Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMPB37AJ1B84CYSZPD8CPPG

Run Details

Model:: GPT-4o, Aug. 6th (temp=0)
Test:: Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:: Fantasy: entering an ancient ruin
Duration:: 16.0s
Cost:: $0.018423
Provider:: Azure

Evaluation summary

Score	Evaluator	Details Link
100.00%	Adverbs in dialogue tags	(details)
78.34%	AI-ism adverb frequency	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism character names	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism location names	(details)
0.00%	AI-ism word frequency	(details)
0.00%	Cliché density	(details)
88.24%	Emotion telling (show vs. tell)	(details)
0.00%	Filter word density	(details)
100.00%	Gibberish response detection	(details)
100.00%	Markdown formatting overuse	(details)
100.00%	Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)	(details)
86.15%	Name drop frequency	(details)
0.00%	Narrator intent-glossing	(details)
26.69%	"Not X but Y" pattern overuse	(details)
100.00%	Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)	(details)
69.20%	Paragraph length variance	(details)
100.00%	Passive voice overuse	(details)
100.00%	Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse	(details)
100.00%	Em-dash & semicolon overuse	(details)
100.00%	Purple prose (modifier overload)	(details)
100.00%	Repeated phrase echo	(details)
95.58%	Sentence length variance	(details)
50.85%	Sentence opener variety	(details)
49.02%	Adverb-first sentence starts	(details)
31.76%	Pronoun-first sentence starts	(details)
18.82%	Subject-first sentence starts	(details)
73.53%	Subordinate conjunction sentence starts	(details)
0.00%	Technical jargon density	(details)
0.00%	Useless dialogue additions	(details)
13.64%	Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)	(details)
62.7272%	Overall

Model input

System

You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue.

You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex.

Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.

User/Human

<codex>
<character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist">
  <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor>
  <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair>
  <height>5'6"</height>
  <age>25</age>
  <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar>
  <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description>
  <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card">
  <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor>
  <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height>
  <age>ageless</age>
  <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form>
  <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice>
  <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description>
  <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle">
  <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor>
  <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair>
  <height>5'5"</height>
  <age>300 years old</age>
  <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance>
  <speech>speaks in riddles</speech>
  <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints>
  <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion>
  <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description>
  <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory>
</character>

<location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony">
  <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler>
  <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor>
  <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description>
</location>

<location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)">
  <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation>
  <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones>
  <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior>
  <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora>
  <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description>
</location>

<item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas">
  <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor>
  <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial>
  <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size>
  <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior>
  <glow>faint inner glow</glow>
  <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description>
</item>

<item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts">
  <material>moonsilver</material>
  <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape>
  <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature>
  <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow>
  <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power>
  <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo>
  <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description>
</item>

<lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology">
  <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect>
  <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance>
  <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring>
  <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description>
</lore>
</codex>

Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre.

A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition.

Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore.
Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

The air shimmered with a faint, otherworldly glow as Aurora Carter stepped through the ancient oak standing stones that marked the boundary of the Fae Grove. Her breath caught in her throat, the Heartstone Pendant around her neck pulsing gently against her skin, as if in recognition of the magic that thrummed through the air. She glanced back at Nyx, their form a silhouette of living shadow, eyes glowing faintly violet in the dim light. They nodded, a silent assurance that they were ready to proceed.

Beside her, Isolde Varga moved with an ethereal grace, her silver hair cascading down her back like a waterfall of moonlight. She seemed to glide rather than walk, leaving no footprints on the soft earth. Her pale lavender eyes scanned the grove, taking in the wildflowers that bloomed in riotous colors, their petals glistening with dew despite the absence of rain.

"Time dances differently here," Isolde murmured, her voice a soft melody that seemed to blend with the rustling leaves. "An hour within these bounds may be but a moment or an eternity outside."

Rory nodded, her mind racing with the possibilities and dangers that such a place could hold. She had heard tales of the Fae and their capricious nature, of how they could twist time and reality to their whims. Yet, standing here, she felt a strange sense of peace, as if the grove itself welcomed her presence.

They moved deeper into the grove, the path winding through clusters of ancient trees whose branches arched overhead, forming a natural cathedral. The air was thick with the scent of earth and blooming flowers, a heady perfume that seemed to seep into her very bones. Rory's fingers brushed against the rough bark of a tree, feeling the life pulsing beneath its surface, a heartbeat in time with her own.

Nyx drifted beside her, their form shifting between solid and incorporeal, a shadow among shadows. "This place remembers," they whispered, their voice like a breeze stirring the leaves. "It holds echoes of those who have walked here before."

Rory shivered, not from fear, but from the weight of history that seemed to press down upon her. She could almost hear the whispers of the past, the laughter and tears of those who had sought the grove's secrets. Her eyes caught a glint of something among the roots of a nearby tree, and she crouched down to investigate.

It was a small, intricately carved stone, its surface etched with symbols that seemed to shift and change as she looked at them. She picked it up, feeling a warmth spread through her fingers, and turned to Isolde. "What is this?"

Isolde's eyes widened slightly, a rare expression of surprise crossing her ageless features. "A memory stone," she said, her voice tinged with awe. "It holds the essence of a moment, captured in time. A gift from the grove to those it deems worthy."

Rory turned the stone over in her hands, feeling the weight of its significance. She slipped it into her pocket, a talisman of her journey into this otherworldly realm.

As they continued, the grove seemed to shift around them, the path leading them to a clearing bathed in soft, golden light. In the center stood a pool of water, its surface as smooth as glass, reflecting the sky above. Rory approached it cautiously, peering into its depths. The water was impossibly clear, revealing a bed of shimmering stones that glowed with an inner light.

Nyx knelt beside her, their fingers trailing through the water without disturbing its surface. "A mirror to the soul," they murmured, their voice barely audible. "It shows not what is, but what could be."

Rory stared into the pool, her reflection wavering, shifting. She saw herself standing on a precipice, the Heartstone Pendant glowing fiercely against her chest. Around her, shadows danced, and she felt a pull, a call to something greater than herself. She blinked, and the vision faded, leaving only her own face staring back at her.

Isolde joined them, her gaze distant, as if seeing beyond the present. "The grove offers glimpses, but it is up to you to choose your path," she said, her words a gentle reminder of the choices that lay ahead.

Rory nodded, feeling the weight of her decisions pressing down on her. She rose, brushing the dirt from her jeans, and turned to her companions. "Let's keep moving."

They left the clearing, the path winding deeper into the grove. The air grew cooler, the light dimming as the trees closed in around them. Rory felt a prickle of unease, the sense that they were being watched. She glanced at Nyx, who seemed unperturbed, their form blending seamlessly with the shadows.

Isolde paused, her head tilted as if listening to a distant melody. "We are not alone," she said, her voice a soft warning.

Rory's hand instinctively went to the Fae-Forged Blade at her side, its moonsilver surface cold against her palm. She scanned the trees, searching for any sign of movement, but saw nothing. The grove was silent, the only sound the rustle of leaves in the breeze.

Then, from the shadows, a figure emerged. It was a creature of the grove, its form shifting and indistinct, like a mirage. Its eyes glowed with an inner light, and it regarded them with a curious intensity.

Rory held her ground, her heart pounding in her chest. "Who are you?" she called, her voice steady despite the fear that clawed at her.

The creature tilted its head, a gesture of consideration. "A guardian," it replied, its voice a chorus of whispers. "The grove's protector."

Isolde stepped forward, her presence commanding. "We mean no harm," she said, her words carrying the weight of truth. "We seek only knowledge."

The guardian regarded her for a long moment, then nodded. "The grove welcomes those who come with open hearts," it said, its form beginning to dissolve back into the shadows. "But beware, for not all who enter are as they seem."

With that, it vanished, leaving only the rustle of leaves in its wake. Rory let out a breath she hadn't realized she'd been holding, her grip on the dagger relaxing.

"Let's keep moving," she said, her voice firm. "We have much to learn."

They continued on, the path leading them deeper into the heart of the grove. The air was thick with magic, a living presence that seemed to guide their steps. Rory felt a sense of wonder, of possibility, as if the very fabric of reality was within her grasp.

As they walked, the grove revealed its secrets, each discovery a testament to the power and beauty of the Fae. Rory felt a connection to this place, a bond that transcended time and space. She knew that whatever lay ahead, she would face it with courage and determination, her heart and mind open to the possibilities of the unknown.

Evaluation details

Result

Evaluator

Details

Meta Data

100.00%

Adverbs in dialogue tags

Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs

totalTags	11
adverbTagCount	0
adverbTags	(empty)
dialogueSentences	21
tagDensity	0.524
leniency	1
rawRatio	0
effectiveRatio	0

78.34%

AI-ism adverb frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)

wordCount

1154

totalAiIsmAdverbs

found

adverb	"gently"
count	1

adverb	"very"
count	2

adverb	"slightly"
count	1

adverb	"cautiously"
count	1

highlights

0	"gently"
1	"very"
2	"slightly"
3	"cautiously"

100.00%

AI-ism character names

Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

100.00%

AI-ism location names

Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

0.00%

AI-ism word frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)

wordCount

1154

totalAiIsms

found

word	"shimmered"
count	1

word	"otherworldly"
count	2

word	"cascading"
count	1

word	"scanned"
count	2

word	"glistening"
count	1

word	"dances"
count	1

word	"racing"
count	1

word	"sense of"
count	2

word	"echoes"
count	1

word	"weight"
count	4

word	"glint"
count	1

word	"etched"
count	1

word	"warmth"
count	1

word	"tinged"
count	1

word	"depths"
count	1

word	"wavering"
count	1

word	"reminder"
count	1

word	"intensity"
count	1

word	"pounding"
count	1

word	"testament"
count	1

highlights

0	"shimmered"
1	"otherworldly"
2	"cascading"
3	"scanned"
4	"glistening"
5	"dances"
6	"racing"
7	"sense of"
8	"echoes"
9	"weight"
10	"glint"
11	"etched"
12	"warmth"
13	"tinged"
14	"depths"
15	"wavering"
16	"reminder"
17	"intensity"
18	"pounding"
19	"testament"

0.00%

Cliché density

Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window

totalCliches

maxInWindow

found

label	"let out a breath"
count	1

label	"eyes widened/narrowed"
count	1

label	"air was thick with"
count	2

label	"weight of words/silence"
count	1

highlights

0	"let out a breath"
1	"eyes widened"
2	"The air was thick with"
3	"the weight of truth"

88.24%

Emotion telling (show vs. tell)

Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling

emotionTells

narrationSentences

matches

0	"d with awe"
1	"felt a prickle"
2	"a sense of wonder"

0.00%

Filter word density

Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words

filterCount

hedgeCount

narrationSentences

filterMatches

(empty)

hedgeMatches

0	"seemed to"

100.00%

Gibberish response detection

Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)

analyzedSentences	78
gibberishSentences	0
adjustedGibberishSentences	0
longSentenceCount	0
runOnParagraphCount	0
giantParagraphCount	0
wordSaladCount	0
repetitionLoopCount	0
controlTokenCount	0
maxSentenceWordsSeen	29
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Markdown formatting overuse

Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting

markdownSpans	0
markdownWords	0
totalWords	1154
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)

Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks

totalAttributions	11
unquotedAttributions	0
matches	(empty)

86.15%

Name drop frequency

Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words

totalMentions

wordCount

1018

uniqueNames

maxNameDensity

1.28

worstName

"Rory"

maxWindowNameDensity

worstWindowName

"Rory"

discoveredNames

Aurora	1
Carter	1
Fae	4
Grove	1
Heartstone	2
Pendant	2
Nyx	4
Isolde	7
Varga	1
Rory	13
Fae-Forged	1
Blade	1

persons

0	"Aurora"
1	"Carter"
2	"Pendant"
3	"Isolde"
4	"Varga"
5	"Rory"

places

0	"Fae"
1	"Grove"
2	"Fae-Forged"

globalScore

0.861

windowScore

0.00%

Narrator intent-glossing

Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns

analyzedSentences

glossingSentenceCount

matches

0	"melody that seemed to blend with the rustling leaves"
1	"perfume that seemed to seep into her very bones"
2	"history that seemed to press down upon her"
3	"symbols that seemed to shift and change as she looked at them"
4	"as if seeing beyond the present"
5	"seemed unperturbed their form blending seamlessly with the shadows"
6	"as if listening to a distant melody"
7	"presence that seemed to guide their steps"

26.69%

"Not X but Y" pattern overuse

Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words

totalMatches

per1kWords

1.733

wordCount

1154

matches

0	"not from fear, but from the weight of history"
1	"not what is, but what could be"

100.00%

Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)

Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses

thatCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"knew that whatever"

69.20%

Paragraph length variance

Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts

totalParagraphs

mean

42.74

std

16.76

0.392

sampleLengths

0	86
1	61
2	33
3	56
4	69
5	38
6	59
7	41
8	43
9	29
10	65
11	34
12	55
13	39
14	28
15	52
16	23
17	45
18	37
19	25
20	22
21	23
22	41
23	30
24	13
25	48
26	59

100.00%

Passive voice overuse

Target: ≤2% passive sentences

passiveCount	0
totalSentences	68
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse

Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs

pastProgressiveCount

totalVerbs

174

matches

0	"were being"

100.00%

Em-dash & semicolon overuse

Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons

emDashCount	0
semicolonCount	0
flaggedSentences	0
totalSentences	78
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Purple prose (modifier overload)

Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking

wordCount	1019
adjectiveStacks	0
stackExamples	(empty)
adverbCount	27
adverbRatio	0.02649656526005888
lyAdverbCount	15
lyAdverbRatio	0.014720314033366046

100.00%

Repeated phrase echo

Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)

totalSentences	78
echoCount	0
echoWords	(empty)

95.58%

Sentence length variance

Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts

totalSentences

mean

14.79

std

5.75

0.389

sampleLengths

0	26
1	29
2	20
3	11
4	21
5	14
6	26
7	19
8	14
9	16
10	22
11	18
12	22
13	23
14	24
15	15
16	13
17	10
18	18
19	21
20	20
21	23
22	15
23	3
24	13
25	10
26	20
27	14
28	15
29	22
30	18
31	8
32	17
33	14
34	11
35	9
36	9
37	15
38	16
39	15
40	12
41	27
42	12
43	13
44	3
45	11
46	14
47	13
48	14
49	12

50.85%

Sentence opener variety

Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers

consecutiveRepeats	2
diversityRatio	0.32051282051282054
totalSentences	78
uniqueOpeners	25

49.02%

Adverb-first sentence starts

Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb

adverbCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"Then, from the shadows, a"

ratio

0.015

31.76%

Pronoun-first sentence starts

Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun

pronounCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"Her breath caught in her"
1	"She glanced back at Nyx,"
2	"They nodded, a silent assurance"
3	"She seemed to glide rather"
4	"Her pale lavender eyes scanned"
5	"She had heard tales of"
6	"They moved deeper into the"
7	"they whispered, their voice like"
8	"She could almost hear the"
9	"Her eyes caught a glint"
10	"It was a small, intricately"
11	"She picked it up, feeling"
12	"she said, her voice tinged"
13	"She slipped it into her"
14	"they murmured, their voice barely"
15	"She saw herself standing on"
16	"She blinked, and the vision"
17	"she said, her words a"
18	"She rose, brushing the dirt"
19	"They left the clearing, the"

ratio

0.471

18.82%

Subject-first sentence starts

Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject

subjectCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"The air shimmered with a"
1	"Her breath caught in her"
2	"She glanced back at Nyx,"
3	"They nodded, a silent assurance"
4	"She seemed to glide rather"
5	"Her pale lavender eyes scanned"
6	"Isolde murmured, her voice a"
7	"Rory nodded, her mind racing"
8	"She had heard tales of"
9	"They moved deeper into the"
10	"The air was thick with"
11	"Rory's fingers brushed against the"
12	"Nyx drifted beside her, their"
13	"they whispered, their voice like"
14	"Rory shivered, not from fear,"
15	"She could almost hear the"
16	"Her eyes caught a glint"
17	"It was a small, intricately"
18	"She picked it up, feeling"
19	"Isolde's eyes widened slightly, a"

ratio

0.882

73.53%

Subordinate conjunction sentence starts

Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction

subConjCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"Yet, standing here, she felt"

ratio

0.015

0.00%

Technical jargon density

Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns

analyzedSentences

technicalSentenceCount

matches

0	"The air shimmered with a faint, otherworldly glow as Aurora Carter stepped through the ancient oak standing stones that marked the boundary of the Fae Grove."
1	"Her breath caught in her throat, the Heartstone Pendant around her neck pulsing gently against her skin, as if in recognition of the magic that thrummed through…"
2	"Her pale lavender eyes scanned the grove, taking in the wildflowers that bloomed in riotous colors, their petals glistening with dew despite the absence of rain…"
3	"Yet, standing here, she felt a strange sense of peace, as if the grove itself welcomed her presence."
4	"The water was impossibly clear, revealing a bed of shimmering stones that glowed with an inner light."
5	"Nyx knelt beside her, their fingers trailing through the water without disturbing its surface."
6	"Isolde joined them, her gaze distant, as if seeing beyond the present."
7	"Rory nodded, feeling the weight of her decisions pressing down on her."
8	"She glanced at Nyx, who seemed unperturbed, their form blending seamlessly with the shadows."
9	"Rory felt a sense of wonder, of possibility, as if the very fabric of reality was within her grasp."
10	"Rory felt a connection to this place, a bond that transcended time and space."

0.00%

Useless dialogue additions

Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments

totalTags

uselessAdditionCount

matches

0	"they murmured, their voice barely audible"
1	"she said, her voice a soft warning"
2	"she called, her voice steady despite the fear that clawed at her"
3	"it replied, its voice a chorus of whispers"
4	"she said, her words carrying the weight of truth"
5	"she said, her voice firm"

13.64%

Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)

Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags

totalTags

fancyCount

fancyTags

0	"Isolde murmured (murmur)"
1	"they whispered (whisper)"
2	"they murmured (murmur)"

dialogueSentences

tagDensity

0.524

leniency

rawRatio

0.273

effectiveRatio

0.273

62.7272%