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Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMN7F2E9G8X4GMKBEP951BN
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Model:
Ministral 8B
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Thriller: chase through city streets
Duration:
12.2s
Cost:
$0.000307
Model input
System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
Model response
Messages
Meta
AI
The rain came down in sheets, a relentless drumming that turned the cobblestones slick beneath Quinn’s boots. She kept her pace steady, her breath even, the leather of her
watch
strap creaking faintly against her wrist as she adjusted her grip on the handle of her revolver. The gun was a relic from her days in the Special Response Unit, its
weight
familiar, its purpose unyielding. She hadn’t fired it in years—not since the night she’d lost Morris. But tonight, the streets of Soho felt like a different world, one where the rules of the law didn’t apply, where shadows moved on their own and the air hummed with something just beyond perception. The suspect—*he*—had been easy to tail at first. A man in a long, dark coat, his face obscured by the brim of a fedora pulled low. He moved with the confidence of someone who knew these streets better than the cops who patrolled them. Quinn had seen him before, lurking near the Raven’s Nest, that seedy bar with its neon sign
flicker
ing like a dying star. She’d been there once, posing as a journalist,
watch
ing, listening. That was when she’d first noticed the way he
watch
ed the door, the way his fingers twitched near his coat like he
was itching
to pull something from his pocket. Something that wasn’t just a cigarette pack. Now, he was cutting through the alley behind the old bookshop, his
footsteps
swallowed by the rain. Quinn followed, her boots splashing through puddles that reflected the sickly glow of the streetlamps. The air smelled of wet stone and something sharper—ozone, maybe, or the faint metallic tang of old blood. She didn’t like it. Didn’t like any of it. A sharp crack split the air. Quinn barely had time to react before the glass of the alley’s exit shattered inward, rain and shards raining down in a glittering storm. She ducked, pressing herself against the brick wall as the suspect’s head appeared in the doorway, his fedora askew, his face twisted in something between a sneer and a grimace. "You’re not supposed to be here, Detective," he said, his voice low, amused. "This isn’t your turf." Quinn didn’t answer. She didn’t need to. She stepped forward, her revolver leveled at his chest. "Drop whatever you’re carrying. Now." The man laughed, a sound that was equal parts mirth and menace. "Or what? You’re gonna shoot me in the middle of the street? Get real." He reached into his coat, and Quinn’s finger tightened on the trigger— A hand clamped over her wrist, yanking her back with a strength that surprised her. She whirled, her gun still raised, and found herself staring into the warm brown eyes of a man she didn’t recognize. He was younger, maybe mid-thirties, with dark curly hair slicked back from his face. A scar ran along his left forearm, a pale line against his olive skin. He wore a stained white shirt beneath a worn leather jacket, and the scent of antiseptic and something earthier—like damp earth and crushed herbs—lingered around him. "Easy," he said, his voice calm, but his grip was iron. "He’s not worth it." Quinn glared at him, then back at the suspect, who was now pressing a hand to his side, his coat gaping open to reveal a dark stain spreading across his shirt. "He’s bleeding. He’s got something on him." The younger man—*Tomás*, she realized with a
flicker
of irritation—didn’t look at the suspect. His gaze
was fixed
on her, intense. "You don’t know what you’re dealing with here. That’s not just blood." Quinn’s jaw tightened. "Then what is it?" Before he could answer, the suspect let out a groan, his body sagging against the alley wall. "Fucking paramedic," he muttered. "Always sticking his nose where it doesn’t belong." Tomás’s fingers flexed around Quinn’s wrist, just enough to remind her he was still there. "He’s not just a paramedic. He’s got a way with things that don’t heal normally." Quinn exhaled
sharply
through her nose. "Supernatural." Tomás didn’t confirm or deny it. Instead, he nodded toward the suspect, who was now sliding to the ground, his movements sluggish, unnatural. "He’s not the one you should be worried about. There’s someone else coming. Someone who doesn’t like loose ends." Quinn’s pulse spiked. She
knew that tone
. Knew the way his voice dropped, the way his body language shifted when he
was talking
about things that went beyond the law. She’d heard it before, in the whispers of the old-timers on the force, in the files that
got buried
. "You’re talking about the Veil Market." Tomás’s expression didn’t change, but his grip on her wrist tightened just
slightly
. "You’re not supposed to know about it." Quinn yanked her arm free. "I know about it because I’ve been looking for answers. And right now, that suspect—" she jerked her chin toward the man on the ground, who was now muttering to himself in a language she didn’t recognize "—he’s got something that belongs to the clique. Something that’s got my partner’s name on it." Tomás’s eyes darkened. "You lost a partner?" Quinn’s fingers twitched toward her revolver again. "Three years ago. Under suspicious circumstances. And now, I’m starting to think it wasn’t just a hit. It was something else." The younger man’s gaze
flickered
to the suspect, then back to her. "You’re walking into something dangerous. The Veil Market isn’t a place for cops." Quinn stepped around him, her boots splashing through the puddles. "I’m not here as a cop. I’m here as a detective. And I’m not leaving until I get what I came for." Tomás followed her, his voice low. "Then you’d better be ready. Because what you’re about to walk into doesn’t play by your rules." The suspect groaned again, his body convulsing. Quinn crouched beside him, her revolver still drawn. "Where is it? Where’s the package?" The man’s eyes rolled back, his skin taking on a sickly sheen. "You’re not gonna find it here," he rasped. "It’s underground. The Veil Market. Full moon tonight. You’ll know it when you see it." Quinn stood, her mind racing. The Veil Market. She’d heard rumors, of course—whispers in the back alleys of the force, files that got marked "classified" and then disappeared. But this was the first time she’d had something concrete to go on. And now, thanks to this suspect and the paramedic who
seemed to
know more than he
was letting
on, she had a lead. She turned to Tomás. "How do I get in?" His expression was
unreadable
. "You don’t." She raised an eyebrow. "Then what the hell am I doing here?" Tomás exhaled, running a hand through his damp hair. "You need a bone token. Something from something that’s already dead." Quinn’s stomach twisted. "You’re joking." Tomás shook his head. "I wish I were." She looked back at the suspect, who was now lying still, his chest rising and falling in shallow, unnatural breaths. "His bone token?" Tomás hesitated. "It’s not just a token. It’s a key. And once you’re inside, you’re not just a customer. You’re prey." Quinn holstered her revolver, her fingers brushing against the familiar
weight
of the gun. "Then I’ll just have to be careful." Tomás’s gaze was steady. "You won’t be careful enough." A sound cut through the night—a distant, rhythmic *thump*, like something heavy
being dropped
into water. Quinn’s skin prickled. "What the hell was that?" Tomás’s voice was
barely above a whisper
. "That’s the market moving. It’s not stationary. It changes with the moon." Quinn’s mind raced. The full moon was tonight. That meant the Veil Market was already here, lurking beneath the city, waiting. And if she wanted answers—if she wanted to find out what had
really
happened to
Morris—she had to go down there. She looked at the suspect, then at Tomás. "Help me." Tomás’s expression was grim. "I can’t just walk you in there." Quinn’s voice was firm. "Then tell me how." Tomás closed his eyes for a moment, as if gathering his thoughts. When he opened them again, his gaze was intense. "There’s a way in. An old Tube station beneath Camden. But you’ll need to get there before the market shifts again. And once you’re inside, you don’t look back." Quinn nodded. "I won’t." Tomás reached into his jacket and pulled out a small, tarnished bone token. It
was shaped
like a key, its surface
etched
with strange symbols. "This is yours. But remember—once you’re in, you’re not just a guest. You’re a target." Quinn took the token, her fingers brushing against the cold, smooth bone. "I understand." Tomás’s voice dropped to a whisper. "You don’t. But you will." The suspect groaned again, his body twitching. Quinn knelt beside him, her hand hovering over his coat. "Where’s the entrance?" The man’s eyes
fluttered
open, his gaze unfocused. "Under the station. Near the old tracks. But you have to go at midnight. That’s when the door opens." Quinn stood, her mind made up. "I’ll be there." Tomás’s expression was grim. "Be careful." Quinn didn’t answer. She turned and started walking, her boots splashing through the rain-soaked streets. She could feel Tomás’s gaze on her back, but she didn’t look back. She had a suspect to find, a market to infiltrate, and a partner’s name to avenge. The rain continued to fall, a relentless drumming that filled the silence between her thoughts. She adjusted her grip on the bone token, feeling its
weight
against her palm. It was cold, heavy, and it felt like a promise. And she was ready to keep it.
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.0000%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
4
adverbTagCount
0
adverbTags
(empty)
75.1861%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)
wordCount
1612
totalAiIsmAdverbs
4
found
0
adverb
"sharply"
count
1
1
adverb
"slightly"
count
1
2
adverb
"barely above a whisper"
count
1
3
adverb
"really"
count
1
highlights
0
"sharply"
1
"slightly"
2
"barely above a whisper"
3
"really"
100.0000%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
44.1687%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)
wordCount
1612
totalAiIsms
9
found
0
word
"flickered"
count
1
1
word
"flicker"
count
1
2
word
"fluttered"
count
1
3
word
"unreadable"
count
1
4
word
"weight"
count
3
5
word
"footsteps"
count
1
6
word
"etched"
count
1
highlights
0
"flickered"
1
"flicker"
2
"fluttered"
3
"unreadable"
4
"weight"
5
"footsteps"
6
"etched"
100.0000%
Cliche density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
0
maxInWindow
0
found
(empty)
highlights
(empty)
100.0000%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
103
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Filter word density
Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
1
hedgeCount
2
narrationSentences
103
filterMatches
0
"watch"
hedgeMatches
0
"seemed to"
1
"happened to"
100.0000%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
1
totalSentences
146
matches
0
"knew that tone"
100.0000%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
54
mean
29.61
std
25.06
cv
0.846
sampleLengths
0
113
1
113
2
59
3
77
4
21
5
38
6
90
7
15
8
38
9
33
10
7
11
29
12
30
13
7
14
42
15
55
16
20
17
58
18
7
19
28
20
25
21
32
22
23
23
21
24
35
25
64
26
9
27
6
28
12
29
20
30
5
31
8
32
23
33
21
34
21
35
9
36
24
37
19
38
42
39
10
40
11
41
8
42
50
43
4
44
40
45
14
46
11
47
20
48
27
49
9
100.0000%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤5% passive sentences
passiveCount
4
totalSentences
103
matches
0
"was fixed"
1
"got buried"
2
"being dropped"
3
"was shaped"
100.0000%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
3
totalVerbs
214
matches
0
"was itching"
1
"was talking"
2
"was letting"
100.0000%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
1182
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
38
adverbRatio
0.032148900169204735
lyAdverbCount
10
lyAdverbRatio
0.008460236886632826
100.0000%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
146
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.0000%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
146
mean
10.95
std
8.2
cv
0.749
sampleLengths
0
17
1
30
2
19
3
12
4
35
5
8
6
18
7
18
8
22
9
10
10
30
11
7
12
17
13
15
14
18
15
4
16
5
17
6
18
24
19
30
20
13
21
4
22
3
23
4
24
9
25
5
26
12
27
26
28
15
29
21
30
14
31
14
32
26
33
11
34
4
35
31
36
7
37
14
38
7
39
12
40
3
41
4
42
17
43
4
44
8
45
15
46
15
47
6
48
1
49
6
47.9452%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
3
diversityRatio
0.2465753424657534
totalSentences
146
uniqueOpeners
36
0.0000%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
4
fancyCount
4
fancyTags
0
"he said, his voice low, amused (say, amuse)"
1
"he said, his voice calm, but his grip was iron (say, be)"
2
"he muttered (mutter)"
3
"he rasped (rasp)"
86.3118%