Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMPEK4TB976HR8M1T3C2JEP

Run Details

Model:: Llama 3.1 70B
Test:: Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:: Fantasy: entering an ancient ruin
Duration:: 49.2s
Cost:: $0.001096
Provider:: DeepInfra

Model input

System

You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue.

You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex.

Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.

User/Human

<codex>
<character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist">
  <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor>
  <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair>
  <height>5'6"</height>
  <age>25</age>
  <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar>
  <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description>
  <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card">
  <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor>
  <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height>
  <age>ageless</age>
  <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form>
  <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice>
  <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description>
  <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle">
  <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor>
  <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair>
  <height>5'5"</height>
  <age>300 years old</age>
  <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance>
  <speech>speaks in riddles</speech>
  <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints>
  <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion>
  <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description>
  <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory>
</character>

<location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony">
  <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler>
  <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor>
  <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description>
</location>

<location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)">
  <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation>
  <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones>
  <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior>
  <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora>
  <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description>
</location>

<item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas">
  <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor>
  <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial>
  <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size>
  <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior>
  <glow>faint inner glow</glow>
  <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description>
</item>

<item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts">
  <material>moonsilver</material>
  <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape>
  <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature>
  <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow>
  <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power>
  <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo>
  <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description>
</item>

<lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology">
  <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect>
  <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance>
  <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring>
  <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description>
</lore>
</codex>

Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre.

A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition.

Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore.
Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

As they stepped through the ancient oak standing stones, the air around them seemed to thicken, like a warm, scented mist enveloping their skin. Rory, her bright blue eyes wide with wonder, felt the world tilt slightly, as if the very fabric of reality had shifted. She glanced at Nyx, who stood beside her, their faintly glowing violet eyes fixed intently on the path ahead. The Shade's usually impassive expression was tinged with a hint of curiosity, a subtle relaxing of their features that Rory had grown to recognize.

Isolde, the Half-Fae seer, led the group, her silver hair fluttering behind her like a banner. She moved with an ethereal silence, her pale lavender eyes scanning the surroundings with an air of quiet reverence. The soft rustle of her long, flowing gown was the only sound she made as she glided across the ground, leaving no footprints behind.

As they walked, the trees grew taller and closer, their branches twisted and gnarled with age. The air was filled with the sweet scent of blooming wildflowers, which seemed to be scattered across the clearing with reckless abandon. Rory felt a sense of enchantment wash over her, as if she had stumbled into a dream world.

"Look," Nyx whispered, their voice barely audible, as they reached out a shadowy hand to touch a delicate, gemstone-encrusted vine. The vine seemed to respond to their touch, its tendrils unfurling like a slow-moving snake. Rory watched, fascinated, as the vine wrapped itself around Nyx's wrist, forming a glittering, crystalline cuff.

Isolde paused, her gaze flicking toward the vine. "Ah, yes. The heartblooms. Rare and precious. They only grow in places where the fabric of the Veil is thin."

Rory's eyes met Isolde's, and she felt a shiver run down her spine. She had heard stories about the Veil, the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms, but she had never seen it, never felt its presence so acutely.

As they continued deeper into the grove, the trees grew stranger, their trunks thickening and twisting until they seemed to be made of a dark, liquid glass. Rory reached out a hand, hesitantly, and touched the surface of one of the trees. It felt cool and smooth, like polished obsidian.

"Be careful," Isolde warned, her voice low and melodious. "The trees here are not like those in the mortal world. They have... memories."

Rory's fingers jerked back, as if burned. She looked up to see Nyx watching her, their expression inscrutable.

Suddenly, the air around them seemed to vibrate, like the strings of a harp plucked by an invisible hand. Rory felt a jolt of unease, as if the very fabric of reality was shifting and flowing around her.

"What's happening?" she whispered, her eyes darting toward Isolde.

The Half-Fae seer closed her eyes, her face tilted up toward the sky. "The solstice is near. The Veil is weakening. We must be careful not to draw attention to ourselves."

As she spoke, the vibration ceased, leaving behind an oppressive silence. Rory felt like she was holding her breath, waiting for something to happen, for the world to shudder back into motion.

And then, without warning, the trees began to sing.

Their voices were low and husky, like the gentle rustling of leaves, but with a depth and richness that seemed to vibrate through every cell in Rory's body. The sound was haunting and beautiful, like nothing she had ever heard before.

Nyx's eyes gleamed with a soft, otherworldly light, as they raised their face to the sky, drinking in the music. Isolde's eyes remained closed, a small, enigmatic smile playing on her lips.

Rory felt herself swaying, her feet moving in time with the music, as if she was being drawn into some ancient, primal dance. The trees seemed to be calling to her, their voices weaving a spell of wonder and enchantment.

As the music swelled, Rory felt the world around her begin to shift and flow, like the surface of a river. She saw visions of ancient civilizations, of Fae courts and Hel's dark, burning cities. She saw the Veil, shimmering and fragile, a thin barrier between worlds.

And then, as suddenly as it had begun, the music ceased. The trees fell silent, their branches still and unmoving. Rory felt like she was waking from a dream, her senses slowly returning to her.

As she looked around, she saw that Nyx was watching her, their expression soft and concerned. Isolde's eyes were open, her gaze piercing and intense.

"What did you see?" the Half-Fae seer asked, her voice barely above a whisper.

Rory hesitated, unsure of how to describe the visions that had flooded her mind. "I saw... the Veil," she said finally, her voice barely above a whisper. "I saw the worlds, all of them, connected and separate."

Isolde's eyes seemed to bore into her soul, as if searching for something. And then, with a soft, enigmatic smile, she turned and continued on their journey, deeper into the heart of the grove.

As they followed her, Rory felt the world around her begin to shift and change, like the surface of a river flowing into the unknown. She knew that she was walking into a place of wonder and danger, a place where the very fabric of reality was thin and fragile.

And she knew that she would never be the same again.

Evaluation details

Result

Evaluator

Details

Meta Data

0.0000%

Adverbs in dialogue tags

Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs

totalTags

adverbTagCount

adverbTags

0	"Nyx whispered, their voice barely audible, as they reached out a shadowy hand to touch a delicate, gemstone-encrusted vine [barely]"
1	"she said finally, her voice barely above a whisper [finally, barely]"

0.0000%

AI-ism adverb frequency

Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)

wordCount

907

totalAiIsmAdverbs

found

adverb	"hesitantly"
count	1

adverb	"slightly"
count	1

adverb	"slowly"
count	1

adverb	"suddenly"
count	2

adverb	"barely above a whisper"
count	2

adverb	"very"
count	3

highlights

0	"hesitantly"
1	"slightly"
2	"slowly"
3	"suddenly"
4	"barely above a whisper"
5	"very"

100.0000%

AI-ism character names

Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

100.0000%

AI-ism location names

Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

0.7718%

AI-ism word frequency

Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)

wordCount

907

totalAiIsms

found

word	"ethereal"
count	1

word	"crystalline"
count	1

word	"enigmatic"
count	2

word	"tinged"
count	1

word	"glided"
count	1

word	"oppressive"
count	1

word	"otherworldly"
count	1

word	"dance"
count	1

highlights

0	"ethereal"
1	"crystalline"
2	"enigmatic"
3	"tinged"
4	"glided"
5	"oppressive"
6	"otherworldly"
7	"dance"

100.0000%

Cliche density

Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window

totalCliches	0
maxInWindow	0
found	(empty)
highlights	(empty)

100.0000%

Emotion telling (show vs. tell)

Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling

emotionTells	0
narrationSentences	51
matches	(empty)

58.3973%

Filter word density

Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words

filterCount

hedgeCount

narrationSentences

filterMatches

(empty)

hedgeMatches

0	"seemed to"
1	"began to"
2	"begin to"

100.0000%

Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)

Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses

thatCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"saw that Nyx"
1	"knew that she"
2	"knew that she"

97.7149%

Paragraph length variance

Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts

totalParagraphs

mean

36.08

std

17.75

0.492

sampleLengths

0	89
1	59
2	56
3	51
4	28
5	43
6	50
7	23
8	18
9	38
10	9
11	31
12	32
13	9
14	41
15	32
16	40
17	47
18	35
19	25
20	14
21	37
22	34
23	50
24	11

94.1176%

Passive voice overuse

Target: ≤5% passive sentences

passiveCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"was tinged"
1	"was filled"
2	"being drawn"

100.0000%

Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse

Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs

pastProgressiveCount

totalVerbs

157

matches

0	"was shifting"
1	"was holding"
2	"was haunting"
3	"was waking"
4	"was watching"
5	"was walking"

93.2428%

Purple prose (modifier overload)

Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking

wordCount

832

adjectiveStacks

stackExamples

0	"delicate, gemstone-encrusted vine."

adverbCount

adverbRatio

0.040865384615384616

lyAdverbCount

lyAdverbRatio

0.018028846153846152

100.0000%

Repeated phrase echo

Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)

totalSentences	55
echoCount	0
echoWords	(empty)

78.8005%

Sentence length variance

Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts

totalSentences

mean

16.4

std

5.69

0.347

sampleLengths

0	24
1	22
2	19
3	24
4	16
5	19
6	24
7	16
8	22
9	18
10	20
11	15
12	16
13	8
14	20
15	13
16	30
17	27
18	15
19	8
20	9
21	14
22	7
23	11
24	19
25	19
26	9
27	13
28	18
29	11
30	21
31	9
32	28
33	13
34	20
35	12
36	23
37	17
38	21
39	14
40	12
41	11
42	9
43	15
44	16
45	9
46	14
47	14
48	13
49	10

44.5455%

Sentence opener variety

Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers

consecutiveRepeats	3
diversityRatio	0.2727272727272727
totalSentences	55
uniqueOpeners	15

0.0000%

Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)

Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags

totalTags

fancyCount

fancyTags

0	"Nyx whispered, their voice barely audible, as they reached out a shadowy hand to touch a delicate, gemstone-encrusted vine (whisper, reach out touch)"
1	"Isolde warned, her voice low and melodious (warn)"
2	"whispered (whisper)"
3	"she said finally, her voice barely above a whisper (say finally)"

68.6818%