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Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMPCZGHQSJPS5P2A5STHD5D
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Model:
Mistral NeMO
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Fantasy: entering an ancient ruin
Duration:
5.0s
Cost:
$0.000372
Model input
System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
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Meta
AI
Rory, her heart pounding a staccato rhythm against her ribs, stepped into the Fae Grove.
The air was thick with
the scent of damp earth and blooming wildflowers, their colors vibrant even in the dappled twilight. She felt a prickle at the back of her neck, a sensation of being watched, but she pushed the unease aside. She was here for answers, and she wouldn't be deterred by her overactive imagination. Nyx, a living shadow at her side, shifted into a more solid form. Their violet eyes scanned the grove, the faint glow casting eerie shadows on the ancient oak standing stones that marked the boundary. "This place," they whispered, their voice like wind through leaves, "it's... alive." Isolde, the
ethereal
Half-Fae,
glided
ahead. Her silver hair caught the moonlight, and her pale lavender eyes reflected the luminescent flora. She left no footprints on the soft moss beneath her bare feet. "Welcome, mortals," she said, her voice a soft, melodic riddle. "Time moves differently here. An hour within can be minutes or days without." Rory glanced back at the standing stones, their rough surfaces
etched
with symbols she didn't recognize. She felt a
pang
of unease. They
were entering
uncharted territory, both literally and figuratively. But she had come this far, and she wouldn't turn back now. The grove was a
symphony
of alien beauty. Trees twisted into impossible shapes, their branches adorned with glowing flowers that cast an
otherworldly
light. The air hummed with a faint, constant melody, like the distant
echo
of a song only half-remembered. Rory felt a shiver run down her spine, a mix of awe and fear. Nyx, ever the cautious one, kept close. Their form
flickered
, shifting between solid and incorporeal. "This place... it reminds me of the spaces between realms," they murmured. "The silence, the stillness... it's unnatural." Rory nodded, her gaze fixed on Isolde's retreating form. "We should keep moving," she said, her voice
barely above a whisper
. "We don't know what's out here." They ventured deeper, the grove's song growing louder, more insistent. Rory felt it resonating within her, a pulse that matched her own heartbeat. She reached up, touching the Heartstone pendant at her throat. It pulsed faintly in response, warm against her skin. Suddenly, Isolde stopped. She turned, her pale eyes reflecting the luminescent flora. "Here," she said, her voice a soft riddle. "Here is what you seek." Rory stepped forward, her eyes widening as she took in the sight. A portal stood before them, its edges shimmering like the surface of a soap bubble. Beyond it, she could see a sprawling vineyard bathed in warm amber light. The air
was filled
with the scent of ripe fruit and the distant clamor of feasting. "The Veil is thin here," Nyx said, their voice barely audible. "This is a rift point. A tear in the barrier between realms." Rory reached out, her fingers brushing against the portal's edge. It was warm, like the summer sun, and it hummed with the same melody as the grove. She felt a pull, a tugging at her core that drew her towards the portal. "Dymas," she whispered, her voice barely audible. "The realm of Gluttony." Isolde nodded, her eyes never leaving Rory's. "Yes," she said, her voice a soft riddle. "But be warned, mortal. All who enter must pay the price." Rory hesitated, her hand still on the portal's edge. She thought of the stories she'd heard, the tales of those who had ventured into Hel and never returned. But she also thought of the answers she sought, the truth that lay beyond the portal. She took a deep breath, steeling herself. "I'll
take that risk
," she said, her voice steady. And with that, she stepped through the portal, leaving the Fae Grove and entering the realm of Hel.
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
0.0000%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
9
adverbTagCount
4
adverbTags
0
"she said, her voice a soft, melodic riddle [soft]"
1
"she said, her voice barely above a whisper [barely]"
2
"Nyx said, their voice barely audible [barely]"
3
"she whispered, her voice barely audible [barely]"
68.6028%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)
wordCount
637
totalAiIsmAdverbs
2
found
0
adverb
"suddenly"
count
1
1
adverb
"barely above a whisper"
count
1
highlights
0
"suddenly"
1
"barely above a whisper"
100.0000%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
0.0000%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)
wordCount
637
totalAiIsms
8
found
0
word
"ethereal"
count
1
1
word
"symphony"
count
1
2
word
"pang"
count
1
3
word
"flickered"
count
1
4
word
"glided"
count
1
5
word
"otherworldly"
count
1
6
word
"echo"
count
1
7
word
"etched"
count
1
highlights
0
"ethereal"
1
"symphony"
2
"pang"
3
"flickered"
4
"glided"
5
"otherworldly"
6
"echo"
7
"etched"
100.0000%
Cliche density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
1
maxInWindow
1
found
0
label
"air was thick with"
count
1
highlights
0
"The air was thick with"
100.0000%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
48
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Filter word density
Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
0
hedgeCount
0
narrationSentences
48
filterMatches
(empty)
hedgeMatches
(empty)
100.0000%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
1
totalSentences
55
matches
0
"take that risk"
64.8807%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
16
mean
39.69
std
14.97
cv
0.377
sampleLengths
0
71
1
47
2
56
3
43
4
55
5
33
6
27
7
42
8
25
9
56
10
23
11
42
12
11
13
26
14
44
15
34
100.0000%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤5% passive sentences
passiveCount
1
totalSentences
48
matches
0
"was filled"
100.0000%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
1
totalVerbs
94
matches
0
"were entering"
100.0000%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
548
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
19
adverbRatio
0.03467153284671533
lyAdverbCount
9
lyAdverbRatio
0.016423357664233577
100.0000%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
55
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
92.9295%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
55
mean
11.55
std
4.41
cv
0.382
sampleLengths
0
15
1
21
2
21
3
14
4
13
5
22
6
12
7
6
8
15
9
12
10
10
11
13
12
16
13
6
14
9
15
12
16
8
17
16
18
17
19
14
20
7
21
8
22
12
23
6
24
9
25
12
26
6
27
10
28
13
29
10
30
9
31
3
32
9
33
8
34
5
35
12
36
15
37
13
38
16
39
11
40
12
41
10
42
17
43
15
44
7
45
4
46
7
47
8
48
11
49
9
62.4242%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
4
diversityRatio
0.41818181818181815
totalSentences
55
uniqueOpeners
23
8.3333%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
9
fancyCount
6
fancyTags
0
"they whispered, their voice like wind through leaves (whisper)"
1
"she said, her voice a soft, melodic riddle (say, voice)"
2
"they murmured (murmur)"
3
"she said, her voice a soft riddle (say, voice)"
4
"she whispered, her voice barely audible (whisper)"
5
"she said, her voice a soft riddle (say, voice)"
76.3042%