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Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMPADVVRRC04MDS7A0QVYRB
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Model:
Mistral NeMO
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Thriller: chase through city streets
Duration:
10.2s
Cost:
$0.000388
Model input
System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
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Messages
Meta
AI
The rain lashed at Detective Harlow Quinn's face, each drop stinging like a tiny, icy needle. Her breath misted in the chill night air as she pounded after the fleeing figure, her worn leather
watch
glint
ing under the sickly glow of the streetlamps. The suspect, Tomás Herrera, darted around a corner, his olive skin and dark hair blending with the shadows. Quinn's
heart hammered in her chest
, her sharp jaw set in determination. She wasn't about to lose him now. The chase had begun in the dimly lit confines of The Raven's Nest, Silas' bar in Soho. Quinn had been nursing a drink, her brown eyes scanning the crowd, when she'd spotted Herrera. He'd been skittish, his warm brown eyes darting
nervously
, and she'd known he was up to something. She'd followed him out into the rain, and now they
were dancing
this dangerous
dance
through the city streets. Quinn skidded around the corner, her shoes splashing in puddles. Herrera was nowhere to be seen. She paused, her chest heaving, listening. A faint scuffling sound
echo
ed from a nearby alley. She drew her gun, her military precision kicking in, and moved towards the noise. The alley was narrow, the buildings on either side
looming
like monoliths, their windows dark and empty. Rainwater gurgled in the gutters, and the stench of rotting food and something more
sinister
hung heavy in the air
. Quinn's instincts prickled. This was wrong. This wasn't just a chase anymore. She saw the grate then, half-hidden under a pile of refuse. It was ajar, just enough for a man to squeeze through. Herrera's scarred forearm was visible, his fingers curled around the edge of the grate. He
was pulling
himself up, his Saint Christopher medallion catching the faint light. "Herrera!" Quinn barked, her gun trained on him. "Stop right there!" He froze, his head turning
slightly
to look at her. Then, with a sudden burst of strength, he hauled himself up and disappeared into the darkness. Quinn cursed under her breath. She couldn't let him get away, not after everything she'd seen tonight. She holstered her gun, grabbed the edge of the grate, and pulled herself up. The metal was slick with rain, and she had to use all her strength to heave herself through the narrow opening. She found herself in a tunnel, the air damp and heavy with the scent of earth and something else, something ancient and wrong. The tunnel was barely tall enough for her to stand upright, the walls slick with moisture. She could hear water dripping somewhere in the distance, and the faint
echo
of Herrera's
footsteps
. Quinn followed the sound, her heart pounding in her ears. The tunnel
seemed to
go on forever, twisting and turning like a snake. She could feel the
weight
of the earth above her, the press of it against her skin. It was
oppressive
, claustrophobic, and she had to fight the urge to turn back. Finally, the tunnel opened up into a vast cavern. Quinn stepped inside, her eyes widening in shock. She was in some kind of underground market, a sprawling labyrinth of stalls and tents.
The air was thick with
the scent of exotic spices, the clamor of voices, and the hum of strange,
otherworldly
music. She'd heard rumors of this place, the Veil Market, a black market for supernatural goods and services. It
was said
to move locations every full moon, and tonight was the night. She'd never expected to find herself here, though, chasing after a former paramedic with a mysterious past. Quinn scanned the crowd, her eyes searching for Herrera. He was nowhere to be seen, but she spotted a man in a nearby stall, his eyes glowing with an
otherworldly
light. He
was selling
what looked like potions, their contents bubbling and smoking in glass vials. Beside him, a woman
was haggling
over a small, writhing creature that looked like a cross between a snake and a spider. Quinn shuddered, her grip tightening on her gun. This was dangerous territory, and she was woefully unprepared. But she couldn't turn back now. Not when she was so close to catching Herrera. She moved deeper into the market, her eyes scanning the crowd. She passed stalls selling enchanted artifacts, banned alchemical substances, and information whispered in hushed tones. She saw creatures she couldn't even
begin to
identify, their eyes following her as she passed, their expressions wary. Suddenly, she saw Herrera. He was at the far end of the market, his back to her as he spoke to a hooded figure. Quinn's heart leapt in her throat. She raised her gun, her finger hovering over the trigger. But something held her back. This was too public, too risky. She couldn't just shoot him here, not with all these people around. She lowered her gun, her mind racing. She needed to get closer, needed to hear what they
were saying
. She needed to understand what
was going
on here, what Herrera
was involved
in. She moved towards them, her steps silent, her breath held tight in her chest. She was close now, close enough to hear their voices, to see the tension in Herrera's shoulders. She was close enough to see the
glint
of something metallic in the hooded figure's hand. Suddenly, Herrera turned, his eyes widening as he saw her. He said something to the figure, something urgent and low, and then he
was running
, pushing past the crowd, disappearing into the maze of stalls. Quinn cursed, her heart pounding. She took off after him, her gun still in her hand. She couldn't let him get away, not now, not after everything she'd seen. She chased him through the market, her eyes fixed on his back. She could hear the shouts of the market-goers, the clatter of falling goods, the hum of fear and excitement. She could feel the press of the crowd around her, their bodies hot and sweaty, their breath mingling with hers. Herrera was fast, his body lean and muscular from years of working as a paramedic. But Quinn
was driven
, her years of service fueling her pursuit. She could see him up ahead, his dark hair a
beacon
in the crowd. She could hear his ragged breath, the pounding of his heart. Suddenly, he skidded to a halt, turning to face her. His eyes were wild, his face flushed with exertion. He held something in his hand, something small and metallic. A bone token, she realized, her heart sinking. He
was going
to use it to escape, to disappear into the shadows. "Herrera," she panted, her gun trained on him. "It's over. You can't run anymore." He looked at her, his warm brown eyes filled with a mix of fear and defiance. Then, with a sudden movement, he threw the bone token to the ground. It shattered, the pieces scattering like bones on the cold earth. Quinn stared at him, confusion and shock warring within her. "What are you doing?" she asked, her voice
barely above a whisper
. Herrera took a deep breath, his shoulders slumping in defeat. "I can't run anymore, Detective," he said, his voice hoarse. "I can't keep living like this, looking over my shoulder, always afraid." Quinn lowered her gun, her heart pounding in her chest. She didn't understand what
was happening
here, didn't understand what Herrera
was involved
in. But she knew one thing for sure - this was only the beginning. This was just the first step into a world she didn't understand, a world filled with danger and darkness. But she was a detective, and she'd made a promise to herself, to her fallen partner, to never stop searching for the truth. No matter where it led her, no matter how dangerous the path. And so, with a deep breath, she stepped forward, her hand reaching out to cuff Herrera. She was ready to face whatever came next, ready to dive headfirst into the darkness. Because that was who she was, who she'd always been. Detective Harlow Quinn, the woman who chased the shadows, who hunted the truth, no matter the cost.
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
50.0000%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
4
adverbTagCount
1
adverbTags
0
"The chase had begun in the dimly lit confines of The Raven's Nest, [dimly]"
55.6541%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)
wordCount
1353
totalAiIsmAdverbs
6
found
0
adverb
"nervously"
count
1
1
adverb
"slightly"
count
1
2
adverb
"suddenly"
count
3
3
adverb
"barely above a whisper"
count
1
highlights
0
"nervously"
1
"slightly"
2
"suddenly"
3
"barely above a whisper"
100.0000%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
0.0000%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)
wordCount
1353
totalAiIsms
14
found
0
word
"beacon"
count
1
1
word
"glint"
count
1
2
word
"glinting"
count
1
3
word
"oppressive"
count
1
4
word
"otherworldly"
count
2
5
word
"sinister"
count
1
6
word
"looming"
count
1
7
word
"weight"
count
1
8
word
"dance"
count
1
9
word
"dancing"
count
1
10
word
"footsteps"
count
1
11
word
"echo"
count
1
12
word
"echoed"
count
1
highlights
0
"beacon"
1
"glint"
2
"glinting"
3
"oppressive"
4
"otherworldly"
5
"sinister"
6
"looming"
7
"weight"
8
"dance"
9
"dancing"
10
"footsteps"
11
"echo"
12
"echoed"
33.3333%
Cliche density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
3
maxInWindow
3
found
0
label
"heart pounded in chest"
count
1
1
label
"air was thick with"
count
1
2
label
"hung in the air"
count
1
highlights
0
"heart hammered in her chest"
1
"The air was thick with"
2
"hung heavy in the air"
100.0000%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
103
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Filter word density
Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
1
hedgeCount
2
narrationSentences
103
filterMatches
0
"watch"
hedgeMatches
0
"seemed to"
1
"begin to"
100.0000%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
0
totalSentences
106
matches
(empty)
56.3757%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
30
mean
45.07
std
15.65
cv
0.347
sampleLengths
0
80
1
69
2
45
3
49
4
49
5
11
6
26
7
52
8
55
9
54
10
53
11
48
12
68
13
32
14
45
15
63
16
33
17
47
18
35
19
29
20
51
21
51
22
50
23
14
24
40
25
22
26
32
27
56
28
35
29
58
100.0000%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤5% passive sentences
passiveCount
4
totalSentences
103
matches
0
"was said"
1
"was involved"
2
"was driven"
3
"was involved"
100.0000%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
8
totalVerbs
226
matches
0
"were dancing"
1
"was pulling"
2
"was selling"
3
"was haggling"
4
"were saying"
5
"was going"
6
"was running"
7
"was happening"
99.2316%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
1321
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
54
adverbRatio
0.0408781226343679
lyAdverbCount
14
lyAdverbRatio
0.010598031794095382
100.0000%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
106
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
98.9096%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
106
mean
12.75
std
5.07
cv
0.397
sampleLengths
0
16
1
27
2
18
3
12
4
7
5
17
6
16
7
17
8
19
9
10
10
6
11
6
12
9
13
14
14
17
15
20
16
3
17
3
18
6
19
11
20
11
21
14
22
13
23
8
24
3
25
10
26
16
27
5
28
12
29
14
30
21
31
23
32
16
33
16
34
10
35
13
36
17
37
14
38
9
39
8
40
15
41
21
42
17
43
14
44
17
45
9
46
22
47
15
48
22
49
8
33.9623%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
17
diversityRatio
0.22641509433962265
totalSentences
106
uniqueOpeners
24
50.0000%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
4
fancyCount
2
fancyTags
0
"The chase had begun in the dimly lit confines of The Raven's Nest, (begin dimly light)"
1
"she panted, her gun trained on him (pant, train)"
75.1451%