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Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMPADVTT9HPPNCQNPA88G54
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Model:
GPT-4o Mini (temp=1)
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Romance: separated couple reunites
Duration:
30.2s
Cost:
$0.001315
Model input
System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
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The door swung open with a reluctant creak, revealing Aurora Carter, who stood poised in the small entryway of Eva's flat. She squinted against the soft glow of early evening light filtering through the dusty windows, fully expecting to find a pile of unread books waiting for her and Ptolemy's impatient meows filling the air. But instead, her gaze locked onto Lucien Moreau, a figure carved from sharp angles, elegantly framed against the cluttered chaos of her refuge. Her heart skipped a beat, an involuntary reaction she wished she could suppress. “What are you doing here?” The words tumbled out, edged with a mixture of disbelief and something deeper, somewhere just beneath the surface. Lucien's eyes, one amber and the other an inky black, glimmered with a confidence that cut through her hesitation. He wore a fitted charcoal suit, tailored to perfection, the kind of attire that made reality bend toward whatever he wanted. His slicked-back platinum hair glinted in the light, accentuating the sharp lines of his cheekbones. “I need to talk,” he said, his voice smooth as
silk
, yet with an undercurrent of urgency that made her pulse quicken. Rory's stomach twisted, torn between the familiarity of the man standing before her and the barrage of memories that came rushing back. After months of silence, his sudden presence felt like the sharp
pang
of an old wound reopening. “Talk? You show up unannounced at my place after—after what happened, and you think we can just talk?” She
tried to
sound indignant, but the tremor in her voice betrayed her resolve. Looking past her into the cramped flat, Lucien's lips curled into a wry smile. “It seems your home remains as… eclectic as ever.” She shot him an incredulous look, and behind her, the tabby cat, Ptolemy, wove between her legs, chirping an inquisitive greeting. “Not that it’s any of your business, but I get things done around here.” Rory crossed her arms, a weak façade of defiance. “Let me come in.” His gaze
softened, that glimmer
of mischief in his eyes muted by an earnestness she hadn’t known was possible from him. Unbidden, memories emerged—secret smiles in shadowed corners, the brush of a hand that still tingled in her mind. With an exasperated sigh, she stepped aside, opening the door wide, reluctant but unable to withstand the pull of their shared past. Lucien swept in as if he
were entering
a ballroom rather than a cramped flat on Brick Lane, and somehow, the space felt both smaller and warmer. “Nice place," he said, surveying the dim room cluttered with stacks of books, scrolls, and scattered research notes. “Best I can do on a delivery girl’s salary,” she replied, fighting to keep her tone neutral, but the bitterness curled at the edges, hinting at deeper pains. Rory closed the door with a faint click and leaned against it, arms still crossed defensively. “Would it be too audacious to say it looks like the refuge of a brilliant mind?” He leaned casually against a bookshelf, his confidence at ease, and Rory hated how it made her stomach twist. “What do you want, Lucien?” she asked, cutting through his charm. It felt easier to confront him head-on, to seize the reins of this moment before it spiraled beyond her control. He hesitated, the
flicker
of something
unreadable
flashing across his face. “It’s about the ledger.” That one word sent a chill rippling through her. The ledger—the connection between their worlds, the reason they had drifted apart. “I told you I wasn’t getting involved again.” “It's not a choice at this point. You need to listen.” His voice deepened, polished with his usual poise but
tinged
with urgency. “How do you
know that I
care?” she shot back, half-biting back the hurt. “You didn’t seem to care much before.” “Forgive me if I believed you were safer without the complications.” His gaze bore into hers, a challenge wrapped in regret. “I was wrong. I came to find you.” “Find me?” she
echo
ed incredulously, feeling the
weight
of his past judgments lay heavy between them like a wall. “What’s your plan now, exactly? Show up, act like nothing happened?” He straightened, the careless demeanor giving way to a more serious tone, the typical teasing aura dissolved like mist. “I know things have been complicated, Aurora, but London is
unraveling
. You’re part of this—part of something larger than both of us.” The pulse of the moment thickened with tension, and she took a breath, trying to quell the anxiety curling in her stomach. “And you think that just because you’re here, I’ll be ready to jump back in?” “I think you might
realize that you
don’t have a choice,” he replied, a softness surfacing in his voice that beckoned with memories she had buried. “I can offer you protection, a place in this.” “And what would that mean for us, Lucien?” Her heart raced as she bravely pressed on, scanning his expression for the slightest inkling of sincerity beyond his polished mask. The silence stretched between them, the air thick with
unspoken
emotions—a coiled tension she didn’t fully understand. Lucien pushed off the bookshelf, closing the distance between them,
deliberately
invading the space that had once felt safe. “It means I still want you in my life, Rory. It means I’m offering you a chance to fight this together.” Her resolve
wavered
, torn between longing and the scars of her past. “Together? That’s rich, coming from the one who left without a word.” “I had my reasons,” he said, exasperation igniting his voice. “You don’t understand what I was trying to protect you from.” “Protect me? Or push me away? You think I’m some fragile flower who can’t handle herself?” Anger flared within her, a fierce fire lighting her blue eyes. “I am capable of taking care of myself!” “I know that. I never doubted it for a second.” Lucien’s voice softened again, almost soothing, his earnest vulnerability a
stark
contrast to his earlier bravado. “But this world isn’t what it seems. I thought I could keep you out of it. I was wrong.” Her breath hitched in her throat, the raw honesty striking deeper than she expected. Each word
seemed to
peel away the layers of hurt, the resentment she had so
carefully
cultivated since leaving him behind. Rory’s heart
fluttered
at the way he said her name, as if she were something precious. “And now, what? You think you can just waltz back in after all this time?” “I’m risking a lot by being here,” he said quietly, stepping closer until he could almost reach out and touch her. “But you mean something to me, Rory. More than I let on before.” She could feel the heat radiating between them, a
magnetic
force that beckoned her to lower her guard, to acknowledge the
unspoken
bond that still lingered in the air. But doubt clawed at her resolve. “You left, Lucien. You can’t just come back and expect everything to be fine.” “There’s no guarantee that it will be,” he admitted, vulnerability breaking through his usual charm. “But I have to try.” Their eyes locked, an electric connection igniting in the dimly lit room, pulling away the shadows that had long-since formed. Around them, old memories haunted the walls, memories layered with laughter and introspection. Rory’s heart thudded painfully against her ribcage, desperate, as a surge of emotions washed over her. “What if I don’t want to fight? What if I just want to forget everything?” The words slipped from her lips, raw and revealing. “Then you can’t just walk away,” he said, desperation creeping in, vulnerable and intense. He reached a hand toward her, hesitating, offering a connection stuck in a nexus between longing and fear. She glanced at his hand, so close yet so far, every nerve in her body alive with the heat of possibility. “You don’t get to decide what I want. Not anymore.” “I know you’re stronger than that,” he said
softly
. “I want to be part of your fight, whatever that means. Will you at least hear me out?” The room pulsed with
unspoken
desires, ancient longings igniting like embers in her chest. The walls felt as though they
were closing
in, a mixture of old dreams colliding with sharp reality. Amy’s deep voice
echo
ed in her mind—she had told her to be brave. “Talk,” she sighed, her resolve
flicker
ing like a candle flame, reluctant but glowing. “But if this goes sideways, don’t think for one second I’ll hold back.” “Fair enough,” Lucien replied, relief cracking through that
perfectly
polished
facade
. Stepping closer, he lowered his cane, resting it against the table as he leaned in, eyes steady and focused. “That’s the Rory I know.” With that, she realized how tangled their lives had become, how their paths had intertwined yet spiraled apart. Unraveled, yet still bound by choices they had made, and the choice
looming
now hung heavy above them. And as they
began to
talk, to weave their stories anew, Rory felt the thrum of hope murmur deep within her—an
echo
of what could be, promising a connection that had not yet fully withered.
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
22.2222%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
12
adverbTagCount
4
adverbTags
0
"he said quietly, stepping closer until he could almost reach out and touch her [quietly, almost]"
1
"he said softly [softly]"
2
"she sighed, her resolve flickering like a candle flame, reluctant but glowing [like]"
3
"Lucien replied, relief cracking through that perfectly polished facade [perfectly]"
74.0260%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)
wordCount
1540
totalAiIsmAdverbs
4
found
0
adverb
"carefully"
count
1
1
adverb
"deliberately"
count
1
2
adverb
"perfectly"
count
1
3
adverb
"softly"
count
1
highlights
0
"carefully"
1
"deliberately"
2
"perfectly"
3
"softly"
100.0000%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
0.0000%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)
wordCount
1540
totalAiIsms
19
found
0
word
"facade"
count
1
1
word
"pang"
count
1
2
word
"tinged"
count
1
3
word
"flicker"
count
1
4
word
"wavered"
count
1
5
word
"fluttered"
count
1
6
word
"looming"
count
1
7
word
"silk"
count
1
8
word
"unspoken"
count
3
9
word
"unreadable"
count
1
10
word
"magnetic"
count
1
11
word
"stark"
count
1
12
word
"weight"
count
1
13
word
"echo"
count
1
14
word
"echoed"
count
2
15
word
"unraveling"
count
1
highlights
0
"facade"
1
"pang"
2
"tinged"
3
"flicker"
4
"wavered"
5
"fluttered"
6
"looming"
7
"silk"
8
"unspoken"
9
"unreadable"
10
"magnetic"
11
"stark"
12
"weight"
13
"echo"
14
"echoed"
15
"unraveling"
100.0000%
Cliche density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
0
maxInWindow
0
found
(empty)
highlights
(empty)
100.0000%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
66
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Filter word density
Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
0
hedgeCount
3
narrationSentences
66
filterMatches
(empty)
hedgeMatches
0
"tried to"
1
"seemed to"
2
"began to"
100.0000%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
3
totalSentences
88
matches
0
"softened, that glimmer"
1
"know that I"
2
"realize that you"
73.4733%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
40
mean
38.23
std
15.56
cv
0.407
sampleLengths
0
78
1
36
2
77
3
71
4
23
5
44
6
43
7
67
8
44
9
35
10
31
11
15
12
29
13
23
14
21
15
29
16
30
17
41
18
37
19
35
20
29
21
57
22
24
23
21
24
35
25
45
26
66
27
34
28
49
29
20
30
49
31
24
32
32
33
31
34
27
35
45
36
26
37
35
38
36
39
35
100.0000%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤5% passive sentences
passiveCount
0
totalSentences
66
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
2
totalVerbs
203
matches
0
"were entering"
1
"were closing"
100.0000%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
1080
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
41
adverbRatio
0.03796296296296296
lyAdverbCount
16
lyAdverbRatio
0.014814814814814815
100.0000%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
88
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
98.6392%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
88
mean
17.38
std
6.89
cv
0.397
sampleLengths
0
21
1
34
2
23
3
13
4
23
5
19
6
21
7
15
8
22
9
22
10
17
11
32
12
14
13
9
14
21
15
23
16
25
17
18
18
22
19
27
20
18
21
28
22
16
23
35
24
11
25
20
26
11
27
4
28
9
29
12
30
8
31
23
32
14
33
7
34
21
35
8
36
19
37
11
38
19
39
22
40
22
41
15
42
26
43
9
44
29
45
17
46
19
47
21
48
12
49
12
67.4242%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
4
diversityRatio
0.4318181818181818
totalSentences
88
uniqueOpeners
38
0.0000%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
12
fancyCount
11
fancyTags
0
"he said, his voice smooth as silk, yet with an undercurrent of urgency that made her pulse quicken (say, make quicken)"
1
"he said, surveying the dim room cluttered with stacks of books, scrolls, and scattered research notes (say, survey clutter scroll)"
2
"she replied, fighting to keep her tone neutral, but the bitterness curled at the edges, hinting at deeper pains (reply, fight keep curl hint)"
3
"he replied, a softness surfacing in his voice that beckoned with memories she had buried (reply, surface beckon bury)"
4
"he said, exasperation igniting his voice (say, ignite)"
5
"he said quietly, stepping closer until he could almost reach out and touch her (say quietly, step almost reach out touch)"
6
"he admitted, vulnerability breaking through his usual charm (admit, break)"
7
"he said, desperation creeping in, vulnerable and intense (say, creep in)"
8
"he said softly (say softly)"
9
"she sighed, her resolve flickering like a candle flame, reluctant but glowing (sigh, flicker like glow)"
10
"Lucien replied, relief cracking through that perfectly polished facade (reply, crack perfectly polish)"
78.5756%