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Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMMZDSAP1B3RC0Q0RQ609JV
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Model:
Mistral Large
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Fantasy: entering an ancient ruin
Duration:
27.6s
Cost:
$0.012018
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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
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The standing stones
loomed
like
sentinels
in the mist, their gnarled oaks twisted with age. Rory adjusted the strap of her messenger bag, the Heartstone Pendant tucked safely beneath her shirt, its warmth a steady pulse against her skin. The air smelled of damp earth and something sweeter—honeysuckle, maybe, or the faint metallic tang of magic. Nyx materialized beside her, their form flickering between solid and shadow. "The grove doesn’t want us here," they murmured, their voice like wind through dead leaves. "It’s testing us." Rory exhaled, watching her breath curl in the cold air. "Or it’s just cold. It *is* December." Isolde stepped between the stones first, her silver hair shimmering as if woven with starlight. She left no footprints in the frost. "The grove chooses who enters," she said, her pale lavender eyes fixed on Rory. "And it has chosen you." Rory hesitated, then followed. The moment she crossed the threshold, the world tilted. The mist swallowed the standing stones behind her, and the air hummed with energy, raising the fine hairs on her arms. Before her stretched a clearing unlike anything she’d ever seen—wildflowers b
loomed
in impossible colors, their petals glowing faintly in the dim light. Towering trees with bark like polished silver stretched toward a sky that wasn’t quite blue, but not gray either. It was as if the grove existed in the space between dawn and dusk, suspended in perpetual twilight. Nyx solidified beside her, their violet eyes wide. "This isn’t Earth," they whispered. "Not entirely." Isolde
glided
forward, her bare feet brushing the grass without disturbing a single blade. "The Fae Courts call this place a *pocket*," she said. "A sliver of their realm bleeding into ours." Rory reached out, her fingers hovering just above a cluster of flowers that pulsed with an inner light. "It’s beautiful." "Beauty is often a trap," Nyx said, their voice low. "The Fae are fond of them." Isolde shot them a look. "And Shades are fond of doom-saying." Rory ignored them, stepping deeper into the grove. The air grew warmer, thick with the scent of blossoms and something richer—spiced wine, perhaps, or the faintest hint of smoke. A narrow path wound through the undergrowth, lined with stones that glowed faintly, as if lit from within. Nyx drifted ahead, their shadowy form stretching unnaturally long in the dim light. "The path is moving," they said. Rory frowned. "What?" Isolde smiled, cryptic as ever. "The grove shifts to guide—or mislead. It depends on what it thinks you need." Rory’s fingers tightened around the strap of her bag. "And what does it think *I* need?" Isolde didn’t answer. Instead, she gestured toward the path. "Walk, and see." The deeper they went, the stranger the grove became. The trees grew taller, their branches twisting into arches overhead, forming a living tunnel. The stones along the path pulsed brighter, their light casting shifting patterns on the ground. Rory’s boots made no sound as she walked, as if the earth itself absorbed the noise. Then, the path opened into a wider clearing, and Rory stopped. A pool of water lay at its center,
perfectly
still, its surface like glass. But it wasn’t the pool that made her breath catch—it was the figure standing beside it. A woman, or something like one, with skin like polished
marble
and hair that flowed like liquid silver. She turned as they approached, her eyes—pale, pupil-less, and glowing faintly—locking onto Rory. Isolde bowed her head. "Lady of the Grove." The woman smiled, but there was no warmth in it. "Seer. You bring mortals into my domain." Rory’s pulse quickened. She’d heard stories of the Fae, of their cruelty and caprice. But before she could speak, Nyx stepped forward, their form flickering like a candle in the wind. "We seek answers," they said. "About the Veil. About the rifts." The Fae woman tilted her head, her gaze sliding to Rory. "And you, little mortal? What do you seek?" Rory swallowed. The Heartstone Pendant burned against her skin, as if reacting to the Fae’s presence. "I need to know how to close a rift," she said. "Before it tears open
completely
." The woman’s smile widened, sharp as a blade. "The Veil weakens. The solstice approaches." She gestured to the pool. "Look, and see what the grove shows you." Rory hesitated, then stepped forward. The water’s surface rippled as she approached, and when she looked down, she didn’t see her reflection. She saw a city—London, but not as she knew it. The sky was wrong, the color of a fresh bruise, and the streets writhed with shadows that moved like living things. Buildings
flickered
in and out of existence, their edges blurred as if caught between two worlds. And in the distance, a tear in the sky, a jagged wound of darkness that pulsed with an unnatural light. Rory’s breath hitched. "What is that?" "The rift," Isolde said
softly
. "The one you fear." The Fae woman’s voice was a whisper. "The Veil is thinning. And when it breaks, Hel will spill into your world." Rory’s fingers curled into fists. "How do I stop it?" The woman’s laughter rang like bells. "You don’t. You *choose*." The vision shifted. Now she saw a feast hall, grand and opulent, filled with figures draped in
silk
and jewels. At the head of the table sat a man—no, not a man. His skin was too pale, his eyes too dark, and his smile too wide. Prince Belphegor. The ruler of Dymas. And he
was watching
her. Rory stumbled back, her heart hammering. The pool’s surface stilled, the vision dissolving like smoke. The Fae woman’s voice was a sigh. "The grove has shown you what it will. Now, you must decide." Nyx’s form solidified beside her, their expression grim. "We’re running out of time." Isolde placed a hand on Rory’s shoulder. "The solstice is in three days. If the rift isn’t closed by then, it never will be." Rory looked back at the pool, then at the path ahead. The grove had given her a warning. Now, she had to act. She turned to Nyx and Isolde. "Then we don’t have a choice. We go to Dymas."
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
96.2963%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
9
adverbTagCount
1
adverbTags
0
"Isolde said softly [softly]"
71.1538%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)
wordCount
1040
totalAiIsmAdverbs
3
found
0
adverb
"completely"
count
1
1
adverb
"perfectly"
count
1
2
adverb
"softly"
count
1
highlights
0
"completely"
1
"perfectly"
2
"softly"
100.0000%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
42.3077%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)
wordCount
1040
totalAiIsms
6
found
0
word
"sentinels"
count
1
1
word
"flickered"
count
1
2
word
"glided"
count
1
3
word
"loomed"
count
1
4
word
"silk"
count
1
5
word
"marble"
count
1
highlights
0
"sentinels"
1
"flickered"
2
"glided"
3
"loomed"
4
"silk"
5
"marble"
100.0000%
Cliche density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
0
maxInWindow
0
found
(empty)
highlights
(empty)
100.0000%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
80
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Filter word density
Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
0
hedgeCount
0
narrationSentences
80
filterMatches
(empty)
hedgeMatches
(empty)
100.0000%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
0
totalSentences
107
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
43
mean
23.93
std
17.82
cv
0.745
sampleLengths
0
56
1
29
2
17
3
41
4
4
5
89
6
15
7
32
8
20
9
16
10
11
11
47
12
19
13
3
14
19
15
16
16
12
17
54
18
11
19
30
20
31
21
8
22
17
23
31
24
11
25
19
26
32
27
27
28
22
29
67
30
6
31
9
32
21
33
10
34
10
35
52
36
5
37
15
38
19
39
13
40
24
41
23
42
16
100.0000%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤5% passive sentences
passiveCount
0
totalSentences
80
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
1
totalVerbs
137
matches
0
"was watching"
100.0000%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
811
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
29
adverbRatio
0.035758323057953144
lyAdverbCount
7
lyAdverbRatio
0.008631319358816275
100.0000%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
107
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.0000%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
107
mean
9.62
std
5.52
cv
0.574
sampleLengths
0
15
1
24
2
17
3
11
4
15
5
3
6
10
7
7
8
15
9
7
10
14
11
5
12
4
13
9
14
21
15
22
16
19
17
18
18
8
19
5
20
2
21
14
22
10
23
8
24
18
25
2
26
10
27
6
28
5
29
6
30
8
31
21
32
18
33
13
34
6
35
2
36
1
37
5
38
14
39
9
40
7
41
3
42
6
43
3
44
9
45
14
46
15
47
16
48
11
49
14
41.5888%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
9
diversityRatio
0.29906542056074764
totalSentences
107
uniqueOpeners
32
63.8889%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
9
fancyCount
4
fancyTags
0
"they murmured, their voice like wind through dead leaves (murmur)"
1
"she said, her pale lavender eyes fixed on Rory (say, eyes fixed)"
2
"they whispered (whisper)"
3
"Isolde said softly (say softly)"
89.1315%