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Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMPDD60Y0P34R8A5QTPCZTT
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Model:
Mistral NeMO
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Fantasy: entering an ancient ruin
Duration:
9.3s
Cost:
$0.000492
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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
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In the hushed embrace of Richmond Park, Rory, Nyx, and Isolde stood before the ancient oak standing stones, their gnarled roots stretching like welcoming arms. The air here was different, charged with a subtle energy that prickled Rory's skin. She glanced at Nyx, their violet eyes reflecting the dappled sunlight filtering through the canopy. The Shade's form
shimmered
, solidifying into a tall, humanoid figure, their cloak billowing despite the absence of wind. Isolde,
ethereal
and ageless, stepped forward. Her silver hair whispered around her like a waterfall of moonlight. "Welcome, mortals and shade, to the Fae Grove," she said, her voice a soft rustle of leaves. "Time moves differently here. Tread
carefully
." Rory nodded, her hand instinctively going to the Heartstone Pendant hanging around her neck. It pulsed faintly, warmth spreading from the deep crimson gemstone. Nyx noticed her movement, their gaze flicking to the pendant before returning to Rory's face. "Let us begin," Isolde said, leading them deeper into the grove. Wildflowers b
loomed
year-round, their colors vibrant and clashing, yet somehow harmonious. Bees hummed, their wings beating a steady rhythm against the quiet
symphony
of birdsong. As they ventured further, the air grew cooler, damp with the scent of earth and old magic. The standing stones
loomed
larger, their ancient faces carved with symbols that
seemed to
dance
at the edge of Rory's perception. She reached out to touch one, her fingers tracing the cool, rough surface.
A shiver ran down her spine
, not of fear, but of awe. Nyx drifted closer, their form
wavering
like a mirage. "These stones... they're not from this world," they murmured, their voice a whisper carried on the wind. "They're Fae-touched." Isolde glanced back, her pale lavender eyes
gleaming
. "Indeed," she said. "The Fae left them here as a marker, a doorway between realms." Rory's breath hitched as she noticed something moving among the shadows cast by the stones. She squinted, trying to make out the shape. It was small, no larger than a cat, with fur as black as Nyx's cloak. It darted between the stones, disappearing into the undergrowth. "What
was that?" she
asked, her voice
barely above a whisper
. Nyx's form solidified, their gaze following the creature's path. "A shadowling," they said. "A creature of the spaces between realms. They're harmless, usually curious." Rory
let out a breath
she hadn't realized she'd been holding. She followed Isolde and Nyx deeper into the grove, her heart pounding with a mix of unease and exhilaration. The grove opened up into a clearing, and Rory gasped. Before them stood a tree unlike any she'd ever seen. Its trunk twisted like a serpent, its bark shimmering like metal. Its branches str
etched
wide, leaves of iridescent green rustling
softly
, casting dappled light onto the mossy ground. "The World Tree," Isolde said, her voice filled with reverence. "The heart of the Fae Grove." Rory approached the tree, her
footsteps
silent on the soft moss. She reached out, her fingers brushing against the cool, smooth bark. It hummed under her touch, a vibration that
resonated
deep within her chest. She felt a sudden,
profound
connection to everything around her - the grove, the tree, the creatures hidden in the undergrowth. It was overwhelming, yet comforting. Nyx joined her, their form flickering as they reached out to touch the tree. "It's alive," they said, wonder coloring their voice. "Not just alive... aware." A sudden chill swept through the grove, and the leaves of the World Tree rustled loudly, their iridescence dimming. Rory's breath misted in the air, and she rubbed her arms, trying to ward off the sudden cold. Isolde turned to them, her expression grave. "We've lingered too long," she said. "The grove is reacting to our presence. We should leave." Rory nodded, her gaze lingering on the World Tree. As they turned to leave, she noticed something
glinting
at the base of the tree. She bent down, her fingers closing around a small, cold object. It was a dagger, its blade slender and leaf-shaped, made of a material she'd never seen before. It glowed faintly in the dim light, like moonlight captured in metal. "Rory," Nyx warned, their voice a low growl. "We should go." Rory hesitated, then tucked the dagger into her belt. "I'll just be a moment," she said, her eyes fixed on the tree. She felt a strange pull, a tugging at the edges of her consciousness. She reached out, her fingers brushing against the bark again. This time, she felt something - a pulse, a beat, like a heartbeat. It
echo
ed through her, resonating with the Heartstone Pendant. Suddenly, the grove
seemed to
hold its breath. The rustling leaves stilled, the birdsong fell silent. Then, as if released from an invisible hold, the grove erupted into chaos. The temperature plummeted, and the World Tree's branches whipped wildly, its leaves scattering like confetti. Rory stumbled back, her heart pounding in her chest. Nyx was by her side in an instant, their form solid, their hand gripping her arm. "Rory, we need to go. Now." Isolde was already moving, her silver hair billowing behind her like a banner. Rory followed, her breath coming in short, sharp gasps. They ran through the grove, the ancient oak standing stones
looming
like silent
sentinels
. The Heartstone Pendant pulsed against her skin, its warmth a
beacon
in the sudden cold. As they reached the edge of the grove, Rory glanced back. The World Tree stood tall, its branches still, its leaves glowing
softly
. The grove was quiet again, as if nothing had happened. But Rory knew better. She could still feel the
echo
of the tree's heartbeat, the cold of its anger. They stepped out of the grove, the air around them shifting, warming. Rory leaned against a tree, her breath coming in ragged gasps. Nyx stood beside her, their form flickering as they watched her, concern
etched
on their shadowy face. Isolde turned to them, her pale lavender eyes serious. "The grove does not take kindly to trespassers," she said. "Especially those who take without asking." Rory reached up, her fingers closing around the Fae-Forged Blade at her belt. She felt
a pang of guilt
, of unease. She had taken something from the grove, from the World Tree. She had taken something that wasn't hers to take. "I'm sorry," she said, her voice
barely above a whisper
. "I didn't mean to cause any harm." Isolde's expression softened. "Apologies are not enough, Rory Carter," she said. "But perhaps, in time, the grove will forgive you. Until then, be careful with the blade. It is a gift, yes, but it is also a responsibility." Rory nodded, her gaze fixed on the blade. She felt a sudden,
profound
sense of purpose, of duty. She would protect this blade, she vowed. She would use it to protect those she cared about. As they left the Fae Grove, Rory couldn't shake the feeling of unease. She had experienced something wondrous, something
otherworldly
. She had felt the pulse of ancient magic, the heartbeat of a tree that was more than just a tree. She had taken something from it, something powerful. And she knew, with a certainty that filled her with both excitement and dread, that her life would never be the same.
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.0000%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
14
adverbTagCount
1
adverbTags
0
"she said, her voice barely above a whisper [barely]"
50.4950%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)
wordCount
1212
totalAiIsmAdverbs
6
found
0
adverb
"carefully"
count
1
1
adverb
"softly"
count
2
2
adverb
"suddenly"
count
1
3
adverb
"barely above a whisper"
count
2
highlights
0
"carefully"
1
"softly"
2
"suddenly"
3
"barely above a whisper"
100.0000%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
0.0000%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)
wordCount
1212
totalAiIsms
20
found
0
word
"ethereal"
count
1
1
word
"symphony"
count
1
2
word
"beacon"
count
1
3
word
"sentinels"
count
1
4
word
"pang"
count
1
5
word
"resonated"
count
1
6
word
"shimmered"
count
1
7
word
"gleaming"
count
1
8
word
"glinting"
count
1
9
word
"wavering"
count
1
10
word
"otherworldly"
count
1
11
word
"loomed"
count
1
12
word
"looming"
count
1
13
word
"profound"
count
2
14
word
"dance"
count
1
15
word
"footsteps"
count
1
16
word
"echo"
count
1
17
word
"echoed"
count
1
18
word
"etched"
count
1
highlights
0
"ethereal"
1
"symphony"
2
"beacon"
3
"sentinels"
4
"pang"
5
"resonated"
6
"shimmered"
7
"gleaming"
8
"glinting"
9
"wavering"
10
"otherworldly"
11
"loomed"
12
"looming"
13
"profound"
14
"dance"
15
"footsteps"
16
"echo"
17
"echoed"
18
"etched"
66.6667%
Cliche density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
2
maxInWindow
2
found
0
label
"shiver down spine"
count
1
1
label
"let out a breath"
count
1
highlights
0
"A shiver ran down her spine"
1
"let out a breath"
100.0000%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
1
narrationSentences
94
matches
0
"a pang of guilt"
100.0000%
Filter word density
Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
0
hedgeCount
2
narrationSentences
94
filterMatches
(empty)
hedgeMatches
0
"seemed to"
100.0000%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
1
totalSentences
106
matches
0
"was that?\" she"
84.4924%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
31
mean
39.03
std
17.4
cv
0.446
sampleLengths
0
72
1
40
2
39
3
36
4
63
5
28
6
23
7
47
8
11
9
24
10
30
11
48
12
16
13
61
14
26
15
37
16
23
17
64
18
11
19
67
20
53
21
22
22
51
23
52
24
40
25
25
26
41
27
17
28
38
29
35
30
70
100.0000%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤5% passive sentences
passiveCount
0
totalSentences
94
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
0
totalVerbs
193
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
1056
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
34
adverbRatio
0.032196969696969696
lyAdverbCount
11
lyAdverbRatio
0.010416666666666666
100.0000%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
106
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.0000%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
106
mean
11.42
std
4.69
cv
0.411
sampleLengths
0
25
1
14
2
15
3
18
4
6
5
11
6
17
7
6
8
14
9
10
10
15
11
11
12
11
13
14
14
17
15
21
16
13
17
12
18
9
19
17
20
2
21
8
22
3
23
12
24
15
25
8
26
15
27
9
28
11
29
9
30
4
31
11
32
11
33
19
34
10
35
10
36
11
37
17
38
10
39
6
40
11
41
11
42
13
43
21
44
5
45
14
46
8
47
4
48
19
49
18
36.7925%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
14
diversityRatio
0.29245283018867924
totalSentences
106
uniqueOpeners
31
50.0000%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
14
fancyCount
7
fancyTags
0
"she said, her voice a soft rustle of leaves (say, voice)"
1
"Isolde said, leading them deeper into the grove (say, lead)"
2
"they murmured, their voice a whisper carried on the wind (murmur, carry on)"
3
"Isolde said, her voice filled with reverence (say, fill)"
4
"they said, wonder coloring their voice (say, coloring)"
5
"Nyx warned, their voice a low growl (warn)"
6
"she said, her eyes fixed on the tree (say, fix)"
81.6733%