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Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMPEA92PZRF4908QGSD6MYW
Run Details
Model:
GPT-4o Mini (temp=1)
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Fantasy: entering an ancient ruin
Duration:
29.0s
Cost:
$0.001130
Model input
System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
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Meta
AI
The sharp chill of early evening air clawed at Aurora Carter’s skin as her breath turned to mist. She stood at the edge of Richmond Park, the moonlight pooling like cold silver on the manicured grass, a translucent veil stretching silently overhead. It felt different tonight; a humming in the air, a promise of something breathtaking—and terrifying. She shifted, the Heartstone Pendant warming against her chest, its faint glow a reminder of the unknown ahead. As the group gathered, the
weight
of expectation settled like a stone in her stomach. Nyx stood
slightly
apart from them, their shadowy form flickering with
echo
es of the surrounding night. The first hint of unease sparked in Aurora at the sight of the Shade; she still struggled to shake off the visceral fear Nyx’s
ethereal
presence elicited. But this venture had been necessary. They needed Isolde’s gui
dance
, and they would need to cross the Veil to find her. “Are you ready?” Nyx’s voice
dance
d like a whisper in the cold breeze, as intangible as smoke. “More than ready,” Rory replied, though she couldn't shake the nervous flutter deep in her chest. The wild beauty of this Fae-touched grove was a firefly's promise of both beauty and danger. The walking path widened ahead, flanked by ancient oak standing stones. Each stone stood grotesquely misshapen, twisting towards the sky, as if frozen mid-breath. Aurora reached her hand out to touch the weathered bark. The moment her fingers brushed against it, warmth surged through her, licking the edges of her consciousness, filling her with a strange, wild energy. The stones whispered secrets she almost understood, like forgotten melodies teasing the edge of her memory. “Stay close,” she instructed, glancing back at Felix and Clara, her companions. Clara, a bright-eyed historian with thick glasses likely packed with meandering notes, took a hesitant step forward. “You
feel that?” Clara’s
brow
furrowed
, glancing around as if the trees themselves might answer. “It’s like… we’re not just walking into a place. This is—” “Alive,” Felix interjected, smoothing down an errant strand of his dark hair. He stepped ahead, his heart racing with curiosity. “This is more than a grove. It’s—” “—a crossing point,” Nyx finished, gliding forward, their silhouette darkening against the soft luminescence of the hanging vines. “The boundary between Earth and the Fae Realm, where time behaves… peculiarly.” Aurora’s pulse quickened at the thought of how easily time could warp here. An hour could stretch into timelessness. She clutched the Heartstone, its pulse reinforcing her resolve. They wandered deeper, the ambient light around them shifting hues, swirling from tender lavender to vibrant emerald. Twinkling motes
flickered
like fireflies caught in a summer
dance
, weaving through the air, brushing against the skin with
tantalizing
whispers. The laughter of hidden springs
echo
ed in distant harmony, inviting them further.
“Is that... singing?”
Clara squinted, tilting her head. Rory nodded, listening intently. A haunting melody
resonated
around them, vibrating through her
very
bones. It was a sound both breathtaking and unsettling, the song of the Fae. It simultaneously beckoned and warned, filling the night with rich layers of emotion. She breathed in, savoring the scent of damp earth and blooming wildflowers. “Look!” Felix gasped, pointing toward a cluster of glowing mushrooms sprouting along a nearby fallen log. Their translucent caps radiated an iridescent glow, illuminating the dark. As they approached, the iridescence pulsed rhythmically, akin to a heartbeat. Aurora knelt beside the mushrooms, drawn by their delicate beauty. “They’re incredible. I’ve never seen anything like this.” The stories her parents had whispered about Fae magic flooded back, and she felt a sense of wonder threading through her
apprehension
s. “Magical flora,” Nyx murmured, hovering close. “Though not all in this grove possess friendly intentions. We must tread
carefully
.” At Nyx’s warning, Aurora straightened
slowly
, casting furtive glances into the shadows where movement caught her eye. Something
flickered
just beyond the reach of their light, features blending into darkness, watching. Aurora’s heart raced as glimpses of
ethereal
creatures darted behind the trees—tender shapes with glimmering wings and shimmering skin. Were they spirits? Faeries? “Did you
see that?” Clara’s
voice barely rose above a whisper, eyes wide with awe and
apprehension
. “Yes.” Aurora barely
managed to
reply, swallowing hard. “I don’t think we’re alone.” As if summoned by her thoughts, a dulcet voice rang through the grove. “Many come seeking, but few find what they desire.” From between the gnarled roots of an ancient tree, Isolde Varga emerged, her silver hair
cascading
like liquid moonlight. Her pale lavender eyes studied the group,
gleaming
with centuries of knowledge and mischief. “You have crossed the threshold. You would speak to the Seer?” Aurora’s breath caught in her throat, and Felix stepped forward, determination crossing his features. “We need your gui
dance
—our world is
unraveling
, and we believe you can help us.” “Hope lies tangled in shadows,” Isolde replied cryptically, casting a gaze toward Nyx, who appeared rapt in her words. The Shade shifted uneasily, the whispers of their past merging with the
resonance
of the grove. “As your world crumbles, so too does the Veil,” she continued, her voice like a fog lifting in the dawn. “It weakens with each passing moment, drawing threadbare boundaries between realms.” A chill slithered up Aurora’s spine as she grasped the
weight
of Isolde’s words. “If the Veil weakens—” “Then any creature may slip through,” Nyx answered, the
glint
of violet igniting in their eyes. “Including threats that have long been imprisoned.” “What do we do?” Felix pressed. “How can we stop it?” “You must seek the Fae blade,” Isolde said, raising a slender finger, traced with light. “Forged of moonsilver in the Courts; a weapon capable of severing ties. Darkness festers where the Veil has been breached, and gluttony thrives in the shadows of Dymas.” “Dymas?” Aurora
echo
ed, the name conjuring vivid images of overindulgent feasts and the Prince of Gluttony—Belphegor, a figure born of decay and temptation. Unease settled in like a thick fog as she considered the implications. Before she could fathom further, the air shifted, a sudden drop in temperature
cascading
around them like ice. The shadows parted, and for a moment, Aurora thought she saw Belphegor’s twisted grin peering through, hungry, relentless. “Stay alert,” Nyx whispered, the soothing presence of the shade now thick with tension. Suddenly, e
very
thing around them shrieked to a halt—the laughter of the Fae faded, the mushrooms dimmed, the trees
seemed to
exhale a shaky breath. Aurora’s heart pounded in
anticipation
, and she felt the pulse of the Heartstone align with the thudding in her chest. “Time bends, but we have a limited moment before the path is sealed,” Isolde urged, glancing at the advancing shadows. “Choose swiftly, for some choices lead into light, while others
echo
into eternity.” In that moment, Aurora understood—wonder and dread intertwined, their fates shaped by the choices made within this alien grove. And so they stood, at the threshold of time and fate, poised on the cusp of an adventure teetering on the knife-edge of peril and possibility.
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
56.4103%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
13
adverbTagCount
3
adverbTags
0
"she instructed, glancing back at Felix and Clara, her companions [back]"
1
"Nyx murmured, hovering close [close]"
2
"Isolde replied cryptically, casting a gaze toward Nyx, who appeared rapt in her words [cryptically]"
57.6271%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)
wordCount
1180
totalAiIsmAdverbs
5
found
0
adverb
"carefully"
count
1
1
adverb
"slightly"
count
1
2
adverb
"slowly"
count
1
3
adverb
"suddenly"
count
1
4
adverb
"very"
count
1
highlights
0
"carefully"
1
"slightly"
2
"slowly"
3
"suddenly"
4
"very"
100.0000%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
0.0000%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)
wordCount
1180
totalAiIsms
22
found
0
word
"ethereal"
count
2
1
word
"resonated"
count
1
2
word
"resonance"
count
1
3
word
"flickered"
count
2
4
word
"gleaming"
count
1
5
word
"glint"
count
1
6
word
"cascading"
count
2
7
word
"tantalizing"
count
1
8
word
"anticipation"
count
1
9
word
"apprehension"
count
1
10
word
"furrowed"
count
1
11
word
"weight"
count
2
12
word
"dance"
count
1
13
word
"echo"
count
1
14
word
"echoed"
count
2
15
word
"echoes"
count
1
16
word
"unraveling"
count
1
highlights
0
"ethereal"
1
"resonated"
2
"resonance"
3
"flickered"
4
"gleaming"
5
"glint"
6
"cascading"
7
"tantalizing"
8
"anticipation"
9
"apprehension"
10
"furrowed"
11
"weight"
12
"dance"
13
"echo"
14
"echoed"
15
"echoes"
16
"unraveling"
100.0000%
Cliche density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
0
maxInWindow
0
found
(empty)
highlights
(empty)
100.0000%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
69
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Filter word density
Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
0
hedgeCount
2
narrationSentences
69
filterMatches
(empty)
hedgeMatches
0
"managed to"
1
"seemed to"
100.0000%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
3
totalSentences
83
matches
0
"feel that?” Clara’s"
1
"“Is that... singing?”"
2
"see that?” Clara’s"
100.0000%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
34
mean
34.41
std
17.47
cv
0.508
sampleLengths
0
75
1
79
2
17
3
32
4
74
5
29
6
26
7
27
8
30
9
28
10
50
11
8
12
53
13
37
14
40
15
19
16
54
17
17
18
13
19
22
20
44
21
28
22
35
23
31
24
18
25
23
26
11
27
43
28
35
29
36
30
14
31
44
32
33
33
45
100.0000%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤5% passive sentences
passiveCount
0
totalSentences
69
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
0
totalVerbs
174
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
949
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
33
adverbRatio
0.03477344573234984
lyAdverbCount
16
lyAdverbRatio
0.01685985247629083
100.0000%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
83
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.0000%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
83
mean
14.1
std
5.87
cv
0.416
sampleLengths
0
18
1
24
2
15
3
18
4
15
5
16
6
27
7
6
8
15
9
17
10
16
11
16
12
11
13
13
14
10
15
24
16
16
17
12
18
17
19
15
20
11
21
12
22
8
23
7
24
18
25
12
26
13
27
6
28
9
29
17
30
21
31
12
32
8
33
4
34
11
35
13
36
13
37
12
38
16
39
10
40
11
41
10
42
30
43
6
44
13
45
17
46
14
47
19
48
3
49
1
96.3855%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
3
diversityRatio
0.6265060240963856
totalSentences
83
uniqueOpeners
52
0.0000%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
13
fancyCount
13
fancyTags
0
"Rory replied, though she couldn't shake the nervous flutter deep in her chest (reply, does not shake)"
1
"she instructed, glancing back at Felix and Clara, her companions (instruct, glance)"
2
"Felix interjected, smoothing down an errant strand of his dark hair (interject, smooth)"
3
"Nyx finished, gliding forward, their silhouette darkening against the soft luminescence of the hanging vines (finish, glide darken)"
4
"gasped (gasp)"
5
"Nyx murmured, hovering close (murmur, hover close)"
6
"Isolde replied cryptically, casting a gaze toward Nyx, who appeared rapt in her words (reply cryptically, cast appear)"
7
"she continued, her voice like a fog lifting in the dawn (continue, like)"
8
"Nyx answered, the glint of violet igniting in their eyes (answer, ignite)"
9
"pressed (pressed)"
10
"Isolde said, raising a slender finger, traced with light (say, raise trace)"
11
"Nyx whispered, the soothing presence of the shade now thick with tension (whisper)"
12
"Isolde urged, glancing at the advancing shadows (urge, glance)"
82.9661%