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Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMMHBQKYM517DAXHA64VB5S
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Model:
Mistral Large
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Thriller: chase through city streets
Duration:
34.6s
Cost:
$0.012948
Model input
System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
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Meta
AI
The rain came down in sheets, turning the London streets into a slick, reflective maze. Detective Harlow Quinn’s breath fogged in front of her as she sprinted, her boots splashing through puddles that glowed under the sickly orange of the streetlights. Her leather
watch
creaked against her wrist, the second hand ticking in time with her pulse. Eighteen years on the force, and she’d never chased a suspect like this—never had one slip through her fingers so easily, only to vanish into the mouth of an alley like a ghost. She skidded to a halt at the alley’s entrance, her sharp jaw set. The rain drummed against her shoulders, soaking through her coat. The suspect—Tomás Herrera, if her intel was right—had been a blur of motion, his dark curls plastered to his forehead, his Saint Christopher medallion
glinting
under the neon signs before he’d ducked out of sight. She’d seen the scar on his forearm, the way he moved like a man who knew how to run. And now he
was gone
. Quinn exhaled
sharply
, her fingers flexing around the grip of her torch. The alley was narrow, lined with overflowing bins and the skeletal remains of fire escapes. A rat scuttled past her boot, its tail flicking through the water. She stepped forward, her breath shallow, her senses dialed up to a razor’s edge. The air smelled of wet pavement and something older, something metallic and faintly sweet, like copper and ozone. Then she saw it—a
flicker
of movement near the far end, where the alley spilled into a wider street. A shadow, quick as a blink, darting left. Quinn broke into a run, her coat flaring behind her. She rounded the corner just in time to see Herrera slip into a doorway beneath a
flicker
ing green neon sign: *The Raven’s Nest*. She slowed, her instincts prickling. The bar was a known haunt for the city’s underbelly, but this was different. Herrera wasn’t just hiding. He
was leading
her somewhere. Quinn pushed through the door, the warmth of the bar hitting her like a wave.
The air was thick with
the scent of whiskey and old paper, the walls lined with yellowed maps and black-and-white photographs. A few patrons glanced up, their expressions guarded. A bartender with a face like weathered oak wiped a glass with a rag, his eyes tracking her as she moved. She didn’t have time for this. “Police,” she said, flashing her badge. “I’m looking for a man. Dark hair, scar on his left arm. Came in here just now.” The bartender’s gaze
flicked
to the back of the room, then back to her. “Haven’t seen him.” Quinn’s jaw tightened. She knew a lie when she heard one. She strode past the bar, her boots thudding against the worn floorboards. The back of the room was dim, the light swallowed by shadows. A bookshelf stood against the wall, its shelves crammed with leather-bound volumes. She ran her fingers along the spines, pressing here and there, searching for the telltale click of a hidden mechanism. There. The bookshelf swung inward, revealing a narrow passage. Quinn’s pulse spiked. She stepped through, the door clicking shut behind her. The air in the hidden room was cooler, the silence heavier. A single bulb hung from the ceiling, casting long shadows. The walls
were lined
with crates, their contents hidden in the dark. And then she saw the door at the far end—a metal hatch,
slightly
ajar. Quinn hesitated. She was off the books here. No backup, no warrant, no idea what waited on the other side. But Herrera was getting away, and she couldn’t
let that happen
. Not after what
happened to
Morris. She pushed the hatch open. A set of rusted stairs descended into darkness. The air that rose to meet her was damp, carrying the scent of earth and something older, something that made the hairs on the back of her neck stand on end. She shone her torch down the steps, the beam cutting through the gloom. The walls
were lined
with tiles, their patterns faded and cracked. An abandoned Tube station. Quinn swallowed hard. She’d heard the rumors—whispers of a black market that moved with the full moon, a place where the rules of the world didn’t apply. The Veil Market. She took the first step. The stairs creaked under her
weight
, the sound
echoing
into the dark. The deeper she went, the colder it got, her breath misting in front of her. At the bottom, the tunnel opened into a cavernous space, the ceiling lost in shadow. Stalls lined the walls, their wares hidden under tarps and
flicker
ing lanterns. The air hummed with a low, electric energy, like the moment before a storm. And then she saw him. Herrera stood near a stall at the far end, his back to her, talking to a figure shrouded in a hooded cloak. Quinn ducked behind a stack of crates, her heart hammering. She couldn’t hear what they
were saying
, but Herrera’s posture was tense, his hands gesturing
sharply
. The hooded figure reached into their robes, pulling out a small, bone-white token. Herrera took it, nodding once before turning toward another tunnel. Quinn’s fingers tightened around her torch. She had to follow him. Had to see where he
was going
, what he
was involved
in. But the market was alive with movement now—figures slipping between the stalls, their voices a low murmur. She was out of her depth here. She took a step forward, then froze. A hand clamped down on her shoulder. Quinn spun, her free hand going for her sidearm, but the figure was faster. A blade glinted in the dim light, pressing against her throat. She froze, her breath shallow. “You don’t belong here, Detective,” a voice hissed in her ear. The accent was thick, Eastern European. The blade pressed harder, just shy of breaking skin. Quinn’s mind raced. She could fight. Could
try to
disarm him. But one wrong move, and she’d be bleeding out in this underground hell. “Let me go,” she said, her voice steady despite the adrenaline coursing through her. “I’m not here for you.” The blade didn’t move. “Then who are you here for?” Quinn’s jaw tightened. She had one play. “Tomás Herrera.” A pause. Then the pressure on her throat eased, just
slightly
. “Why?” “He’s a suspect in an ongoing investigation,” she said. “And I’m not leaving without him.” The figure chuckled, a dry, humorless sound. “You’re either
very
brave or
very
stupid, Detective.” Quinn didn’t answer. She was both. The blade withdrew. The figure stepped back, melting into the shadows. “Go. But if you’re still here when the market moves, you’ll wish you’d never come down those stairs.” Quinn didn’t wait for a second warning. She turned, her torch cutting through the dark as she sprinted after Herrera. The tunnel he’d taken was narrower, the walls slick with moisture. The air smelled of salt and something sharper, like ozone and burning metal. And then she saw it—the end of the tunnel, a faint glow spilling from the other side. She slowed, pressing herself against the wall. Peering around the corner, she saw Herrera standing in a small chamber, his back to her. A figure in a long coat stood across from him, their face obscured by a wide-brimmed hat. Between them, a table
was covered
in vials of swirling liquid, their colors shifting like oil on water. Quinn’s breath caught. This was it. This was what she’d been chasing. She stepped forward, her boot scuffing against the stone. Herrera turned. His warm brown eyes locked onto hers, widening in recognition. “Detective,” he said, his voice low. “You shouldn’t have followed me.” Quinn’s hand hovered over her sidearm. “Step away from the table, Herrera. Now.” The figure in the coat didn’t move. “She’s persistent,” they said, their voice like gravel. “I’ll give her that.” Herrera didn’t take his eyes off Quinn. “You don’t understand what you’re walking into.” “Then explain it to me,” she said. “Because right now, all I see is a man with a lot to hide.” Herrera exhaled
sharply
. “You want the truth? Fine. But you’re not going to like it.” The figure in the coat chuckled. “Oh, this should be good.” Quinn’s fingers twitched. She
was running
out of time. Out of options. And then the lights
flickered
. The chamber plunged into darkness.
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.0000%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
7
adverbTagCount
0
adverbTags
(empty)
50.4249%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)
wordCount
1412
totalAiIsmAdverbs
7
found
0
adverb
"sharply"
count
3
1
adverb
"slightly"
count
2
2
adverb
"very"
count
2
highlights
0
"sharply"
1
"slightly"
2
"very"
100.0000%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
57.5071%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)
wordCount
1412
totalAiIsms
6
found
0
word
"flickered"
count
1
1
word
"flicker"
count
1
2
word
"flicked"
count
1
3
word
"glinting"
count
1
4
word
"weight"
count
1
5
word
"echoing"
count
1
highlights
0
"flickered"
1
"flicker"
2
"flicked"
3
"glinting"
4
"weight"
5
"echoing"
100.0000%
Cliche density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
1
maxInWindow
1
found
0
label
"air was thick with"
count
1
highlights
0
"The air was thick with"
100.0000%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
126
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Filter word density
Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
1
hedgeCount
2
narrationSentences
126
filterMatches
0
"watch"
hedgeMatches
0
"happened to"
1
"try to"
100.0000%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
1
totalSentences
142
matches
0
"let that happen"
100.0000%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
51
mean
27.43
std
24
cv
0.875
sampleLengths
0
90
1
82
2
71
3
60
4
28
5
65
6
6
7
23
8
17
9
67
10
1
11
53
12
14
13
37
14
5
15
67
16
30
17
5
18
68
19
5
20
71
21
47
22
7
23
7
24
30
25
26
26
24
27
19
28
10
29
9
30
12
31
15
32
15
33
6
34
29
35
44
36
17
37
58
38
12
39
9
40
2
41
21
42
13
43
19
44
14
45
21
46
15
47
11
48
12
49
5
100.0000%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤5% passive sentences
passiveCount
5
totalSentences
126
matches
0
"was gone"
1
"were lined"
2
"were lined"
3
"was involved"
4
"was covered"
100.0000%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
4
totalVerbs
221
matches
0
"was leading"
1
"were saying"
2
"was going"
3
"was running"
94.0000%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
1268
adjectiveStacks
1
stackExamples
0
"small, bone-white token."
adverbCount
33
adverbRatio
0.026025236593059938
lyAdverbCount
11
lyAdverbRatio
0.008675078864353312
100.0000%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
142
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.0000%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
142
mean
9.85
std
6.39
cv
0.648
sampleLengths
0
15
1
26
2
16
3
33
4
13
5
10
6
35
7
19
8
5
9
12
10
15
11
12
12
14
13
18
14
19
15
8
16
10
17
23
18
5
19
14
20
4
21
5
22
15
23
21
24
8
25
21
26
6
27
6
28
17
29
14
30
3
31
3
32
8
33
12
34
12
35
12
36
20
37
1
38
8
39
3
40
9
41
11
42
10
43
12
44
14
45
2
46
6
47
12
48
11
49
6
42.9577%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
10
diversityRatio
0.2535211267605634
totalSentences
142
uniqueOpeners
36
67.8571%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
7
fancyCount
3
fancyTags
0
"she said, flashing her badge (say, flash)"
1
"a voice hissed in her ear (hiss)"
2
"she said, her voice steady despite the adrenaline coursing through her (say, course)"
88.9851%