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Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMNDWSQ42CDMVCNZ4C0C8JA
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Model:
Mistral Large 2
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Mystery: examining a crime scene
Duration:
35.3s
Cost:
$0.013006
Model input
System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
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AI
The abandoned Tube station stank of damp concrete and rust, the kind of smell that clung to the back of your throat like a bad memory. Detective Harlow Quinn stepped over the police tape, her boots scuffing against the cracked tile of what had once been Camden Town station.
The air was thick with
the hum of generators and the low murmur of forensics teams, but beneath it all, something else thrummed—a wrongness, like a finger dragged down a chalkboard. She adjusted the worn leather
watch
on her left wrist, its strap loose enough to slide when she flexed her fingers. The station’s overhead lights
flickered
, casting long shadows that pooled in the corners like spilled ink. Quinn had seen plenty of crime scenes in her eighteen years on the force, but this one made the hairs on the back of her neck stand at attention. “You’re late.” Quinn turned. DS
Patel
stood near the edge of the platform, arms crossed, his dark eyes sharp beneath the brim of his cap. He jerked his chin toward the body sprawled across the tracks. “Thought you’d want to see this before the suits from the Yard start mucking it up.” Quinn stepped closer, her gaze sweeping over the scene. The victim—a man in his thirties, dressed in a rumpled suit—lay face-up, his limbs splayed at unnatural angles. No blood. No visible wounds. Just a man who looked like he’d decided to take a nap on the tracks and never woken up. “Cause of death?” she asked.
Patel
shrugged. “Coroner’s on his way, but my money’s on heart attack. Guy’s got the build of someone who skipped leg day for a decade.” Quinn crouched, her knees popping. She ignored the twinge in her bad hip—the one that acted up when it rained, or when she spent too long standing over a corpse. The victim’s skin was pale, almost waxy, but it was his expression that caught her attention. His mouth was open, lips parted as if he’d been mid-sentence when whatever killed him had struck. His eyes were wide, unblinking, fixed on something just beyond the station’s crumbling ceiling. “Look at his hands,” Quinn said.
Patel
frowned. “What about them?” She pointed. The man’s fingers
were curled
inward, not in the stiff rigor of death, but like he’d been clutching something. Something small. Something that wasn’t there anymore. “He’s holding air,” Quinn said.
Patel
exhaled through his nose. “Or he was holding his chest before he keeled over. Classic heart attack pose.” Quinn didn’t answer. She stood, brushing dust from her trousers, and scanned the platform. The station was a relic—peeling paint, graffiti-scrawled walls, a ticket booth with its glass long shattered. But there, near the edge of the platform, something glinted under the harsh glow of the floodlights. She stepped closer. A small brass compass, its casing tarnished with verdigris, lay half-hidden beneath a discarded newspaper. The needle spun
lazily
, as if unsure which way to point. Quinn’s pulse kicked up a notch. She knew this compass. She’d seen one just like it three years ago, in the hands of a man who’d claimed to be a “collector of rare artifacts.” A man who’d died in an alleyway not far from here, his body contorted in the same way as the victim on the tracks. No blood. No wounds. Just a man who’d looked like he’d seen something impossible right before he died. Quinn reached into her pocket and pulled on a pair of nitrile gloves. She picked up the compass, turning it over in her palm. The face
was etched
with strange symbols—sigils, maybe, or some kind of arcane script. She didn’t recognize them, but she knew someone who might. “You’re not seriously picking that up, are you?”
Patel
said. “That’s evidence.” Quinn ignored him. She slipped the compass into her coat pocket. “Where’s the CCTV?”
Patel
gestured toward the ceiling. “Non-functional. Hasn’t worked in years.” “Convenient.” “Or just shitty infrastructure.”
Patel
rubbed the back of his neck. “Look, Quinn, I get it. This is weird. But weird doesn’t mean supernatural. Guy probably had a heart attack, dropped his weird little trinket, and that’s that.” Quinn didn’t answer. She was too busy staring at the wall behind the ticket booth. The graffiti there was fresh—still
glistening
under the lights. A series of symbols, hastily scrawled in what looked like blood. She didn’t recognize the language, but she recognized the shape of them. A warning. Or an invitation. “You see this?” she asked.
Patel
followed her gaze. “Kids. Probably some kind of gang tag.” Quinn stepped closer. The symbols weren’t random. They were deliberate. Precise. And they matched the ones on the compass. Her radio crackled. “Detective Quinn, you there?” She unclipped it from her belt. “Quinn here.” “Got a witness for you. Says she saw the victim right before he died. She’s in the back of the squad car.” Quinn exchanged a glance with
Patel
. “On my way.” The witness was a young woman with curly red hair and round glasses, her freckled face pale beneath the glare of the squad car’s interior light. She clutched a worn leather satchel in her lap, her fingers digging into the straps like she
was trying
to anchor herself. Quinn slid into the seat beside her. “I’m Detective Quinn. You saw what happened?” The woman nodded, her throat working. “I—I was on my way home. Late shift at the museum. I saw him standing near the edge of the platform. He looked… lost. Like he didn’t know where he was.” Quinn’s gaze
flicked
to the woman’s satchel. The British Museum’s logo
was stamped
on the flap. “What’s your name?” “Eva. Eva Kowalski.” “You work in the restricted archives, don’t you, Eva?” Eva’s
eyes widened
. “How did you—?” Quinn ignored the question. “Did you see anyone else with the victim?” Eva hesitated. “No. But…” She trailed off, tucking a strand of hair behind her left ear—a nervous habit, Quinn noted. “There was something else. A sound. Like… like static. And then he just… fell.” Quinn leaned in. “Did he say anything?” Eva’s fingers tightened on her satchel. “He said, ‘It’s not supposed to be here.’” Quinn’s breath caught. Three years ago, her partner, DS Morris, had said the exact same thing right before he died. Right before his body had
been found
twisted in a way that no living person’s should. She pulled the compass from her pocket and held it up. “You recognize this?” Eva’s face went slack. “Where did you get that?” “It was near the body. What is it?” Eva swallowed. “It’s a Veil Compass. It points toward… toward rifts. Portals. Places where the boundary between our world and others is thin.” Quinn’s pulse hammered in her ears. “And where would it be pointing now?” Eva’s gaze
flicked
to the compass. The needle spun wildly, then stilled, pointing toward the far end of the platform. Toward the darkness beyond the reach of the floodlights. Quinn’s radio crackled again. “Quinn, we’ve got another one.” She didn’t take her eyes off Eva. “Another what?” “Another body. Same MO. Found near the old service tunnels.” Quinn’s stomach twisted. She knew those tunnels. They ran beneath the city like veins, dark and winding and full of things that didn’t have names. She clipped the radio back to her belt. “Stay here.” Eva grabbed her wrist. “Detective, wait. You don’t understand what you’re dealing with.” Quinn met her gaze. “Then explain it to me.” Eva’s grip tightened. “That compass doesn’t just point to rifts. It *opens* them. And whatever’s on the other side… it’s not friendly.” Quinn pulled her wrist free. “Then I guess I’d better make sure it stays closed.” She stepped out of the squad car, the
weight
of the compass heavy in her pocket.
Patel
was waiting
for her, his expression grim. “You buying any of this?” he asked. Quinn didn’t answer. She was too busy staring at the darkness at the end of the platform, where the needle of the compass had pointed. Somewhere in the shadows, something
was waiting
. And it had already killed twice.
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.0000%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
6
adverbTagCount
0
adverbTags
(empty)
92.6740%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)
wordCount
1365
totalAiIsmAdverbs
1
found
0
adverb
"lazily"
count
1
highlights
0
"lazily"
80.0000%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
0
"Patel"
100.0000%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
56.0440%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)
wordCount
1365
totalAiIsms
6
found
0
word
"flickered"
count
1
1
word
"flicked"
count
2
2
word
"glistening"
count
1
3
word
"weight"
count
1
4
word
"etched"
count
1
highlights
0
"flickered"
1
"flicked"
2
"glistening"
3
"weight"
4
"etched"
100.0000%
Cliche density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
2
maxInWindow
1
found
0
label
"eyes widened/narrowed"
count
1
1
label
"air was thick with"
count
1
highlights
0
"eyes widened"
1
"The air was thick with"
100.0000%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
107
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Filter word density
Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
1
hedgeCount
0
narrationSentences
107
filterMatches
0
"watch"
hedgeMatches
(empty)
100.0000%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
0
totalSentences
145
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
64
mean
21.14
std
18.94
cv
0.896
sampleLengths
0
80
1
66
2
2
3
50
4
51
5
5
6
25
7
77
8
6
9
5
10
28
11
5
12
19
13
47
14
29
15
6
16
4
17
66
18
48
19
12
20
14
21
10
22
1
23
38
24
52
25
5
26
11
27
19
28
7
29
8
30
22
31
9
32
48
33
14
34
37
35
19
36
3
37
9
38
6
39
12
40
34
41
7
42
14
43
36
44
14
45
9
46
8
47
23
48
13
49
29
100.0000%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤5% passive sentences
passiveCount
4
totalSentences
107
matches
0
"were curled"
1
"was etched"
2
"was stamped"
3
"been found"
100.0000%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
3
totalVerbs
168
matches
0
"was trying"
1
"was waiting"
2
"was waiting"
100.0000%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
999
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
29
adverbRatio
0.02902902902902903
lyAdverbCount
4
lyAdverbRatio
0.004004004004004004
100.0000%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
145
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.0000%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
145
mean
9.33
std
7.85
cv
0.841
sampleLengths
0
26
1
23
2
31
3
21
4
16
5
29
6
2
7
2
8
21
9
11
10
16
11
9
12
18
13
2
14
3
15
19
16
5
17
2
18
23
19
5
20
25
21
16
22
17
23
14
24
6
25
2
26
3
27
2
28
19
29
2
30
5
31
5
32
5
33
14
34
3
35
11
36
16
37
17
38
3
39
15
40
11
41
6
42
4
43
48
44
2
45
2
46
14
47
13
48
11
49
14
45.7471%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
7
diversityRatio
0.30344827586206896
totalSentences
145
uniqueOpeners
44
100.0000%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
6
fancyCount
0
fancyTags
(empty)
92.6156%