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Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMPDZ67RPSKWB364879M5SQ
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Model:
Mistral NeMO
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Thriller: chase through city streets
Duration:
34.3s
Cost:
$0.000385
Model input
System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
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Meta
AI
In the heart of London, rain slashed down like silver needles, turning the city into a slick,
glistening
beast. Detective Harlow Quinn, her salt-and-pepper hair darkened by the downpour, pursued her suspect through the labyrinthine streets of Soho. The man, Tomás Herrera, darted around corners, his olive skin a
stark
contrast against the neon lights reflecting off the wet cobblestones. Quinn's breath misted in the chilly air, her worn leather
watch
ticking away the seconds on her left wrist. She wasn't about to lose him, not again. Quinn's sharp jaw was set, her brown
eyes narrowed
against the rain. She'd been chasing Herrera for blocks, ever since he'd bolted from The Raven's Nest, Silas' bar, where she'd been waiting for him. The bar's distinctive green neon sign had been a
beacon
in the storm, but now it was just a distant glow, swallowed by the night. She could still see Herrera, though, his dark form weaving through the crowds, his Saint Christopher medallion
glinting
under the streetlamps. Herrera
suddenly
veered left, disappearing down a narrow alley. Quinn pushed herself harder, her military precision driving her forward. She rounded the corner, her shoes slipping on the wet ground. The alley was a dead end, but Herrera was nowhere to be seen. Then she noticed the grate, half-hidden in the shadows. It was open, revealing a dark hole leading downwards. Quinn hesitated, her heart pounding in her chest. She'd heard rumors about the Veil Market, the supernatural black market that operated beneath the city. It
was said
to move locations e
very
full moon, and tonight, the moon was full. She glanced back at the street, then down at the gaping hole. Herrera was her key to the clique, to understanding what had
happened to
her partner, DS Morris. She couldn't let him slip away. She holstered her gun, grabbed the edge of the grate, and swung herself down into the darkness. Her feet hit the cold, damp ground, and she found herself in a tunnel, the air heavy with the scent of earth and something else, something acrid and unfamiliar. She could hear Herrera's
footsteps
echoing
ahead, and she set off after him, her flashlight cutting through the gloom. The tunnel opened up into a vast cavern, and Quinn found herself staring at the Veil Market. It was like nothing she'd ever seen. Stalls made of bone and shadow sold e
very
thing from glowing potions to cages filled with writhing,
otherworldly
creatures. The air hummed with energy, and the chatter of the market-goers filled the space, a
cacophony
of languages and voices that grated against her ears. Quinn spotted Herrera up ahead, weaving through the crowd. She followed, her heart pounding in her chest. She was out of her depth, but she couldn't stop now. Not when she was so close. Herrera
suddenly
turned, disappearing behind a stall. Quinn quickened her pace, pushing past a group of hooded figures. She rounded the stall, her breath catching in her throat. Herrera
was gone
, but there was a door set into the rock face, a bone token inserted into a slot above the handle. She reached out, her fingers brushing the token. It was warm to the touch, pulsing with an
otherworldly
energy. She looked around, her heart pounding. She could hear voices on the other side of the door, low and urgent. She could turn back, leave the market, forget she'd ever seen this place. But she thought of Morris, of the empty space in her life where he'd once been. She thought of the clique, of the secrets they hid. She couldn't turn back now. Quinn took a deep breath, pulled the bone token from the slot, and pushed open the door. The voices stopped, and she found herself in a small, dimly lit room. Herrera was there, along with two other men, their faces hard and cold. They were all looking at her, surprise
etched
on their faces. "Detective Quinn," Herrera said, his voice
barely above a whisper
. "What are you doing here?" Quinn looked around the room, her eyes landing on a table in the corner. It was covered with files, photographs, evidence. Evidence of the clique, of their activities. She felt a thrill of triumph, but it was short-lived. She
was outnumbered
, and she was in their territory. "I could ask you the same thing, Herrera," she said, her voice steady despite the fear coiling in her stomach. "But I think I already know the answer." Herrera sighed, running a hand through his short curly hair. "I'm afraid you do, Detective. And I'm afraid you've made a
very
big mistake." Quinn's hand inched towards her gun, but she knew it was too late. She'd made her choice, and now she had to face the consequences. But she
wasn't going
down without a fight. Not again. Not ever again. The room was silent, the tension
palpable
. Then,
suddenly
, one of the men lunged at her, his face contorted with rage. Quinn reacted instinctively, her training kicking in. She dodged his attack, her hand finally reaching her gun. She fired, the sound
echoing
loudly in the small room. The man fell to the ground, clutching his leg, a look of shock on his face. Herrera and the other man exchanged a look, then turned to face her. Quinn backed up, her gun trained on them, her heart pounding in her chest. She
was outnumbered
, but she wasn't outmatched. Not yet. "Stay back," she warned, her voice steady despite the fear coursing through her veins. "I don't want to hurt anyone else, but I will if I have to." Herrera held up his hands, a sad smile on his face. "I believe you, Detective. But I'm afraid it's too late for that." Quinn felt a chill run down her spine,
a sense of unease
settling over her. She looked around the room, her eyes landing on a mirror in the corner. She could see her reflection, but it was distorted, warped. And behind her, in the reflection, she could see a figure, a figure that wasn't there. She spun around, her gun raised, but it was too late. The figure was already on her, its hands cold and clammy as they closed around her throat. She struggled, kicking and punching, but it was like fighting smoke. She could feel the life draining out of her, her vision starting to swim. And then, e
very
thing went black. When Quinn came to, she was back in the alley, the rain still pouring down around her. She gasped for breath, her hand going to her throat. It was sore, but there was no mark, no sign of the attack. She looked around, her heart pounding in her chest. The grate
was closed
, the tunnel sealed. There was no sign of Herrera, no sign of the Veil Market. She stumbled to her feet, her body aching. She felt disoriented, confused. Had it all been a dream? No, she thought, her hand going to her pocket. Her fingers closed around the bone token, still warm, still pulsing with energy. It hadn't been a dream. It had been real. And now, she had proof. Quinn looked up at the sky, the rain still falling, the moon still full. She knew she should go back, report what she'd seen. But she also knew that no one would believe her. Not without more evidence. And she knew where to find it. She took a deep breath, steeling herself for what was to come. Then she turned, her eyes on the grate, on the darkness below. She
wasn't going
to let this go. Not now. Not ever. She was going to find the truth, no matter what it took. No matter where it led her. Even if it meant going back into the darkness, back into the Veil Market. She was going to find her answers. And she was going to bring the clique to justice. No matter what the cost.
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
0.0000%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
4
adverbTagCount
2
adverbTags
0
"She'd been chasing Herrera for blocks, ever since he'd bolted from The Raven's Nest, [ever]"
1
"Herrera said, his voice barely above a whisper [barely]"
62.4906%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)
wordCount
1333
totalAiIsmAdverbs
5
found
0
adverb
"suddenly"
count
3
1
adverb
"barely above a whisper"
count
1
2
adverb
"very"
count
1
highlights
0
"suddenly"
1
"barely above a whisper"
2
"very"
100.0000%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
9.9775%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)
wordCount
1333
totalAiIsms
12
found
0
word
"palpable"
count
1
1
word
"cacophony"
count
1
2
word
"beacon"
count
1
3
word
"glistening"
count
1
4
word
"glinting"
count
1
5
word
"otherworldly"
count
2
6
word
"stark"
count
1
7
word
"footsteps"
count
1
8
word
"echoing"
count
2
9
word
"etched"
count
1
highlights
0
"palpable"
1
"cacophony"
2
"beacon"
3
"glistening"
4
"glinting"
5
"otherworldly"
6
"stark"
7
"footsteps"
8
"echoing"
9
"etched"
100.0000%
Cliche density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
2
maxInWindow
1
found
0
label
"eyes widened/narrowed"
count
1
1
label
"sense of foreboding"
count
1
highlights
0
"eyes narrowed"
1
"a sense of unease"
100.0000%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
112
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Filter word density
Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
1
hedgeCount
1
narrationSentences
112
filterMatches
0
"watch"
hedgeMatches
0
"happened to"
100.0000%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
0
totalSentences
117
matches
(empty)
79.4535%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
27
mean
49.19
std
21.06
cv
0.428
sampleLengths
0
87
1
80
2
61
3
74
4
65
5
67
6
34
7
70
8
64
9
54
10
15
11
47
12
28
13
24
14
38
15
64
16
36
17
28
18
23
19
55
20
53
21
5
22
68
23
54
24
45
25
67
26
22
100.0000%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤5% passive sentences
passiveCount
5
totalSentences
112
matches
0
"was said"
1
"was gone"
2
"was outnumbered"
3
"was outnumbered"
4
"was closed"
100.0000%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
1
totalVerbs
220
matches
0
"wasn't going"
94.9763%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
1268
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
58
adverbRatio
0.04574132492113565
lyAdverbCount
12
lyAdverbRatio
0.00946372239747634
100.0000%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
117
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.0000%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
117
mean
11.35
std
5.24
cv
0.462
sampleLengths
0
19
1
19
2
22
3
19
4
8
5
12
6
22
7
25
8
21
9
9
10
10
11
11
12
13
13
9
14
9
15
8
16
16
17
15
18
12
19
17
20
6
21
17
22
29
23
19
24
17
25
7
26
18
27
25
28
9
29
8
30
11
31
6
32
7
33
11
34
10
35
23
36
8
37
11
38
6
39
14
40
13
41
16
42
10
43
5
44
17
45
13
46
13
47
11
48
10
49
5
38.8889%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
13
diversityRatio
0.19658119658119658
totalSentences
117
uniqueOpeners
23
0.0000%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
4
fancyCount
3
fancyTags
0
"She'd been chasing Herrera for blocks, ever since he'd bolted from The Raven's Nest, (chase bolt)"
1
"she said, her voice steady despite the fear coiling in her stomach (say, coil)"
2
"she warned, her voice steady despite the fear coursing through her veins (warn, course)"
75.6345%