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Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMPDJ49AAKYBAKZNZKZVB9Z
Run Details
Model:
GPT-4o Mini (temp=0)
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Fantasy: entering an ancient ruin
Duration:
34.1s
Cost:
$0.001282
Model input
System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
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AI
The air
shimmered
with a faint, iridescent glow as Aurora Carter stepped through the ancient oak standing stones, her heart racing with a mix of
trepidation
and exhilaration. The grove unfolded before her like a dream, a hidden
sanctuary
that felt both familiar and
utterly
alien. The wildflowers, vibrant and lush, carpeted the ground in a riot of colors, their petals
glistening
with dew that sparkled like tiny stars. She could hear the soft rustle of leaves, a whispering chorus that
seemed to
beckon her deeper into the grove. “Isolde’s grove,” she murmured, glancing back at her companions. Nyx, the Shade, drifted beside her, their form a fluid silhouette that
flickered
in and out of solidity. Their faintly glowing violet eyes surveyed the surroundings with an inscrutable expression, as if they were both part of the shadows and apart from them. “Time moves differently here,” Nyx whispered, their voice like a breeze through the trees. “We must tread
carefully
.” Rory nodded, her fingers brushing against the Heartstone Pendant that hung around her neck, its deep crimson glow pulsing
gently
in response to the grove’s energy. She felt a warmth radiating from it, a connection to something greater, something that thrummed beneath the surface of this enchanted place. “Do you think Isolde will be here?” she asked, her voice
barely above a whisper
. “Where else would she be?” Nyx replied, their tone teasing yet serious. “She is bound to this realm, as we are bound to our own.” As they ventured further, the trees grew taller, their trunks gnarled and twisted, as if they had witnessed centuries of secrets. The air thickened with the scent of blooming flowers and damp earth, a heady perfume that made Rory’s senses tingle. She could hear the distant sound of water, a gentle trickle that
seemed to
weave through the grove like a melody. “Listen,” she said, halting in her tracks. “Do you hear that?” Nyx paused, their form solidifying as they focused on the sound. “A stream, perhaps. Or a fountain. The Fae are known for their trickery; it could be a lure.” Rory felt a shiver of unease crawl up her spine, but curiosity propelled her forward. “Let’s find out.” They followed the sound, weaving through the trees until they emerged into a small clearing. In the center, a
crystalline
pool
shimmered
under the dappled sunlight, its surface reflecting the vibrant colors of the surrounding flora. The water was impossibly clear, revealing smooth stones at the bottom and delicate fish darting beneath the surface. “Beautiful,” Rory breathed, stepping closer. She knelt at the edge, mesmerized by the way the light danced on the water. “It’s like something out of a fairy tale.” Nyx drifted beside her, their shadowy form contrasting
sharply
with the brilliance of the grove. “Beauty often conceals danger,” they cautioned, their voice a soft murmur. “We must remain vigilant.” Rory nodded, but her gaze remained fixed on the pool. She reached out, her fingers just brushing the surface, and the water rippled in response, sending out concentric circles that distorted the reflection of the trees above. For a moment, she thought she saw a figure beneath the water, a fleeting glimpse of something
ethereal
and
otherworldly
, but it vanished as
quickly
as it had appeared. “Did you
see that?” she
asked, her heart racing. Nyx leaned closer, their eyes narrowing. “What did you see?” “I don’t know,” Rory admitted, pulling her hand back. “It was just… a flash. Like a face.” “Perhaps a spirit of the grove,” Nyx suggested, their tone thoughtful. “Or a trick of the light.” Before Rory could respond, a soft rustling
echoed
from the trees behind them. She turned, her heart pounding, and caught sight of a figure emerging from the shadows. It was Isolde Varga, the Half-Fae seer, her silver hair
cascading
like a waterfall down her back. She moved with an
ethereal
grace, her pale lavender eyes glimmering with ancient wisdom. “Welcome, seekers,” Isolde spoke, her voice melodic and haunting. “You have found the heart of the grove.” Rory felt
a rush of relief
mixed with awe. “Isolde,” she breathed, standing to greet the seer. “We’ve come to seek your guidance.” Isolde smiled, though it was a smile that held secrets. “Guidance is a fickle thing, dear child. What you seek may not be what you find.” Nyx stepped forward, their form shifting
slightly
as they regarded Isolde with a mixture of respect and curiosity. “We seek knowledge of the Veil, and the rifts that threaten to tear it apart.” Isolde’s expression grew serious, her eyes narrowing as she considered their request. “The Veil is a fragile barrier, weakened by the passage of time and the greed of mortals. It is a
tapestry
woven with threads of fate, and each thread pulled can
unravel
the whole.” Rory felt a chill run down her spine. “What can we do?” “Listen to the whispers of the grove,” Isolde replied, gesturing to the wildflowers that swayed
gently
in the breeze. “They hold the memories of those who have come before. But beware, for not all whispers are meant for mortal ears.” As she spoke, the air around them thickened, and Rory felt a strange sensation, as if the
very
fabric of reality
was shifting
. The colors of the grove deepened, the flowers swaying more vigorously, and the sound of the stream grew louder, almost overwhelming. “Isolde, what’s happening?” Rory asked, her voice rising in panic. “Stay calm,” Isolde instructed, her voice steady. “The grove is responding to your presence. It senses your intentions.” Suddenly, the ground beneath them
trembled
, and a low rumble
echoed
through the trees. Rory stumbled, grasping for balance, while Nyx’s form
flickered
, their shadowy edges blurring. “Something is coming,” Nyx warned, their voice urgent. “We must—” Before they could react, a figure emerged from the shadows, a dark silhouette that
loomed
larger than life. It stepped into the clearing, revealing a creature of nightmares, its eyes glowing with a malevolent hunger. “Foolish mortals,” it hissed, its voice a guttural growl. “You dare to tread where you do not belong?” Rory’s heart raced as she instinctively reached for the Fae-Forged Blade at her side, its cold touch grounding her in the chaos. “We mean no harm!” she shouted, her voice steady despite the fear coursing through her veins. “We seek only knowledge!” The creature laughed, a sound that sent chills down her spine. “Knowledge comes at a price, little one. Are you willing to pay?” Isolde stepped forward, her presence commanding. “Leave this place, creature. You have no power here.” The creature hesitated, its eyes narrowing as it regarded the seer. “Very well, but know this: the Veil will not hold forever. The rifts will widen, and chaos will reign.” With that, it melted back into the shadows, leaving the grove in an uneasy silence. Rory exhaled, her heart still racing as she turned to Isolde. “What
was that?” she
asked, her voice trembling. “A harbinger of the darkness that encroaches upon us,” Isolde replied, her expression grave. “You must be prepared, for the path ahead is fraught with peril.” Rory nodded, determination igniting within her. She glanced at Nyx, who had solidified once more, their violet eyes reflecting the
weight
of their shared burden. “We will be ready,” Rory vowed, gripping the Fae-Forged Blade
tightly
. “Whatever it takes.” As they stood in the grove, the wildflowers swaying
gently
around them, Rory felt the pulse of the Heartstone Pendant against her chest, a reminder of the power they wielded and the journey that lay ahead. The grove, with its secrets and wonders, had opened its arms to them, but it also held shadows that whispered of challenges yet to come. And together, they would face whatever awaited them beyond the shimmering veil.
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
85.7143%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
21
adverbTagCount
3
adverbTags
0
"she murmured, glancing back at her companions [back]"
1
"Isolde replied, gesturing to the wildflowers that swayed gently in the breeze [gently]"
2
"Rory vowed, gripping the Fae-Forged Blade tightly [tightly]"
0.0769%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)
wordCount
1301
totalAiIsmAdverbs
13
found
0
adverb
"carefully"
count
1
1
adverb
"gently"
count
3
2
adverb
"quickly"
count
1
3
adverb
"sharply"
count
1
4
adverb
"slightly"
count
1
5
adverb
"suddenly"
count
1
6
adverb
"tightly"
count
1
7
adverb
"utterly"
count
1
8
adverb
"barely above a whisper"
count
1
9
adverb
"very"
count
2
highlights
0
"carefully"
1
"gently"
2
"quickly"
3
"sharply"
4
"slightly"
5
"suddenly"
6
"tightly"
7
"utterly"
8
"barely above a whisper"
9
"very"
100.0000%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
0.0000%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)
wordCount
1301
totalAiIsms
19
found
0
word
"ethereal"
count
2
1
word
"crystalline"
count
1
2
word
"tapestry"
count
1
3
word
"sanctuary"
count
1
4
word
"flickered"
count
2
5
word
"shimmered"
count
2
6
word
"glistening"
count
1
7
word
"cascading"
count
1
8
word
"trembled"
count
1
9
word
"otherworldly"
count
1
10
word
"loomed"
count
1
11
word
"trepidation"
count
1
12
word
"weight"
count
1
13
word
"echoed"
count
2
14
word
"unravel"
count
1
highlights
0
"ethereal"
1
"crystalline"
2
"tapestry"
3
"sanctuary"
4
"flickered"
5
"shimmered"
6
"glistening"
7
"cascading"
8
"trembled"
9
"otherworldly"
10
"loomed"
11
"trepidation"
12
"weight"
13
"echoed"
14
"unravel"
100.0000%
Cliche density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
0
maxInWindow
0
found
(empty)
highlights
(empty)
100.0000%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
1
narrationSentences
69
matches
0
"a rush of relief"
100.0000%
Filter word density
Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
0
hedgeCount
2
narrationSentences
69
filterMatches
(empty)
hedgeMatches
0
"seemed to"
100.0000%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
2
totalSentences
95
matches
0
"see that?” she"
1
"was that?” she"
100.0000%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
43
mean
30.19
std
18.93
cv
0.627
sampleLengths
0
89
1
52
2
18
3
48
4
15
5
25
6
62
7
11
8
29
9
18
10
54
11
28
12
30
13
66
14
9
15
10
16
17
17
17
18
59
19
17
20
23
21
26
22
33
23
46
24
12
25
40
26
44
27
10
28
18
29
27
30
10
31
35
32
18
33
42
34
23
35
15
36
30
37
26
38
8
39
26
40
25
41
14
42
73
100.0000%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤5% passive sentences
passiveCount
0
totalSentences
69
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
1
totalVerbs
176
matches
0
"was shifting"
94.0000%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
967
adjectiveStacks
1
stackExamples
0
"clear, revealing smooth stones"
adverbCount
30
adverbRatio
0.031023784901758014
lyAdverbCount
15
lyAdverbRatio
0.015511892450879007
100.0000%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
95
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.0000%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
95
mean
13.66
std
7.06
cv
0.517
sampleLengths
0
28
1
18
2
23
3
20
4
9
5
18
6
25
7
14
8
4
9
26
10
22
11
15
12
12
13
13
14
21
15
20
16
21
17
7
18
4
19
11
20
18
21
15
22
3
23
15
24
21
25
18
26
5
27
15
28
8
29
15
30
11
31
4
32
10
33
27
34
29
35
9
36
6
37
4
38
9
39
8
40
11
41
6
42
13
43
15
44
17
45
14
46
9
47
8
48
9
49
8
65.2632%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
3
diversityRatio
0.4105263157894737
totalSentences
95
uniqueOpeners
39
0.0000%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
21
fancyCount
15
fancyTags
0
"she murmured, glancing back at her companions (murmur, glance)"
1
"Nyx whispered, their voice like a breeze through the trees (whisper, like)"
2
"she said, halting in her tracks (say, halt)"
3
"Rory breathed, stepping closer (breathe, step)"
4
"they cautioned, their voice a soft murmur (caution)"
5
"Rory admitted, pulling her hand back (admit, pull)"
6
"Nyx suggested, their tone thoughtful (suggest)"
7
"Isolde spoke, her voice melodic and haunting (speak)"
8
"she breathed, standing to greet the seer (breathe, stand greet)"
9
"Isolde replied, gesturing to the wildflowers that swayed gently in the breeze (reply, gesture sway gently)"
10
"Isolde instructed, her voice steady (instruct)"
11
"Nyx warned, their voice urgent (warn)"
12
"it hissed, its voice a guttural growl (hiss)"
13
"shouted (shout)"
14
"Rory vowed, gripping the Fae-Forged Blade tightly (vow, grip)"
79.1208%