical jargon density

Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns

analyzedSentences

technicalSentenceCount

matches

0	"The ancient oak standing stones that marked the boundary loomed behind her, their gnarled surfaces whispering secrets of ages past."
1	"She glanced back at Nyx, the Shade, who moved with an eerie grace, their form a shifting silhouette of living shadow."
2	"Time moved differently here, and Rory felt a strange disorientation, as if the minutes were stretching and folding in on themselves."
3	"It was beautiful, but there was an underlying sense of unease, as if the grove itself was watching them."
4	"She glanced at Nyx, who was watching her with an inscrutable expression."
5	"They found a grove of silver-leafed trees that sang softly in the breeze, their branches swaying in a hypnotic dance."
6	"They discovered a circle of standing stones etched with ancient runes, their surfaces glowing faintly with residual magic."
7	"She glanced at Nyx, who gave her a reassuring smile, their form flickering like a shadow in the twilight."

53.57%

Useless dialogue additions

Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments

totalTags

uselessAdditionCount

matches

0	"Nyx asked, their voice barely more than a whisper"
1	"she said, her voice steady"

1.85%

Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)

Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags

totalTags

fancyCount

fancyTags

0	"Isolde murmured (murmur)"
1	"they whispered (whisper)"
2	"Isolde warned (warn)"
3	"she admitted (admit)"

dialogueSentences

tagDensity

0.481

leniency

0.963

rawRatio

0.308

effectiveRatio

0.296

72.9021%