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Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMPBNE5910F9G692QBSPYM2
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Model:
GPT-4o Mini (temp=0)
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Fantasy: entering an ancient ruin
Duration:
25.6s
Cost:
$0.001047
Model input
System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
Model response
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Meta
AI
The air
shimmered
with a faint, iridescent glow as Aurora Carter stepped through the ancient oak standing stones, her heart racing with a mix of
trepidation
and exhilaration. The grove unfolded before her like a dream, a hidden
sanctuary
that felt both familiar and
utterly
alien. The wildflowers, vibrant and lush, carpeted the ground in a riot of colors, their petals
glistening
with dew that sparkled like diamonds in the soft light filtering through the leaves. “Is this
really
it?” Rory whispered, her bright blue eyes wide with wonder. She turned to her companions, Nyx and Isolde, who followed closely behind. The Shade’s silhouette
flickered
, a living shadow that
seemed to
absorb the light around them, while Isolde
glided
forward, her silver hair trailing like a comet’s tail. “Indeed,” Isolde replied, her voice a melodic whisper that danced through the air. “The Fae Grove, a pocket of magic untouched by time. Here, the mundane and the extraordinary intertwine.” Rory felt a shiver run down her spine, not from fear, but from the sheer enchantment of the place.
The air was thick with
the scent of blooming flowers and something sweet, almost like honey, but richer, more intoxicating. She took a deep breath, letting the aroma fill her lungs, grounding her in this moment. As they ventured deeper, the grove revealed its secrets. Trees twisted and turned in impossible shapes, their trunks adorned with luminescent fungi that pulsed
gently
, casting a soft glow on the path ahead. Rory reached out to touch one, her fingers brushing against the cool, damp surface. It felt alive, thrumming with energy beneath her fingertips. “Careful,” Nyx warned, their voice a soft whisper that
seemed to
echo
from the shadows. “Not all that glows is benign.” Rory nodded, pulling her hand back, a
flicker
of unease threading through her excitement. She glanced at Nyx, their violet eyes glowing faintly in the dim light, and felt a surge of gratitude for their presence. They had been a constant source of support since she fled to London, their
enigmatic
nature both comforting and unsettling. “Look!” Isolde exclaimed, her gaze fixed on a cluster of trees ahead. “The Heartstone blooms.” Rory followed her gaze, and her breath caught in her throat. Nestled among the roots of a gnarled tree were flowers unlike any she had ever seen. Their petals were deep crimson, mirroring the color of the Heartstone pendant that hung around her neck, a gift from an unknown benefactor. The flowers pulsed
softly
, as if in rhythm with her own heartbeat, and she felt an inexplicable pull toward them. “Can we touch them?” Rory asked, her voice
barely above a whisper
. “Only if you wish to know their secrets,” Isolde replied cryptically, her pale lavender eyes
glinting
with mischief. “But be warned, knowledge comes at a price.” Rory hesitated, the
weight
of Isolde’s words settling heavily in the air. She glanced at Nyx, who
seemed to
be watching her intently, their shadowy form
flicker
ing with
anticipation
. “What do you think?” she asked, her voice steady despite the flutter of uncertainty in her chest. “Knowledge is a double-edged sword,” Nyx replied, their tone thoughtful. “But perhaps it is a risk worth taking.” With a deep breath, Rory stepped closer to the flowers, kneeling beside them. She reached out, her fingers brushing against the soft petals. A jolt of energy surged through her, and images flooded her mind—visions of a world beyond her own, of shadows and light, of choices yet to be made. She gasped, pulling her hand back as the images faded, leaving her breathless. “What did you see?” Isolde asked, her voice laced with curiosity. “Just… flashes,” Rory stammered, her heart racing. “A glimpse of something… important. But it was gone before I could grasp it.” “Then it is a sign,” Isolde said, her expression serious. “The Grove has chosen you, Rory. You are meant for something greater.” Before Rory could respond, a low rumble
echo
ed through the grove, vibrating beneath her feet. The trees shuddered, their leaves rustling like whispers in the wind. Nyx’s form
flickered
, their eyes narrowing as they scanned the surroundings. “Something stirs,” they murmured, their voice barely audible. “We should move.” Rory nodded, her pulse quickening as they continued deeper into the grove. The path twisted and turned, leading them to a clearing bathed in
ethereal
light. In the center stood a massive stone altar, covered in
intricate
carvings that glowed faintly, illuminating the space with a soft,
otherworldly
radiance. “What is this place?” Rory breathed, stepping closer to the altar. The carvings depicted scenes of Fae and mortals intertwined, their expressions a mix of joy and sorrow. “This is a place of communion,” Isolde explained, her voice reverent. “Where the Fae once gathered to share their wisdom with those who sought it. But it has been long since any have come here.” Rory reached out to touch the stone, feeling the cool surface beneath her fingertips. A surge of energy pulsed through her, and she closed her eyes, allowing the sensations to wash over her. She could almost hear the
echo
es of laughter and music, the vibrant life that once filled this sacred space. “Do you feel it?” she asked, her voice barely a whisper. “Yes,” Nyx replied, their tone somber. “But there is a darkness here, too. A shadow that lingers, waiting.” Rory opened her eyes, scanning the clearing. The light
seemed to
flicker
, shadows creeping along the edges of her vision. “What do you mean?” “The Veil is thin here,” Nyx explained, their voice low. “It is a gateway, a point of connection between realms. But it is also vulnerable. We must tread
carefully
.” Isolde stepped forward, her expression contemplative. “The balance of power shifts. The Fae Courts are restless, and the shadows grow bolder. We must be vigilant.” Rory felt a chill creep up her spine,
the weight of their words
settling heavily in the air. “What can we do?” “Seek the Heartstone,” Isolde instructed, her voice firm. “It is a key to understanding the forces at play. But be wary; it will not reveal itself easily.” Rory nodded, determination igniting within her. She glanced at Nyx, who offered a reassuring nod, their shadowy form steady beside her. Together, they would
navigate
this world of wonder and danger, uncovering the secrets that lay hidden within the grove. As they prepared to leave the clearing, Rory felt a lingering sense of unease. The shadows danced at the edges of her vision, whispering secrets she could not yet comprehend. But she also felt
a spark of hope
, a
flicker
of possibility that urged her forward. With each step deeper into the grove, she knew they were on the brink of something extraordinary, a journey that would test their resolve and reshape their destinies. The Fae Grove held its mysteries close, but Rory was ready to uncover them, no matter the cost.
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
94.1176%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
17
adverbTagCount
2
adverbTags
0
"Isolde replied cryptically, her pale lavender eyes glinting with mischief [cryptically]"
1
"they murmured, their voice barely audible [barely]"
47.9618%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)
wordCount
1153
totalAiIsmAdverbs
6
found
0
adverb
"carefully"
count
1
1
adverb
"gently"
count
1
2
adverb
"softly"
count
1
3
adverb
"utterly"
count
1
4
adverb
"barely above a whisper"
count
1
5
adverb
"really"
count
1
highlights
0
"carefully"
1
"gently"
2
"softly"
3
"utterly"
4
"barely above a whisper"
5
"really"
100.0000%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
0.0000%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)
wordCount
1153
totalAiIsms
22
found
0
word
"ethereal"
count
1
1
word
"sanctuary"
count
1
2
word
"enigmatic"
count
1
3
word
"flickered"
count
2
4
word
"flicker"
count
3
5
word
"shimmered"
count
1
6
word
"glistening"
count
1
7
word
"glinting"
count
1
8
word
"glided"
count
1
9
word
"otherworldly"
count
1
10
word
"intricate"
count
1
11
word
"trepidation"
count
1
12
word
"anticipation"
count
1
13
word
"weight"
count
2
14
word
"echo"
count
1
15
word
"echoed"
count
1
16
word
"echoes"
count
1
17
word
"navigate"
count
1
highlights
0
"ethereal"
1
"sanctuary"
2
"enigmatic"
3
"flickered"
4
"flicker"
5
"shimmered"
6
"glistening"
7
"glinting"
8
"glided"
9
"otherworldly"
10
"intricate"
11
"trepidation"
12
"anticipation"
13
"weight"
14
"echo"
15
"echoed"
16
"echoes"
17
"navigate"
66.6667%
Cliche density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
3
maxInWindow
2
found
0
label
"air was thick with"
count
1
1
label
"weight of words/silence"
count
1
2
label
"flicker of emotion"
count
1
highlights
0
"The air was thick with"
1
"the weight of their words"
2
"a spark of hope"
100.0000%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
65
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Filter word density
Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
0
hedgeCount
4
narrationSentences
65
filterMatches
(empty)
hedgeMatches
0
"seemed to"
100.0000%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
0
totalSentences
80
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
33
mean
34.88
std
17.95
cv
0.515
sampleLengths
0
76
1
52
2
30
3
55
4
56
5
21
6
56
7
15
8
70
9
12
10
26
11
46
12
18
13
64
14
11
15
21
16
22
17
37
18
11
19
49
20
28
21
35
22
52
23
11
24
18
25
24
26
29
27
25
28
22
29
27
30
40
31
46
32
46
100.0000%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤5% passive sentences
passiveCount
0
totalSentences
65
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
0
totalVerbs
161
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
916
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
26
adverbRatio
0.028384279475982533
lyAdverbCount
14
lyAdverbRatio
0.015283842794759825
100.0000%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
80
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.0000%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
80
mean
14.39
std
6.1
cv
0.424
sampleLengths
0
28
1
18
2
30
3
13
4
12
5
27
6
13
7
17
8
19
9
20
10
16
11
9
12
24
13
14
14
9
15
15
16
6
17
14
18
22
19
20
20
12
21
3
22
11
23
16
24
23
25
20
26
12
27
18
28
8
29
12
30
17
31
17
32
10
33
8
34
13
35
10
36
28
37
13
38
11
39
7
40
14
41
10
42
12
43
15
44
11
45
11
46
8
47
3
48
12
49
14
70.4167%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
2
diversityRatio
0.4375
totalSentences
80
uniqueOpeners
35
27.9412%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
17
fancyCount
10
fancyTags
0
"whispered (whisper)"
1
"Isolde replied, her voice a melodic whisper that danced through the air (reply, voice dance)"
2
"Nyx warned, their voice a soft whisper that seemed to echo from the shadows (warn, seem echo)"
3
"exclaimed (exclaim)"
4
"Isolde replied cryptically, her pale lavender eyes glinting with mischief (reply cryptically, glint)"
5
"Rory stammered, her heart racing (stammer, race)"
6
"they murmured, their voice barely audible (murmur)"
7
"Isolde explained, her voice reverent (explain)"
8
"Nyx explained, their voice low (explain)"
9
"Isolde instructed, her voice firm (instruct)"
82.7708%