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Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMMVKVS61DMBNNCTDD617CM
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Model:
Mistral Large
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Romance: separated couple reunites
Duration:
40.8s
Cost:
$0.014408
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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
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The door swung open before Rory could knock a second time. Eva stood there, her dark curls wild around her shoulders, a smudge of ink on her cheekbone. Behind her, the flat smelled of old paper and bergamot tea, the usual chaos of scrolls and leather-bound tomes spilling across e
very
available surface. Ptolemy, the tabby cat, wound himself around Eva’s ankles with a plaintive mew. “Rory?” Eva blinked, her brown eyes widening. “What the hell are you doing here? It’s—” She checked the clock on the wall, a monstrosity of gears and brass that looked like it belonged in a steampunk novel. “—nearly midnight.” Rory shifted her
weight
, the cold night air biting through her leather jacket. “I know. I’m sorry. I wouldn’t have come if it wasn’t—” She hesitated, then exhaled
sharply
. “Evan’s back.” Eva’s expression darkened. She stepped back, pulling the door wider. “Get in. Now.” Rory slipped inside, the warmth of the flat wrapping around her like a too-tight embrace. The deadbolts slid home behind her with three sharp clicks, and Eva turned, arms crossed. “What do you mean, *back*? He was supposed to be in Manchester.” “He was. Or at least, that’s what I thought.” Rory rubbed her temples, the crescent scar on her wrist catching the dim light. “I saw him tonight. Outside the Golden Empress. He was just… standing there, watching me.” Eva swore under her breath, a string of Welsh that would’ve made their mother blush. She grabbed Rory’s wrist, pulling her toward the sagging sofa. Ptolemy leapt onto the armrest, tail flicking as he eyed Rory with suspicion. “Sit. Talk.” Rory sank onto the cushions, the springs groaning beneath her. “I don’t know how he found me. I’ve been careful. No social media, no calls to Cardiff, nothing that could trace back to me.” “Except you’ve been working at the same damn restaurant for months,” Eva pointed out, pacing. “And you *did* use your real name there, didn’t you?” Rory winced. “I had to. Yu-Fei needed a real ID for the payroll.” Eva threw her hands up. “Rory. *Rory.* You know better than that.” “I *do* know better!” Rory’s voice cracked. She stood abruptly, knocking a stack of books off the coffee table. Ptolemy hissed and bolted. “I know better, okay? But I was trying to *live*. To not look over my shoulder e
very
second of e
very
day. And now he’s here, and I don’t know what to do.” Eva’s expression softened. She reached out, squeezing Rory’s shoulder. “You should’ve called me sooner.” “I didn’t want to drag you into this again.” “Too late.” Eva’s grip tightened. “You’re my sister in all the ways that matter. And if that bastard thinks he can just waltz back into your life after what he did—” The doorbell rang. Both women froze. Eva’s
eyes narrowed
. “Did you tell anyone you were coming here?” Rory shook her head. The bell rang again, longer this time, insistent. Eva grabbed a letter opener from the desk—a wicked-looking thing with a silver blade—and crept toward the door. “Stay back.” Rory’s pulse hammered in her throat, but she followed, pressing herself against the wall. Eva peered through the peephole, then jerked back as if burned. “What?” Rory whispered. Eva didn’t answer. Instead, she unlocked the deadbolts with deliberate slowness, her shoulders tense. The door swung open. Lucien Moreau stood in the hallway, his platinum blond hair
gleaming
under the flickering bulb, his heterochromatic eyes—amber and black—fixed on Rory with unsettling intensity. He leaned on his ivory-handled cane, the picture of effortless elegance in his tailored charcoal suit, but there was a tightness around his mouth that Rory had never seen before. “Mademoiselle Carter,” he said, his voice smooth, accented. “We need to talk.” Rory’s breath caught. Of all the people she’d expected to see tonight, Lucien was the last. The *
very
* last. Eva’s grip on the letter opener didn’t waver. “You’ve got some nerve showing up here, Moreau.” Lucien’s gaze
flicked
to her, unruffled. “And yet, here I am.” His eyes returned to Rory. “It’s about Evan.” Rory’s
stomach dropped
. “What about him?” Lucien stepped inside without waiting for an invitation, the scent of sandalwood and something darker—something like smoke—following him. Eva shut the door, locking it again with sharp, angry movements. “He’s not just back in London,” Lucien said, his voice low. “He’s working with the Black Dawn.” Rory’s blood turned to ice. The Black Dawn was a name whispered in the supernatural underworld—a cabal of demons and rogue sorcerers who dealt in forbidden magic, human trafficking, and worse. If Evan
was tangled
up with them… Eva let out a sharp laugh. “You’re joking.” “I don’t joke about such things.” Lucien’s cane tapped against the floor, a slow, deliberate rhythm. “Evan’s been seen meeting with their operatives. He’s not here for you, Rory. Not *just* for you. He’s here for something bigger.” Rory’s hands
trembled
. She clenched them into fists. “What do they want?” Lucien’s gaze locked onto hers, and for a heartbeat, the world narrowed to just the two of them—the
weight
of his stare, the way his amber eye burned like a flame. “You.” The word hung between them, heavy and suffocating. Eva stepped forward, breaking the spell. “Why her?” Lucien didn’t look away from Rory. “Because of what you are.” Rory’s breath hitched. “I’m not anything.” “You’re wrong.” His voice was softer now, almost gentle. “You’ve always been more than you realize. And now, they know it too.” Rory’s mind raced. She thought of the nightmares that had plagued her since childhood—the ones where shadows whispered her name, where something *hungry* lurked just beyond the edge of her vision. She’d always assumed they were just dreams. But what if they weren’t? Eva’s voice cut through her thoughts. “This is bullshit. Rory’s just a girl from Cardiff. She’s not some… some *chosen one* in a bad fantasy novel.” Lucien finally tore his gaze away from Rory, turning to Eva with a faint, humorless smile. “And yet, here we are.” Rory swallowed hard. “What do they want with me?” Lucien’s expression darkened. “They believe you’re a descendant of the Morrigan.” The name
sent a jolt through
her. The Morrigan—the Celtic goddess of war and fate, a figure from the old stories her mother used to tell her. It was impossible. Ridiculous. And yet… Rory’s fingers brushed the scar on her wrist. She remembered the night she’d gotten it—the way the knife had slipped, the way the blood had pooled, dark and thick, before her mother had pressed a cloth to the wound and whispered something in Welsh. A prayer. Or maybe a spell. Eva
was staring
at her. “Rory?” Rory shook her head, forcing a laugh. “This is insane. I’m not— I can’t be—” “You don’t have to believe me,” Lucien said. “But you *do* have to listen. Evan isn’t just an ex-boyfriend with a grudge anymore. He’s a pawn. And if the Black Dawn gets their hands on you, they won’t just hurt you. They’ll *use* you.” Rory’s chest tightened. She thought of Evan’s hands on her, the way his voice had gone soft right before it turned cruel. The way he’d always
seemed to
know exactly where she was, even when she hadn’t told him. “Why are you telling me this?” she asked, her voice
barely above a whisper
. Lucien’s expression shuttered. “Because I made a mistake. And I don’t intend to make another.” The air between them crackled, thick with history—with the night they’d met in a dimly lit bar in Soho, the way his fingers had brushed hers when he’d handed her a drink, the way he’d looked at her like she was something rare. Something precious. And then, later, the way he’d walked away without a word. Rory’s throat ached. “You could’ve told me sooner.” “I know.” His voice was rough. “But I thought… I thought I could handle it. Keep you safe without you ever knowing.” “And now?” “Now, I need your help.” Eva let out a disbelieving laugh. “You’ve got to be kidding me. After e
very
thing, you just waltz in here and ask for her *help*?” Lucien’s jaw tightened. “I’m not asking for me. I’m asking for her. For all of us.” Rory studied him—the way his knuckles whitened around the handle of his cane, the way his black eye
seemed to
swallow the light. She thought of the last time she’d seen him, the way he’d turned his back on her in the middle of a crowded street, his coat flaring behind him like wings. She should’ve hated him. She *did* hate him. Or at least, she wanted to. But the fear coiling in her gut was stronger than the hurt. “What do we do?” she asked. Lucien’s shoulders relaxed, just
slightly
. “We fight.” Eva groaned. “Oh, for fuck’s sake.” Rory ignored her. She met Lucien’s gaze, her chin lifting. “Tell me e
very
thing.”
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.0000%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
7
adverbTagCount
0
adverbTags
(empty)
73.3511%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)
wordCount
1501
totalAiIsmAdverbs
4
found
0
adverb
"sharply"
count
1
1
adverb
"slightly"
count
1
2
adverb
"barely above a whisper"
count
1
3
adverb
"very"
count
1
highlights
0
"sharply"
1
"slightly"
2
"barely above a whisper"
3
"very"
100.0000%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
66.6889%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)
wordCount
1501
totalAiIsms
5
found
0
word
"flicked"
count
1
1
word
"gleaming"
count
1
2
word
"trembled"
count
1
3
word
"weight"
count
2
highlights
0
"flicked"
1
"gleaming"
2
"trembled"
3
"weight"
33.3333%
Cliche density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
3
maxInWindow
3
found
0
label
"eyes widened/narrowed"
count
1
1
label
"stomach dropped/sank"
count
1
2
label
"sent a shiver through"
count
1
highlights
0
"eyes narrowed"
1
"stomach dropped"
2
"sent a jolt through"
100.0000%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
107
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Filter word density
Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
0
hedgeCount
2
narrationSentences
107
filterMatches
(empty)
hedgeMatches
0
"seemed to"
100.0000%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
0
totalSentences
153
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
70
mean
21.19
std
15.7
cv
0.741
sampleLengths
0
65
1
39
2
31
3
13
4
42
5
38
6
40
7
34
8
25
9
13
10
12
11
55
12
14
13
9
14
31
15
3
16
3
17
11
18
4
19
8
20
20
21
25
22
3
23
18
24
55
25
12
26
19
27
16
28
19
29
6
30
29
31
17
32
38
33
8
34
38
35
12
36
32
37
8
38
8
39
11
40
6
41
22
42
43
43
26
44
21
45
9
46
11
47
31
48
2
49
50
100.0000%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤5% passive sentences
passiveCount
1
totalSentences
107
matches
0
"was tangled"
100.0000%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
1
totalVerbs
172
matches
0
"was staring"
100.0000%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
1004
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
35
adverbRatio
0.0348605577689243
lyAdverbCount
7
lyAdverbRatio
0.0069721115537848604
100.0000%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
153
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.0000%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
153
mean
9.69
std
8.39
cv
0.865
sampleLengths
0
11
1
17
2
24
3
13
4
7
5
30
6
2
7
13
8
16
9
2
10
3
11
7
12
3
13
15
14
15
15
12
16
23
17
15
18
15
19
10
20
13
21
2
22
10
23
24
24
15
25
10
26
2
27
11
28
5
29
7
30
7
31
12
32
4
33
32
34
3
35
6
36
5
37
9
38
5
39
26
40
3
41
3
42
3
43
8
44
4
45
8
46
18
47
2
48
14
49
11
45.4248%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
7
diversityRatio
0.2549019607843137
totalSentences
153
uniqueOpeners
39
67.8571%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
7
fancyCount
3
fancyTags
0
"Eva pointed out, pacing (point out, pace)"
1
"whispered (whisper)"
2
"he said, his voice smooth, accented (say, accent)"
87.4503%