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Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMMNHB8TPHWPWJ535SG0KK5
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Model:
Ministral 8B
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Thriller: chase through city streets
Duration:
7.4s
Cost:
$0.000225
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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
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Meta
AI
The rain came down in sheets, a relentless drumming that turned the pavement into a slick mirror, reflecting the neon glow of the Raven’s Nest’s green sign as Quinn passed beneath it. She didn’t slow. The leather of her
watch
strap, worn thin at the edges, creaked against her wrist with each step, the only sound cutting through the storm’s roar. Her breath came sharp and controlled, her jaw tight enough to
feel
the tension radiate down her spine. *Morris would’ve known what to do here.* She’d lost the suspect at the corner of Wardour Street, but the trail hadn’t vanished—it had doubled back, sharp and deliberate, like someone who knew exactly where they
were going
. And Quinn knew, too. The Raven’s Nest wasn’t just a bar. It was a front. A place where the city’s secrets went to rot behind locked doors and whispered deals. The alley behind the pub was a maze of rusted metal and peeling paint, the air thick with the scent of damp stone and something older, something metallic and faintly sweet—like old blood left too long in the sun. She crouched low, pressing her back against the wall, her fingers brushing the cold brick. The rain hammered against her collar, soaking through the wool of her coat. She could hear him now—light
footsteps
, quick and sure, moving with the ease of someone who owned the dark. A man who didn’t belong in the daylight. Quinn exhaled through her nose, then moved. She stayed to the shadows, her boots silent on the uneven pavement. The entrance to the Raven’s Nest was just ahead, its green neon sign pulsing like a dying heartbeat. She could walk in, call for backup, let the night shift handle the mess. But she didn’t. Because she knew what waited inside. Not just a bar. Not just a place where men in suits drank and women in tight dresses laughed too loud. A place where the clique gathered. A place where things happened that didn’t belong in the world she’d built her career on. She pressed her palm against the door, felt the slight give as it swung inward. The bell above chimed, hollow and mocking, and she stepped inside.
The air was thick with
the scent of whiskey and something else—something sharp, like ozone after a storm. The bar was dim, the only light coming from the flickering flames of a dozen candles on the tables. A few patrons sat in the corner, their faces half-lit, their drinks untouched. They all turned as she entered, but their expressions didn’t change. Not a single one of them
looked surprised
. They knew she
was coming
. Quinn kept her hands visible, her fingers curled loose around the grip of her sidearm. She didn’t draw it. Not yet. She moved toward the back of the room, where the walls
were lined
with old maps and yellowed photographs. The air grew cooler here, the hum of conversation fading into a murmur. She could
feel
it—the
weight
of something unseen pressing down on her, like the breath of a sleeping beast. Then she saw him. A man stood in the center of the room, his back to her, his dark hair slick with rain. He wasn’t alone. Two others flanked him, their faces half-hidden in shadow. The man turned
slowly
, his eyes locking onto hers. Tomás Herrera. Quinn’s stomach twisted. She’d seen his photo in the files—former paramedic, disbarred, rumored to be dealing in things that weren’t supposed to exist. But the man in front of her wasn’t just a name. He was warm brown eyes and a scar that ran along his left forearm like a brand. He was the kind of man who could make you
feel
seen, even when he
was looking
right through you. “Detective Quinn,” he said, his voice smooth as aged whiskey. “I wasn’t expecting you.” She didn’t answer. She didn’t trust her voice. She didn’t trust the way her pulse had spiked, the way her fingers twitched toward her gun. Herrera smiled, just
slightly
. “You’re going to want to sit down.” She didn’t move. Behind him, the bookshelf shifted. A section of the wall slid open with a whisper, revealing a staircase descending into darkness. The air from below was thick with the scent of damp earth and something else—something electric, like the moment before a storm breaks. Quinn’s breath hitched. She
knew that smell
. She’d smelled it before. In the alley where Morris had vanished. In the files that had been too neatly filed, too
carefully
sealed. “You’re not here for me,” Herrera said, his voice low. “You’re here for what’s below.” She didn’t look away. She didn’t blink. Then she stepped forward, her boots thudding against the floorboards. “Show me.” The staircase was narrow, the steps slick with moisture. The air grew colder as she descended, the hum of the city fading into a distant roar. At the bottom, a door stood
slightly
ajar, its edges glowing faintly blue. The scent of the underground market hit her like a physical blow—enchanted goods, alchemical substances, the sharp tang of something forbidden. The Veil Market. Quinn hesitated at the threshold. She could turn back. She could walk away. She could call for backup and let the night shift handle the mess. But she didn’t. She stepped inside. The market was a labyrinth of stalls and shadows, the air thick with the murmur of hushed voices and the clink of glass. People moved like ghosts, their faces half-lit by flickering lanterns. Some wore masks. Others didn’t. But they all knew she was there. They all knew who she was. And they all knew what she was about to do. She followed the trail of blue light deeper into the market, her fingers brushing the cold metal of her gun. She could
feel
it—the
weight
of the past pressing down on her, the ghost of Morris’s voice in her ear, *You’re not alone, Harlow. You never were.* She turned a corner and saw him. A man stood in the center of the market, his back to her, his hands wrapped around a bone token. The token glowed faintly blue, its edges sharp as a blade. He was the one who had led her here. The one who had known she
was coming
. Quinn raised her gun. “You’re going to want to put that away,” Herrera said, his voice coming from behind her. “Before you do something you’ll regret.” She didn’t lower the gun. The man turned, his face half-hidden in shadow. His eyes locked onto hers. And then the lights went out.
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.0000%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
3
adverbTagCount
0
adverbTags
(empty)
64.0611%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)
wordCount
1113
totalAiIsmAdverbs
4
found
0
adverb
"carefully"
count
1
1
adverb
"slightly"
count
2
2
adverb
"slowly"
count
1
highlights
0
"carefully"
1
"slightly"
2
"slowly"
100.0000%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
73.0458%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)
wordCount
1113
totalAiIsms
3
found
0
word
"weight"
count
2
1
word
"footsteps"
count
1
highlights
0
"weight"
1
"footsteps"
100.0000%
Cliche density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
1
maxInWindow
1
found
0
label
"air was thick with"
count
1
highlights
0
"The air was thick with"
100.0000%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
1
narrationSentences
100
matches
0
"looked surprised"
100.0000%
Filter word density
Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
2
hedgeCount
0
narrationSentences
100
filterMatches
0
"watch"
1
"feel"
hedgeMatches
(empty)
100.0000%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
1
totalSentences
105
matches
0
"knew that smell"
100.0000%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
32
mean
34.41
std
32.38
cv
0.941
sampleLengths
0
86
1
60
2
94
3
103
4
26
5
74
6
72
7
4
8
113
9
14
10
25
11
11
12
3
13
44
14
30
15
15
16
7
17
12
18
63
19
26
20
3
21
3
22
51
23
10
24
47
25
7
26
48
27
4
28
22
29
5
30
13
31
6
100.0000%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤5% passive sentences
passiveCount
1
totalSentences
100
matches
0
"were lined"
100.0000%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
4
totalVerbs
185
matches
0
"were going"
1
"was coming"
2
"was looking"
3
"was coming"
100.0000%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
1074
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
38
adverbRatio
0.035381750465549346
lyAdverbCount
11
lyAdverbRatio
0.010242085661080074
100.0000%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
105
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.0000%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
105
mean
10.49
std
7.42
cv
0.708
sampleLengths
0
32
1
3
2
26
3
18
4
7
5
30
6
4
7
7
8
4
9
15
10
39
11
15
12
13
13
19
14
8
15
7
16
12
17
18
18
14
19
3
20
6
21
4
22
17
23
6
24
16
25
15
26
11
27
18
28
19
29
13
30
11
31
8
32
5
33
15
34
4
35
2
36
19
37
13
38
19
39
4
40
19
41
3
42
9
43
9
44
2
45
3
46
20
47
11
48
17
49
20
34.7619%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
16
diversityRatio
0.2761904761904762
totalSentences
105
uniqueOpeners
29
8.3333%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
3
fancyCount
2
fancyTags
0
"he said, his voice smooth as aged whiskey (say, age)"
1
"Herrera said, his voice coming from behind her (say, come)"
87.0707%