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Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMN73Z8Q2EMNRPAC9NPR3Q0
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Model:
Mistral Large
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Thriller: chase through city streets
Duration:
28.8s
Cost:
$0.010500
Model input
System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
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Meta
AI
The rain came down in sheets, turning the London streets into a slick, black mirror. Detective Harlow Quinn’s breath fogged in front of her as she sprinted, her boots splashing through puddles that reflected the
fractured
glow of neon signs. The suspect—Tomás Herrera—was fast, his dark curls plastered to his forehead, his Saint Christopher medallion bouncing against his chest with every stride. He cut left down a narrow alley, his scarred forearm slicing through the air as he vaulted over a stack of crates. Quinn didn’t hesitate. She followed, her sharp jaw set, her worn leather
watch
digging into her wrist. The alley spat them out onto Greek Street, where the green neon sign of *The Raven’s Nest*
flickered
like a dying ember. Herrera didn’t slow. He shouldered past a group of smokers huddled under the bar’s awning, sending one stumbling into the gutter. “Police!” Quinn barked, but the word
was swallowed
by the drumming rain. Herrera glanced back, his warm brown eyes locking onto hers for a split second before he ducked into the mouth of an alley on the opposite side of the street. Quinn cursed under her breath. She
wasn’t losing
him. Not tonight. The alley was a gullet of shadows, the brick walls slick with rain and grime. Herrera’s
footsteps
echoed
ahead, but the sound
was swallowed
by the deeper darkness of a descending staircase. Quinn skidded to a halt at the top, her pulse hammering. The stairs led down into the bowels of the city, into the abandoned Tube tunnels beneath Camden. She knew what lay down there—the Veil Market. A place where the rules of the world above didn’t apply. She hesitated. Protocol said to call for backup. Protocol said not to pursue a suspect into unknown, potentially hostile territory alone. But protocol hadn’t saved DS Morris three years ago. Protocol hadn’t explained the way his body had
been found
—pale, drained, his eyes wide with something like terror. Quinn had spent the last three years chasing whispers, following leads that always
seemed to
slip through her fingers. And now, here was Herrera, a man with ties to the supernatural underworld, running straight into the dark. Her fingers twitched toward her radio. No. Backup would take too long. By the time they arrived, Herrera would be gone, swallowed by the market’s shifting stalls and shadowed corridors. She had to move now. Quinn descended the stairs, her boots splashing in shallow, stagnant water. The air grew thicker, warmer, laced with the scent of incense and something metallic. The tunnel opened up into a cavernous space, the walls lined with flickering lanterns that cast long,
wavering
shadows. The Veil Market sprawled before her, a labyrinth of stalls and tents, their wares glowing with an eerie luminescence. A bone token hung from a chain around her neck—she didn’t remember picking it up, but she must have grabbed it from Herrera during the chase. The market was alive with movement. Figures in hooded cloaks and masks of polished bone wove between the stalls, their voices a low hum beneath the clatter of unseen transactions. A vendor with too many teeth grinned at her from behind a table laden with jars of swirling, iridescent liquid. Another stall displayed rows of knives, their blades
etched
with symbols that made her eyes ache if she looked at them too long. Quinn pushed forward, her military precision cutting through the crowd. She kept her gaze sharp, scanning for Herrera’s dark curls, his olive skin, the
glint
of his medallion. The market
seemed to
shift around her, the paths between stalls rearranging like a living thing. She turned a corner and nearly collided with a towering figure wrapped in tattered robes, its face hidden beneath a deep hood. It didn’t speak, but its presence pressed against her like a physical
weight
. She sidestepped it, her breath shallow. Ahead, she caught a flash of movement—Herrera, slipping between two stalls. She broke into a run, her boots pounding against the damp stone. The stall owners hissed as she brushed past, their voices rising in a chorus of disapproval. A woman with silver-streaked hair grabbed at her sleeve, pressing a small, pulsating stone into her palm. “For protection,” she whispered, her voice like dry leaves. Quinn shook her off and kept moving. The market
seemed to
narrow, the stalls pressing in closer, their wares more grotesque. A man with a face like melted wax offered her a vial of what looked like liquid shadow. A child—if it was a child—held out a handful of teeth, each one humming with a quiet, discordant note. Quinn ignored them all, her focus locked on Herrera. She rounded another corner and skidded to a stop. Herrera stood in the center of a small clearing, his chest heaving, his hands raised. Behind him, a figure emerged from the shadows—a man with a face like a skull, his eyes burning with a cold, blue fire. Quinn’s stomach twisted. She
knew that face
. Or rather, she knew the stories. Silas Vey, the keeper of the Veil Market. A man who
was said
to deal in more than just enchanted trinkets. “Detective Quinn,” Silas said, his voice like gravel. “What an unexpected pleasure.” Herrera didn’t turn around. “You weren’t supposed to follow me,” he muttered. Quinn’s fingers twitched toward her sidearm, but she didn’t draw it. Not yet. “Tomás Herrera,” she said, her voice steady. “You’re under arrest.” Silas laughed, a sound like cracking ice. “Arrest? Here? Oh, Detective, you have no jurisdiction in my market.” Quinn’s jaw tightened. “I’m not leaving without him.” Silas tilted his head, his burning eyes studying her. “And what makes you think you could take him if I say otherwise?” Quinn didn’t answer. She didn’t have to. She’d spent her life facing down men who thought they were untouchable. Silas Vey was no different. Herrera finally turned to face her, his expression
unreadable
. “You don’t know what you’re getting into, Quinn.” “Then enlighten me,” she said. Silas stepped between them, his skeletal face splitting into a grin. “Oh, this is going to be fun.” He raised a hand, and the shadows around them deepened, pressing in like a living thing. “Run along, Detective. Before you learn more than you bargained for.” Quinn’s pulse pounded in her ears. She could feel the
weight
of the market around her, the eyes of its denizens
watch
ing, waiting. She had a choice to make—turn back now, or push forward into the unknown. She didn’t hesitate. “Herrera,” she said, her voice low. “Move.” And then she lunged.
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.0000%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
6
adverbTagCount
0
adverbTags
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)
wordCount
1104
totalAiIsmAdverbs
0
found
(empty)
highlights
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
9.4203%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)
wordCount
1104
totalAiIsms
10
found
0
word
"flickered"
count
1
1
word
"glint"
count
1
2
word
"wavering"
count
1
3
word
"unreadable"
count
1
4
word
"fractured"
count
1
5
word
"weight"
count
2
6
word
"footsteps"
count
1
7
word
"echoed"
count
1
8
word
"etched"
count
1
highlights
0
"flickered"
1
"glint"
2
"wavering"
3
"unreadable"
4
"fractured"
5
"weight"
6
"footsteps"
7
"echoed"
8
"etched"
100.0000%
Cliche density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
0
maxInWindow
0
found
(empty)
highlights
(empty)
100.0000%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
88
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Filter word density
Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
1
hedgeCount
3
narrationSentences
88
filterMatches
0
"watch"
hedgeMatches
0
"seemed to"
100.0000%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
1
totalSentences
96
matches
0
"knew that face"
100.0000%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
27
mean
40.48
std
30.3
cv
0.749
sampleLengths
0
84
1
60
2
12
3
41
4
79
5
85
6
35
7
89
8
73
9
85
10
72
11
60
12
81
13
12
14
12
15
23
16
18
17
8
18
22
19
24
20
17
21
5
22
45
23
37
24
3
25
7
26
4
100.0000%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤5% passive sentences
passiveCount
4
totalSentences
88
matches
0
"was swallowed"
1
"was swallowed"
2
"been found"
3
"was said"
100.0000%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
1
totalVerbs
175
matches
0
"wasn’t losing"
100.0000%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
1024
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
19
adverbRatio
0.0185546875
lyAdverbCount
4
lyAdverbRatio
0.00390625
100.0000%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
96
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.0000%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
96
mean
11.39
std
6.83
cv
0.6
sampleLengths
0
15
1
25
2
22
3
22
4
3
5
14
6
22
7
3
8
18
9
12
10
30
11
5
12
4
13
2
14
15
15
17
16
11
17
17
18
8
19
11
20
2
21
6
22
13
23
9
24
18
25
19
26
18
27
6
28
1
29
5
30
18
31
5
32
11
33
14
34
19
35
19
36
26
37
6
38
24
39
20
40
23
41
10
42
18
43
16
44
22
45
13
46
6
47
11
48
12
49
16
50.0000%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
7
diversityRatio
0.34375
totalSentences
96
uniqueOpeners
33
91.6667%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
6
fancyCount
2
fancyTags
0
"she whispered, her voice like dry leaves (whisper, like)"
1
"he muttered (mutter)"
91.2404%