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Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMMK472K121CHNEXPJK4060
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Model:
Mistral Large 2
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Mystery: examining a crime scene
Duration:
27.2s
Cost:
$0.010522
Model input
System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
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The abandoned Tube station beneath Camden reeked of damp concrete and old urine, the kind of stink that clung to the back of the throat and wouldn’t let go. Detective Harlow Quinn adjusted the beam of her torch, sweeping it across the graffiti-scarred walls of the platform. The air hummed with the low thrum of distant trains, a ghostly reminder of the world above. But down here, the rules were different. She could feel it in the way her pulse quickened, in the prickle of unease along her spine. “You’re late,” a voice called from the shadows. DS Priya Kapoor stepped into the light, her dark eyes sharp beneath the brim of her cap. She held a evidence bag in one gloved hand, the plastic crinkling as she turned it over. Inside was a small brass compass, its face
etched
with strange, looping symbols. Quinn exhaled through her nose. “Traffic on the North Circular was a nightmare. What’ve we got?” “Male, mid-thirties, no ID. Found him slumped against the wall over there.” Kapoor gestured to a huddled shape beneath a flickering emergency light. The body was half-hidden in the gloom, but Quinn could make out the waxy pallor of the man’s skin, the way his fingers curled into the concrete like he’d been trying to claw his way out. “No obvious signs of trauma. No blood, no defensive wounds. Just… dead.” Quinn crouched beside the body, her torchlight catching the
glint
of something metallic near the man’s outstr
etched
hand. A bone token, carved with the same sigils as the compass. She didn’t touch it. Not yet. “Tox screen?” “Already sent it off. But I’m telling you, Quinn, this isn’t drugs.” Kapoor’s voice was low, urgent. “Look at his face.” Quinn did. The man’s mouth
was frozen
in a silent scream, his eyes wide and glassy, the pupils dilated to black pools. But it wasn’t fear she saw there. It was something else. Something like *recognition*. Like he’d seen the thing that killed him and understood, too late, what it was. She stood, brushing dust from her knees. “You said no defensive wounds. But his nails are broken. He was fighting.” “Or trying to dig through the wall.” Kapoor shrugged. “Maybe he was high. Maybe he thought he could tunnel his way out.” Quinn didn’t answer. Instead, she turned her attention to the compass in the evidence bag. The needle
wasn’t pointing
north. It
wasn’t pointing
at anything. It spun
lazily
, as if caught in an unfelt breeze. “Where’d you find this?” she asked. “Clutched in his hand. Like he was using it to
navigate
.” Quinn’s jaw tightened. She’d seen enough strange things in her eighteen years on the force to know when something didn’t fit. And this? This was a puzzle with missing pieces. “You run the symbols?” “Yeah. No hits in the usual databases. I was about to send them to the museum, see if their occult division has any ideas.” Quinn’s fingers twitched toward her wrist, where the leather of her
watch
strap was worn smooth from years of fidgeting. The museum. The *occult* division. She thought of the last case she’d worked with DS Morris, the way the crime scene photos had shown things that couldn’t be real. The way Morris had looked at her, just before the end, like he’d seen something she hadn’t. “Don’t,” she said
sharply
. “Not yet.” Kapoor raised an eyebrow. “You’ve got a better idea?” Quinn didn’t. But she knew someone who might. --- The British Museum’s restricted archives were a labyrinth of towering shelves and whispered secrets. The air smelled of old paper and lemon oil, the kind of scent that made Quinn’s nose itch. She’d called ahead, and Eva Kowalski
was waiting
for her in a small reading nook, a stack of leather-bound books at her elbow. Eva’s green eyes
flicked
up as Quinn approached, her round glasses catching the dim light. “Detective Quinn,” she said, tucking a curl of red hair behind her left ear. “This is a surprise.” Quinn didn’t waste time on pleasantries. She placed the evidence bag on the table between them. “What is this?” Eva’s fingers hovered over the compass, not quite touching the plastic. “Where did you find it?” “Crime scene. Male victim, mid-thirties, no ID. He was holding this when he died.” Eva’s breath hitched. She reached for the bag, then pulled her hand back like it had burned her. “This isn’t just a compass,” she said quietly. “It’s a Veil Compass. It points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal.” Quinn’s pulse spiked. “Supernatural.” “Yes.” Eva met her eyes. “You’ve seen them before, haven’t you? The things that don’t fit.” Quinn thought of Morris. Of the way his body had
been found
, twisted in a way that defied physics. Of the way the coroner’s report had listed “unknown causes” in the space where the truth should have been. She didn’t answer. Instead, she asked, “What’s the Veil Market?” Eva’s fingers twisted together. “It’s a black market. For things that shouldn’t exist. Enchanted objects, banned substances, information. It moves every full moon, hidden in places like this.” She gestured to the shadows beyond the reading nook, as if the market might be lurking in the stacks. “You need a bone token to get in.” Quinn’s gaze
flicked
to the dead man’s broken nails. To the token she’d left at the scene, still half-buried in the concrete. Eva leaned forward. “Whoever that man was, he wasn’t just lost. He was *running*. And whatever he was running from, it followed him.” Quinn’s stomach twisted. She thought of the way the compass needle had spun, aimless and unmoored. Like it had lost its way. Like its owner had, too. She stood abruptly, her chair scraping against the floor. “I need to get back to the scene.” Eva caught her wrist. “Quinn. Be careful. If the Veil Market is involved, you’re not just dealing with criminals. You’re dealing with things that don’t play by the rules.” Quinn looked down at Eva’s hand, at the freckles dusting her knuckles. She thought of Morris again, of the way he’d laughed the last time they’d worked a case together, his voice warm and rough with too many cigarettes. “I know,” she said. And she did. But that didn’t mean she was going to stop.
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
0.0000%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
7
adverbTagCount
3
adverbTags
0
"she said sharply [sharply]"
1
"she said quietly [quietly]"
2
"Instead, she asked, [Instead,]"
81.1321%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)
wordCount
1060
totalAiIsmAdverbs
2
found
0
adverb
"lazily"
count
1
1
adverb
"sharply"
count
1
highlights
0
"lazily"
1
"sharply"
100.0000%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
52.8302%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)
wordCount
1060
totalAiIsms
5
found
0
word
"flicked"
count
2
1
word
"glint"
count
1
2
word
"etched"
count
1
3
word
"navigate"
count
1
highlights
0
"flicked"
1
"glint"
2
"etched"
3
"navigate"
100.0000%
Cliche density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
0
maxInWindow
0
found
(empty)
highlights
(empty)
100.0000%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
79
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Filter word density
Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
1
hedgeCount
0
narrationSentences
79
filterMatches
0
"watch"
hedgeMatches
(empty)
100.0000%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
0
totalSentences
101
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
39
mean
27.03
std
20.46
cv
0.757
sampleLengths
0
89
1
55
2
16
3
71
4
37
5
21
6
51
7
20
8
22
9
35
10
6
11
11
12
34
13
24
14
66
15
6
16
9
17
8
18
1
19
55
20
33
21
19
22
16
23
14
24
39
25
4
26
16
27
38
28
10
29
55
30
22
31
23
32
22
33
5
34
17
35
29
36
39
37
4
38
12
100.0000%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤5% passive sentences
passiveCount
2
totalSentences
79
matches
0
"was frozen"
1
"been found"
100.0000%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
3
totalVerbs
135
matches
0
"wasn’t pointing"
1
"wasn’t pointing"
2
"was waiting"
100.0000%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
767
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
14
adverbRatio
0.018252933507170794
lyAdverbCount
5
lyAdverbRatio
0.00651890482398957
100.0000%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
101
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.0000%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
101
mean
10.44
std
7.94
cv
0.761
sampleLengths
0
29
1
18
2
17
3
7
4
18
5
8
6
17
7
17
8
13
9
5
10
11
11
23
12
36
13
12
14
18
15
11
16
4
17
2
18
2
19
17
20
4
21
2
22
20
23
7
24
4
25
3
26
15
27
7
28
13
29
9
30
13
31
3
32
12
33
5
34
5
35
10
36
6
37
11
38
3
39
18
40
2
41
7
42
4
43
24
44
20
45
2
46
3
47
24
48
17
49
4
57.3333%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
6
diversityRatio
0.38
totalSentences
100
uniqueOpeners
38
67.8571%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
7
fancyCount
3
fancyTags
0
"she said sharply (say sharply)"
1
"she said, tucking a curl of red hair behind her left ear (say, tuck leave)"
2
"she said quietly (say quietly)"
85.8325%