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Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMPAPZBNPNZZFM2NGZBR4JM
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Model:
Mistral NeMO
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Mystery: examining a crime scene
Duration:
9.0s
Cost:
$0.000368
Model input
System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
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Messages
Meta
AI
Detective Harlow Quinn stepped off the creaking wooden planks of the makeshift bridge, her boots sinking
slightly
into the damp earth of the abandoned Tube station.
The air was thick with
the scent of damp and decay, the silence so
profound
it
seemed to
hum in her ears. She glanced at the bone token clutched in her gloved hand, the only thing that had granted her entry into this hidden world beneath Camden. The Veil Market was a labyrinth of stalls and makeshift tents, a black market for the supernatural. It moved locations every full moon, and tonight, it was here, in this forgotten station. Harlow's
watch
, a worn leather band around her left wrist, ticked
softly
, the only sound in the eerie stillness. She spotted DS
Evans
, her colleague, hunched over a body near the old ticket booth. He looked up as she approached, his face pale in the dim light. "Quinn," he acknowledged, standing straight. "You're late." Harlow ignored the jab. She was never late, not when it came to her work. She just preferred to make an entrance. She stepped closer to the body, her sharp jaw set, brown eyes taking in every detail. The victim was a man, mid-forties perhaps, dressed in the worn clothes of a market trader. His eyes were open, staring up at the vaulted ceiling, a look of terror frozen on his face. But it was the wound that caught Harlow's attention - a deep gash across his throat, clean and precise. Too clean. "Stab wound,"
Evans
said, crouching beside her. "Single blow. Killer knew what they were doing." Harlow nodded, but something didn't sit right. She leaned in closer, her eyes scanning the wound, the lack of blood spatter, the way the body
was positioned
. "Something's off,
Evans
. Look at this." She pointed at the wound. "No blood. And the body's too neat. Like it was posed."
Evans
frowned, following her gaze. "You think it's staged?" "I think it's not what it seems," Harlow replied, standing up. She pulled out her Veil Compass, the small brass instrument
etched
with protective sigils. The needle spun wildly before settling, pointing towards the old platform. "There's something else here. Something supernatural."
Evans
looked at the compass, then back at the body. "You think this is... related to your partner's case?" Harlow's grip tightened on the compass. Three years ago, her partner, DS Morris, had vanished during a case that had led them to the Veil Market. His body was never found, but Harlow knew he was dead. And she knew there was more to his disappearance than met the eye. She just couldn't prove it. Yet. "I don't know," she admitted, tucking the compass away. "But I intend to find out." She moved away from the body, her eyes scanning the market. Stalls were empty, their owners nowhere to be seen. It was as if the entire market had fled, leaving only the body behind. A chill ran down her spine. This wasn't right. The market was never empty. Not like this. Her gaze fell on a stall at the far end of the platform, its tent flap fluttering
slightly
. She could see a faint glow coming from within. She walked towards it, her boots
echoing
in the silence. As she pushed aside the tent flap, she found herself in a small, cluttered space filled with books and artifacts. An old lantern cast a soft glow over the chaos. Behind a makeshift counter sat Eva Kowalski, Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher. She
was hunched
over a book, her curly red hair falling over her face, round glasses perched on her nose. She looked up as Harlow entered, her green eyes wide with surprise. "Detective Quinn," she said, tucking a strand of hair behind her left ear. "What are you doing here?" Harlow held up her bone token. "I could ask you the same thing, Miss Kowalski. You're not exactly a regular here." Eva sighed, closing the book. "I was looking for something. A book, actually. But I can't find it." Harlow raised an eyebrow. "A book? In the middle of a crime scene?" Eva shrugged. "The market's always been a good source of... rare information." Harlow's gaze swept over the stall, landing on a small, leather-bound book on the counter. It was old, its cover worn, a strange symbol
etched
into the leather. She picked it up, flipping through the pages. It
was filled
with handwritten notes, sketches of symbols, and what looked like spellwork. "What's this?" she asked, showing the book to Eva. Eva hesitated before answering, "It's... just a journal. Notes on some old rituals." Harlow felt a prickle of unease. She'd
seen that symbol
before, in her partner's notes. It was the same symbol that had been carved into the wall of the last place Morris had been seen alive. "Where did you get this, Miss Kowalski?" Eva looked away, tucking another strand of hair behind her ear. "I... I can't remember. It was a long time ago." Harlow studied Eva, her mind racing. Something was off here. Eva
was hiding
something. She could feel it. She put the book down, her eyes scanning the stall again. Her gaze landed on a small, brass compass on the counter. It was similar to hers, but smaller, its face
etched
with different sigils. "What's
that?" she
asked, pointing at the compass. Eva followed her gaze, her eyes widening
slightly
. "It's... just a compass. I use it for my research." Harlow picked it up, turning it over in her hands. It was lighter than hers, the sigils different. But the needle pointed in the same direction as hers - towards the old platform. Towards the body. She looked at Eva, her mind made up. "I'm taking this," she said, pocketing the compass. "And I'm taking you down to the station. We need to have a little chat." Eva paled, but she didn't protest. She just stood up, grabbing her worn leather satchel full of books. "Alright, Detective," she said, her voice steady despite the fear in her eyes. "Let's talk." As they left the stall, Harlow cast one last look at the market. It was still empty, still silent. But she could feel it now, a hum of energy, a whisper of something ancient and powerful. Something that had
been awakened
. She didn't know what
was going
on here, but she
was going
to find out. She
was going
to find out who
killed that man
, and why. She
was going
to find out what Eva Kowalski
was hiding
. And she
was going
to find out what had
really
happened to
her partner, all those years ago. Because Harlow Quinn never left a case unsolved. Not when it came to the Veil Market. Not when it came to the supernatural. And certainly not when it came to her partner. She would see this through, no matter where it led her. No matter what she had to face. Because that was who she was. That was what she did. She was Detective Harlow Quinn, and she would not rest until the truth was uncovered.
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.0000%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
10
adverbTagCount
1
adverbTags
0
"she admitted, tucking the compass away [away]"
58.0185%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)
wordCount
1191
totalAiIsmAdverbs
5
found
0
adverb
"slightly"
count
3
1
adverb
"softly"
count
1
2
adverb
"really"
count
1
highlights
0
"slightly"
1
"softly"
2
"really"
80.0000%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
0
"Evans"
100.0000%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
58.0185%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)
wordCount
1191
totalAiIsms
5
found
0
word
"profound"
count
1
1
word
"echoing"
count
1
2
word
"etched"
count
3
highlights
0
"profound"
1
"echoing"
2
"etched"
100.0000%
Cliche density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
1
maxInWindow
1
found
0
label
"air was thick with"
count
1
highlights
0
"The air was thick with"
100.0000%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
98
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Filter word density
Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
1
hedgeCount
2
narrationSentences
98
filterMatches
0
"watch"
hedgeMatches
0
"seemed to"
1
"happened to"
100.0000%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
3
totalSentences
115
matches
0
"seen that symbol"
1
"that?\" she"
2
"killed that man"
100.0000%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
34
mean
35.03
std
19.87
cv
0.567
sampleLengths
0
73
1
51
2
35
3
38
4
55
5
15
6
49
7
9
8
42
9
19
10
56
11
15
12
51
13
37
14
76
15
18
16
21
17
18
18
13
19
12
20
50
21
9
22
13
23
43
24
21
25
53
26
8
27
18
28
36
29
31
30
33
31
41
32
56
33
76
99.3197%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤5% passive sentences
passiveCount
5
totalSentences
98
matches
0
"was positioned"
1
"was hunched"
2
"was filled"
3
"been carved been seen"
4
"been awakened"
100.0000%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
3
totalVerbs
179
matches
0
"was hiding"
1
"was going"
2
"was hiding"
94.0000%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
1010
adjectiveStacks
1
stackExamples
0
"small, leather-bound book"
adverbCount
29
adverbRatio
0.028712871287128714
lyAdverbCount
11
lyAdverbRatio
0.01089108910891089
100.0000%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
115
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.0000%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
115
mean
10.36
std
5.26
cv
0.508
sampleLengths
0
26
1
22
2
25
3
17
4
15
5
19
6
15
7
13
8
5
9
2
10
4
11
11
12
7
13
16
14
16
15
18
16
19
17
2
18
7
19
8
20
7
21
20
22
11
23
11
24
5
25
4
26
11
27
14
28
11
29
6
30
10
31
9
32
6
33
20
34
11
35
13
36
5
37
1
38
9
39
6
40
11
41
9
42
14
43
6
44
3
45
5
46
3
47
18
48
9
49
10
46.6667%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
8
diversityRatio
0.3217391304347826
totalSentences
115
uniqueOpeners
37
0.0000%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
10
fancyCount
7
fancyTags
0
"he acknowledged, standing straight (acknowledge, stand)"
1
"Evans said, crouching beside her (say, crouch)"
2
"Harlow replied, standing up (reply, stand up)"
3
"she admitted, tucking the compass away (admit, tuck)"
4
"she said, tucking a strand of hair behind her left ear (say, tuck leave)"
5
"Eva hesitated before answering, (hesitate answer)"
6
"she said, pocketing the compass (say, pocket)"
84.4720%