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Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMNEZ7SJ25QZFT80JGH1SCN
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Model:
Mistral Large 2
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Thriller: chase through city streets
Duration:
28.5s
Cost:
$0.010686
Model input
System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
Model response
Messages
Meta
AI
The rain came down in sheets, turning the pavement into a slick mirror that reflected the
fractured
glow of neon signs and streetlamps. Detective Harlow Quinn moved with the precision of a woman who had spent too many nights like this—chasing shadows through the underbelly of London. Her breath came in controlled bursts, fogging the air in front of her as she scanned the alleyways branching off from Greek Street. The suspect had vanished near the mouth of an alley, but she knew better than to assume he
was gone
. She adjusted the worn leather strap of her
watch
, the one thing she still wore from her early days on the force, and pressed forward. The soles of her boots splashed through puddles that pooled in the cracks of the pavement. Ahead, the distinctive green neon sign of *The Raven’s Nest*
flickered
, its light bleeding into the rain like watercolor. She slowed, her instincts prickling. The bar was a known haunt for the kind of people who didn’t like cops—especially not ones asking questions about missing persons and unsolved cases with too many loose ends. Quinn exhaled
sharply
, her breath curling in the cold air. She wasn’t here for the bar. She was here for the man who had just ducked inside—Tomás Herrera, the former paramedic with the scarred forearm and the Saint Christopher medallion. He’d been at the scene of the last disappearance, the one that had set off every alarm bell in her skull. And now he
was running
. She pushed through the door of *The Raven’s Nest*, the warmth of the bar hitting her like a wall.
The air was thick with
the scent of whiskey and old wood, the hum of low conversation threading through the dim light. Her eyes adjusted
quickly
, sweeping over the patrons—most of them too absorbed in their drinks to notice her, but a few glancing up with the wary eyes of people who knew trouble when they saw it. Herrera wasn’t at the bar. He wasn’t at any of the tables. Quinn’s jaw tightened. The bookshelf. She moved toward the back of the room, her steps silent despite the creak of the floorboards beneath her. The bookshelf was just as she’d heard—lined with leather-bound volumes that looked like they’d never
been opened
. She ran her fingers along the spine of one, then another, until she found the loose one. The shelf swung open with a soft click, revealing a narrow passage lit by a single bare bulb. The hidden room beyond was small, cluttered with crates and stacks of yellowed papers. A door at the far end stood
slightly
ajar, rain-slicked air seeping through the gap. Quinn didn’t hesitate. She stepped inside, pulling the bookshelf shut behind her, and slipped through the door. The alley on the other side was narrower, the walls pressing in on either side like the ribs of some great beast. The rain had turned the cobblestones treacherous, and Quinn’s boots skidded as she took off at a run. Herrera was ahead of her, his dark curls plastered to his forehead, his Saint Christopher medallion bouncing against his chest as he sprinted. He glanced back once, his warm brown eyes wide with something like panic, before he ducked left into another alley. Quinn followed, her lungs burning. She wasn’t as young as she used to be, but she wasn’t about to
let that stop
her. The alley opened into a wider street, the kind that tourists never saw—boarded-up shops, graffiti-scrawled walls, the occasional
flicker
of a security light. Herrera was fast, but she was relentless. She closed the distance, her fingers brushing the back of his jacket as he skidded around another corner. Then he
was gone
. Quinn skidded to a halt, her breath ragged. The street dead-ended at a rusted metal door set into the brick wall of what looked like an abandoned building. The door was ajar, a sliver of darkness visible beyond. She approached
cautiously
, her hand resting on the grip of her service weapon. The rain drummed against the metal, the sound hollow and
echoing
. She pushed the door open with her foot. Stairs led downward, the air growing colder with each step. The walls were damp, the scent of mildew and something older—something metallic—filling her nose. The stairs ended at another door, this one newer, reinforced with steel. A symbol
was carved
into the center of it, something that made her skin prickle. She didn’t recognize it, but she knew trouble when she saw it. Quinn hesitated. This wasn’t just another alley. This was something else. Something *off*. She thought of DS Morris, her partner, the way his body had
been found
three years ago—no signs of struggle, no cause of death, just a look of frozen terror on his face. She thought of the cases she’d been working since, the ones that didn’t add up, the ones that whispered of things beyond the scope of her badge. Herrera had gone through this door. And if she wanted answers, she had to follow. She pushed the door open. The air on the other side was thick, humid, like stepping into a cave. The space beyond was vast, lit by
flicker
ing lanterns that cast long, shifting shadows across the walls. Stalls lined the cavernous room, their wares displayed under glass or hanging from hooks—vials of glowing liquid, bundles of dried herbs, strange artifacts that
seemed to
hum with energy. The people here moved like ghosts, their faces obscured by hoods or masks, their voices a low murmur that
echoed
unnaturally. Quinn’s pulse hammered in her throat. This wasn’t just a black market. This was something *other*. A hand clamped down on her shoulder. She spun, her fist already flying, but the man who had grabbed her was faster. He twisted her arm behind her back, pressing her against the damp wall. His breath was hot against her ear. “You don’t belong here, Detective,” he hissed. Quinn gritted her teeth. “Neither does Herrera.” The man chuckled, a sound like dry leaves scraping stone. “Herrera’s one of us. You’re not.” She didn’t struggle. Not yet. “What is this place?” “The Veil Market,” he said, as if that explained everything. “And you’ve got about thirty seconds before the bone tokens run out.” Quinn’s mind raced. Bone tokens. She’d heard rumors—whispers of a market that moved with the moon, where the things sold weren’t just illegal, they were *impossible*. She thought of the symbol on the door, the way the air here
seemed to
vibrate with something unseen. The man released her, shoving her back toward the door. “Go. Before you get us all killed.” Quinn didn’t move. Herrera was here somewhere. And if this place held the answers she needed—answers about Morris, about the cases that had haunted her for years—then she
wasn’t leaving
without them. She stepped forward, her boots clicking against the stone floor. The market swallowed her whole.
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.0000%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
2
adverbTagCount
0
adverbTags
(empty)
65.8994%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)
wordCount
1173
totalAiIsmAdverbs
4
found
0
adverb
"cautiously"
count
1
1
adverb
"quickly"
count
1
2
adverb
"sharply"
count
1
3
adverb
"slightly"
count
1
highlights
0
"cautiously"
1
"quickly"
2
"sharply"
3
"slightly"
100.0000%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
57.3743%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)
wordCount
1173
totalAiIsms
5
found
0
word
"flickered"
count
1
1
word
"flicker"
count
1
2
word
"fractured"
count
1
3
word
"echoed"
count
1
4
word
"echoing"
count
1
highlights
0
"flickered"
1
"flicker"
2
"fractured"
3
"echoed"
4
"echoing"
100.0000%
Cliche density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
1
maxInWindow
1
found
0
label
"air was thick with"
count
1
highlights
0
"The air was thick with"
100.0000%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
86
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Filter word density
Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
1
hedgeCount
2
narrationSentences
86
filterMatches
0
"watch"
hedgeMatches
0
"seemed to"
100.0000%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
1
totalSentences
91
matches
0
"let that stop"
100.0000%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
30
mean
38.5
std
30.84
cv
0.801
sampleLengths
0
90
1
95
2
66
3
89
4
5
5
71
6
46
7
83
8
71
9
4
10
62
11
8
12
63
13
13
14
60
15
15
16
5
17
81
18
16
19
7
20
35
21
7
22
7
23
16
24
9
25
22
26
45
27
17
28
32
29
15
94.5736%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤5% passive sentences
passiveCount
5
totalSentences
86
matches
0
"was gone"
1
"been opened"
2
"was gone"
3
"was carved"
4
"been found"
100.0000%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
2
totalVerbs
185
matches
0
"was running"
1
"wasn’t leaving"
100.0000%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
1133
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
27
adverbRatio
0.02383053839364519
lyAdverbCount
8
lyAdverbRatio
0.00706090026478376
100.0000%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
91
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.0000%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
91
mean
12.69
std
8.22
cv
0.647
sampleLengths
0
23
1
24
2
23
3
20
4
25
5
16
6
19
7
5
8
30
9
10
10
6
11
24
12
21
13
5
14
19
15
22
16
36
17
5
18
7
19
3
20
2
21
19
22
17
23
17
24
18
25
14
26
15
27
3
28
14
29
22
30
18
31
23
32
20
33
5
34
18
35
23
36
7
37
18
38
4
39
8
40
20
41
10
42
13
43
11
44
8
45
10
46
14
47
12
48
15
49
12
39.0110%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
10
diversityRatio
0.24175824175824176
totalSentences
91
uniqueOpeners
22
0.0000%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
2
fancyCount
2
fancyTags
0
"he hissed (hiss)"
1
"he said, as if that explained everything (say, explain)"
85.6975%