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Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMN3MGZ7X9EF7PF4ZN8XFC1
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Model:
Mistral Large
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Thriller: chase through city streets
Duration:
32.1s
Cost:
$0.010668
Model input
System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
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Meta
AI
The rain came down in sheets, turning the pavement into a slick mirror that
fractured
the neon glow of Soho into a thousand trembling reflections. Detective Harlow Quinn moved like a shadow cut loose from the storm, her boots splashing through puddles that swallowed the sound of her steps. Her breath came in controlled bursts, fogging the collar of her trench coat as she scanned the alley ahead. The suspect had vanished around the corner of Greek Street, but she knew better than to think he’d slipped away. Eighteen years on the force had taught her the rhythm of a chase—the way a fleeing man’s shoulders tensed before a turn, the way his
footsteps
hesitated when he thought he’d lost you. She’d
heard that hesitation
three blocks back. He was tiring. Quinn adjusted the worn leather strap of her
watch
, the movement automatic, a habit from her army days when seconds meant the difference between life and death. The cold metal bit into her wrist, grounding her. She rounded the corner, her hand brushing the grip of her service weapon beneath her coat. The alley was narrow, lined with overflowing bins and the skeletal remains of fire escapes. A single flickering bulb cast long,
wavering
shadows. There. A figure darted across the mouth of the alley, his dark jacket blending with the night. Tomás Herrera—former paramedic, off-the-books medic to London’s underbelly, and, if her instincts were right, the key to
unraveling
the clique’s operations. He’d been at the Raven’s Nest when the raid went down, slipping out the back like smoke. She’d followed his trail through the rain, past the shuttered shops and the drunks stumbling home from last call, until the city’s pulse had faded into something quieter, something hungrier. Herrera ducked into a side street, his Saint Christopher medallion
glinting
as it swung free from his collar. Quinn broke into a sprint, her breath sharp in her throat. She
wasn’t losing
him. Not tonight. The side street opened into a wider thoroughfare, the rain drumming against the awnings of closed market stalls. Herrera glanced over his shoulder, his warm brown eyes locking onto hers for a fraction of a second before he bolted again. Quinn cursed under her breath. He
was heading
for the Tube station. Camden. Abandoned, half-collapsed, a graveyard for trains that hadn’t run in decades. She knew the stories—urban explorers who’d gone missing, kids who’d broken in for dares and come out changed. Or not at all. The department had written it off as structural instability, but Quinn had seen enough in the past three years to know better. Some places weren’t just empty. They were hungry. Herrera disappeared down the stairs leading to the station’s entrance, his
footsteps
echoing
back up to her. Quinn hesitated at the top, her fingers tightening around the cold metal of the railing. The air smelled of damp concrete and something older, something metallic and faintly sweet, like copper left in the rain. The green emergency lights
flickered
, casting the stairwell in a sickly glow. She could call it in. Wait for backup. But backup wouldn’t get here in time, and Herrera would be gone—vanished into whatever lay beneath Camden’s streets. And if he
was running
to ground, it meant he had something to hide. Something worth hiding. Quinn exhaled, her breath curling into the damp air. Then she followed. The stairwell
seemed to
stretch longer than it should have, the walls pressing in as the temperature dropped. Her boots splashed through shallow pools of water that reflected the dim light like black glass. At the bottom, the tunnel opened into a cavernous space, the ceiling lost in shadow. The remnants of old tracks gleamed dully beneath a layer of grime, and the air hummed with a low, almost imperceptible vibration, like the station itself
was breathing
. Herrera was nowhere in sight. Quinn moved forward, her hand resting on her weapon. The silence was
oppressive
, broken only by the distant drip of water and the faint scuffle of rats in the dark. Then, a sound—low, rhythmic, like the murmur of a crowd. She followed it, her steps careful, deliberate. The tunnel curved, and
suddenly
, the darkness gave way to light. A market sprawled before her, a labyrinth of stalls lit by flickering lanterns and the eerie glow of what looked like floating embers.
The air was thick with
the scent of spices and something sharper, something that made her nose burn. People moved between the stalls—no, not people. Not all of them. Some had too many fingers, their skin shimmering like oil on water. Others moved with a fluid grace that made her stomach clench. A woman with eyes like polished obsidian turned to
watch
her pass, her lips curling into a smile that showed too many teeth. Quinn’s pulse hammered in her throat. She’d seen things in the past three years that defied explanation—things that had gotten Morris killed. But this? This was something else. This was a world she wasn’t supposed to see. A hand clamped over her mouth. Quinn reacted on instinct, driving her elbow back into her attacker’s ribs. The grip loosened, and she spun, her fist connecting with a jaw that felt too solid, too *wrong*. Herrera stumbled back, his scarred forearm coming up to block her next strike. His eyes were wide, his breath ragged. “Detective,” he hissed. “You shouldn’t be here.” Quinn didn’t lower her guard. “Neither should you.” Herrera’s gaze
flicked
to the market behind her, then back to her face. “You don’t understand what this place is.” “I know it’s illegal. I know you’re running from me. And I know you’ve got answers about what happened to my partner.” Herrera’s expression darkened. “Morris? That’s what this is about?” “You were there that night. At the Raven’s Nest. You treated someone after the raid—someone who wasn’t on any official report.” Herrera’s fingers twitched at his sides, his Saint Christopher medallion
glinting
in the dim light. “You’re out of your depth, Quinn.” “Then help me understand.” A shout
echoed
through the market. Quinn turned in time to see a group of figures—tall, gaunt, their limbs too long—pushing through the crowd toward them. Herrera grabbed her arm. “We need to move. Now.” Quinn yanked free. “I’m not running.” “You don’t have a choice.” Herrera’s voice was urgent. “They’re not human. And they don’t like cops.” The figures were closer now, their movements jerky, unnatural. Quinn’s hand went to her weapon, but Herrera shook his head. “That won’t help you here.” She had no idea what *here* was. But she knew fear when she saw it—and Herrera
was terrified
. The first of the figures lunged. Quinn didn’t hesitate. She turned and ran.
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.0000%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
1
adverbTagCount
0
adverbTags
(empty)
91.1661%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)
wordCount
1132
totalAiIsmAdverbs
1
found
0
adverb
"suddenly"
count
1
highlights
0
"suddenly"
100.0000%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
0.0000%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)
wordCount
1132
totalAiIsms
12
found
0
word
"flickered"
count
1
1
word
"flicked"
count
1
2
word
"glinting"
count
2
3
word
"wavering"
count
1
4
word
"oppressive"
count
1
5
word
"fractured"
count
1
6
word
"footsteps"
count
2
7
word
"echoed"
count
1
8
word
"echoing"
count
1
9
word
"unraveling"
count
1
highlights
0
"flickered"
1
"flicked"
2
"glinting"
3
"wavering"
4
"oppressive"
5
"fractured"
6
"footsteps"
7
"echoed"
8
"echoing"
9
"unraveling"
100.0000%
Cliche density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
1
maxInWindow
1
found
0
label
"air was thick with"
count
1
highlights
0
"The air was thick with"
100.0000%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
1
narrationSentences
87
matches
0
"was terrified"
100.0000%
Filter word density
Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
1
hedgeCount
1
narrationSentences
87
filterMatches
0
"watch"
hedgeMatches
0
"seemed to"
100.0000%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
1
totalSentences
99
matches
0
"heard that hesitation"
100.0000%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
34
mean
32.88
std
27.64
cv
0.841
sampleLengths
0
88
1
43
2
75
3
1
4
84
5
35
6
52
7
64
8
64
9
43
10
12
11
77
12
5
13
47
14
11
15
98
16
37
17
6
18
50
19
7
20
8
21
20
22
22
23
9
24
21
25
21
26
4
27
35
28
6
29
17
30
25
31
18
32
6
33
7
100.0000%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤5% passive sentences
passiveCount
1
totalSentences
87
matches
0
"was terrified"
100.0000%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
4
totalVerbs
173
matches
0
"wasn’t losing"
1
"was heading"
2
"was running"
3
"was breathing"
100.0000%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
1031
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
24
adverbRatio
0.023278370514064017
lyAdverbCount
6
lyAdverbRatio
0.005819592628516004
100.0000%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
99
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.0000%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
99
mean
11.29
std
7.53
cv
0.667
sampleLengths
0
25
1
24
2
19
3
20
4
33
5
7
6
3
7
27
8
9
9
16
10
15
11
8
12
1
13
16
14
21
15
17
16
30
17
18
18
11
19
4
20
2
21
18
22
22
23
5
24
7
25
1
26
11
27
18
28
4
29
22
30
5
31
3
32
17
33
15
34
20
35
12
36
5
37
3
38
18
39
14
40
3
41
9
42
3
43
18
44
16
45
15
46
28
47
5
48
9
49
21
53.5354%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
2
diversityRatio
0.3333333333333333
totalSentences
99
uniqueOpeners
33
0.0000%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
1
fancyCount
1
fancyTags
0
"he hissed (hiss)"
84.9824%