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Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMQE6P02XDAEEC45Q4D46X8
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Model:
Qwen 3.5 397B A17B
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Fantasy: entering an ancient ruin
Duration:
1m 54s
Cost:
$0.017425
Provider:
Alibaba
Model input
System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
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Meta
AI
The Heartstone pendant burned against Aurora's collarbone, a steady, rhythmic heat that had nothing to do with body temperature. She pressed a hand to her chest, fingers brushing the silver chain, feeling the deep crimson gem pulse like a second heartbeat. Beside her, the alleyway shadows coalesced, rising from the brickwork until they formed a towering silhouette. Nyx stood six feet of living darkness, the faint violet glow of their eyes cutting through the London gloom. "The tear is here," Nyx whispered, the voice sounding like dry leaves skittering over pavement. "The Veil is thin. Frayed." Aurora squinted at the blank wall of the warehouse. To her human eyes, it was just grimy brick and peeling paint. But the pendant tugged her forward, insistent. She adjusted the grip on the Fae-Forged Blade in her left hand. The moonsilver was always cold, a
stark
contrast to the humid summer night, and the chill seeped into her palm, grounding her. The leaf-shaped dagger hummed faintly, sensing the proximity of the unnatural. "Lead the way," Aurora said, her voice steady despite the adrenaline tightening her throat. She was a delivery driver, not a soldier, but she had learned
quickly
that panic got you killed in the spaces between worlds. Nyx flowed forward, their form shifting from solid to incorporeal as they passed through the brickwork. Aurora didn't
have that luxury
. She stepped into the shadow where Nyx had vanished and felt the air pressure drop. The sounds of London traffic—the distant sirens, the rumble of buses—vanished instantly, replaced by a heavy, static silence. Then, a shimmering distortion rippled before her, like heat haze off asphalt. She pushed through. The transition was not a step but a fall. Her stomach
lurched
, and the ground solidified beneath her boots with a soft thud. Aurora blinked, her bright blue eyes widening. The grey sky of London
was gone
. Above them stretched a canopy of warm amber, glowing without a visible sun. It cast a perpetual late-afternoon light over the landscape, bathing everything in a honeyed hue. They stood on a ridge overlooking a vast expanse of vineyards, but the vines were unlike any grown on Earth. The leaves were deep purple, veined with gold, and the grapes hanging from them were the size of plums, translucent and glowing
softly
from within. The air was thick, heavy with scent. It wasn't just the smell of earth and plants; it was the aroma of a kitchen left to simmer for days. Roasted meats, spiced wines, caramelized sugar, and exotic herbs wove together into a perfume so rich it made Aurora's mouth water involuntarily. It was the scent of excess. "Where are we?" she asked, her breath catching in the humid air. "Dymas," Nyx replied. The Shade stood beside her, now fully solid, their shadowy form
stark
against the amber light. "The realm of Gluttony. Prince Belphegor's domain." Aurora looked down at her left wrist, where the small crescent-shaped scar from her childhood accident itched faintly. A psychosomatic reaction, surely, but the place felt like it was pressing against her skin. She tightened her grip on the Fae blade. The cold metal was a relief against the
oppressive
warmth of this world. "It's beautiful," she admitted, though the word felt inadequate. Rows of orchards stretched into the distance, trees laden with fruits that
shimmered
like gemstones. In the valley below, she could see structures carved from white stone, smoke rising from chimneys in lazy, fragrant spirals. "It is a trap," Nyx corrected, their violet eyes scanning the horizon. "Everything here is designed to indulge. To consume. To keep you full until you forget you ever wanted to leave." Aurora took a step forward, her boots sinking into soil that was too soft, too rich. Wildflowers bloomed at her feet, but their colors were wrong—shades of orange and red that
seemed to
vibrate. She watched a beetle crawl across a leaf, its shell made of what looked like polished copper. "We need to find the portal back," Aurora said, forcing her mind into the analytical box she used for law exams. "The pendant brought us here. It should guide us out." "The Heartstone reacts to Hel portals," Nyx said, drifting
slightly
ahead. Their form
flickered
, edges blurring into the ambient shadow of the vines. "But Dymas is vast. The portals are guarded." As they descended the ridge, the silence broke. Distant laughter
echoed
from the valley, accompanied by the clinking of glass and the strumming of strings. It sounded like a feast, but the joy in the voices felt strained, rehearsed. Aurora spotted movement among the vines below. Figures moved with purpose, carrying baskets of the glowing fruit. They wore aprons stained with juices that looked too much like blood. "Helbound souls," Nyx whispered. "Contracted from Earth. Chefs, mostly." Aurora felt a chill that had nothing to do with the blade. She remembered the codex entries she'd skimmed in Isolde's grove, the warnings about the cost of magic. These weren't just workers; they were trapped. She moved deeper into the orchard, the amber light filtering through the purple leaves. The heat
was intensifying
, making her black hair stick to her neck. She brushed a hand against a hanging fruit, and it pulsed under her touch, warm and yielding. A drop of juice welled up where her nail pierced the skin, smelling of cinnamon and clove. "Don't eat," Nyx warned, their voice sharp. "Once you consume the essence of Hel, you belong to it." Aurora wiped her hand on her jeans, wiping away the sticky residue. "Noted." They reached the edge of a clearing where a stone table stood, laden with platters of food that steamed despite the heat. The spread was immaculate, perfect, yet no one sat there. It was an offering. Or a lure. Aurora's pendant spiked in temperature, burning hot against her skin. She hissed, pulling the chain out to look at the crimson gem. It
was glowing
fiercely, pointing toward a grove of twisted trees at the far end of the clearing. "There," she said. "The way out is rarely the way in," Nyx said, their form elongating as they stretched toward the twisted trees. "The Veil shifts here. Time is fluid." Aurora looked back at the ridge they had descended. It seemed further away now, the distance stretching unnaturally. The amber sky
seemed to
darken
slightly
, the light deepening to the color of bruised flesh. The laughter from the valley grew louder, closer, though no one had approached them. She sheathed the Fae blade at her hip, the cold metal settling against her thigh. She was cool-headed. She was intelligent. She could
navigate
a courtroom; she could
navigate
a hellish vineyard. But as she looked at the twisted trees, she felt the
weight
of the place settling on her shoulders. It was a place of hunger, and it had noticed them. "Stay close," Aurora said, her voice low. Nyx nodded, a ripple passing through their shadowy substance. "Always." They moved toward the trees, the ground soft beneath their feet, leaving no prints in the rich soil. Aurora kept her hand near the blade, her eyes on the amber horizon, waiting for the feast to begin.
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2/17/2026, 2:40:53 AM
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Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.0000%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
13
adverbTagCount
1
adverbTags
0
"Nyx said, drifting slightly ahead [slightly]"
66.8600%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)
wordCount
1207
totalAiIsmAdverbs
4
found
0
adverb
"quickly"
count
1
1
adverb
"slightly"
count
2
2
adverb
"softly"
count
1
highlights
0
"quickly"
1
"slightly"
2
"softly"
100.0000%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
17.1500%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)
wordCount
1207
totalAiIsms
10
found
0
word
"lurched"
count
1
1
word
"flickered"
count
1
2
word
"shimmered"
count
1
3
word
"oppressive"
count
1
4
word
"stark"
count
2
5
word
"weight"
count
1
6
word
"echoed"
count
1
7
word
"navigate"
count
2
highlights
0
"lurched"
1
"flickered"
2
"shimmered"
3
"oppressive"
4
"stark"
5
"weight"
6
"echoed"
7
"navigate"
100.0000%
Cliche density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
0
maxInWindow
0
found
(empty)
highlights
(empty)
100.0000%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
87
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Filter word density
Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
0
hedgeCount
2
narrationSentences
87
filterMatches
(empty)
hedgeMatches
0
"seemed to"
100.0000%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
1
totalSentences
97
matches
0
"have that luxury"
100.0000%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
31
mean
38.68
std
22.24
cv
0.575
sampleLengths
0
76
1
20
2
73
3
37
4
69
5
23
6
87
7
56
8
12
9
26
10
54
11
44
12
32
13
51
14
31
15
31
16
68
17
9
18
36
19
60
20
18
21
13
22
39
23
40
24
3
25
27
26
48
27
62
28
7
29
10
30
37
100.0000%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤5% passive sentences
passiveCount
1
totalSentences
87
matches
0
"was gone"
100.0000%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
2
totalVerbs
190
matches
0
"was intensifying"
1
"was glowing"
94.0000%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
1087
adjectiveStacks
1
stackExamples
0
"small crescent-shaped scar"
adverbCount
30
adverbRatio
0.027598896044158234
lyAdverbCount
12
lyAdverbRatio
0.011039558417663294
100.0000%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
97
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.0000%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
97
mean
12.36
std
5.71
cv
0.462
sampleLengths
0
19
1
22
2
16
3
19
4
15
5
5
6
9
7
12
8
7
9
12
10
22
11
11
12
14
13
23
14
16
15
5
16
15
17
18
18
12
19
3
20
9
21
14
22
7
23
7
24
13
25
15
26
20
27
25
28
7
29
21
30
22
31
6
32
12
33
3
34
16
35
7
36
18
37
15
38
8
39
13
40
9
41
15
42
20
43
12
44
20
45
16
46
18
47
17
48
21
49
10
51.5464%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
10
diversityRatio
0.3711340206185567
totalSentences
97
uniqueOpeners
36
1.9231%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
13
fancyCount
9
fancyTags
0
"Nyx whispered, the voice sounding like dry leaves skittering over pavement (whisper, sound like skitter)"
1
"Aurora said, her voice steady despite the adrenaline tightening her throat (say, tighten)"
2
"she admitted, though the word felt inadequate (admit, feel)"
3
"Nyx corrected, their violet eyes scanning the horizon (correct, scan)"
4
"Aurora said, forcing her mind into the analytical box she used for law exams (say, force mind use)"
5
"Nyx said, drifting slightly ahead (say, drift slightly)"
6
"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
7
"Nyx warned, their voice sharp (warn)"
8
"Nyx said, their form elongating as they stretched toward the twisted trees (say, elongate stretch)"
84.2047%