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Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMN81TZ4D1K3Y5TEX393CSC
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Model:
Ministral 8B
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Thriller: chase through city streets
Duration:
6.2s
Cost:
$0.000203
Model input
System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
Model response
Messages
Meta
AI
The rain fell in sheets, a relentless drumming that turned the pavement to slick mirrors beneath Quinn’s boots. She crouched low, her breath shallow, her fingers tightening around the grip of her sidearm. The neon glow of a
flicker
ing streetlamp cast long, jagged shadows across the cobblestones, but the man ahead of her was nothing but a dark blur, a ghost slipping through the downpour. She had been tracking him for hours—ever since the call came in about the stolen artifact, the one that had been sitting in the Metropolitan Museum’s restricted vaults for a century. The kind of thing that didn’t just vanish. The kind of thing that *moved* itself. And now, after a trail of bloodstained alleyways and a chase through the backstreets of Soho, he
was leading
her somewhere deeper. Somewhere *wrong*. The Raven’s Nest
loomed
ahead, its green neon sign buzzing like a dying insect against the storm. The bar’s door
was propped
open, a gust of warm, damp air spilling onto the sidewalk. Inside, the hum of low voices and the clink of glasses
was muffled
, but the air smelled of stale whiskey and something older—something that didn’t belong in a human world. Quinn hesitated. She knew the place. Knew the stories. Knew the kind of people who frequented its hidden corners. But her suspect was already inside. She didn’t hesitate long. The moment she stepped over the threshold, the rain behind her cut off like a curtain. The bar was dim, the kind of dim that made your eyes ache, the kind that hid things. The walls
were lined
with yellowed maps and black-and-white photographs of people who looked like they belonged in a different century. A few patrons sat at the bar, their faces half-lit by the dim glow of a single lamp. They turned as she entered, but their expressions were
unreadable
—just the kind of blank indifference that made her skin prickle. Quinn moved toward the back, her hand resting
lightly
on her holster. The suspect
was gone
. But she could feel him. The air shifted where he’d been, like the world itself had exhaled. Then she saw it—a
flicker
of movement behind the bookshelf. A hidden door, barely visible unless you knew it was there. The kind of thing that made her jaw tighten. She’d seen doors like this before. Seen the things that slipped through them. She reached out, her fingers brushing the edge of the shelf. The wood was cold, damp. She pulled. The door swung open with a groan of protesting hinges, revealing a narrow staircase descending into darkness. The scent of damp earth and something metallic filled her nostrils. The Veil Market. Her pulse spiked. She knew about the Veil Market. Knew it moved e
very
full moon, knew it was a place where the rules of the human world didn’t apply. Knew it was where things went to disappear. And she knew, with a certainty that settled like a stone in her gut, that her suspect wasn’t just running. He
was *going
somewhere*. The choice was simple. She could turn back. Walk out of that bar, back into the rain, and pretend she’d never seen the door. Pretend she hadn’t followed a trail of blood and lies straight into the mouth of hell. Or she could go down. Quinn exhaled
sharply
, her breath fogging in the cold air. She stepped forward, her boots
echoing
on the wooden stairs. The door creaked shut behind her, sealing her in. The descent was steep, the steps slick with something she didn’t want to identify. The air grew heavier, thicker, until it felt like the
very
air was pressing against her skin. The market
loomed
ahead, a labyrinth of stalls and
flicker
ing lanterns, the kind of place where deals were made in whispers and curses were paid in blood. And there, in the center of it all, was her suspect. He stood with his back to her, his dark hair damp from the rain that had followed her down. He wasn’t alone. A woman in a floor-length coat stood beside him, her fingers wrapped around a small, ornate box. The kind of box that didn’t belong in any museum. Quinn’s hand twitched toward her weapon. But then she saw the way the woman’s fingers
trembled
. Saw the way her eyes darted to the shadows, as if she expected something to come for her at any moment. And then she saw the bone token in the woman’s pocket. The one that let you in. Quinn’s blood turned to ice. She had been wrong. This wasn’t just a chase. This wasn’t just about an artifact. This was about something worse. The woman turned, her face half-hidden beneath the brim of her hat. She smiled—a slow, knowing thing. "Detective Quinn," she said, her voice like
silk
over glass. "I was wondering when you’d follow." Quinn’s finger tightened around her pistol. "Let’s talk." The woman laughed, a sound that
echoed
through the market like a dying animal. Then she turned back to the box, her fingers brushing it as if it were sacred. And in that moment, Quinn knew. She wasn’t here to arrest anyone. She was here to find out what the hell
was happening
. The market around them
seemed to
shift, the lanterns
flicker
ing like dying stars. Somewhere in the distance, a bell tolled—not the sound of a clock, but something older, something that made her teeth ache. The woman reached into the box. And something inside *moved*. Quinn didn’t wait. She fired.
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.0000%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
1
adverbTagCount
0
adverbTags
(empty)
67.7766%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)
wordCount
931
totalAiIsmAdverbs
3
found
0
adverb
"lightly"
count
1
1
adverb
"sharply"
count
1
2
adverb
"very"
count
1
highlights
0
"lightly"
1
"sharply"
2
"very"
100.0000%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
14.0709%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)
wordCount
931
totalAiIsms
8
found
0
word
"flicker"
count
1
1
word
"trembled"
count
1
2
word
"loomed"
count
2
3
word
"silk"
count
1
4
word
"unreadable"
count
1
5
word
"echoed"
count
1
6
word
"echoing"
count
1
highlights
0
"flicker"
1
"trembled"
2
"loomed"
3
"silk"
4
"unreadable"
5
"echoed"
6
"echoing"
100.0000%
Cliche density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
0
maxInWindow
0
found
(empty)
highlights
(empty)
100.0000%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
84
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Filter word density
Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
0
hedgeCount
1
narrationSentences
84
filterMatches
(empty)
hedgeMatches
0
"seemed to"
100.0000%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
0
totalSentences
86
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
36
mean
25.56
std
23.89
cv
0.935
sampleLengths
0
65
1
70
2
82
3
6
4
4
5
93
6
33
7
43
8
18
9
31
10
37
11
24
12
4
13
36
14
5
15
29
16
58
17
11
18
49
19
37
20
11
21
6
22
5
23
15
24
5
25
33
26
8
27
30
28
6
29
6
30
11
31
34
32
6
33
4
34
3
35
2
93.6508%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤5% passive sentences
passiveCount
5
totalSentences
84
matches
0
"was propped"
1
"was muffled"
2
"were lined"
3
"was gone"
4
"were made were paid"
100.0000%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
3
totalVerbs
159
matches
0
"was leading"
1
"was *going"
2
"was happening"
100.0000%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
921
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
32
adverbRatio
0.03474484256243214
lyAdverbCount
4
lyAdverbRatio
0.004343105320304018
100.0000%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
86
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.0000%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
86
mean
10.7
std
7.11
cv
0.664
sampleLengths
0
18
1
15
2
32
3
31
4
8
5
7
6
22
7
2
8
17
9
16
10
30
11
2
12
4
13
3
14
10
15
6
16
4
17
16
18
18
19
21
20
18
21
20
22
12
23
4
24
5
25
12
26
10
27
11
28
9
29
6
30
7
31
11
32
5
33
2
34
17
35
11
36
3
37
3
38
6
39
20
40
8
41
20
42
4
43
4
44
4
45
16
46
16
47
5
48
10
49
10
32.5581%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
15
diversityRatio
0.2558139534883721
totalSentences
86
uniqueOpeners
22
100.0000%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
1
fancyCount
0
fancyTags
(empty)
88.7092%