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Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMPF0Q8CXFFZ96YNV76AEYE
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Model:
Mistral NeMO
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Thriller: chase through city streets
Duration:
18.4s
Cost:
$0.000643
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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
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AI
The rain lashed down, a relentless drumbeat on the cobbled streets of Soho. Detective Harlow Quinn's trench coat whipped around her ankles as she pursued her suspect, the hem heavy with absorbed rain. Her breath misted in the chilled air, each exhale a silent countdown to the chase's inevitable end. The suspect, Tomás Herrera, darted around a corner, his dark form swallowed by the night. Quinn's heart pounded in her ears, her military-precise strides eating up the distance between them. She rounded the corner, eyes scanning the deserted street. There! A flash of olive skin disappearing into an alleyway. Quinn's hand instinctively went to her hip, fingers wrapping around the cold metal of her gun. She paused, listening. Rainwater gurgled in the gutters, a distant siren wailed, but no footfalls
echoed
back to her. She stepped into the alley, her worn leather
watch
glinting
in the faint light from a high window. The alley was a labyrinth of dumpsters and fire escapes, a
stark
contrast to the vibrant streets above. Quinn moved
cautiously
, her sharp jaw set in determination. She'd been chasing Herrera for weeks, ever since she'd caught a whiff of something off about him. He
was connected
to the clique, she was sure of it, and she was going to find out why. A sudden movement caught her eye. Herrera, crouching behind a dumpster, looked up at her with wide, panicked eyes. He held something in his hand, a small vial filled with swirling,
otherworldly
light. Quinn's breath caught in her throat. She'd
seen that light
before, three years ago, when Morris— She shook the memory away, focusing on Herrera. "Police!" she barked, her voice
echoing
off the cold brick walls. "You're under arrest!" Herrera scrambled to his feet, the vial clutched in his fist. "Detective Quinn," he panted, "you don't understand. I can explain—" "Save it for the station," Quinn growled, advancing on him. She could see the fear in his eyes, the desperation. But she also saw something else, a
flicker
of defiance. He wasn't going to come quietly. Herrera's gaze darted past her, to the mouth of the alley. Then, with a sudden burst of speed, he bolted. Quinn cursed, giving chase. They emerged onto a bustling street, cars hissing through puddles, headlights casting eerie shadows. Herrera weaved through the traffic, Quinn hot on his heels. They turned onto a narrow side street, then another, until they
were lost
in the maze of Camden's back alleys. Quinn's lungs burned, her legs ached, but she pushed on, her gaze locked onto Herrera's retreating form. He
was flagging
, his steps slowing. She
was gaining
on him. Suddenly, Herrera skidded to a halt. He spun around, facing Quinn, his chest heaving. "Detective," he gasped, "you can't follow me any further." Quinn slowed to a stop, her hands raised, gun pointed at the ground. "Why not?" she asked, her voice
barely above a whisper
. Herrera held up the vial, the swirling light casting eerie patterns on his face. "Because," he said, "this is where I go when I need to... disappear." Quinn's
eyes narrowed
. She looked past Herrera, to the unassuming manhole cover at his feet. A symbol
was etched
into the metal, a stylized eye with a bone through it. She'd
seen that symbol
before, too, carved into the wall of the abandoned tube station where Morris had— She shook the thought away, her grip tightening on her gun. "What is this place, Herrera?" she asked, her voice steady despite the turmoil within her. Herrera took a deep breath, then another, as if steeling himself for what was to come. "It's called the Veil Market," he said finally. "A black market for... unusual goods and services. I can't let you follow me down there, Detective. It's not safe." Quinn's gaze
flicked
back to the symbol, then to Herrera's pleading eyes. She thought of Morris, of the unexplained circumstances of his death. She thought of the clique, of the answers she was so close to finding. Then she thought of the darkness below, of the unknown, the dangerous. She lowered her gun, her decision made. "I'm coming with you, Herrera," she said, her voice firm. "I need answers, and you're going to help me get them." Herrera hesitated, then nodded, resignation in his eyes. He knelt down, gripped the edge of the manhole cover, and heaved it aside. The stench of damp earth and something else, something acrid and
otherworldly
, rose from the darkness. Quinn wrinkled her nose, her heart pounding in her chest. Herrera looked up at her, his warm brown eyes filled with worry. "Stay close, Detective," he said. "And whatever you do, don't make eye contact with anyone." Quinn took a deep breath, then nodded. "Lead the way, Herrera," she said, her voice steady despite the butterflies in her stomach. Herrera climbed down the ladder, Quinn close behind. The darkness swallowed them whole, the manhole cover clanging back into place above them, sealing them off from the world above. Quinn's breath
echoed
in her ears, her heart pounding like a drum in the silence. They reached the bottom of the ladder, stepping onto cold, damp concrete. A faint light
flickered
in the distance, casting eerie shadows on the curved walls of the abandoned tube station. Quinn could feel the
weight
of the earth above her, the press of the unknown ahead. She took a deep breath, her hand going to her gun. Herrera led the way, his steps sure and steady despite the darkness. They walked in silence, the only sound the distant drip of water and the soft rustle of their clothes. The light grew brighter, the sound of voices
echoing
through the tunnel. They turned a corner, and
suddenly
, they were there. The Veil Market was a sprawling, chaotic mess of stalls and tents, filled with creatures and people alike. Quinn's
eyes widened
as she took it all in, her gaze flicking from a stall selling glowing potions to a group of what
appeared to
be fairies arguing over a pile of shimmering dust. She kept her hand on her gun, her senses on high alert. Herrera led her through the market, his gaze straight ahead, ignoring the curious glances they received. They passed stalls selling e
very
thing from ancient artifacts to live animals, their cries
echoing
through the market like a
macabre
symphony
. Quinn's
stomach churned
at the sight, her grip tightening on her gun. Finally, they reached a stall tucked away in a quiet corner of the market. It was little more than a table covered in a worn cloth, but the symbol
etched
into the wood was the same as the one on the manhole cover. Herrera turned to face Quinn, his eyes filled with a mix of fear and determination. "This is where I get my supplies, Detective," he said, his voice low. "I can't promise you'll find what you're looking for here, but... I can promise you'll find something." Quinn looked around, her gaze taking in the strange,
otherworldly
scene. She thought of Morris, of the answers she was so close to finding. She thought of the danger, of the unknown, the dangerous. Then she thought of the clique, of the power they held, the lives they ruined. She took a deep breath, her decision made. "Let's find out what they know, Herrera," she said, her voice steady despite the turmoil within her. "Let's find out what they're hiding." Herrera nodded, turning to the stall. The woman behind it was human, but her eyes were not. They were black, like pools of ink, and they
seemed to
stare right through Quinn, into her
very
soul. She shivered, her hand going to her gun. "Can I help you?" the woman asked, her voice like
velvet
, her lips curving into a smile that didn't reach her eyes. Herrera stepped forward, his voice
barely above a whisper
. "We're looking for information," he said. "About the clique." The woman's smile faded, her eyes narrowing. "The clique," she repeated, her voice thoughtful. "That's a dangerous game you're playing, Detective." Quinn stepped forward, her gaze locked with the woman's. "I'm not playing games," she said, her voice steady. "I'm looking for answers. And I'll do whatever it takes to find them." The woman's gaze
flicked
to Quinn's gun, then back to her face. She smiled, a slow, predatory smile that
sent a shiver down
Quinn's spine. "Very well, Detective," she said. "But be warned, the truth comes at a price. And the clique always collects their debts." Quinn nodded, her gaze
unwavering
. "I'll take my chances," she said. "Now, what can you tell me about them?" The woman's smile faded, her eyes turning serious. "The clique is a powerful force in this world, Detective," she said. "They control the flow of... unusual goods and services. They have their hands in e
very
thing, from the highest echelons of power to the lowest dregs of society. And they don't take kindly to those who interfere with their business." Quinn's
heart pounded in her chest
, her mind racing. She thought of the clique, of the power they held, the lives they ruined. She thought of Morris, of the answers she was so close to finding. She thought of the danger, of the unknown, the dangerous. But she also thought of justice, of the truth. And she knew, no matter what the cost, she had to see this through. "I understand the risk," she said, her voice steady. "But I have to know the truth. I have to find out what happened to my partner. And I won't stop until I do." The woman nodded, her gaze filled with a mix of respect and pity. "Very well, Detective," she said. "But be warned, the truth is a dangerous thing. And once you know it, there's no going back." Quinn took a deep breath, her decision made. "I'm ready," she said. "Tell me what you know." The woman's gaze
flicked
to Herrera, then back to Quinn. "Very well," she said. "But first, you must prove yourself. You must
show that you
are worthy of the truth." Quinn's gaze narrowed, her hand tightening on her gun. "What do you mean?" she asked, her voice wary. The woman smiled, a slow, predatory smile that
sent a shiver down
Quinn's spine. "A test, Detective," she said. "A test of your courage, your cunning, your skill. Prove yourself to me, and I will tell you what you want to know." Quinn looked around, her gaze taking in the strange,
otherworldly
scene. She thought of Morris, of the answers she was so close to finding. She thought of the danger, of the unknown, the dangerous. Then she thought of justice, of the truth. And she knew, no matter what the test was, she had to pass it. "Very well," she said, her voice steady. "What do I have to do?" The woman's smile widened, her eyes
gleaming
with a mix of amusement and malice. "A game, Detective," she said. "A game of chance, a game of skill, a game of luck. Win, and you will earn your answers. Lose, and... well, let's just say the clique has a use for those who fail to meet their expectations." Quinn's
heart pounded in her chest
, her mind racing. She thought of the clique, of the power they held, the lives they ruined. She thought of Morris, of the answers she was so close to finding. She thought of the danger, of the unknown, the dangerous. Then she thought of justice, of the truth. And she knew, no matter what the cost, she had to win. "Alright," she said, her voice steady. "I'll play your game. Tell me the rules." The woman's smile faded, her eyes turning serious. "The game is called 'The Veil's Embrace', Detective," she said. "It is a test of your courage, your cunning, your skill. You will be given three tasks to complete, each one more difficult than the last. Complete them all, and you will earn your answers. Fail any one of them, and... well, let's just say the clique has a use for those who fail to meet their expectations." Quinn nodded, her gaze
unwavering
. "I understand," she said. "What are the tasks?" The woman's gaze
flicked
to Herrera, then back to Quinn. "The first task is simple, Detective," she said. "You must find your way through the market, from one end to the other, without being seen. You have one hour to complete this task. Fail, and you will forfeit your chance to learn the truth." Quinn's gaze narrowed, her mind racing. "How do I know when I've reached the other end?" she asked. The woman smiled, a slow, predatory smile that
sent a shiver down
Quinn's spine. "You will know, Detective," she said. "Trust me, you will know." Quinn took a deep breath, her decision made. "Very well," she said. "I'll do it. But first, I need to know something. What happens if I win? What happens to the clique?" The woman's smile faded, her eyes turning serious. "If you win, Detective," she said, "you will have the truth. And with the truth, you will have the power to bring the clique to justice. But be warned, the clique will not go down without a fight. They will stop at nothing to protect their interests, their power. You will have to be ready, Detective. You will have to be ready for anything." Quinn nodded, her gaze
unwavering
. "I understand," she said. "I'll do whatever it takes to bring them down. I promise you that." The woman nodded, her gaze filled with a mix of respect and pity. "Very well, Detective," she said. "Then let the game begin. You have one hour to complete your task. Good luck." Quinn took a deep breath, her mind racing. She looked around, her gaze taking in the strange,
otherworldly
scene. She thought of Morris, of the answers she was so close to finding. She thought of the danger, of the unknown, the dangerous. Then she thought of justice, of the truth. And she knew, no matter what the cost, she had to win. She turned to Herrera, her gaze serious. "Stay here," she said. "I'll be back in an hour. And if I'm not... well, you know what to do." Herrera nodded, his gaze filled with worry. "Be careful, Detective," he said. "The market is a dangerous place. You don't know what you're getting into." Quinn smiled, a small, determined smile. "I know exactly what I'm getting into, Herrera," she said. "And I'm ready for it. I have to be. For Morris. For justice. For the truth." Herrera nodded, his gaze filled with a mix of respect and fear. "Good luck, Detective," he said. "I'll be here, waiting for you." Quinn nodded, her gaze
unwavering
. "I'll be back," she said. "And when I am, I'll have the answers we need. I promise you that." With that, she turned and disappeared into the crowd, her heart pounding in her chest, her mind racing with determination. She had one hour to complete her task, one hour to prove herself, one hour to earn the truth. And she
was determined
to make the most of e
very
second.
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.0000%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
42
adverbTagCount
1
adverbTags
0
"he said finally [finally]"
52.7373%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)
wordCount
2539
totalAiIsmAdverbs
12
found
0
adverb
"cautiously"
count
1
1
adverb
"suddenly"
count
2
2
adverb
"barely above a whisper"
count
2
3
adverb
"very"
count
7
highlights
0
"cautiously"
1
"suddenly"
2
"barely above a whisper"
3
"very"
100.0000%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
0.0000%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)
wordCount
2539
totalAiIsms
30
found
0
word
"symphony"
count
1
1
word
"churned"
count
1
2
word
"flickered"
count
1
3
word
"flicker"
count
1
4
word
"flicked"
count
4
5
word
"gleaming"
count
1
6
word
"glinting"
count
1
7
word
"macabre"
count
1
8
word
"otherworldly"
count
5
9
word
"velvet"
count
1
10
word
"unwavering"
count
4
11
word
"stark"
count
1
12
word
"weight"
count
1
13
word
"echoed"
count
2
14
word
"echoing"
count
3
15
word
"etched"
count
2
highlights
0
"symphony"
1
"churned"
2
"flickered"
3
"flicker"
4
"flicked"
5
"gleaming"
6
"glinting"
7
"macabre"
8
"otherworldly"
9
"velvet"
10
"unwavering"
11
"stark"
12
"weight"
13
"echoed"
14
"echoing"
15
"etched"
0.0000%
Cliche density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
8
maxInWindow
5
found
0
label
"heart pounded in chest"
count
2
1
label
"eyes widened/narrowed"
count
2
2
label
"stomach dropped/sank"
count
1
3
label
"sent a shiver through"
count
3
highlights
0
"heart pounded in her chest"
1
"eyes narrowed"
2
"eyes widened"
3
"stomach churned"
4
"sent a shiver down"
100.0000%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
181
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Filter word density
Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
1
hedgeCount
2
narrationSentences
181
filterMatches
0
"watch"
hedgeMatches
0
"appeared to"
1
"seemed to"
100.0000%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
3
totalSentences
213
matches
0
"seen that light"
1
"seen that symbol"
2
"show that you"
78.1146%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
67
mean
37.88
std
16.04
cv
0.423
sampleLengths
0
50
1
49
2
53
3
63
4
49
5
22
6
21
7
36
8
48
9
48
10
23
11
23
12
27
13
48
14
26
15
44
16
49
17
28
18
48
19
27
20
22
21
44
22
58
23
52
24
64
25
49
26
58
27
30
28
49
29
31
30
44
31
22
32
18
33
21
34
31
35
46
36
19
37
59
38
46
39
23
40
33
41
36
42
17
43
30
44
18
45
42
46
56
47
13
48
57
49
66
100.0000%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤5% passive sentences
passiveCount
4
totalSentences
181
matches
0
"was connected"
1
"were lost"
2
"was etched"
3
"was determined"
100.0000%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
2
totalVerbs
337
matches
0
"was flagging"
1
"was gaining"
100.0000%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
1788
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
55
adverbRatio
0.03076062639821029
lyAdverbCount
15
lyAdverbRatio
0.008389261744966443
100.0000%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
213
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.0000%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
213
mean
11.92
std
7.6
cv
0.638
sampleLengths
0
13
1
20
2
17
3
15
4
15
5
9
6
1
7
9
8
16
9
3
10
16
11
18
12
18
13
9
14
17
15
19
16
6
17
13
18
14
19
6
20
10
21
8
22
11
23
3
24
11
25
10
26
10
27
10
28
10
29
6
30
11
31
9
32
4
33
14
34
10
35
20
36
17
37
6
38
5
39
6
40
8
41
9
42
13
43
10
44
14
45
13
46
3
47
12
48
15
49
18
40.1408%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
21
diversityRatio
0.19718309859154928
totalSentences
213
uniqueOpeners
42
100.0000%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
42
fancyCount
5
fancyTags
0
"he panted (pant)"
1
"Quinn growled, advancing on him (growl, advance)"
2
"he gasped (gasp)"
3
"he said finally (say finally)"
4
"she repeated, her voice thoughtful (repeat)"
80.6466%