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Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMPB71J4NJNKJ847TY2YGSA
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Model:
Mistral NeMO
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Thriller: chase through city streets
Duration:
30.4s
Cost:
$0.000468
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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
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Meta
AI
The rain was a relentless drumbeat against Detective Harlow Quinn's trench coat, each drop a tiny, cold fist pounding at her shoulders. The city lights reflected off the slick cobblestones, turning London's streets into a labyrinth of wet, shimmering mirrors. She'd been tracking Tomás Herrera for hours, the former paramedic's olive skin and dark hair blending with the night, making him a slippery target. But Quinn was a hunter, and she never lost her prey. Her breath misted in the chill air as she rounded a corner, her worn leather
watch
glinting
under the streetlamp. The sharp pain in her side was a familiar companion, a reminder of the years she'd spent chasing shadows like this one. She'd lost count of how many times she'd chased suspects through these streets, but she'd never lost one yet. Herrera darted into an alley, his shoes splashing in the puddles. Quinn followed, her heart pounding in her chest. The alley was narrow, the buildings on either side
looming
like monoliths, their windows dark and empty. She could hear Herrera's ragged breath up ahead,
see
the faint glow of his cigarette lighter as he paused to catch his breath. Quinn slowed, her hand resting on the grip of her service revolver. She'd been after Herrera for weeks, ever since she'd found evidence linking him to the clique, a secret society she suspected
was involved
in criminal activity. But Herrera wasn't just a suspect; he was a key, a door to a world she'd only glimpsed at the edges of her vision. A world of shadows and secrets, of things that went bump in the night. She rounded the corner, her eyes scanning the darkness. Herrera
was gone
, but there was a faint glow coming from a grate in the ground. Quinn approached, her boots
echoing
in the silence. The grate was old, rusted, but it
was unlocked
. She could hear voices coming from below, muffled and indistinct. Quinn hesitated, her hand still on her gun. She'd followed Herrera this far, but going down there was a different story. She was a cop, not a spy, and she'd never set foot in a place like this before. But she was close now, closer than she'd ever been to understanding what had
happened to
her partner, DS Morris, three years ago. Closer to finding out why he'd died under circumstances that defied explanation. She took a deep breath, the scent of damp earth and something else, something acrid and unfamiliar, filling her nostrils. Then she holstered her gun, grabbed the edge of the grate, and pulled herself down into the darkness. The tunnel was narrow, the ceiling low, forcing Quinn to duck her head as she made her way forward. The voices were louder now,
echoing
off the walls, a
cacophony
of languages and accents. She could
see
a faint light up ahead, hear the murmur of a crowd. She stepped out into a cavernous space, her eyes widening in disbelief. She was in an abandoned Tube station, but it was like no station she'd ever
see
n. The walls
were lined
with stalls, their tables groaning under the
weight
of strange,
otherworldly
objects. There were people everywhere, their faces a blur of colors and shapes, their eyes
gleaming
in the dim light. Quinn hesitated, her hand instinctively going to her gun. But she didn't draw it, not yet. She was out of her depth here, she knew that, but she also
knew that she
was close. Close to Herrera, close to the truth. She pushed her way through the crowd, her eyes scanning the stalls. There were potions and powders, crystals and charms, things that defied explanation and understanding. She saw a woman with scales instead of skin, a man with antlers growing from his forehead. She saw creatures that looked like spiders, like snakes, like nothing she'd ever
see
n before. And then she saw Herrera, standing at a stall at the far end of the market. He
was talking
to a man with a face like a raven, his eyes
gleaming
black and beady. Quinn hesitated, her heart pounding in her chest. She could arrest Herrera now, take him in for questioning. But she'd lose this, lose the chance to understand what was
really
going on here. She took a deep breath, her eyes scanning the market. She needed a disguise, something to blend in with the crowd. She spotted a stall selling clothes, robes and cloaks and hats in every color of the rainbow. She grabbed a cloak, a hooded thing in deep purple, and pulled it on over her trench coat. She pulled the hood up, hiding her face in the shadows, and made her way towards Herrera. The man with the raven face
was talking
now, his voice a harsh, grating sound that made Quinn's skin crawl. She couldn't hear what he was saying, not over the din of the market, but she could
see
Herrera's face,
see
the way he was listening, his eyes wide and intent. Quinn hesitated, her hand going to her gun. She could arrest them both now, take them in for questioning. But she didn't. She stood there, in the shadows, and she
watch
ed. The man with the raven face reached into his pocket and pulled out a small, stoppered bottle. He handed it to Herrera, who took it with a nod. Then he turned and walked away, disappearing into the crowd. Quinn hesitated, her heart pounding in her chest. She could follow Herrera,
see
where he went, what he did with the bottle. Or she could follow the raven-faced man, find out who he was, where he came from. She took a deep breath, her eyes scanning the market. Then she made her choice. She followed the raven-faced man. He led her through the market, past stalls selling things she couldn't even
begin to
understand. She saw a stall selling what looked like human teeth, another selling what the sign claimed were dragon scales. She saw a woman with wings, her feathers shimmering in the dim light, and a man with hooves instead of feet. The raven-faced man led her to a door at the back of the market, a door that
was guarded
by two men with guns. They nodded as he approached, their eyes scanning the crowd. Quinn hung back, her heart pounding in her chest. She could
see
Herrera now, standing at the edge of the market, the bottle clutched in his hand. She hesitated, her hand going to her gun. She could arrest him now, take him in for questioning. But she didn't. She stood there, in the shadows, and she
watch
ed. The raven-faced man disappeared through the door, the guards closing it behind him. Quinn waited a moment, then made her way towards Herrera. He was still standing there, the bottle clutched in his hand, his eyes scanning the market. Quinn approached him, her hand going to her gun. "Herrera," she said, her voice low and dangerous. "You're under arrest." Herrera turned to face her, his eyes widening in surprise. Then he smiled, a slow, dangerous smile that made Quinn's blood run cold. "Detective Quinn," he said, his voice a low purr. "I've been expecting you." Quinn hesitated, her hand tightening on her gun. "You have the right to remain silent," she said, her voice steady and calm. "Anything you say can and will be used against you in a court of law. You have the right to an attorney. If you cannot afford an attorney, one will be appointed for you. Do you understand these rights as I have read them to you?" Herrera laughed, a harsh, grating sound that made Quinn's skin crawl. "You don't understand, Detective," he said, his eyes
gleaming
in the dim light. "You don't understand at all." Quinn hesitated, her heart pounding in her chest. Then she reached out, her hand closing around Herrera's arm. "You're under arrest," she said again, her voice steady and calm. "Come with me." Herrera didn't resist as she led him away, through the market and back up the tunnel. He walked beside her, his head held high, his eyes scanning the crowd. Quinn could feel the tension in his arm, the way he
was coiled
, ready to spring. She led him out into the alley, the rain still pounding against the cobblestones. She could
see
the patrol car waiting at the end of the alley, its lights flashing in the darkness. She could
see
the uniforms, their hands on their guns, their eyes
watch
ing her, waiting for her signal. She turned to Herrera, her hand still on his arm. "You have the right to remain silent," she said again, her voice steady and calm. "Anything you say can and will be used against you in a court of law. You have the right to an attorney. If you cannot afford an attorney, one will be appointed for you. Do you understand these rights as I have read them to you?" Herrera smiled, a slow, dangerous smile that made Quinn's blood run cold. "I understand, Detective," he said, his voice a low purr. "But you still don't understand. You still don't understand at all." Quinn hesitated, her heart pounding in her chest. Then she turned and led Herrera towards the patrol car, her mind racing, her thoughts a whirlwind of questions and doubts and fears. She didn't understand, not yet. But she would. She would understand, no matter what it took. No matter where it led her. No matter what she had to do. She opened the door of the patrol car, her hand still on Herrera's arm. She could
see
the uniforms
watch
ing her, their eyes filled with questions, with concern. She could
see
the worry in their eyes, the way they
were looking
at her, at Herrera, at the world that had led them here. She pushed Herrera into the backseat, her hand on his head as he ducked to get in. Then she closed the door, her heart pounding in her chest. She stood there for a moment, her eyes scanning the alley, the city, the world. Then she turned and walked away, her mind racing, her thoughts a whirlwind of questions and doubts and fears. She didn't know what was going to happen next. She didn't know where this was going to lead her, what she was going to find, what she was going to have to do. But she knew one thing for sure. She was going to find out the truth. No matter what it took. No matter where it led her. No matter what she had to do. She was going to find out the truth. And she was going to bring them to justice. No matter what it took. No matter what it cost. No matter what she had to do.
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
38.0952%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
7
adverbTagCount
2
adverbTags
0
"she said again, her voice steady and calm [again]"
1
"she said again, her voice steady and calm [again]"
94.4843%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)
wordCount
1813
totalAiIsmAdverbs
1
found
0
adverb
"really"
count
1
highlights
0
"really"
100.0000%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
44.8428%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)
wordCount
1813
totalAiIsms
10
found
0
word
"cacophony"
count
1
1
word
"gleaming"
count
3
2
word
"glinting"
count
1
3
word
"otherworldly"
count
1
4
word
"looming"
count
1
5
word
"weight"
count
1
6
word
"echoing"
count
2
highlights
0
"cacophony"
1
"gleaming"
2
"glinting"
3
"otherworldly"
4
"looming"
5
"weight"
6
"echoing"
100.0000%
Cliche density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
0
maxInWindow
0
found
(empty)
highlights
(empty)
100.0000%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
129
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Filter word density
Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
3
hedgeCount
2
narrationSentences
129
filterMatches
0
"watch"
1
"see"
hedgeMatches
0
"happened to"
1
"begin to"
100.0000%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
1
totalSentences
136
matches
0
"knew that she"
48.5044%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
36
mean
50.25
std
16.07
cv
0.32
sampleLengths
0
75
1
61
2
59
3
76
4
52
5
74
6
38
7
48
8
63
9
41
10
58
11
67
12
73
13
51
14
31
15
38
16
38
17
20
18
56
19
61
20
30
21
39
22
20
23
36
24
68
25
29
26
32
27
45
28
51
29
71
30
33
31
60
32
53
33
62
34
66
35
34
100.0000%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤5% passive sentences
passiveCount
6
totalSentences
129
matches
0
"was involved"
1
"was gone"
2
"was unlocked"
3
"were lined"
4
"was guarded"
5
"was coiled"
100.0000%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
5
totalVerbs
296
matches
0
"was talking"
1
"was talking"
2
"was saying, was listening"
3
"were looking"
100.0000%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
1668
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
38
adverbRatio
0.022781774580335732
lyAdverbCount
4
lyAdverbRatio
0.002398081534772182
100.0000%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
136
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.0000%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
136
mean
13.3
std
6.96
cv
0.523
sampleLengths
0
22
1
18
2
24
3
11
4
20
5
22
6
19
7
11
8
8
9
17
10
23
11
12
12
26
13
24
14
14
15
9
16
16
17
8
18
9
19
10
20
8
21
13
22
18
23
23
24
12
25
20
26
18
27
19
28
15
29
14
30
12
31
16
32
16
33
19
34
9
35
7
36
18
37
7
38
12
39
14
40
17
41
15
42
16
43
18
44
8
45
10
46
15
47
10
48
11
49
17
30.8824%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
26
diversityRatio
0.15441176470588236
totalSentences
136
uniqueOpeners
21
67.8571%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
7
fancyCount
3
fancyTags
0
"he said, his eyes gleaming in the dim light (say, gleam)"
1
"she said again, her voice steady and calm (say again)"
2
"she said again, her voice steady and calm (say again)"
83.8039%