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Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMPCEAFQGZYRJPQA8GH3HYQ
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Model:
Mistral NeMO
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Fantasy: entering an ancient ruin
Duration:
8.8s
Cost:
$0.000468
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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
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In the hush of a London dawn, Rory Carter, her breath misting in the chill, led the way through Richmond Park. The others followed—Nyx, the Shade, their form a flickering shadow at her back, and Isolde, the Half-Fae, her silver hair catching the first light like a comet's tail. They
were bound
for the Fae Grove, a place Rory had heard whispers of but never seen. The park was quiet, the world still yawning awake. Their
footsteps
crunched on frost-kissed leaves, the only sound save for the distant call of a lone bird. Rory's
heart pounded in her chest
, a mix of
anticipation
and unease. She clutched the Heartstone Pendant at her throat, feeling its faint pulse against her skin. As they walked, the trees
began to
change. Their leaves turned a deeper green, almost iridescent, and wildflowers bloomed at their feet, defying the season. The air grew heavy with magic, prickling against Rory's skin like static. She glanced at Isolde, who walked with an
otherworldly
grace, her eyes distant, as if she were already elsewhere. Nyx, ever watchful, moved between them, their form shifting like smoke. "We're close," they whispered, their voice carried on the wind. "I can feel it. The Veil is thin here." Rory nodded, her gaze fixed ahead. She could see them now—the ancient oak standing stones, their bark
etched
with runes that
seemed to
dance
in the light. Beyond them, the air
shimmered
, like heat haze on a summer's day. The boundary of the Fae Grove. Isolde stepped forward, her voice
barely above a whisper
. "Three steps, and we shall cross." She took one, then another, her footfalls silent. On the third, she vanished, swallowed by the shimmer. Rory took a deep breath, her hand going to the Fae-Forged Blade at her side. She could feel Nyx's presence behind her, solid and reassuring. Then, with a quick glance back at the world they knew, she stepped through. The change was immediate. The air was warmer, heavier, filled with the scent of blooming flowers and distant rain. The sky above was not the pale blue of an English morning but a warm amber, like honey. Dymas, Rory thought, her heart quickening. We've crossed into Hel. Nyx stepped through behind her, their form solidifying. "We're in Dymas," they said, their voice
echoing
slightly
. "Gluttony. Be on your guard." Rory nodded, her eyes scanning the landscape. They stood in a grove of trees laden with fruit, their branches heavy with the
weight
. Beyond, she could see sprawling vineyards, their vines thick with grapes, and in the distance, the spires of a grand palace, its towers reaching for the sky. Isolde waited for them, her eyes closed, her face upturned. "It's been so long," she murmured. "I had forgotten the feel of it. The taste of it." She opened her eyes, her gaze meeting Rory's. "We are not alone, child. The prince knows we are here." Rory's hand tightened on the blade at her side. "Belphegor," she said, her voice steady despite the fear coiling in her gut. "What does he want?" Isolde smiled, a small, sad curve of her lips. "He wants what all princes want, child. Power. Knowledge. Control." She turned, her gaze fixed on the palace. "But we are not here for him. We are here for the truth." They moved deeper into the grove, the trees parting before them like a living thing. Rory could feel the magic here, thick and heavy, pressing against her skin. She could hear laughter in the distance, the clink of glasses, the hum of voices. A feast, she thought. They're having a feast. As they approached, the laughter grew louder, the voices more raucous. They came to a clearing, a grand table laid out before them, laden with food. Souls, Rory realized, her stomach turning. They're using souls to cook. Nyx stepped closer, their form flickering. "We should not be here," they said, their voice low. "This is not our fight." Rory looked at them, then at Isolde, who stood watching, her expression
unreadable
. "We're here for the truth," she said, her voice steady. "And we're not leaving until we have it." Isolde nodded, her gaze meeting Rory's. "Well spoken, child." She turned, her voice rising, carrying over the laughter and the noise. "Belphegor! We seek an audience!" The laughter stopped. The noise faded. The souls at the table turned, their eyes wide, their faces pale. Then, from the palace, a figure emerged, tall and
imposing
, his eyes burning like embers. Belphegor. He walked towards them, his steps slow, measured. His gaze fixed on Rory, a smile playing at the corners of his mouth. "Aurora Carter," he said, his voice like thunder. "I have been expecting you." Rory stood her ground, her hand tight on the blade at her side. "I'm here for the truth," she said, her voice steady. "I want to know why you're after me. Why you sent Evan. Why you gave me the Heartstone." Belphegor laughed, a sound like distant thunder. "Always so many questions, little mortal." He stepped closer, his gaze fixed on her. "Very well. I will give you your answers. But in return, you must give me something." Rory's
heart pounded in her chest
. She could feel Nyx behind her, solid and reassuring. She could feel Isolde, her presence like a
beacon
. She took a deep breath, her gaze meeting Belphegor's. "What do you want?" she asked. Belphegor smiled, his eyes burning. "A favor, Aurora Carter. When the time comes, you will owe me a favor." Rory hesitated, her gaze flicking to Nyx, to Isolde. Then, she nodded. "Alright," she said. "I'll make you a deal, Belphegor. You tell me the truth, and I'll owe you a favor. But if you lie, if you mislead me, the debt is null and void." Belphegor laughed, a sound like distant thunder. "Agreed," he said, his gaze fixed on her. "You are a bold one, Aurora Carter. I
like that." He
turned, his gaze fixed on the palace. "Come," he said. "Let us talk. Let us make our deal." As they followed him, Rory could feel the magic here, thick and heavy, pressing against her skin. She could hear the laughter, the clink of glasses, the hum of voices. But she kept her gaze fixed ahead, her hand tight on the blade at her side. She was here for the truth, and she would not leave until she had it. No matter the cost.
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.0000%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
12
adverbTagCount
1
adverbTags
0
"they said, their voice echoing slightly [slightly]"
72.3247%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)
wordCount
1084
totalAiIsmAdverbs
3
found
0
adverb
"slightly"
count
1
1
adverb
"barely above a whisper"
count
1
2
adverb
"very"
count
1
highlights
0
"slightly"
1
"barely above a whisper"
2
"very"
100.0000%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
0.0000%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)
wordCount
1084
totalAiIsms
11
found
0
word
"beacon"
count
1
1
word
"shimmered"
count
1
2
word
"otherworldly"
count
1
3
word
"imposing"
count
1
4
word
"unreadable"
count
1
5
word
"anticipation"
count
1
6
word
"weight"
count
1
7
word
"dance"
count
1
8
word
"footsteps"
count
1
9
word
"echoing"
count
1
10
word
"etched"
count
1
highlights
0
"beacon"
1
"shimmered"
2
"otherworldly"
3
"imposing"
4
"unreadable"
5
"anticipation"
6
"weight"
7
"dance"
8
"footsteps"
9
"echoing"
10
"etched"
66.6667%
Cliche density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
2
maxInWindow
2
found
0
label
"heart pounded in chest"
count
2
highlights
0
"heart pounded in her chest"
100.0000%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
85
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Filter word density
Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
0
hedgeCount
2
narrationSentences
85
filterMatches
(empty)
hedgeMatches
0
"began to"
1
"seemed to"
100.0000%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
1
totalSentences
99
matches
0
"like that.\" He"
43.9562%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
27
mean
39.96
std
12.14
cv
0.304
sampleLengths
0
66
1
54
2
56
3
30
4
45
5
32
6
39
7
47
8
22
9
50
10
46
11
26
12
40
13
51
14
37
15
21
16
31
17
26
18
34
19
35
20
41
21
37
22
39
23
19
24
46
25
44
26
65
100.0000%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤5% passive sentences
passiveCount
1
totalSentences
85
matches
0
"were bound"
100.0000%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
0
totalVerbs
140
matches
(empty)
88.0000%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
852
adjectiveStacks
2
stackExamples
0
"heavy, pressing against her"
1
"heavy, pressing against her"
adverbCount
18
adverbRatio
0.02112676056338028
lyAdverbCount
4
lyAdverbRatio
0.004694835680751174
100.0000%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
99
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.0000%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
99
mean
10.9
std
5.71
cv
0.524
sampleLengths
0
21
1
28
2
17
3
9
4
18
5
12
6
15
7
8
8
17
9
12
10
19
11
11
12
10
13
9
14
6
15
21
16
12
17
6
18
9
19
14
20
9
21
15
22
10
23
14
24
4
25
15
26
18
27
6
28
4
29
8
30
9
31
5
32
7
33
16
34
27
35
10
36
6
37
19
38
11
39
9
40
13
41
4
42
9
43
18
44
13
45
15
46
13
47
15
48
4
49
4
55.2189%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
7
diversityRatio
0.37373737373737376
totalSentences
99
uniqueOpeners
37
70.8333%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
12
fancyCount
5
fancyTags
0
"they whispered, their voice carried on the wind (whisper, carry on)"
1
"they said, their voice echoing slightly (say, echo slightly)"
2
"she murmured (murmur)"
3
"she said, her voice steady despite the fear coiling in her gut (say, coil)"
4
"he said, his gaze fixed on her (say, fix)"
82.1765%