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Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMMZE0TFCMERJ1X0Q70RCGT
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Model:
Ministral 3B
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Thriller: chase through city streets
Duration:
4.7s
Cost:
$0.000089
Model input
System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
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Meta
AI
The rain hammered against the grimy windows of Quinn’s patrol car, turning the neon glow of the city into a jagged, bleeding light. She gripped the wheel tighter, her fingers digging into the leather-wrapped handle. The air smelled of wet pavement and exhaust, thick with the scent of something older—something that clung to the damp like a second layer of skin. Detective Harlow Quinn had never been one for second thoughts. But this wasn’t just another case. Not anymore. The man in front of her—a wiry figure with a scar running down his forearm—had vanished into the labyrinth of Soho, leaving behind only a trail of wet footprints and the faint, acrid tang of something burning. Quinn’s instincts screamed at her: *Follow him.* But the streets here were a maze of back alleys,
flicker
ing streetlights, and the occasional figure darting between shadows. She’d seen enough of this city to
know that some
doors shouldn’t be opened. And yet, the scent of the Veil Market—rich, intoxicating, like dark chocolate and old blood—pulled at her like a siren’s call. She turned the key in the ignition, the engine growling to life. The rain didn’t bother her. Not anymore. --- The neon sign of *The Raven’s Nest*
loomed
ahead, its green glow
flicker
ing like a dying ember. Quinn stepped out of the car, her boots sinking into the mud. The air inside was thick with the scent of stale beer and something sharper—alcohol mixed with something else, something that made her stomach twist. She pushed through the door, the momentary relief of dryness a fleeting comfort. Inside, the bar was a graveyard of half-empty pints and the hum of low voices. A few patrons glanced up as she crossed the room, their eyes flicking past her to the back, where a figure stood near the counter, his back to her. Quinn’s pulse quickened. *Tomás.* She didn’t need to see his face to know it was him. The way he moved, the way he carried himself—like a man who’d seen too much and still chose to keep walking. “You’re late,” she said, her voice sharp with the
weight
of her own exhaustion. Tomás turned, his warm brown eyes meeting hers. “Detective Quinn.” “You know I’m not here for the usual.” He exhaled, rubbing the back of his neck. “You’re not the first to ask.” A server sidled up beside them, a tray of drinks in her hands. Quinn took a whiskey from her, the burn of it hitting her throat like a reminder of what she
was chasing
. Tomás ordered a beer, his fingers brushing against the Saint Christopher medallion around his neck. “You’re still here,” Quinn said, her gaze lingering on the scar along his forearm. “Still working for them.” A smirk played at his lips. “You think I’m working for them? Or you think I’m working for *you*?” She didn’t answer. She didn’t have to. The back door creaked open, and a gust of cold air hit them, carrying the scent of damp stone and something older—something that made Quinn’s skin prickle. She turned just in time to see a figure slip through the shadows, their back to her, their movements too fluid, too *wrong.* Tomás’s voice cut through the silence. “You’re not supposed to be here.” Quinn’s
blood ran cold
. *They* knew she
was coming
. The man turned, his face obscured by the darkness. Quinn’s breath hitched. It was the same face she’d seen in the alley, the same face that had burned her with a look like a blade. “Detective Quinn,” the man said, his voice smooth, dangerous. “You’ve been looking for me.” She didn’t flinch. Didn’t hesitate. “I’ve been looking for *everything.*” The man stepped closer, his shadow stretching long across the floor. “Then come with me.” Quinn’s fingers tightened around her whiskey glass. She knew the risk. But she also knew the cost of turning away. “No,” she said. The man’s smile was all teeth. “Oh, but you will.” Tomás stepped between them, his voice low. “Quinn, wait.” She didn’t wait. She didn’t look back. The man’s hand shot out, grabbing her wrist. Quinn’s reflexes were sharp, her own fist connecting with his jaw before he could pull her forward. Sparks flew as his skull cracked against the bar. He stumbled, but he didn’t fall. “You’re not the only one who’s been chasing shadows,” he growled. Quinn’s eyes burned with something raw and desperate. She didn’t care about the rules anymore. She didn’t care about the risks. She lunged. The back door burst open, and the world exploded around her. --- The underground market was a labyrinth of tunnels, their walls slick with moisture, their air thick with the scent of ozone and something sweeter—like crushed violets and old magic. Quinn’s lungs burned as she ran, her boots kicking up dust and the occasional whisper of unseen voices. Then she saw it—a
flicker
of movement in the darkness ahead. A figure standing at the mouth of a tunnel, their back to her, their silhouette sharp against the dim light. Tomás. She skidded to a halt, her breath ragged. “You’re supposed to be helping me.” He didn’t turn. “I’m doing what I can.” “And what’s that?” A sound cut through the silence—a low, guttural whisper. Quinn’s blood turned to ice. The figure turned. It wasn’t a man. It wasn’t a woman. It was something else entirely—a shape shifting between forms, its eyes glowing like embers in the dark. Quinn’s pulse roared in her ears. She had to move. She had to *move.* She lunged, her hand connecting with the creature’s shoulder. Pain exploded through her fingers, but she didn’t stop. She didn’t look back. Behind her, Tomás cursed. Then he was there, his voice a blade in her ear. “Quinn, *no!*” She didn’t listen. The tunnel ahead twisted, the air growing colder with each step. The creature’s laughter
echoed
in her skull, a sound like breaking glass. Quinn didn’t know where she
was going
. She didn’t care. She only knew that if she didn’t move, she’d be dead. And if she didn’t move fast enough, she’d be *more than dead.*
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.0000%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
5
adverbTagCount
0
adverbTags
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)
wordCount
1033
totalAiIsmAdverbs
0
found
(empty)
highlights
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
61.2778%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)
wordCount
1033
totalAiIsms
4
found
0
word
"flicker"
count
1
1
word
"loomed"
count
1
2
word
"weight"
count
1
3
word
"echoed"
count
1
highlights
0
"flicker"
1
"loomed"
2
"weight"
3
"echoed"
100.0000%
Cliche density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
1
maxInWindow
1
found
0
label
"blood ran cold"
count
1
highlights
0
"blood ran cold"
100.0000%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
94
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Filter word density
Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
0
hedgeCount
0
narrationSentences
94
filterMatches
(empty)
hedgeMatches
(empty)
100.0000%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
1
totalSentences
109
matches
0
"know that some"
100.0000%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
55
mean
18.56
std
16.48
cv
0.888
sampleLengths
0
61
1
18
2
44
3
54
4
19
5
1
6
66
7
48
8
33
9
14
10
10
11
8
12
14
13
49
14
18
15
19
16
7
17
50
18
12
19
9
20
35
21
14
22
10
23
15
24
20
25
3
26
10
27
9
28
7
29
40
30
11
31
21
32
2
33
11
34
1
35
47
36
31
37
1
38
14
39
8
40
3
41
14
42
3
43
4
44
4
45
17
46
14
47
22
48
17
49
3
100.0000%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤5% passive sentences
passiveCount
0
totalSentences
94
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
3
totalVerbs
149
matches
0
"was chasing"
1
"was coming"
2
"was going"
100.0000%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
941
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
23
adverbRatio
0.024442082890541977
lyAdverbCount
3
lyAdverbRatio
0.003188097768331562
100.0000%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
109
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.0000%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
109
mean
9.37
std
7.25
cv
0.774
sampleLengths
0
23
1
12
2
26
3
10
4
6
5
2
6
37
7
7
8
19
9
14
10
21
11
12
12
5
13
2
14
1
15
17
16
12
17
24
18
13
19
15
20
29
21
3
22
1
23
12
24
21
25
14
26
8
27
2
28
8
29
8
30
6
31
13
32
21
33
15
34
14
35
4
36
6
37
13
38
3
39
4
40
27
41
23
42
6
43
6
44
4
45
5
46
9
47
3
48
23
49
9
39.7196%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
11
diversityRatio
0.21495327102803738
totalSentences
107
uniqueOpeners
23
75.0000%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
5
fancyCount
2
fancyTags
0
"Quinn said, her gaze lingering on the scar along his forearm (say, linger)"
1
"he growled (growl)"
92.7057%