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Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMMNP4MAS0YSF3BDHJBX9AZ
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Model:
Ministral 8B
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Mystery: examining a crime scene
Duration:
6.9s
Cost:
$0.000204
Model input
System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
Model response
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Meta
AI
The abandoned Tube station beneath Camden had
been sealed
off for nearly a decade, its rusted gates welded shut, its flickering emergency lights long since dead. But Detective Harlow Quinn knew better than to trust the official narrative. She stepped over the yellow police tape with the quiet precision of a soldier on patrol, her boots crunching on broken glass and the occasional brittle bone. The air smelled of damp concrete and something older—something *wrong*. Eva Kowalski stood near the far wall, her round glasses reflecting the sickly glow of the flashlights cast by the handful of uniformed officers clustered around the scene. She tucked a strand of curly red hair behind her ear, her fingers trembling just
slightly
as she adjusted the strap of her leather satchel. When she saw Harlow, her expression shifted from cautious to wary. "You weren’t supposed to be here," she murmured, her voice low. Harlow didn’t slow her stride. "I wasn’t *supposed* to be anywhere near this case, but here I am." She nodded toward the body—a man in a tailored suit, his face frozen in an expression of frozen terror. His eyes were wide, his mouth
slightly
ajar, as if he’d
been caught
mid-scream. The coroner’s team had already begun their work, but the initial assessment was clear: death by asphyxiation. No signs of struggle, no defensive wounds. Just… gone. Eva exhaled
sharply
. "They’re saying it’s a suicide. Carbon monoxide poisoning from the old ventilation system." Harlow crouched beside the body, her sharp jaw set, her brown eyes scanning the details. The man’s fingers were still curled around a small brass compass, its casing
etched
with sigils that looked almost like a warning. The needle was pointed straight at the ceiling, as if he’d been holding it there in his final moments. "That’s not what I’m seeing," she said, her voice flat. A uniformed officer stepped forward, his radio crackling. "Detective Quinn, we’ve got the scene secured. You’re the only one who should be down here." Harlow ignored him, her gaze flicking to the walls. The station had
been stripped
of its original tiles, the concrete exposed in jagged patches. But beneath the dust, she saw something else—scratches, like claws or talons,
etched
into the surface. Too precise to be accidental. Too deliberate to be random. Eva followed her line of sight. "What is that?" Harlow didn’t answer. Instead, she turned her attention to the body again, running her fingers over the man’s suit jacket. The fabric was too fine, too well-tailored, for a local businessman. And then there was the watch—a sleek, modern piece with a digital display, but the band was tarnished, as if it had been submerged in water for weeks. Or longer. She straightened, her military bearing making the officers around her shift uncomfortably. "This wasn’t a suicide." The coroner, a burly man with a clipboard, cleared his throat. "Detective, the tox screen—" "Wasn’t done yet," Harlow cut in. "And even if it was, we both know carbon monoxide doesn’t leave traces like this." She gestured to the man’s face, the way his lips had turned an unnatural shade of blue, not from lack of oxygen, but from something else. Something *wrong*. Eva stepped closer, her satchel bumping against her hip. "You think it’s supernatural?" Harlow didn’t meet her eyes. "I think this man was looking for something he wasn’t supposed to find." A beat of silence. Then, from the shadows near the far wall, a low chuckle
echoed
. The officers tensed, their flashlights sweeping the darkness. But there was nothing there—just the usual creaks of an old building settling, the distant drip of water. Eva’s breath hitched. "Did you hear that?" Harlow didn’t answer. She was already moving, her steps measured, her mind racing. The scratches on the wall. The compass. The way the man’s body had been arranged, as if he’d been *placed* there rather than stumbled upon. And then there was the fact that the Veil Market—an underground supernatural black market that only appeared beneath Camden during the full moon—had
been rumored
to be active again. She reached the far corner of the station, where the concrete had
been chipped
away to reveal a narrow passage, just wide enough for a person to squeeze through. The air coming from it was thick, humid, carrying the scent of something metallic and old. A rift. Eva hurried to her side. "What is that?" Harlow didn’t look back. "A way in. Or a way out." She reached into her coat pocket and pulled out a small, folded piece of paper—a sketch she’d made earlier that day, of the man’s face, the compass, the scratches on the wall. She unfolded it, holding it up to the dim light. "This man wasn’t just selling information at the Veil Market. He was *collecting* it." Eva’s voice was barely a whisper. "And now he’s dead." Harlow didn’t answer. She was already stepping through the passage, her boots sinking into the damp earth. The officers called after her, but she didn’t stop. She knew what she
was walking
into. And she knew that if she was right, this wasn’t just another case. This was a hunt.
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.0000%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
3
adverbTagCount
0
adverbTags
(empty)
65.5963%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)
wordCount
872
totalAiIsmAdverbs
3
found
0
adverb
"sharply"
count
1
1
adverb
"slightly"
count
2
highlights
0
"sharply"
1
"slightly"
100.0000%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
65.5963%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)
wordCount
872
totalAiIsms
3
found
0
word
"echoed"
count
1
1
word
"etched"
count
2
highlights
0
"echoed"
1
"etched"
100.0000%
Cliche density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
0
maxInWindow
0
found
(empty)
highlights
(empty)
100.0000%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
64
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Filter word density
Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
0
hedgeCount
0
narrationSentences
64
filterMatches
(empty)
hedgeMatches
(empty)
100.0000%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
0
totalSentences
76
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
24
mean
35.92
std
25.12
cv
0.699
sampleLengths
0
75
1
75
2
77
3
16
4
66
5
24
6
50
7
9
8
61
9
16
10
15
11
49
12
13
13
18
14
42
15
7
16
67
17
47
18
8
19
11
20
56
21
10
22
46
23
4
60.4167%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤5% passive sentences
passiveCount
7
totalSentences
64
matches
0
"been sealed"
1
"been caught"
2
"been stripped"
3
"was tarnished, been submerged"
4
"been arranged, been *placed"
5
"been rumored"
6
"been chipped"
100.0000%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
1
totalVerbs
109
matches
0
"was walking"
87.6707%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
741
adjectiveStacks
1
stackExamples
0
"underground supernatural black market"
adverbCount
35
adverbRatio
0.04723346828609987
lyAdverbCount
10
lyAdverbRatio
0.01349527665317139
100.0000%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
76
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.0000%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
76
mean
11.34
std
8.82
cv
0.778
sampleLengths
0
26
1
12
2
27
3
10
4
28
5
25
6
11
7
11
8
5
9
32
10
14
11
17
12
7
13
1
14
1
15
3
16
13
17
15
18
22
19
19
20
10
21
8
22
16
23
9
24
15
25
16
26
5
27
5
28
6
29
3
30
3
31
17
32
11
33
28
34
2
35
12
36
4
37
11
38
4
39
6
40
41
41
2
42
9
43
4
44
5
45
13
46
4
47
12
48
8
49
18
50.4386%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
5
diversityRatio
0.34210526315789475
totalSentences
76
uniqueOpeners
26
8.3333%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
3
fancyCount
2
fancyTags
0
"she murmured, her voice low (murmur)"
1
"Harlow cut in (harlow cut in)"
84.5913%