Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMQHBXT9HK7XXYMJ93WXQ3A

Run Details

Duration:
40.1s
Cost:
$0.006237
Provider:
Z.AI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The ancient oak standing stones rose from the earth like silent sentinels, their bark gnarled with centuries of growth. Aurora Carter paused before them, her bright blue eyes scanning the seemingly ordinary patch of Richmond Park. To any other visitor, it was just another stretch of green space, but Rory knew better. "Are you certain this is the place?" she asked, her fingers unconsciously brushing against the small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist. The Shadow known as Nyx shifted beside her, their form wavering like smoke. "The boundary is here," they whispered, their voice carried on the wind as if speaking from a distance. "Feel how the air changes." Rory took a breath and noticed it then—a subtle shift in temperature, a faint shimmering distortion that might have been heat haze to anyone else. But she knew it for what it was: a thinning of the Veil. Isolde Varga stepped forward, her silver hair catching the afternoon light despite being deep in the shade of the trees. The Half-Fae seer moved with an ethereal grace that seemed almost unnatural, and as Rory watched, she realized Isolde left no footprints in the soft earth. "The Grove has waited for you, Aurora Carter," Isolde said, her pale lavender eyes fixed on Rory. "Time flows differently within. What seems minutes here may be hours in the world outside, or perhaps days. The Fae do not measure moments as mortals do." Rory nodded, her hand instinctively reaching for the Heartstone Pendant hidden beneath her shirt. The deep crimson gemstone, roughly the size of her thumbnail, had begun to pulse with a faint warmth against her skin. She had discovered this reaction whenever she approached places where the Veil was thin. "Let's go then," Rory said, trying to sound more confident than she felt. "No point in keeping the Fae waiting." Nyx flowed forward, their shadowy form becoming momentarily solid as they passed between two of the standing stones. Rory followed, with Isolde bringing up the rear. As she crossed the invisible threshold, the world shifted. The air changed first—growing still and fragrant with the scent of flowers that shouldn't be blooming in late autumn. Rory blinked and found herself in a clearing that had not been there a moment before. Wildflowers carpeted the ground in impossible colors: blues so deep they seemed almost black, reds that glowed with inner light, and purples that shimmered as if dusted with starlight. "By the Ancients," Rory breathed, her cool-headed composure momentarily forgotten. Nyx had solidified fully, their faintly glowing violet eyes taking in everything. "This place exists between realms," they murmured. "I can feel the spaces between spaces." The sky above had changed too. Though they had entered on an overcast afternoon, the Grove was bathed in perpetual twilight, with no visible sun but an ambient light that cast no shadows. Ancient trees ringed the clearing, their trunks impossibly wide and twisted into shapes that seemed almost intentional—as if they had grown to please an unseen eye. Isolde moved through the wildflowers without disturbing a single petal. "The Grove remembers what the world has forgotten," she said cryptically. "Listen carefully, and it might share its secrets with you." Rory took a few steps forward, marveling at how the air seemed to sparkle with tiny lights like dust motes catching the sun, though there was no sun here. As she walked deeper into the Grove, she noticed that the Heartstone Pendant was growing warmer against her skin, its faint inner glow visible through her shirt. "What's happening to my pendant?" she asked, pulling it out to show the others. Isolde approached, her ageless face showing a rare expression of something like approval. "The Heartstone originates from Dymas, the realm of Gluttony in Hel. It recognizes the touch of Fae magic. The Veil is thin here, and the pendant responds to proximity of power." Nyx extended a shadowy tendril toward the pendant but stopped short of touching it. "It resonates with the spaces between realms, much as I do. A compass that points to weakness in the boundary." Rory tucked the pendant away again, her fingers brushing against the hilt of the Fae-Forged Blade tucked into her belt. The moonsilver dagger, a gift from Isolde, was always cold to the touch, but here in the Grove, it seemed to hum with latent energy. As they ventured further into the clearing, Rory noticed a path winding toward the center, marked by stones that glowed with a soft blue light. Without discussion, they followed it, the wildflowers parting before them like a welcoming crowd. The air grew stiller, the only sound being the soft crunch of earth beneath Rory's boots—Nyx made no sound at all as they moved, and Isolde seemed to glide above the ground rather than walk on it. At the center of the Grove stood a great tree, its trunk so wide it would take ten people holding hands to encircle it. Its branches reached upward into the twilight sky, disappearing into the unseen heights above. But what drew Rory's attention was the hollow at its base—a perfect archway leading into darkness within the tree. "The entrance to the Fae realm lies within," Isolde said, her voice barely above a whisper. "Few mortals have passed through it and returned unchanged." Rory felt a shiver run down her spine, part fear, part excitement. She had come a long way from her days studying Pre-Law in Cardiff, fleeing her abusive ex, and working as a delivery person. The world she had discovered—the hidden world of magic and realms—both terrified and fascinated her. Nyx flowed toward the archway, their form becoming less defined. "I can feel the pull of other realms. This tree is a nexus point, a place where the Veil is naturally thin." As if responding to Nyx's words, the Heartstone Pendant suddenly grew hot against Rory's chest. She gasped, pulling it out. The deep crimson gemstone was glowing brightly now, pulsing with a light that seemed to synchronize with the faint luminescence of the Fae-Forged Blade at her belt. "What's happening?" she asked, her voice tight. Isolde's lavender eyes widened with realization. "The convergence," she breathed. "It wasn't supposed to happen for another season. The Veil weakens prematurely." Nyx snapped back to solid form. "Something is coming through," they said, their voice urgent. "A rift point has opened." From the darkness within the tree, Rory could see it now—a faint distortion in the air, like heat haze but darker, somehow wrong. The air grew cold, and the wildflowers at the base of the tree began to wilt. "Draw your blade," Isolde commanded, her usual riddle-like speech replaced by urgency. Rory didn't hesitate. The moonsilver dagger slid from its sheath, its leaf-shaped blade glowing brighter in response to whatever was coming through the rift. It was always cold to the touch, but now it felt like holding ice. The distortion in the air grew larger, and with it came a smell—sulfur and something sweetly rotten, like overripe fruit left to rot in the sun. Rory had smelled it before, during her brief but terrifying encounter with a demon that had slipped through a tear in the Veil. "From Dymas," Nyx whispered, their form becoming indistinct again as if preparing to battle. Rory tightened her grip on the Fae-Forged Blade, its magic humming against her palm. The Heartstone Pendant pulsed in time with the growing rift, as if trying to communicate something she couldn't understand. The shadows within the tree's hollow deepened, and for a moment, Rory thought she saw eyes forming in the darkness—eyes that burned with a hungry, intelligent light. Something was trying to cross over, something from the realm of Gluttony, of excess and indulgence. "Stand together," Isolde said, her silver hair stirring though there was no wind. "The Grove may hide us, or it may reveal us. The Fae do not distinguish between friend and foe when intruders cross the threshold." Rory stood her ground, the cool-headed intelligence that had served her well in dangerous situations now fully engaged. She had fled one nightmare only to discover another, but she wasn't running anymore. Whatever was trying to cross over from Dymas, she would face it with the Fae-forged magic in her hands and the unlikely allies at her side. The rift widened, and the first hint of something beyond—a clawed hand, reaching through the Veil—emerged from the darkness. The wildflowers around the base of the tree blackened and died where it touched. Rory raised the blade, its moonsilver glow casting dancing shadows across her determined face. The wonder of the Fae Grove had turned to danger, and the exploration had become a defense of the boundary between worlds.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags15
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"she said cryptically [cryptically]"
dialogueSentences27
tagDensity0.556
leniency1
rawRatio0.067
effectiveRatio0.067
86.35% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1465
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"carefully"
count1
1
adverb"barely above a whisper"
count1
2
adverb"suddenly"
count1
3
adverb"sweetly"
count1
highlights
0"carefully"
1"barely above a whisper"
2"suddenly"
3"sweetly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
55.63% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1465
totalAiIsms13
found
0
word"sentinels"
count1
1
word"scanning"
count1
2
word"wavering"
count1
3
word"pulse"
count1
4
word"warmth"
count1
5
word"shimmered"
count1
6
word"perfect"
count1
7
word"whisper"
count1
8
word"down her spine"
count1
9
word"encounter"
count1
10
word"pulsed"
count1
11
word"dancing"
count1
12
word"determined"
count1
highlights
0"sentinels"
1"scanning"
2"wavering"
3"pulse"
4"warmth"
5"shimmered"
6"perfect"
7"whisper"
8"down her spine"
9"encounter"
10"pulsed"
11"dancing"
12"determined"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes widened"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences76
matches
0"felt a shiver"
48.87% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount5
narrationSentences76
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences88
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen38
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1453
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions16
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
50.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions84
wordCount1208
uniqueNames21
maxNameDensity1.9
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Carter1
Richmond1
Park1
Rory23
Shadow1
Nyx9
Veil4
Varga1
Half-Fae1
Isolde12
Heartstone4
Pendant4
Grove5
Fae-Forged3
Blade3
Pre-Law1
Cardiff1
Gluttony1
Dymas1
Fae-forged1
Fae6
persons
0"Carter"
1"Rory"
2"Shadow"
3"Nyx"
4"Varga"
5"Isolde"
6"Pendant"
7"Blade"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Veil"
3"Grove"
4"Cardiff"
5"Dymas"
6"Fae"
globalScore0.548
windowScore0.5
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences69
glossingSentenceCount11
matches
0"s scanning the seemingly ordinary patch of R"
1"as if speaking from a distance"
2"seemed almost unnatural and as Rory watched, she realized Isolde left no footprints in the soft earth"
3"seemed almost black reds that glowed with inner light, and purples that shimmered as if dusted with starlight"
4"seemed almost intentional as if they had grown to please an unseen eye"
5"something like approval"
6"As if responding to Nyx's words, the Heartstone Pendant suddenly grew hot against Rory's chest"
7"light that seemed to synchronize with the faint luminescence of the Fae-Forged Blade at her belt"
8"felt like holding ice"
9"as if preparing to battle"
10"as if trying to communicate something she couldn't understand"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.688
wordCount1453
matches
0"no visible sun but"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences88
matches
0"noticed that the"
69.63% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs40
mean36.33
std14.3
cv0.394
sampleLengths
052
122
236
338
446
544
649
720
835
964
1010
1126
1259
1331
1456
1514
1644
1734
1845
1939
2037
2157
2225
2350
2432
2547
267
2722
2820
2939
3012
3138
3249
3314
3433
3543
3637
3758
3833
3936
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences76
matches
0"was bathed"
33.33% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount5
totalVerbs200
matches
0"was glowing"
1"was coming"
2"was trying"
3"wasn't running"
4"was trying"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount12
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences10
totalSentences88
ratio0.114
matches
0"Rory took a breath and noticed it then—a subtle shift in temperature, a faint shimmering distortion that might have been heat haze to anyone else."
1"The air changed first—growing still and fragrant with the scent of flowers that shouldn't be blooming in late autumn."
2"Ancient trees ringed the clearing, their trunks impossibly wide and twisted into shapes that seemed almost intentional—as if they had grown to please an unseen eye."
3"The air grew stiller, the only sound being the soft crunch of earth beneath Rory's boots—Nyx made no sound at all as they moved, and Isolde seemed to glide above the ground rather than walk on it."
4"But what drew Rory's attention was the hollow at its base—a perfect archway leading into darkness within the tree."
5"The world she had discovered—the hidden world of magic and realms—both terrified and fascinated her."
6"From the darkness within the tree, Rory could see it now—a faint distortion in the air, like heat haze but darker, somehow wrong."
7"The distortion in the air grew larger, and with it came a smell—sulfur and something sweetly rotten, like overripe fruit left to rot in the sun."
8"The shadows within the tree's hollow deepened, and for a moment, Rory thought she saw eyes forming in the darkness—eyes that burned with a hungry, intelligent light."
9"The rift widened, and the first hint of something beyond—a clawed hand, reaching through the Veil—emerged from the darkness."
88.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1230
adjectiveStacks2
stackExamples
0"small crescent-shaped scar"
1"growing warmer against her"
adverbCount43
adverbRatio0.034959349593495934
lyAdverbCount18
lyAdverbRatio0.014634146341463415
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences88
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences88
mean16.51
std7.24
cv0.438
sampleLengths
019
117
216
322
413
518
65
725
813
920
1026
1117
1227
1314
1421
1514
1613
177
1818
198
209
2119
2216
2329
2410
2512
267
277
286
2927
3026
3110
3211
3310
3429
3527
3614
3713
3831
3914
4020
4120
4225
4325
4414
4537
4624
4714
4819
4916
57.95% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats4
diversityRatio0.375
totalSentences88
uniqueOpeners33
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences74
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount12
totalSentences74
matches
0"she asked, her fingers unconsciously"
1"they whispered, their voice carried"
2"She had discovered this reaction"
3"she said cryptically"
4"she asked, pulling it out"
5"Its branches reached upward into"
6"She had come a long"
7"She gasped, pulling it out."
8"she asked, her voice tight"
9"they said, their voice urgent"
10"It was always cold to"
11"She had fled one nightmare"
ratio0.162
41.08% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount62
totalSentences74
matches
0"The ancient oak standing stones"
1"Aurora Carter paused before them,"
2"she asked, her fingers unconsciously"
3"The Shadow known as Nyx"
4"they whispered, their voice carried"
5"Rory took a breath and"
6"Isolde Varga stepped forward, her"
7"The Half-Fae seer moved with"
8"Isolde said, her pale lavender"
9"Rory nodded, her hand instinctively"
10"The deep crimson gemstone, roughly"
11"She had discovered this reaction"
12"Rory said, trying to sound"
13"Nyx flowed forward, their shadowy"
14"Rory followed, with Isolde bringing"
15"The air changed first—growing still"
16"Rory blinked and found herself"
17"Wildflowers carpeted the ground in"
18"Rory breathed, her cool-headed composure"
19"Nyx had solidified fully, their"
ratio0.838
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount3
totalSentences74
matches
0"To any other visitor, it"
1"Though they had entered on"
2"As if responding to Nyx's"
ratio0.041
10.58% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences54
technicalSentenceCount10
matches
0"Rory took a breath and noticed it then—a subtle shift in temperature, a faint shimmering distortion that might have been heat haze to anyone else."
1"The Half-Fae seer moved with an ethereal grace that seemed almost unnatural, and as Rory watched, she realized Isolde left no footprints in the soft earth."
2"The air changed first—growing still and fragrant with the scent of flowers that shouldn't be blooming in late autumn."
3"Wildflowers carpeted the ground in impossible colors: blues so deep they seemed almost black, reds that glowed with inner light, and purples that shimmered as i…"
4"Ancient trees ringed the clearing, their trunks impossibly wide and twisted into shapes that seemed almost intentional—as if they had grown to please an unseen …"
5"As if responding to Nyx's words, the Heartstone Pendant suddenly grew hot against Rory's chest."
6"The deep crimson gemstone was glowing brightly now, pulsing with a light that seemed to synchronize with the faint luminescence of the Fae-Forged Blade at her b…"
7"The Heartstone Pendant pulsed in time with the growing rift, as if trying to communicate something she couldn't understand."
8"The shadows within the tree's hollow deepened, and for a moment, Rory thought she saw eyes forming in the darkness—eyes that burned with a hungry, intelligent l…"
9"Rory stood her ground, the cool-headed intelligence that had served her well in dangerous situations now fully engaged."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags15
uselessAdditionCount6
matches
0"Isolde said, her pale lavender eyes fixed on Rory"
1"Rory said, trying to sound more confident than she felt"
2"Isolde said, her voice barely above a whisper"
3"she asked, her voice tight"
4"they said, their voice urgent"
5"Nyx whispered, their form becoming indistinct again as if preparing to battle"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags14
fancyCount5
fancyTags
0"they whispered (whisper)"
1"Rory breathed (breathe)"
2"they murmured (murmur)"
3"she breathed (breathe)"
4"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences27
tagDensity0.519
leniency1
rawRatio0.357
effectiveRatio0.357
68.0477%