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Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMPC4TVQTXPJ7KYH73GVKJ4
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Model:
Mistral NeMO
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Fantasy: entering an ancient ruin
Duration:
9.7s
Cost:
$0.000503
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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
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Meta
AI
In the hushed quiet of a London morning, Rory Carter, Aurora to her friends, stepped out of Silas' bar, the faint glow of her Heartstone pendant casting a warm crimson pulse against her collarbone. She
was joined
by Nyx, the ageless Shade, their form a shifting silhouette of living shadow, and Isolde Varga, the
ethereal
Half-Fae seer, her silver hair a waterfall to her waist. Their destination: the Fae Grove, a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm, hidden within Richmond Park. The park was a
symphony
of green, the ancient oaks standing
sentinel
, their gnarled roots gripping the earth like arthritic fingers. As they ventured deeper, the air grew cool, damp with the scent of earth and something else—an undercurrent of magic, wild and untamed. Rory's boots crunched on the gravel path, the sound
echoing
in the stillness. Nyx, formless, flowed alongside her, their faintly glowing violet eyes never still, always scanning. Isolde led the way, her bare feet leaving no footprints on the mossy ground. She walked with an
otherworldly
grace, her pale lavender eyes fixed on the distance. "We are close," she murmured, her voice a soft riddle. "The grove awaits, as does the Seer." Rory's hand went to the Fae-Forged Blade at her side, the moonsilver dagger cold against her palm. It hummed
softly
, a whisper of power, as if sensing the proximity of its kin. She felt a prickle at the back of her neck, the Veil's presence a faint shimmering distortion in her peripheral vision. The path opened up into a clearing, and there it was: the Fae Grove. Ancient oak standing stones marked the boundary, their bark
etched
with runes that pulsed with a soft,
otherworldly
light. Beyond them, wildflowers bloomed year-round, a riot of color against the green. A stream burbled, its waters clear as crystal, reflecting the dappled sunlight filtering through the canopy above. Rory stepped between the standing stones, a shiver running down her spine. The air here was different, charged with a
palpable
energy. She felt it in her bones, a hum of power that
resonated
with her
very
being. Nyx, solid now, stood beside her, their gaze sweeping the grove. "This place... it's like nothing on Earth," they whispered, their voice a wind-carried sigh. Isolde turned to them, her pale eyes serious. "Time moves differently here. An hour inside can be minutes or days outside. Tread
carefully
, mortals." Rory nodded, her hand going to her Heartstone pendant. It pulsed
warmly
, a
beacon
of familiarity
amidst
the alien beauty. She took a deep breath, the scent of wildflowers and something else—something sweet and intoxicating—filling her lungs. "Let's find this Seer," she said, her voice steady despite the unease coiling in her stomach. They followed the stream, its banks lined with vibrant flowers that
seemed to
sway in time to a melody only they could hear. Rory reached out, her fingers brushing against a petal as soft as
velvet
. It glowed briefly at her touch, a pulse of light that made her heart skip a beat. She pulled back, her breath catching in her throat. Nyx was beside her in an instant, their form shifting, solidifying into a hand on her shoulder. "Careful, Rory," they warned, their voice a low rumble. "This place is alive. It's aware." She nodded, her eyes scanning the grove. The trees here were different, their trunks twisted into
intricate
patterns, their leaves shimmering like precious metal. They cast dappled shadows on the ground, patterns that
seemed to
shift and change, forming images that made no sense and yet felt deeply significant. As they ventured deeper, the sweet scent grew stronger, cloying. Rory felt a strange sensation, a pull at the edge of her consciousness, a whisper of a voice calling her name. She hesitated, her steps faltering. "Do you
hear that?" she
asked, her voice
barely above a whisper
. Nyx and Isolde exchanged a glance. The Half-Fae shook her head, her silver hair catching the light. "I hear nothing but the wind," she said, her voice a soft riddle. Nyx, however, tilted their head, their glowing violet eyes narrowing. "There's something here," they said, their voice a low growl. "Something... old." Rory took a deep breath, her hand going to the Fae-Forged Blade at her side. She felt a surge of power, a hum of energy that
resonated
with her
very
being. She took a step forward, then another, following the pull of the voice. The grove
seemed to
shift around her, the trees twisting into a tunnel, the flowers closing in. The sweet scent was overpowering now, a cloying perfume that made her head spin. She felt
a sense of unease
, a prickle of fear at the back of her neck. But she pressed on, driven by a curiosity she couldn't resist. Suddenly, the tunnel opened up into a clearing. And there, in the center, was the Seer. She was a figure of
ethereal
beauty, her skin the color of moonlight, her eyes a swirling vortex of stardust. She
was surrounded
by a pool of shimmering water, its surface reflecting the night sky above. Rory approached, her steps slow, her heart pounding in her chest. The Seer's gaze
was fixed
on her, her eyes unblinking. "Aurora Carter," she said, her voice a soft sigh. "You have come seeking answers." Rory nodded, her throat dry. "Yes," she
managed to
say, her voice
barely above a whisper
. "I need to know... about the Veil. About Hel. About... me." The Seer smiled, a slow curve of her lips that
sent a shiver down
Rory's spine. "You wish to know your destiny, child," she said, her voice a soft whisper. "But destiny is a fickle thing. It can be shaped, molded. It is not set in stone." Rory felt
a surge of frustration
. She had come all this way, faced all this uncertainty, for answers. And now, she was
being given
riddles. She took a deep breath, her hand going to her Heartstone pendant. It pulsed
warmly
, a
beacon
of strength
amidst
the uncertainty. "What do I need to do?" she asked, her voice steady despite the turmoil within her. The Seer's smile widened, her eyes never leaving Rory's. "You must journey to Hel, child," she said, her voice a soft whisper. "To the realm of Dymas. There, you will find the answers you seek." Rory felt a chill run down her spine. Hel. The realm of the dead. The realm of the damned. She had heard the stories, the whispers of the Wardens. She knew the risks, the dangers. But she also
knew that she
had no choice. She had to go. She took a deep breath, her resolve strengthening. "I'll go," she said, her voice steady. "I'll find the answers I need." The Seer nodded, her eyes never leaving Rory's. "Then go, child," she said, her voice a soft sigh. "But beware. Hel is a dangerous place. And the path you walk is fraught with peril." Rory nodded, her hand going to the Fae-Forged Blade at her side. She felt a surge of power, a hum of energy that
resonated
with her
very
being. She was ready. She was determined. She would find the answers she needed, no matter the cost. As she turned to leave, the grove
seemed to
shift around her, the trees twisting back into their original forms, the flowers opening up, revealing the path back to the standing stones. She walked back, her steps steady, her heart pounding in her chest. She was ready. She was determined. She would face whatever came next, armed with the knowledge that she was on the right path. The path to her destiny. The path to the truth.
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.0000%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
14
adverbTagCount
1
adverbTags
0
"she managed to say, her voice barely above a whisper [barely]"
22.6006%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)
wordCount
1292
totalAiIsmAdverbs
10
found
0
adverb
"carefully"
count
1
1
adverb
"softly"
count
1
2
adverb
"suddenly"
count
1
3
adverb
"warmly"
count
2
4
adverb
"barely above a whisper"
count
2
5
adverb
"very"
count
3
highlights
0
"carefully"
1
"softly"
2
"suddenly"
3
"warmly"
4
"barely above a whisper"
5
"very"
100.0000%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
0.0000%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)
wordCount
1292
totalAiIsms
18
found
0
word
"palpable"
count
1
1
word
"ethereal"
count
2
2
word
"symphony"
count
1
3
word
"beacon"
count
2
4
word
"sentinel"
count
1
5
word
"resonated"
count
3
6
word
"otherworldly"
count
2
7
word
"velvet"
count
1
8
word
"intricate"
count
1
9
word
"amidst"
count
2
10
word
"echoing"
count
1
11
word
"etched"
count
1
highlights
0
"palpable"
1
"ethereal"
2
"symphony"
3
"beacon"
4
"sentinel"
5
"resonated"
6
"otherworldly"
7
"velvet"
8
"intricate"
9
"amidst"
10
"echoing"
11
"etched"
66.6667%
Cliche density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
2
maxInWindow
2
found
0
label
"sense of foreboding"
count
1
1
label
"sent a shiver through"
count
1
highlights
0
"a sense of unease"
1
"sent a shiver down"
100.0000%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
1
narrationSentences
95
matches
0
"a surge of frustration"
100.0000%
Filter word density
Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
0
hedgeCount
5
narrationSentences
95
filterMatches
(empty)
hedgeMatches
0
"seemed to"
1
"managed to"
100.0000%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
2
totalSentences
105
matches
0
"hear that?\" she"
1
"knew that she"
54.7129%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
27
mean
47.48
std
16.21
cv
0.341
sampleLengths
0
82
1
71
2
45
3
53
4
62
5
63
6
24
7
53
8
62
9
32
10
49
11
48
12
30
13
22
14
44
15
58
16
52
17
35
18
27
19
47
20
63
21
35
22
48
23
21
24
34
25
45
26
77
100.0000%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤5% passive sentences
passiveCount
4
totalSentences
95
matches
0
"was joined"
1
"was surrounded"
2
"was fixed"
3
"being given"
100.0000%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
0
totalVerbs
182
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
1137
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
25
adverbRatio
0.02198768689533861
lyAdverbCount
12
lyAdverbRatio
0.010554089709762533
100.0000%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
105
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.0000%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
105
mean
12.21
std
6.09
cv
0.499
sampleLengths
0
34
1
31
2
17
3
21
4
23
5
13
6
14
7
14
8
14
9
10
10
7
11
17
12
15
13
21
14
14
15
19
16
12
17
17
18
12
19
10
20
16
21
11
22
14
23
8
24
16
25
9
26
11
27
17
28
16
29
23
30
13
31
17
32
9
33
17
34
9
35
6
36
7
37
17
38
25
39
10
40
21
41
5
42
12
43
6
44
11
45
13
46
10
47
10
48
2
49
15
37.4603%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
14
diversityRatio
0.3047619047619048
totalSentences
105
uniqueOpeners
32
0.0000%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
14
fancyCount
10
fancyTags
0
"she murmured, her voice a soft riddle (murmur, voice)"
1
"they whispered, their voice a wind-carried sigh (whisper)"
2
"she said, her voice steady despite the unease coiling in her stomach (say, coil)"
3
"they warned, their voice a low rumble (warn)"
4
"she said, her voice a soft riddle (say, voice)"
5
"she said, her voice a soft sigh (say, voice)"
6
"she managed to say, her voice barely above a whisper (manage say)"
7
"she said, her voice a soft whisper (say, voice)"
8
"she said, her voice a soft whisper (say, voice)"
9
"she said, her voice a soft sigh (say, voice)"
75.3789%