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Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMMJR64WVK5SSHFE00BAXVW
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Model:
Ministral 3B
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Mystery: examining a crime scene
Duration:
4.6s
Cost:
$0.000086
Model input
System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
Model response
Messages
Meta
AI
The air in the abandoned Tube station was thick with the scent of damp stone and something older—something that clung to the walls like a second skin. Detective Harlow Quinn adjusted the strap of her leather
watch
, its worn leather creaking
softly
as she stepped into the dim glow of a flickering neon sign, its blue hue bleeding through the rusted metal grates. The Veil Market had moved again tonight, and Quinn had come prepared, her breath steady despite the chill seeping through her boots. She crouched beside the body, her sharp jaw set in military precision. The man lay sprawled across the platform, his fingers twitching as if still reaching for something. His coat
was torn
, the pockets ripped open, but nothing inside—no wallet, no phone, no sign of struggle. The only thing left was the way his eyes had been—glassier than usual, the pupils dilated, as if something had burned them from the inside out. “You sure this is right?” DS Morris’s voice cut through the silence, sharp and weary. Quinn looked up to see him leaning against the wall, his own coat buttoned tight against the cold. His face was pale, his usual confidence dulled by the
weight
of the past three years. Quinn exhaled through her nose, the scent of old blood and something metallic clinging to her uniform. “This isn’t just a murder,” Quinn said, brushing her salt-and-pepper hair back. “It’s something else. Look at the way the light hits his coat. It’s not natural.” Morris followed her gaze. The fabric
shimmered
faintly, as if the fabric itself
was reacting
to unseen energy. “You’re talking about the Veil Market again, aren’t you?” Quinn didn’t answer right away. She reached into her pocket and pulled out the Veil Compass, its brass casing catching the dim light. The needle had settled—
slowly
,
deliberately
—toward the center of the station. Not north. Not east. Not west. The needle pointed straight at the man’s chest. Morris frowned. “That’s impossible. The compass doesn’t work here.” “Doesn’t it?” Quinn flipped the compass over. The sigils on the face
etched
into the brass glowed faintly, pulsing like a slow heartbeat. “It’s not just pointing toward a rift. It’s pointing toward *him*.” A beat of silence str
etched
between them. Morris’s fingers twitched, as if he wanted to touch the compass but didn’t dare. Quinn stood, her boots scuffing against the concrete. “We need to find out what’s happening here. And we need to do it fast.” --- Eva Kowalski’s satchel
was packed
with books, her red curls bouncing as she adjusted the glasses perched on her nose. She’d been waiting in the shadows of the abandoned station, her freckled complexion pale under the flickering light. The Veil Market was a place of secrets, and she’d come here to uncover one. “You’re sure this is the right place?” she asked, her voice
barely above a whisper
. Quinn had called her earlier, her urgency cutting through the usual bureaucratic delays. “The last time you mentioned this, it was a dead end.” Quinn didn’t answer. Instead, she gestured toward the body. “We need to talk to the people who run this place. And we need to know what’s happening with the rifts.” Eva’s breath hitched. “The rifts? You’re not just talking about murders anymore.” “No,” Quinn said, her voice low. “I’m talking about something worse.” --- The Veil Market’s entrance was a narrow sliver of light, guarded by a figure who didn’t look human. His skin was too smooth, his movements too precise, like a man who had spent a lifetime learning to disappear. Quinn and Morris stepped forward, their boots crunching on broken glass. “You want to know about the rifts?” the figure asked, his voice like dry leaves skittering across stone. “Then you’ll have to pay.” Quinn didn’t flinch. “We’re not here for money.” The figure tilted his head, his eyes—if they could be called that—
glinting
with something like amusement. “Then you’re here for the truth. That’s a risk.” Eva stepped forward, her satchel clinking against the stone. “We’re here for answers.” The figure’s gaze
flickered
to her. “You’re not with them.” Eva’s fingers tightened around the handle of her satchel. “Who?” “Aurora,” Quinn said, her voice cutting through the tension. “She’s involved.” The figure’s expression darkened. “She’s been asking about you.” “Then she knows more than she’s letting on,” Quinn said, her jaw set. “We’re not leaving until we know what’s happening.” --- Back in the station, Quinn and Morris sat in the dim light, the Veil Compass between them. Morris rubbed his temples, his usual sharpness dulled by exhaustion. “This isn’t just a supernatural market. It’s a front. Something’s pulling people in.” Quinn nodded. “And the rifts? They’re not just portals. They’re traps.” Eva’s voice cut through the silence. “You think this is connected to the loss of your partner?” Quinn’s eyes locked onto hers. “I think it’s worse.” Morris exhaled
sharply
. “Then we need to move. Now.” Quinn stood, her boots making no sound on the concrete. “We go in. We find out what’s happening. And we make sure no one else gets pulled into this.” Eva’s hands
trembled
slightly
. “And if they don’t want to help?” Quinn’s gaze was steady. “Then we find someone who will.” Outside, the wind howled through the station, carrying with it the scent of something ancient and forgotten. Quinn adjusted her
watch
, its leather creaking
softly
. The Veil Market had moved again. And this time, she
wasn’t leaving
without answers.
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.0000%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
6
adverbTagCount
0
adverbTags
(empty)
24.0781%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)
wordCount
922
totalAiIsmAdverbs
7
found
0
adverb
"deliberately"
count
1
1
adverb
"sharply"
count
1
2
adverb
"slightly"
count
1
3
adverb
"slowly"
count
1
4
adverb
"softly"
count
2
5
adverb
"barely above a whisper"
count
1
highlights
0
"deliberately"
1
"sharply"
2
"slightly"
3
"slowly"
4
"softly"
5
"barely above a whisper"
100.0000%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
34.9241%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)
wordCount
922
totalAiIsms
6
found
0
word
"flickered"
count
1
1
word
"shimmered"
count
1
2
word
"glinting"
count
1
3
word
"trembled"
count
1
4
word
"weight"
count
1
5
word
"etched"
count
1
highlights
0
"flickered"
1
"shimmered"
2
"glinting"
3
"trembled"
4
"weight"
5
"etched"
100.0000%
Cliche density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
0
maxInWindow
0
found
(empty)
highlights
(empty)
100.0000%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
64
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Filter word density
Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
2
hedgeCount
0
narrationSentences
64
filterMatches
0
"watch"
hedgeMatches
(empty)
100.0000%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
0
totalSentences
90
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
36
mean
25.36
std
20.64
cv
0.814
sampleLengths
0
85
1
72
2
66
3
27
4
27
5
47
6
9
7
34
8
44
9
1
10
53
11
39
12
30
13
12
14
11
15
1
16
49
17
23
18
8
19
25
20
13
21
10
22
10
23
11
24
9
25
21
26
1
27
40
28
11
29
17
30
9
31
9
32
29
33
11
34
10
35
39
100.0000%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤5% passive sentences
passiveCount
2
totalSentences
64
matches
0
"was torn"
1
"was packed"
100.0000%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
2
totalVerbs
110
matches
0
"was reacting"
1
"wasn’t leaving"
100.0000%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
665
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
21
adverbRatio
0.031578947368421054
lyAdverbCount
10
lyAdverbRatio
0.015037593984962405
100.0000%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
90
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.0000%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
90
mean
10.14
std
6.76
cv
0.667
sampleLengths
0
27
1
36
2
22
3
12
4
16
5
18
6
26
7
15
8
18
9
16
10
17
11
12
12
15
13
4
14
14
15
9
16
5
17
18
18
10
19
2
20
2
21
2
22
8
23
2
24
7
25
7
26
16
27
11
28
7
29
14
30
8
31
15
32
1
33
20
34
18
35
15
36
15
37
13
38
11
39
3
40
6
41
21
42
3
43
9
44
6
45
5
46
1
47
18
48
20
49
11
47.7011%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
2
diversityRatio
0.27586206896551724
totalSentences
87
uniqueOpeners
24
91.6667%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
6
fancyCount
2
fancyTags
0
"Quinn said, brushing her salt-and-pepper hair back (say, brush)"
1
"Quinn said, her voice cutting through the tension (say, cut)"
88.1394%