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Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMN729S0V2EASHY2MQS3RSV
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Model:
Ministral 8B
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Mystery: examining a crime scene
Duration:
13.1s
Cost:
$0.000202
Model input
System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
Model response
Messages
Meta
AI
The abandoned Tube station hummed with the faintest whisper of damp, the kind that clung to bones and old secrets. Detective Harlow Quinn stepped over the yellow tape with the quiet precision of a soldier on patrol, her boots crunching on broken glass and the occasional scrap of paper—someone’s discarded notes, perhaps, or something more
sinister
. The fluorescent lights above
flickered
, casting long, skeletal shadows against the peeling paint of the station walls. The air smelled of rust and something sharper, like ozone after a storm. Eva Kowalski stood near the far end of the platform, her round glasses reflecting the sickly glow of the emergency lights. She tucked a loose curl behind her ear, her freckled cheeks flushed, though whether from the chill or something else, Harlow couldn’t yet say. Eva had
been called
in as an expert—someone who knew the city’s hidden underbelly better than most. Not that Harlow trusted her entirely. Not yet. “You’re late,” Eva said without looking up, her voice tight. She
was holding
a small, brass compass—Harlow recognized it immediately. The Veil Compass. A relic from the Market, if it wasn’t stolen. The needle wobbled, as if sensing something just beyond the edge of perception. Harlow didn’t answer. She moved to the edge of the platform, where the body lay. Or what was left of it. The victim—a man, mid-forties, dressed in a tailored suit—
was sprawled
across the tracks, his face a ruin of shattered bone and something darker, like ink bled into flesh. His eyes
were gone
. Not just missing. *Removed.* And the way his throat had been slit—too precise, too deliberate—made Harlow’s stomach clench. “Suicide?” Eva finally looked up, her green eyes wide behind her glasses. “Or maybe an animal attack?” Harlow exhaled through her nose. “Animals don’t take the eyes.” Eva’s fingers tightened around the compass. “Then what?” “Something that *wants* them.” A beat of silence. The hum of the station’s forgotten machinery filled the space between them. Eva stepped closer, her satchel slung over one shoulder. “You think it’s supernatural?” Harlow didn’t answer. She crouched beside the body, running her gloved fingers over the man’s lapel. The fabric was stiff, expensive. A man who knew how to dress for power. And yet, here he was, dead on a forgotten platform, his body arranged with the cold deliberation of a ritual. “Look at his hands,” Eva said, pointing. Harlow followed the gesture. The man’s fingers
were curled
, as if he’d been trying to hold onto something. But his palms were empty. No blood. No residue. Just smooth, unmarked skin. “No struggle,” Eva murmured. “No defense.” “Or no time to defend,” Harlow corrected. She turned her attention to the tracks. The rails
were scorched
, as if something had passed through recently—something hot, something *wrong.* And there, half-buried in the gravel, was a small, blackened bone. Not human. Too small. Too *wrong.* Eva leaned in. “That’s not from here.” Harlow picked it up, turning it over in her fingers. It was warm, almost pulsing, despite the cold. “No. It’s not.” She stood, brushing dust from her knees. “This wasn’t a crime scene when it was called in.” Eva blinked. “What?” “The body was moved.” Harlow gestured to the tracks, the way the gravel had
been disturbed
. “Fresh. But not fresh enough to match the initial report.” Eva’s breath hitched. “You think someone staged this?” “Or someone *erased* it.” Harlow stepped back, scanning the platform. “And they left something behind.” The Veil Compass in Eva’s hand
trembled
again, the needle swinging wildly before settling on a point just beyond the platform’s edge. A rift, maybe. A way in. A way out. Eva’s voice was barely a whisper. “The Market.” Harlow didn’t confirm it. She didn’t need to. She turned to the body one last time, studying the way the light caught the edges of the wounds, how the shadows pooled like spilled ink. Then she stood, straightening her jacket. “Get me the security footage from the station above,” she said. “And the names of everyone who was here before the body was found.” Eva nodded, already reaching for her satchel. “You think it’s connected to the clique?” Harlow didn’t answer. She knew better than to assume. But she also knew that when the Veil Compass pointed, you listened. And right now, it
was pointing
at something far worse than a simple murder. She holstered her pistol, the
weight
of it familiar against her hip. “Let’s find out who else was here.” Eva hesitated, then followed her gaze to the tracks. “And if it’s them?” Harlow met her eyes, her jaw set. “Then we’ll make sure they don’t take another.” She turned away, already moving toward the stairs that led up to the surface, where the real investigation began. The body was just the start. The question was—how deep did it go?
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.0000%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
5
adverbTagCount
0
adverbTags
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)
wordCount
818
totalAiIsmAdverbs
0
found
(empty)
highlights
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
51.1002%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)
wordCount
818
totalAiIsms
4
found
0
word
"flickered"
count
1
1
word
"trembled"
count
1
2
word
"sinister"
count
1
3
word
"weight"
count
1
highlights
0
"flickered"
1
"trembled"
2
"sinister"
3
"weight"
100.0000%
Cliche density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
0
maxInWindow
0
found
(empty)
highlights
(empty)
100.0000%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
75
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Filter word density
Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
0
hedgeCount
0
narrationSentences
75
filterMatches
(empty)
hedgeMatches
(empty)
100.0000%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
0
totalSentences
94
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
33
mean
24.45
std
20.4
cv
0.834
sampleLengths
0
86
1
70
2
45
3
71
4
17
5
10
6
8
7
4
8
16
9
13
10
50
11
7
12
31
13
6
14
45
15
7
16
21
17
17
18
3
19
26
20
8
21
15
22
31
23
8
24
8
25
32
26
24
27
14
28
35
29
19
30
13
31
15
32
32
80.0000%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤5% passive sentences
passiveCount
6
totalSentences
75
matches
0
"been called"
1
"was sprawled"
2
"were gone"
3
"were curled"
4
"were scorched"
5
"been disturbed"
100.0000%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
2
totalVerbs
117
matches
0
"was holding"
1
"was pointing"
92.9082%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
686
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
33
adverbRatio
0.048104956268221574
lyAdverbCount
8
lyAdverbRatio
0.011661807580174927
100.0000%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
94
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.0000%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
94
mean
8.59
std
6.78
cv
0.79
sampleLengths
0
20
1
36
2
17
3
13
4
21
5
24
6
17
7
6
8
2
9
10
10
10
11
3
12
9
13
13
14
3
15
12
16
6
17
28
18
4
19
3
20
15
21
12
22
5
23
5
24
5
25
6
26
2
27
4
28
4
29
12
30
9
31
4
32
3
33
13
34
5
35
9
36
20
37
7
38
4
39
14
40
5
41
2
42
2
43
4
44
4
45
2
46
7
47
7
48
25
49
2
40.4255%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
9
diversityRatio
0.2978723404255319
totalSentences
94
uniqueOpeners
28
0.0000%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
5
fancyCount
4
fancyTags
0
"Eva said without looking up, her voice tight (say up)"
1
"Eva said, pointing (say, point)"
2
"Eva murmured (murmur)"
3
"Harlow corrected (correct)"
86.1432%