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Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMPDK5SMWJPFVVNPQNKDQ9R
Run Details
Model:
GPT-4o Mini (temp=0)
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Fantasy: entering an ancient ruin
Duration:
32.7s
Cost:
$0.001137
Model input
System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
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Meta
AI
The air
shimmered
with a faint, iridescent glow as Aurora Carter stepped through the ancient oak standing stones, her heart racing with a mix of
trepidation
and exhilaration. The grove unfolded before her like a dream, a hidden
sanctuary
that felt both familiar and
utterly
alien. The wildflowers, vibrant and lush, carpeted the ground in a riot of colors, their petals
glistening
with dew that sparkled like tiny stars. She could hear the soft rustle of leaves, a whispering chorus that
seemed to
beckon her deeper into the grove. “Isolde’s grove,” she murmured, glancing back at her companions. Nyx, the Shade, hovered just behind her, their silhouette a dark contrast against the
kaleidoscope
of colors. The faintly glowing violet of their eyes
flickered
with curiosity, reflecting the wonder of the place. Beside them, Eva, her childhood friend, stepped forward, her eyes wide with awe.
The air was thick with
magic, a
palpable
energy that thrummed beneath their feet. “Do you
feel that?” Eva
breathed, her voice
barely above a whisper
. “It’s like the air is alive.” Aurora nodded, her fingers brushing against the Heartstone Pendant that hung around her neck. It pulsed
gently
, a warm reminder of the unknown benefactor who had gifted it to her. She had no idea what it
truly
meant, but in this place, it felt like a key to something greater. The pendant’s warmth
seemed to
resonate with the grove, as if it recognized the magic that thrived here. As they ventured further, the trees
loomed
tall and ancient, their gnarled branches twisting toward the sky like the fingers of forgotten giants. Sunlight filtered through the leaves, casting dappled shadows on the ground, and the air
was filled
with the sweet scent of blooming flowers mingled with something earthy and rich. Aurora inhaled deeply, letting the fragrance wash over her, grounding her in the moment. “Look at that!” Eva exclaimed, pointing toward a cluster of trees where the bark
shimmered
with a silvery sheen. Aurora followed her gaze, her breath catching in her throat. The trees were unlike any she had ever seen, their trunks adorned with
intricate
patterns that
seemed to
shift and change as they moved. It was as if the trees were alive, telling stories of ages past. Nyx drifted closer, their form flickering like a candle flame. “These trees are ancient,” they whispered, their voice a soft caress in the wind. “They hold the memories of this grove, the
echoes
of those who have walked here before.” Aurora felt a shiver run down her spine. The grove was a
tapestry
of history, woven with threads of magic and time. She could almost hear the whispers of the past, the laughter of those who had come seeking Isolde’s prophecies. But there was something else, a lingering unease that curled at the edges of her mind. She glanced at Nyx, who
seemed to
sense her discomfort. “Stay close,” they murmured, their voice a soothing balm. “The grove is a
sanctuary
, but it is also a place of power. We must tread
carefully
.” As they moved deeper, the flora shifted, becoming more exotic and
otherworldly
. Flowers with luminescent petals opened and closed in a slow, rhythmic
dance
, their colors shifting from deep indigo to bright gold. Aurora reached out to touch one, and as her fingers brushed against the soft petals, a jolt of energy surged through her, leaving her breathless. “Did you
see that?” she
gasped, pulling her hand back. “It felt like… like it was alive.” Eva laughed, her eyes sparkling with delight. “Of course it is! This is the Fae Grove, Rory. Everything here is alive in ways we can’t even begin to understand.” But as they continued, the atmosphere shifted. The air grew heavier, thick with an unnameable tension. Aurora’s heart raced, and she exchanged a glance with Nyx, who had grown still, their form solidifying as they scanned the surroundings. The shadows deepened, and the once inviting grove now felt like a labyrinth of secrets. “Something’s not right,” Aurora said, her voice low. “I can feel it.” Nyx nodded, their violet eyes narrowing. “The Veil is thin here. We must be cautious. There are rifts that can lead to places we do not wish to go.” Just then, a soft rustling
echoed
through the trees, drawing their attention. Aurora turned, her pulse quickening as she caught sight of a figure emerging from the shadows. It was Isolde Varga, the Half-Fae seer, her silver hair
cascading
like a waterfall down her back. She moved with an
ethereal
grace, her pale lavender eyes shimmering with ancient wisdom. “Welcome, seekers,” Isolde spoke, her voice melodic yet laced with riddles. “You have come to the heart of the grove, where time bends and the past intertwines with the present.” Aurora felt a mix of relief and
apprehension
. “Isolde,” she said, stepping forward. “We seek your gui
dance
.” The seer smiled, a knowing
glint
in her eyes. “Gui
dance
comes at a price, dear one. What is it you wish to know?” Before Aurora could respond, a sudden chill swept through the grove, causing the flowers to tremble. The shadows deepened, and a low growl
reverberated
through the air, sending a shiver down her spine. Nyx’s form
flickered
, their voice urgent. “We must leave. Now.” Isolde’s expression shifted, her gaze piercing. “The grove is a
sanctuary
, but it is also a battleground. The rifts are restless, and something stirs within the shadows.” Aurora’s heart raced as she turned to Eva, who looked equally alarmed. “What do we do?” she asked, her voice trembling. “Follow me,” Nyx commanded, their silhouette shifting as they led the way back toward the standing stones. The air crackled with tension, and Aurora could feel the
weight
of unseen eyes watching them from the depths of the grove. As they retraced their steps, the once vibrant colors of the flowers dulled, and the whispers of the trees grew frantic, as if warning them of the encroaching darkness. Aurora clutched the Heartstone Pendant, its warmth a small comfort against the chill that enveloped them. “Stay close,” Nyx urged, their voice
barely above a whisper
. “Do not stray from the path.” The shadows
seemed to
stretch and twist, reaching for them as they hurried through the grove. Aurora’s breath quickened, and she could feel the pulse of magic thrumming in the air, a chaotic energy that threatened to overwhelm her senses. The standing stones
loomed
ahead, a
beacon
of safety, but the growl
echoed
again, closer this time, a primal sound that sent
a jolt of fear
through her. With one final push, they burst through the standing stones, the grove’s magic receding behind them like a tide. Aurora stumbled, her heart racing as she turned to look back. The trees stood silent, their secrets hidden once more, but the sense of unease lingered, a reminder of the power that lay just beyond the Veil. “Isolde,” she called, but the grove remained still, the whispers fading into the distance. The world outside felt
stark
and cold, a sharp contrast to the warmth of the grove. Aurora took a deep breath, grounding herself in the moment, but the thrill of discovery
was tinged
with the knowledge that they had only scratched the surface of the mysteries that lay within. “Let’s go,” Nyx said, their voice steady. “We have much to discuss, and the shadows are not far behind.” As they turned to leave, Aurora felt the
weight
of the Heartstone Pendant against her chest, a reminder of the journey ahead. The grove had revealed its wonders, but it had also shown her the darkness that lurked just beyond the light. And she knew, deep down, that this was only the beginning.
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
82.0513%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
13
adverbTagCount
2
adverbTags
0
"she murmured, glancing back at her companions [back]"
1
"Nyx urged, their voice barely above a whisper [barely]"
53.3800%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)
wordCount
1287
totalAiIsmAdverbs
6
found
0
adverb
"carefully"
count
1
1
adverb
"gently"
count
1
2
adverb
"utterly"
count
1
3
adverb
"barely above a whisper"
count
2
4
adverb
"truly"
count
1
highlights
0
"carefully"
1
"gently"
2
"utterly"
3
"barely above a whisper"
4
"truly"
100.0000%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
0.0000%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)
wordCount
1287
totalAiIsms
30
found
0
word
"palpable"
count
1
1
word
"ethereal"
count
1
2
word
"tapestry"
count
1
3
word
"beacon"
count
1
4
word
"sanctuary"
count
3
5
word
"tinged"
count
1
6
word
"reverberated"
count
1
7
word
"flickered"
count
2
8
word
"shimmered"
count
2
9
word
"glistening"
count
1
10
word
"glint"
count
1
11
word
"cascading"
count
1
12
word
"otherworldly"
count
1
13
word
"loomed"
count
2
14
word
"intricate"
count
1
15
word
"stark"
count
1
16
word
"trepidation"
count
1
17
word
"apprehension"
count
1
18
word
"weight"
count
2
19
word
"dance"
count
1
20
word
"echoed"
count
2
21
word
"echoes"
count
1
22
word
"kaleidoscope"
count
1
highlights
0
"palpable"
1
"ethereal"
2
"tapestry"
3
"beacon"
4
"sanctuary"
5
"tinged"
6
"reverberated"
7
"flickered"
8
"shimmered"
9
"glistening"
10
"glint"
11
"cascading"
12
"otherworldly"
13
"loomed"
14
"intricate"
15
"stark"
16
"trepidation"
17
"apprehension"
18
"weight"
19
"dance"
20
"echoed"
21
"echoes"
22
"kaleidoscope"
100.0000%
Cliche density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
1
maxInWindow
1
found
0
label
"air was thick with"
count
1
highlights
0
"The air was thick with"
100.0000%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
1
narrationSentences
72
matches
0
"a jolt of fear"
100.0000%
Filter word density
Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
0
hedgeCount
5
narrationSentences
72
filterMatches
(empty)
hedgeMatches
0
"seemed to"
100.0000%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
2
totalSentences
86
matches
0
"feel that?” Eva"
1
"see that?” she"
96.8866%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
30
mean
42.87
std
20.97
cv
0.489
sampleLengths
0
89
1
69
2
18
3
68
4
66
5
66
6
40
7
67
8
26
9
58
10
17
11
29
12
53
13
12
14
29
15
59
16
30
17
17
18
23
19
43
20
27
21
21
22
39
23
45
24
16
25
68
26
56
27
63
28
19
29
53
100.0000%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤5% passive sentences
passiveCount
2
totalSentences
72
matches
0
"was filled"
1
"was tinged"
100.0000%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
0
totalVerbs
186
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
1076
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
33
adverbRatio
0.03066914498141264
lyAdverbCount
11
lyAdverbRatio
0.010223048327137546
100.0000%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
86
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.0000%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
86
mean
14.95
std
6.62
cv
0.443
sampleLengths
0
28
1
18
2
23
3
20
4
9
5
17
6
16
7
13
8
14
9
12
10
6
11
14
12
16
13
20
14
18
15
23
16
29
17
14
18
19
19
10
20
24
21
13
22
10
23
14
24
16
25
8
26
14
27
19
28
16
29
10
30
9
31
17
32
12
33
21
34
25
35
10
36
7
37
7
38
22
39
7
40
9
41
22
42
15
43
8
44
4
45
6
46
23
47
12
48
16
49
17
59.6899%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
2
diversityRatio
0.37209302325581395
totalSentences
86
uniqueOpeners
32
0.0000%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
13
fancyCount
10
fancyTags
0
"she murmured, glancing back at her companions (murmur, glance)"
1
"exclaimed (exclaim)"
2
"they whispered, their voice a soft caress in the wind (whisper)"
3
"they murmured, their voice a soothing balm (murmur)"
4
"gasped (gasp)"
5
"Isolde spoke, her voice melodic yet laced with riddles (speak, lace)"
6
"she said, stepping forward (say, step)"
7
"Nyx commanded, their silhouette shifting as they led the way back toward the standing stones (command, shift lead)"
8
"Nyx urged, their voice barely above a whisper (urge)"
9
"she called, but the grove remained still, the whispers fading into the distance (call, remain fade)"
81.8828%