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Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMN4VJSYTMDTFVS2Z0ZF7SP
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Model:
Mistral Large 2
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Fantasy: entering an ancient ruin
Duration:
39.7s
Cost:
$0.015090
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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
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The standing stones
loomed
like the ribs of some long-dead titan, their gnarled oak bark silvered by centuries of moonlight. Rory adjusted the strap of her delivery bag—though tonight, it carried neither dumplings nor fortune cookies, but the cold
weight
of the Fae blade tucked against her hip. The Heartstone pendant pulsed faintly against her collarbone, its crimson glow a secret between her and the night. Beside her, Nyx shifted, their shadowy form rippling like smoke caught in a draft. "The air tastes different here," they murmured, voice like wind through dead leaves. "Old magic. Hungry magic." Isolde moved ahead, her silver hair catching the starlight as she stepped between the stones. No footprints marked the dew-damp grass behind her. "The Grove remembers," she said, turning just enough for Rory to see the lavender gleam of her eyes. "And it is *curious* about you, Aurora Carter." Rory exhaled, watching her breath curl into the chill air. She’d delivered takeout to half of London, but nothing had prepared her for this—stepping through a veil that wasn’t there, into a place that shouldn’t exist. The moment they crossed the threshold, the world had tilted. The distant hum of Richmond Park’s traffic vanished. The scent of petrol and rain-wet pavement gave way to something richer: damp earth, wild thyme, the sharp green tang of crushed mint. And the light. Above them, the sky was no longer London’s bruised twilight but a vast, star-strewn expanse, deeper than any night Rory had known. Constellations wheeled in unfamiliar patterns, their light painting the clearing in hues of violet and silver. Fireflies—no, not fireflies, something with wings like stained glass—drifted between the trees, their glow pulsing in slow, hypnotic rhythms. Nyx stretched a shadowy hand toward one, fingers passing through its light like smoke. "Not insects," they said. "Echoes. Memories given form." Isolde plucked a wildflower from the grass—a bloom like a tiny blue star, its petals cool as frost against her fingertips. "The Grove shows you what it thinks you need to see." She held it out to Rory. "Take it. It won’t last beyond the stones, but for now…" Rory accepted the flower, its stem delicate as spun sugar. The moment her fingers brushed it, the petals shivered, and for a heartbeat, she swore she heard music—a single,
crystalline
note, like a chime struck in a dream. Then it
was gone
. "Right," Rory muttered, tucking the bloom into her pocket. "So. We’re not in Kansas anymore." Nyx tilted their head. "Kansas?" "Never mind." The trees ahead were ancient, their trunks wide enough that Rory couldn’t have wrapped her arms around them. Moss draped their branches like tattered
velvet
, and between their roots, the earth was soft, yielding. Rory stepped
carefully
, her boots sinking
slightly
with each step. The air hummed, not with sound, but with *pressure*, like the moment before a storm breaks. Isolde led them deeper, her movements eerily silent. Rory
envied that—her
own
footsteps
sounded too loud, too clumsy, like a child stomping through a cathedral. She kept one hand near the Fae blade, its hilt cold even through her jacket. Then she saw the first of the standing stones *inside* the Grove. It rose from the earth like a broken tooth, its surface carved with spirals and knots that
seemed to
shift when she looked at them directly. Rory reached out, then hesitated. "Is it safe to touch?" Isolde didn’t turn. "Nothing here is *safe*. But it won’t harm you. Not yet." Rory pressed her palm to the stone. The world *tilted*. Suddenly, she
was standing
in a market square, the air thick with the scent of baking bread and roasting meat. Stalls lined the cobblestone streets, their wares glowing under lanterns that burned with blue fire. A woman with moth-like wings bartered with a merchant whose skin
shimmered
like oil on water. Children darted between the crowds, their laughter high and bright. And then, just as
suddenly
, it
was gone
. Rory gasped, stumbling back. The Grove snapped back into focus—the trees, the strange sky, the
weight
of the blade at her hip. Nyx steadied her, their touch cool and insubstantial. "Visions," Isolde said
softly
. "The Grove shows you glimpses. Fragments of what was, or what might be." Rory flexed her fingers, half-expecting to find flour dusting her skin. "That wasn’t a memory. That was… *real*." "All memories are real to someone." Isolde’s voice was distant, her gaze fixed on something Rory couldn’t see. "The Grove is a crossroads. A place between." Nyx’s form darkened, their edges sharpening like a blade drawn from a sheath. "Something’s coming." Rory didn’t hear it at first. Then—a rustle, too loud to be the wind. A snap of a twig. The firefly-lights dimmed, retreating into the trees as if called away. Isolde’s hand went to her own dagger, her silver hair whipping as she turned. "We are not alone." The shadows between the trees *moved*. Not like Nyx—fluid, deliberate—but in jerks and starts, like a film strip skipping. Rory’s pulse hammered in her throat. The Heartstone pendant burned against her skin, its crimson glow flaring brighter. Then the first of them stepped into the clearing. It was human-shaped, but wrong. Its limbs were too long, its joints bending in ways that made Rory’s stomach clench. Its skin was the color of old parchment, stretched too tight over jagged bones. When it opened its mouth, no sound came out—only a rush of cold air, like the breath of a tomb. Nyx stepped in front of Rory, their form solidifying. "Hollowborn," they hissed. "Lost things. They shouldn’t be here." Isolde’s voice was a whip-crack. "They’re drawn to the Veil’s weakness. To *her*." She nodded at Rory. "The pendant is a
beacon
." Rory’s fingers closed around the Heartstone. "Can we fight them?" "Only if you want to die
slowly
." Nyx’s voice was grim. "They feed on fear. On memory." The Hollowborn took another step forward. Then another. Rory’s breath came fast. She could *feel* them, pressing in at the edges of her mind—her mother’s voice, Evan’s hands, the cold
weight
of the law textbooks she’d left behind in Cardiff. The Grove’s beauty twisted, the trees
suddenly
too tall, the sky too vast. The standing stones
loomed
like prison bars. Isolde’s hand closed around her wrist. "Breathe," she commanded. "They cannot take what you do not give them." Rory forced herself to exhale. The Fae blade was in her hand, its moonsilver edge catching the starlight. The Hollowborn recoiled, hissing. Nyx’s form rippled, expanding, swallowing the shadows around them. "Run," they said. "Now." Rory didn’t need to be told twice. She turned and sprinted, Isolde at her side, the Seer’s silver hair streaming behind her like a banner. The Grove blurred—the trees, the stones, the strange sky—all of it bleeding together as Rory’s boots pounded the soft earth. Behind them, the Hollowborn shrieked, a sound like tearing
silk
. Ahead, the standing stones
loomed
—the boundary. The way out. Rory didn’t look back. She burst through the threshold, the world snapping back into place with a sound like a held breath released. Richmond Park’s familiar paths stretched before her, the distant glow of London’s skyline a jagged crown on the horizon. The air smelled of rain and exhaust. The fireflies
were gone
. The standing stones stood silent, ordinary. Rory doubled over, hands on her knees, gasping. The Heartstone pendant was dark again, its glow extinguished. The Fae blade’s hilt was slick with sweat. Isolde stepped through the stones a moment later, her expression
unreadable
. "You did well." Nyx emerged last, their form flickering like a guttering candle before solidifying. "They won’t follow. Not beyond the Grove." Rory straightened, wiping her sleeve across her forehead. "What *were* those things?" "Echoes," Nyx said. "Hungry ones." Isolde plucked a leaf from Rory’s hair, her fingers brushing the crescent scar on her wrist. "The Grove tests those who enter. You passed." Rory looked back at the standing stones. The space between them was just that—empty air. No shimmer, no distortion. No sign that anything lay beyond. But she knew better now. She touched the Heartstone pendant, then the Fae blade at her hip. The night was far from over. And London, she suspected, was far stranger than she’d ever imagined.
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
59.2593%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
9
adverbTagCount
2
adverbTags
0
"she said, turning just enough for Rory to see the lavender gleam of her eyes [just]"
1
"Isolde said softly [softly]"
49.9285%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)
wordCount
1398
totalAiIsmAdverbs
7
found
0
adverb
"carefully"
count
1
1
adverb
"slightly"
count
1
2
adverb
"slowly"
count
1
3
adverb
"softly"
count
1
4
adverb
"suddenly"
count
3
highlights
0
"carefully"
1
"slightly"
2
"slowly"
3
"softly"
4
"suddenly"
100.0000%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
0.0000%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)
wordCount
1398
totalAiIsms
15
found
0
word
"crystalline"
count
1
1
word
"beacon"
count
1
2
word
"shimmered"
count
1
3
word
"loomed"
count
3
4
word
"velvet"
count
1
5
word
"silk"
count
1
6
word
"unreadable"
count
1
7
word
"weight"
count
3
8
word
"footsteps"
count
1
9
word
"echoes"
count
2
highlights
0
"crystalline"
1
"beacon"
2
"shimmered"
3
"loomed"
4
"velvet"
5
"silk"
6
"unreadable"
7
"weight"
8
"footsteps"
9
"echoes"
100.0000%
Cliche density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
0
maxInWindow
0
found
(empty)
highlights
(empty)
100.0000%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
112
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Filter word density
Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
0
hedgeCount
1
narrationSentences
112
filterMatches
(empty)
hedgeMatches
0
"seemed to"
100.0000%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
1
totalSentences
137
matches
0
"envied that—her"
100.0000%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
57
mean
24.11
std
18.79
cv
0.78
sampleLengths
0
66
1
31
2
49
3
77
4
3
5
57
6
22
7
49
8
38
9
4
10
15
11
5
12
2
13
60
14
40
15
12
16
36
17
14
18
7
19
3
20
61
21
8
22
30
23
17
24
18
25
26
26
15
27
30
28
18
29
6
30
31
31
9
32
54
33
18
34
22
35
10
36
17
37
8
38
52
39
18
40
22
41
13
42
7
43
48
44
9
45
4
46
55
47
25
48
14
49
19
100.0000%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤5% passive sentences
passiveCount
3
totalSentences
112
matches
0
"was gone"
1
"was gone"
2
"were gone"
100.0000%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
1
totalVerbs
201
matches
0
"was standing"
88.0000%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
1209
adjectiveStacks
2
stackExamples
0
"vast, star-strewn expanse,"
1
"tight over jagged bones."
adverbCount
47
adverbRatio
0.03887510339123242
lyAdverbCount
11
lyAdverbRatio
0.009098428453267164
100.0000%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
137
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.0000%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
137
mean
10.03
std
6.28
cv
0.626
sampleLengths
0
20
1
28
2
18
3
14
4
13
5
4
6
15
7
8
8
18
9
8
10
10
11
26
12
10
13
8
14
23
15
3
16
22
17
16
18
19
19
14
20
4
21
4
22
21
23
17
24
11
25
10
26
28
27
4
28
9
29
6
30
4
31
1
32
2
33
18
34
16
35
10
36
16
37
8
38
17
39
15
40
12
41
26
42
5
43
5
44
3
45
11
46
7
47
3
48
20
49
15
54.2579%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
9
diversityRatio
0.36496350364963503
totalSentences
137
uniqueOpeners
50
8.3333%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
9
fancyCount
6
fancyTags
0
"they murmured, voice like wind through dead leaves (murmur)"
1
"she said, turning just enough for Rory to see the lavender gleam of her eyes (say, turn just see gleam)"
2
"Rory muttered, tucking the bloom into her pocket (mutter, tuck)"
3
"Isolde said softly (say softly)"
4
"they hissed (hiss)"
5
"she commanded (command)"
79.9870%