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Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMPCTHR1G4MJWXPMP1VR3SJ
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Model:
GPT-4o, May 13th (temp=1)
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Thriller: chase through city streets
Duration:
13.3s
Cost:
$0.026975
Provider:
Azure
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You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
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AI
The rain hammered down, relentless sheets that fused everything into a single, liquid blur. Each fat drop splattered and bounced on the cobblestone streets of Soho, turning pavements into
gleaming
rivers. Detective Harlow Quinn
navigated
the slick terrain with a practiced grace, her movements sharp and precise, an
echo
of her military past. She focused on the silhouette ahead, a dark blur moving with urgent, desperate speed. The suspect was just at the edge of her vision. Too close to lose but far enough to remain frustratingly out of reach. Quinn's heart pounded, not from exertion, but from a blood-deep instinct. Something in the flick of the suspect’s jacket had set off alarms in her mind. Memories of her partner DS Morris flashed through her mind, pushing her legs to move faster. She tightened the strap of her worn leather
watch
on her left wrist,
feel
ing the reassuring pressure against her skin. The suspect veered left; Quinn followed. She spotted the neon green sign of The Raven's Nest, its glow a faint, sickly
beacon
in the storm. Sleet stung her cheeks as she made her way through the bar’s entrance, pushing through a pair of mahogany doors that groaned on their hinges. Inside, the air was dense with the scent of aged whiskey and damp wood. The dim lighting cast long shadows across the old maps and black-and-white photographs adorning the walls. Patrons looked up, briefly, from their conversations, their faces barely visible in the gloom. Silas, the bar’s owner, stood behind the counter, his eyes narrowing as he recognized her. “Quinn,” he said, his voice as rough as the sandpaper
feel
of his five o’clock shadow. “Looking for someone?” She scanned the room, her brown eyes sharp under the wet brim of her hat. “A tall man in a grey coat. Just came in.” Silas wiped his hands on a dishrag, nodding towards the back. "Checked out the bookshelf." Quinn's pulse quickened. The hidden room wasn’t on any blueprints, not that she had seen. Weeks of surveilling The Raven's Nest had finally paid off. She pushed past Silas, towards the dim corner where an old, dust-caked bookshelf served as an entrance. She ran her hands along the spines of the books until she found the handle disguised as a worn copy of "Gulliver's Travels." The secret door swung open, revealing a narrow, dimly lit corridor leading to a descending staircase. She didn't hesitate. The suspect was getting away, and every second counted. Down she went, her steps quick, careful. The staircase led to a subterranean world, an old, abandoned Tube station repurposed into the Veil Market. The brightness of enchanted lanterns and the
cacophony
of voices struck her. Stalls crammed together sold wares that
shimmered
with
otherworldly
promise—glowing stones, bottled shadows, and jars of what looked like whispers. Her
eyes narrowed
at the sight, mind racing to piece everything together while keeping her focus on the chase. She scanned the crowd until she saw him—grey coat flashing as the suspect slipped through the throng. Her path
was blocked
momentarily by a stall owner whose wares spilled over in a mess of vials and scrolls. An aromatic cloud of incense and spices clung to the air, and Quinn elbowed her way past, catching a raised eyebrow from the vendor. "Careful, Detective," the vendor warned, a
glint
of hidden knowledge in his eyes. Quinn ignored him. The suspect
was pushing
through a door marked by a faded bone symbol. She reached into her coat pocket and pulled out a bone token she'd confiscated from a shifty informant weeks earlier. She held it up to a guard by the door, who grunted and slid open a concealed panel to let her through. Beyond the door, the scent turned sharper, more defined.
The air was thick with
a medley of metallic tangs and musty earth. The underground network of rooms and passages was a labyrinth, each corner ripe with potential danger. Quinn knew she was outside the bounds of her jurisdiction but pushed forward anyway. Up ahead, she caught sight of olive skin and curly dark hair. The suspect was about to slip through another set of steel doors when someone grabbed her by the arm. Tomás Herrera's warm brown eyes met hers, his grip gentle but firm. "Quinn, what the hell are you doing here?" She shook him off, her jawline tightening. "No time, Herrera. Suspect in grey coat." He looked at her, his face conflicted. "You’re diving deep tonight, Detective. The man you're chasing... He’s connected to something big, something not meant for straightforward law enforcement." Her instincts recoiled at the thought of pulling back. The memory of DS Morris, of his lifeless form discovered under unexplained circumstances, urged her onward. "He knows something about Morris’ case," she said, voice edging a whisper. "I need to get him, Tomás." Tomás scanned her face and sighed heavily. "Then we do this together." Uniting their efforts, Quinn and Tomás approached the steel doors. Behind them, the muffled hum of the Veil Market continued. The air buzzed with the promise of secrets just out of reach. Quinn pushed the door open, revealing a room awash in eerie blue light. The suspect stood by a sizeable, circular table
etched
with symbols she didn’t understand. He turned, revealing a
glint
of recognition in his eyes before he bolted through a side door. "Bloody hell," she swore under her breath and sprinted after him, an
echo
of
footsteps
signaling Tomás following. The chase funneled them into a narrower passageway, unmistakably leading deeper into the heart of the underground network. Each step resounded in the hollow space, marking their pursuit with urgency. The passageway finally spat them out into an expansive chamber. The suspect
was cornered
, hands raised in surrender, though his eyes held the confidence of someone with one last trick up his sleeve. "You’re making a mistake," he said, eyes shifting between Quinn and Tomás. "This isn’t just some underground market. You shouldn’t be here." "Save it," Quinn spat, her breath coming hard. "You’re coming in for questioning." A sound like ripping cloth tore through the room—a portal opening, a way out. The suspect grinned, taking one last glance at their defiance. "There are things at work here you cannot comprehend," he said and lunged at the portal, disappearing in an instant. Silence fell, broken only by the ambient hum of whatever arcane forces powered the market. Tomás stepped forward, his fingers tracing the air where the suspect vanished. "Damn it," Quinn muttered, eyes hard, her determination unravelling into frustration. "Tomás, we need to close these gaps before more slip through." Tomás nodded solemnly, his scar a grim
testament
to the dangers they both faced. "Let’s get you out of here, Quinn. We’ll need a stronger plan, allies who understand this underworld.” Together they turned and began the slow climb back to the surface. The storm still roared overhead, matching the tempest within Quinn’s mind. She had seen beyond the veil this night, and she
was determined
to tear it down piece by piece.
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Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
50.0000%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
8
adverbTagCount
2
adverbTags
0
"Quinn spat, her breath coming hard [hard]"
1
"Quinn muttered, eyes hard, her determination unravelling into frustration [hard]"
100.0000%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)
wordCount
1185
totalAiIsmAdverbs
0
found
(empty)
highlights
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
0.0000%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)
wordCount
1185
totalAiIsms
13
found
0
word
"cacophony"
count
1
1
word
"testament"
count
1
2
word
"beacon"
count
1
3
word
"shimmered"
count
1
4
word
"gleaming"
count
1
5
word
"glint"
count
2
6
word
"otherworldly"
count
1
7
word
"footsteps"
count
1
8
word
"echo"
count
2
9
word
"etched"
count
1
10
word
"navigated"
count
1
highlights
0
"cacophony"
1
"testament"
2
"beacon"
3
"shimmered"
4
"gleaming"
5
"glint"
6
"otherworldly"
7
"footsteps"
8
"echo"
9
"etched"
10
"navigated"
66.6667%
Cliche density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
2
maxInWindow
2
found
0
label
"eyes widened/narrowed"
count
1
1
label
"air was thick with"
count
1
highlights
0
"eyes narrowed"
1
"The air was thick with"
100.0000%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
77
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Filter word density
Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
2
hedgeCount
0
narrationSentences
77
filterMatches
0
"watch"
1
"feel"
hedgeMatches
(empty)
100.0000%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
0
totalSentences
89
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
34
mean
34.65
std
17.84
cv
0.515
sampleLengths
0
90
1
62
2
50
3
59
4
19
5
25
6
15
7
65
8
35
9
49
10
36
11
44
12
13
13
58
14
52
15
31
16
20
17
14
18
28
19
43
20
12
21
32
22
44
23
18
24
30
25
33
26
22
27
13
28
24
29
20
30
27
31
22
32
31
33
42
100.0000%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤5% passive sentences
passiveCount
3
totalSentences
77
matches
0
"was blocked"
1
"was cornered"
2
"was determined"
100.0000%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
1
totalVerbs
167
matches
0
"was pushing"
94.0000%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
1048
adjectiveStacks
1
stackExamples
0
"old, dust-caked bookshelf"
adverbCount
27
adverbRatio
0.025763358778625955
lyAdverbCount
14
lyAdverbRatio
0.013358778625954198
100.0000%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
89
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
96.4765%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
89
mean
13.24
std
5.18
cv
0.391
sampleLengths
0
14
1
17
2
22
3
14
4
10
5
13
6
11
7
15
8
16
9
20
10
6
11
19
12
25
13
14
14
16
15
14
16
15
17
16
18
3
19
15
20
10
21
11
22
4
23
3
24
12
25
10
26
17
27
23
28
16
29
3
30
9
31
7
32
17
33
12
34
20
35
19
36
17
37
20
38
24
39
13
40
3
41
13
42
20
43
22
44
9
45
13
46
16
47
14
48
12
49
19
66.2921%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
6
diversityRatio
0.43820224719101125
totalSentences
89
uniqueOpeners
39
0.0000%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
8
fancyCount
7
fancyTags
0
"the vendor warned, a glint of hidden knowledge in his eyes (warn)"
1
"she said, voice edging a whisper (say, voice edging)"
2
"she swore under her breath and sprinted after him, an echo of footsteps signaling Tomás following (swear sprint follow)"
3
"he said, eyes shifting between Quinn and Tomás (say, shift)"
4
"Quinn spat, her breath coming hard (spit, come hard)"
5
"he said and lunged at the portal, disappearing in an instant (say lunge disappear)"
6
"Quinn muttered, eyes hard, her determination unravelling into frustration (mutter, eye hard, unravel)"
80.7903%