NC Bench
Overview
About
Tests
Models
Vendors
Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMNC0N8KHKM0PFJ60J3WJGY
Run Details
Model:
Ministral 3B
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Mystery: examining a crime scene
Duration:
4.1s
Cost:
$0.000082
Model input
System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
Model response
Messages
Meta
AI
The abandoned Tube station hummed with the stale, damp breath of the earth beneath Camden. Detective Quinn adjusted the strap of her worn leather
watch
as she stepped into the dim glow of a flickering emergency light. The air smelled of rust and something older—something that coiled at the back of her throat like a warning. She’d
been sent
here to investigate the disappearance of a local occultist, but the body she found wasn’t what she expected. The victim lay sprawled across the cracked concrete floor of the old station, her curly red hair matted with something dark and viscous. Eva Kowalski, her best friend and the occult researcher, had been the one to call Quinn in. She’d found the body near the farthest corner, where the air felt thicker, heavier than the rest of the station. Quinn’s instincts prickled. This wasn’t a simple homicide. “Quinn,” a voice cut through the silence. She turned to see DS Morris standing just inside the entrance, his uniform crisp despite the damp. His jaw was set, his eyes sharp with the kind of focus that meant he’d been here before. “You’re late.” “Morris,” Quinn said, voice low. “You’re here.” Morris exhaled through his nose, the sound sharp. “I was told to check in. You know how this place gets.” Quinn didn’t. But she knew enough to
know that the
Veil Market moved like a shadow, shifting its locations on the full moon, and this station had
been abandoned
for years. The bone token they’d found at the entrance—it wasn’t just a key. It was a door. Morris crouched beside the body, his gloved fingers brushing the red curls. “She’s been here a while. The wounds aren’t fresh.” “And the blood?” Quinn asked, stepping closer. The stain on the concrete was too deep, too *wrong*. It didn’t pool like human blood. It clung, like something had
been drawn
into the earth itself. Morris didn’t answer right away. He was already scanning the area, his gaze flicking toward the far wall where the emergency lights cast long, jagged shadows. “You see that?” Quinn followed his stare. The wall wasn’t just cracked. It
was *breathing
*. The cracks pulsed, like veins, and the air between them
seemed to
shift, though no wind stirred. “Morris,” Quinn said, voice tight, “what the hell is this place?” Morris stood, his expression
unreadable
. “It’s not a place. It’s a *threshold*.” A threshold for what, Quinn didn’t know. But she’d seen enough in her years on the force to know that when the supernatural
got involved
, the rules didn’t apply. The body beneath her still didn’t make sense. The wounds were precise, surgical. Not a knife. Not a gun. Something *else*. “Where’s the Veil Compass?” Quinn asked, already knowing the answer. Morris’s eyes darkened. “It’s gone.” Quinn’s fingers tightened around the strap of her satchel. “And the token?” “Gone too.” The station felt colder now. The air thickened, pressing against her skin like a second layer of flesh. Quinn turned back to the body. Eva’s eyes were open, staring blankly at the ceiling. Her mouth was
slightly
parted, as if she’d been speaking in a language Quinn didn’t understand. Then she noticed it—the faint, almost imperceptible glow around Eva’s wrists. A pulse of light, like a heartbeat, flickering just beneath the skin. Morris stepped forward, his breath steady. “She’s not dead.” Quinn’s pulse hammered in her throat. “What?” “She’s not *dead*. She’s… trapped.” Trapped in what, Quinn didn’t know. But the way Morris said it, the way his voice had hardened, made her stomach twist. This wasn’t just a murder. This was something worse. “What do we do?” Quinn asked, her voice
barely above a whisper
. Morris didn’t answer right away. He was already reaching into his jacket, pulling out a small brass compass. It was old, its surface worn smooth by years of use, the needle pointing straight at the body. “This,” Morris said, his voice rough, “isn’t just a homicide. It’s a *breakthrough*.” Quinn’s
blood ran cold
. She’d heard the stories—about the Veil Market, about the things that lurked beneath London’s streets. About the places where the veil between worlds thinned. And now, here she
was, standing
in one of them. The body beneath her moved. Eva’s fingers twitched. Her lips parted further, as if she were about to speak—but instead, the air around her
seemed to
*shift*, like the world itself
was bending
to her will. Morris grabbed Quinn’s arm, his grip iron. “We don’t have time to think. We need to get out of here.” Quinn looked at the body again, at the way Eva’s eyes
flickered
, as if something inside her
was struggling
to escape. “What do you mean, get out?” Morris didn’t answer. He just pulled her toward the entrance, his voice urgent. “We’re not leaving until we know what’s happening.” The station
was closing
in around them. The cracks in the wall pulsed faster, the air thick with an unnatural
weight
. Quinn could feel it—the pull of something unseen, something waiting just beyond the Veil Market’s shifting borders. And then, from the darkness beyond the station, something *answered*.
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.0000%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
7
adverbTagCount
0
adverbTags
(empty)
76.7171%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)
wordCount
859
totalAiIsmAdverbs
2
found
0
adverb
"slightly"
count
1
1
adverb
"barely above a whisper"
count
1
highlights
0
"slightly"
1
"barely above a whisper"
100.0000%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
65.0757%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)
wordCount
859
totalAiIsms
3
found
0
word
"flickered"
count
1
1
word
"unreadable"
count
1
2
word
"weight"
count
1
highlights
0
"flickered"
1
"unreadable"
2
"weight"
100.0000%
Cliche density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
1
maxInWindow
1
found
0
label
"blood ran cold"
count
1
highlights
0
"blood ran cold"
100.0000%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
74
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Filter word density
Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
1
hedgeCount
2
narrationSentences
74
filterMatches
0
"watch"
hedgeMatches
0
"seemed to"
100.0000%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
1
totalSentences
89
matches
0
"know that the"
100.0000%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
34
mean
25.09
std
18.2
cv
0.725
sampleLengths
0
77
1
68
2
44
3
7
4
20
5
47
6
21
7
34
8
29
9
29
10
11
11
12
12
50
13
10
14
5
15
12
16
2
17
49
18
23
19
9
20
7
21
5
22
31
23
12
24
36
25
13
26
38
27
5
28
31
29
20
30
27
31
21
32
38
33
10
97.2973%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤5% passive sentences
passiveCount
4
totalSentences
74
matches
0
"been sent"
1
"been abandoned"
2
"been drawn"
3
"got involved"
100.0000%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
5
totalVerbs
123
matches
0
"was *breathing"
1
"was, standing"
2
"was bending"
3
"was struggling"
4
"was closing"
97.8154%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
753
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
32
adverbRatio
0.04249667994687915
lyAdverbCount
5
lyAdverbRatio
0.006640106241699867
100.0000%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
89
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.0000%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
89
mean
9.58
std
6.48
cv
0.676
sampleLengths
0
15
1
22
2
19
3
21
4
23
5
17
6
20
7
3
8
5
9
7
10
17
11
18
12
2
13
5
14
2
15
8
16
12
17
2
18
29
19
12
20
4
21
12
22
9
23
7
24
10
25
6
26
11
27
5
28
21
29
3
30
4
31
5
32
3
33
17
34
11
35
5
36
7
37
7
38
22
39
8
40
5
41
3
42
3
43
2
44
10
45
3
46
2
47
9
48
3
49
2
42.1348%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
7
diversityRatio
0.2808988764044944
totalSentences
89
uniqueOpeners
25
67.8571%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
7
fancyCount
3
fancyTags
0
"a voice cut through the silence (a voice cut through the silence)"
1
"Quinn said, voice low (say, voice)"
2
"Quinn said, voice tight (say, voice)"
90.9940%