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Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMMTD0PND229AC3J2PS5CPT
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Model:
Mistral Large 2
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Thriller: chase through city streets
Duration:
21.7s
Cost:
$0.008304
Model input
System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
Model response
Messages
Meta
AI
The rain fell in sheets, turning the London streets into a slick,
gleaming
maze. Detective Harlow Quinn’s boots splashed through puddles as she sprinted after the fleeing figure, her breath coming in sharp, controlled bursts. The suspect—some wiry kid with a hood pulled low—darted around a corner, vanishing into the labyrinth of Soho’s back alleys. Quinn didn’t slow. Her leather
watch
strap dug into her wrist as she pumped her arms, her sharp jaw set in determination. Eighteen years on the force had honed her instincts, and right now, they
screamed that this
wasn’t just another petty thief. The kid had moved too fast, too sure, like he knew these streets better than she did. A dumpster clanged as the suspect shoved it aside, the sound
echoing
off the brick walls. Quinn vaulted over it, her military precision keeping her balanced despite the slippery pavement. The neon glow of a bar sign
flickered
ahead—the Raven’s Nest. The kid ducked inside. Quinn skidded to a halt at the entrance, her hand hovering over her holster. The bar’s green neon sign buzzed overhead, casting an eerie glow over the rain-slicked sidewalk. She hesitated. The Raven’s Nest wasn’t just any dive—it was a place where people disappeared, where whispers of the supernatural clung to the air like cigarette smoke. She pushed through the door. The interior was dim, the air thick with the scent of whiskey and old paper. The walls
were lined
with yellowed maps and black-and-white photographs, their edges curling with age. A few patrons glanced up, their expressions
unreadable
, before returning to their drinks. Quinn’s gaze locked onto the back of the bar, where a bookshelf stood
slightly
ajar. A hidden door. The kid had gone through it. She moved
quickly
, her pulse steady despite the adrenaline. The bookshelf swung open with a creak, revealing a narrow staircase descending into darkness. The air below was cooler, damp, carrying the faint metallic tang of underground tunnels. Quinn drew her torch, the beam cutting through the gloom as she stepped onto the first stair. The kid was long gone, but the path was clear—fresh mud on the steps, the faintest scuff marks on the stone. She followed. The tunnel twisted, branching into a network of abandoned Tube passages. The torchlight
flickered
over graffiti-covered walls, the occasional rat scuttling into the shadows. Then, ahead, a faint glow—warm, golden, pulsing like a heartbeat. Quinn slowed. The air hummed with energy, the kind that raised the hairs on the back of her neck. She rounded a corner and froze. The Veil Market sprawled before her, a labyrinth of stalls tucked into the bones of the old Tube station. Lanterns hung from the ceiling, casting long shadows over tables laden with strange artifacts—glowing vials, bundles of dried herbs, stacks of yellowed parchment. The crowd was a mix of humans and… others. A woman with too many fingers bartered over a jar of swirling mist. A man with hollow eyes examined a set of rusted keys. Quinn’s grip tightened on her torch. She’d heard rumors of this place, whispers of a black market where the rules of reality bent like wet paper. But seeing it was different. The air smelled of ozone and old blood, the kind of scent that clung to crime scenes where the impossible had happened. A figure brushed past her—a man with a Saint Christopher medallion
glinting
at his throat. He carried a medical bag, his dark curls damp with rain. Tomás Herrera. Quinn had seen his file. Former paramedic, lost his license after treating patients with injuries that defied explanation. He didn’t spare her a glance, but she knew he’d seen her. Everyone here had. The kid was nowhere in sight. Quinn exhaled
sharply
, her mind racing. She could turn back, call for backup, pretend she’d never seen this place. But that wasn’t her style. Not after Morris. Her partner’s face flashed in her memory—his laugh, the way he’d always stolen her coffee. Then the blood. The way he’d just… stopped. No explanation, no leads. Just a body and a case file that went cold. Quinn stepped forward. The market swallowed her whole. The crowd pressed in, murmuring in languages she didn’t recognize. A stall vendor offered her a vial of something that
shimmered
like liquid starlight. She ignored him, her eyes scanning the shadows. Then she saw it—a bone token, half-buried in the mud near a stall selling what looked like human teeth. The kid must have dropped it. Quinn crouched, picking it up. The moment her fingers closed around it, the air around her shifted. The murmurs of the market faded, replaced by a low, rhythmic chanting. The token pulsed in her palm, warm and alive. She stood, her pulse quickening. The kid had come this way. And if she wanted answers—real answers—she had to follow. The tunnel ahead sloped downward, the air growing colder. Quinn adjusted her grip on the torch and stepped forward, into the dark.
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.0000%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
0
adverbTagCount
0
adverbTags
(empty)
64.4970%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)
wordCount
845
totalAiIsmAdverbs
3
found
0
adverb
"quickly"
count
1
1
adverb
"sharply"
count
1
2
adverb
"slightly"
count
1
highlights
0
"quickly"
1
"sharply"
2
"slightly"
100.0000%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
17.1598%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)
wordCount
845
totalAiIsms
7
found
0
word
"flickered"
count
2
1
word
"shimmered"
count
1
2
word
"gleaming"
count
1
3
word
"glinting"
count
1
4
word
"unreadable"
count
1
5
word
"echoing"
count
1
highlights
0
"flickered"
1
"shimmered"
2
"gleaming"
3
"glinting"
4
"unreadable"
5
"echoing"
100.0000%
Cliche density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
0
maxInWindow
0
found
(empty)
highlights
(empty)
100.0000%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
78
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Filter word density
Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
1
hedgeCount
0
narrationSentences
78
filterMatches
0
"watch"
hedgeMatches
(empty)
100.0000%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
1
totalSentences
78
matches
0
"screamed that this"
93.0242%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
23
mean
36
std
17.12
cv
0.476
sampleLengths
0
55
1
60
2
45
3
56
4
5
5
43
6
24
7
37
8
40
9
34
10
25
11
75
12
53
13
46
14
15
15
33
16
37
17
3
18
37
19
25
20
38
21
20
22
22
100.0000%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤5% passive sentences
passiveCount
1
totalSentences
78
matches
0
"were lined"
100.0000%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
0
totalVerbs
137
matches
(empty)
94.0000%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
845
adjectiveStacks
1
stackExamples
0
"over graffiti-covered walls,"
adverbCount
23
adverbRatio
0.027218934911242602
lyAdverbCount
3
lyAdverbRatio
0.0035502958579881655
100.0000%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
78
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.0000%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
78
mean
10.62
std
6.13
cv
0.578
sampleLengths
0
14
1
21
2
20
3
3
4
19
5
21
6
17
7
16
8
14
9
11
10
4
11
14
12
15
13
2
14
25
15
5
16
15
17
15
18
13
19
15
20
3
21
6
22
9
23
14
24
14
25
17
26
21
27
2
28
11
29
13
30
10
31
2
32
17
33
6
34
19
35
23
36
8
37
1
38
13
39
11
40
6
41
20
42
5
43
22
44
15
45
11
46
2
47
5
48
13
49
12
39.7436%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
8
diversityRatio
0.2564102564102564
totalSentences
78
uniqueOpeners
20
100.0000%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
0
fancyCount
0
fancyTags
(empty)
88.7309%