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Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMQP3C0EFB55NZADSJAA3JX
Run Details
Model:
Z.AI GLM 4.7
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Thriller: chase through city streets
Duration:
1m 7s
Cost:
$0.010601
Provider:
Parasail
Evaluation summary
Score
Evaluator
Details Link
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
(details)
84.55%
AI-ism adverb frequency
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism character names
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
(details)
53.65%
AI-ism word frequency
(details)
100.00%
Cliché density
(details)
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
(details)
100.00%
Filter word density
(details)
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
(details)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
(details)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
(details)
80.56%
Name drop frequency
(details)
100.00%
Narrator intent-glossing
(details)
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
(details)
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
(details)
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
(details)
95.72%
Passive voice overuse
(details)
0.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
(details)
0.00%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
(details)
100.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
(details)
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
(details)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
(details)
35.99%
Sentence opener variety
(details)
24.15%
Adverb-first sentence starts
(details)
48.99%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
(details)
14.35%
Subject-first sentence starts
(details)
0.00%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
(details)
87.05%
Technical jargon density
(details)
0.00%
Useless dialogue additions
(details)
0.00%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
(details)
70.8332%
Overall
Model input
System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
Model response
Messages
Meta
AI
Rain hammered against the pavement of Soho, a relentless, grey curtain that turned the streetlights into smeared halos of neon and sodium.
Detective Harlow Quinn didn't feel
the cold anymore.
She was running on pure
adrenaline and the lingering, bitter aftertaste of failure. Three years of failure, if she was honest with herself. Three years since Morris died in that damp, locked room with no explanation and no witnesses. Tonight, she had a witness. Sort of. Fifty yards ahead, Tomás Herrera
was sprinting
. He moved with a fluid, desperate grace, cutting through the puddles like he
was trying
to outrun his own shadow. Quinn knew his file: ex-paramedic, discharged for 'unauthorized procedures,' now the off-books fixer for a clique of criminals who operated just below the radar of the Met.
He wasn't a killer, at
least
not on paper, but he was the key
. The link. "Herrera!"
Quinn bellowed, her voice lost
in the drumming of the storm. "Stop! Metropolitan Police!" He didn't even look back.
He just ducked around the
corner of a brick Victorian tenement, his dark coat flapping behind him like a broken wing.
Quinn pursued, her boots skidding
on the slick cobblestones.
Her breath hitched in her
chest, a sharp burn that she ignored through sheer force of will.
She checked her watch—a battered
leather thing she’d worn through eighteen years of service—as she ran.
It was past two in
the morning. The streets were largely deserted, save for the rats and the desperate.
She rounded the corner, her
hand hovering over the grip of her service weapon.
The alleyway was narrow, choked
with refuse bags and the smell of rot.
Herrera was scaling a chain-link
fence at the far end, his movements practiced.
He vaulted over the top
with an athleticism that belied his lanky frame. Quinn hit the fence running.
She didn't bother with the
gate; she grabbed the cold metal mesh, hauled herself up, and swung over the top, landing hard on the other side. Her knees absorbed the shock, and she was moving again before the pain could register. She
was gaining
on him.
They burst out onto a
wider street near Camden. The traffic here was lighter, the air thick with the scent of the nearby canal and wet asphalt. Herrera made a sharp right, disappearing down a flight of stone stairs that led toward the Underground. Quinn hesitated for a fraction of a second. The tube station entrance
was boarded
up— condemned, slated for renovation years ago and forgotten by the council. There was no light, just the gaping
maw
of a tunnel leading into the dark underbelly of the city. "Damn it,"
she hissed, plunging down the
stairs after him. The air down here was different.
It was heavier, cooler, and
smelled of ozone and something ancient, like wet earth and old copper. The sound of the rain faded to a distant thrum, replaced by the
echo
of her own
footsteps
and the
rhythmic
slap of Herrera’s retreating pace. The tunnel stretched out before her, curved walls of brick
glistening
with moisture. Emergency lights
flickered
at intervals, bathing the corridor in a sickly, strobing yellow. Quinn slowed her pace, transitioning from a sprint to a tactical crouch.
She knew better than to
rush blindly into the dark. Morris had taught her that. Morris had taught her a lot of things before whatever-it-
was took
him. Up ahead, the tunnel widened. Herrera stopped running. Quinn pressed her back against the damp wall, inching forward.
She peered around the curve
of the brickwork. Herrera
was standing
before a heavy iron gate that blocked the rest of the tunnel.
It wasn't standard Transport for
London issue. The iron was wrought with twisting, disturbing patterns that looked almost organic, like roots thorns. Standing on the other side of the gate was a silhouette—a man, or something shaped like one, draped in a heavy cloak. Herrera
was talking
to him, his voice low and urgent. Quinn couldn't make out the words, but she saw the desperation in his posture.
He reached into his jacket
and pulled something out—a small, white object. He held it up to the
gloom
. A token. It looked like bone. The figure in the cloak took it, inspected it, then produced a heavy ring of keys. The gate groaned open, the sound of grinding metal
echoing
painfully loud in the confined space. Herrera slipped through, and the gate
began to
swing shut. Quinn moved. She sprinted the last twenty yards, covering the distance in seconds. "Police!" she shouted, leveling her weapon at the figure by the gate. "Open it!" The cloaked figure didn't flinch. It didn't even turn its head. The iron gate slammed shut with a finality that
vibrated
through the soles of Quinn's boots. She skidded to a halt, breathless, the muzzle of her Glock steady despite the heaving of her chest. "Step away from the gate,"
she ordered, her voice hard
. The figure turned
slowly
. Under the hood, there was no face—just a shifting shadow, a void where features should have been. It looked at her, or through her, with a gaze that
felt like ice water down her spine
. "Turn back, Detective,"
the figure rasped, its voice sounding like two stones grinding together
. "You have no coin here." Quinn’s jaw tightened. She looked past the creature at the darkness where Herrera had vanished. This was it. The Veil Market. She’d heard whispers of it in interrogations,
fragmented
mentions in the case files of suicides and missing persons. A hidden place for things that shouldn't exist. The clique’s playground. She was a cop. Her jurisdiction was London. The solid, real world of flesh and blood, laws and order. This wasn't that. This was the unknown. This was the thing that had killed Morris. But Herrera was in there. And if he was in there, he
was connected
to them. She looked at the iron bars. They were cold, rusted, impregnable. The figure stood like a gargoyle, blocking the way. "I'm not leaving without him,"
Quinn said, her thumb clicking the safety catch off
. The shadow-thing laughed, a dry, rattling sound. "Then you will die with him." Quinn lowered her weapon
slightly
, her mind
racing
. Brute force wouldn't open this gate. Bullets would likely pass right through that thing. She needed an edge. She needed to think like they did. She stepped back, keeping her eyes on the guard, and
scanned
the walls. The market moved every full moon, the file had said. It moved, but it always left a trace. She looked down at the ground near the threshold of the gate. There, in the grime between the flagstones, was a faint residue. Powdered chalk. Salt. Her eyes darted back to the guard. He hadn't moved. He was confident. Arrogant. Quinn holstered her weapon. The sudden lack of a gun
seemed to
confuse the figure; its head tilted
slightly
. "You're right,"
she said, her voice dropping, losing the aggressive command tone
. "I don't have a coin." She took a step closer, raising her hands
slowly
, palms open. It was a gesture of surrender, but her eyes
were locked
on the mechanism of the lock. It was old. Old iron. Old mechanics. "But I have information," she lied smoothly. "The one who just passed. Tomás. He's compromised. He's being followed. If you let him in there, he leads the law right to your doorstep." The figure paused. The shadows under the hood swirled. "Tomás is trusted," it said, but there was a
flicker
of hesitation now. "Tomás is terrified," Quinn countered, stepping closer still, within arm's reach of the bars. "I saw his face. He’s running from something worse than me. You want a market that stays secret? You need to know what he’s bringing in with him." It was a gamble. A massive, reckless gamble. But it was the only card she had left. The creature stepped closer to the bars. The air grew colder, smelling of ozone and decay. "What do you know of the burden?" "I know he didn't have it when he left the Raven's Nest," Quinn said, improvising, pulling the name of the bar out of the air. She knew Herrera frequented the place. "But he picked something up. Something hot." The shadow-figure stared at her for a long, agonizing moment. Quinn held her breath, her heart hammering against her ribs like a trapped bird. She
was walking
a razor's edge between police work and madness.
Slowly, agonizingly, the figure reached
into its robes. Quinn tensed, ready to draw her weapon if necessary. But instead of a weapon, it pulled out a small, chitinous object—a token, similar to Herrera's, but darker, stained. "Enter," the figure rasped, sliding a small panel aside in the gate. "But know this, Detective. The Veil takes a toll from all who enter without respect. If you lie, you pay in blood." Quinn didn't hesitate. She grabbed the cold iron bars, slipped through the gap the moment it was wide enough, and plunged into the darkness beyond. She didn't look back at the guard. She didn't look at the iron gate as it clanged shut behind her, sealing her in. She looked forward, down the long, torch-lit tunnel that sloped downward, away from London, away from the world she knew. Ahead, she could see the faint glow of unnatural light. She could hear the murmur of a hundred voices, speaking in tongues she didn't recognize. The smell hit her then—incense, spoiled meat, and copper. She tightened the strap on her vest, checked the leather
watch
on her wrist, and started walking. She was off the map now. She was in the Veil.
created_at
"2026-02-17T02:44:25.839064+00:00"
2/17/2026, 2:44:25 AM
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generation_time
67040
tokens_prompt
914
tokens_completion
5338
native_tokens_prompt
812
native_tokens_completion
4874
native_tokens_completion_images
(null)
native_tokens_reasoning
2910
native_tokens_cached
4
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num_input_audio_prompt
(null)
num_media_completion
0
num_search_results
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false
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"stop"
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"stop"
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0.0106008
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0
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"4066cd8db2554dcd947dda7baf6febfe"
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200
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360
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Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
13
adverbTagCount
1
adverbTags
0
"she lied smoothly [smoothly]"
dialogueSentences
22
tagDensity
0.591
leniency
1
rawRatio
0.077
effectiveRatio
0.077
84.55%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount
1618
totalAiIsmAdverbs
5
found
0
adverb
"slowly"
count
3
1
adverb
"slightly"
count
2
highlights
0
"slowly"
1
"slightly"
100.00%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
53.65%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount
1618
totalAiIsms
15
found
0
word
"maw"
count
1
1
word
"echo"
count
1
2
word
"footsteps"
count
1
3
word
"rhythmic"
count
1
4
word
"glistening"
count
1
5
word
"flickered"
count
1
6
word
"standard"
count
1
7
word
"gloom"
count
1
8
word
"echoing"
count
1
9
word
"vibrated"
count
1
10
word
"down her spine"
count
1
11
word
"fragmented"
count
1
12
word
"racing"
count
1
13
word
"scanned"
count
1
14
word
"flicker"
count
1
highlights
0
"maw"
1
"echo"
2
"footsteps"
3
"rhythmic"
4
"glistening"
5
"flickered"
6
"standard"
7
"gloom"
8
"echoing"
9
"vibrated"
10
"down her spine"
11
"fragmented"
12
"racing"
13
"scanned"
14
"flicker"
100.00%
Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
0
maxInWindow
0
found
(empty)
highlights
(empty)
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
147
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
2
hedgeCount
2
narrationSentences
147
filterMatches
0
"watch"
hedgeMatches
0
"began to"
1
"seemed to"
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences
157
gibberishSentences
0
adjustedGibberishSentences
0
longSentenceCount
0
runOnParagraphCount
0
giantParagraphCount
0
wordSaladCount
0
repetitionLoopCount
0
controlTokenCount
0
maxSentenceWordsSeen
28
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans
0
markdownWords
0
totalWords
1612
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions
11
unquotedAttributions
0
matches
(empty)
80.56%
Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions
50
wordCount
1440
uniqueNames
14
maxNameDensity
1.39
worstName
"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity
2.5
worstWindowName
"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Soho
1
Harlow
1
Quinn
20
Morris
4
Tomás
1
Herrera
12
Victorian
1
Camden
1
Underground
1
Transport
1
London
3
Glock
1
Veil
2
Market
1
persons
0
"Harlow"
1
"Quinn"
2
"Morris"
3
"Tomás"
4
"Herrera"
5
"Market"
places
0
"Soho"
1
"Camden"
2
"Underground"
3
"London"
4
"Veil"
globalScore
0.806
windowScore
0.833
100.00%
Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences
106
glossingSentenceCount
1
matches
0
"felt like ice water down her spine"
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches
1
per1kWords
0.62
wordCount
1612
matches
0
"not on paper, but he was the key"
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
0
totalSentences
157
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
52
mean
31
std
17.4
cv
0.561
sampleLengths
0
69
1
7
2
70
3
15
4
26
5
61
6
53
7
46
8
5
9
44
10
45
11
10
12
49
13
65
14
8
15
18
16
59
17
43
18
6
19
42
20
13
21
14
22
27
23
28
24
39
25
19
26
50
27
34
28
16
29
20
30
14
31
13
32
33
33
57
34
14
35
19
36
17
37
35
38
32
39
9
40
13
41
42
42
17
43
23
44
38
45
35
46
36
47
34
48
25
49
43
95.72%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount
4
totalSentences
147
matches
0
"was boarded"
1
"was took"
2
"was connected"
3
"were locked"
0.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
8
totalVerbs
253
matches
0
"was running"
1
"was sprinting"
2
"was trying"
3
"was scaling"
4
"was gaining"
5
"was standing"
6
"was talking"
7
"was walking"
0.00%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount
8
semicolonCount
2
flaggedSentences
9
totalSentences
157
ratio
0.057
matches
0
"She checked her watch—a battered leather thing she’d worn through eighteen years of service—as she ran."
1
"She didn't bother with the gate; she grabbed the cold metal mesh, hauled herself up, and swung over the top, landing hard on the other side."
2
"The tube station entrance was boarded up— condemned, slated for renovation years ago and forgotten by the council."
3
"Standing on the other side of the gate was a silhouette—a man, or something shaped like one, draped in a heavy cloak."
4
"He reached into his jacket and pulled something out—a small, white object."
5
"Under the hood, there was no face—just a shifting shadow, a void where features should have been."
6
"The sudden lack of a gun seemed to confuse the figure; its head tilted slightly."
7
"But instead of a weapon, it pulled out a small, chitinous object—a token, similar to Herrera's, but darker, stained."
8
"The smell hit her then—incense, spoiled meat, and copper."
100.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
221
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
7
adverbRatio
0.03167420814479638
lyAdverbCount
0
lyAdverbRatio
0
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
157
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
157
mean
10.27
std
6.17
cv
0.601
sampleLengths
0
22
1
8
2
13
3
10
4
16
5
5
6
2
7
7
8
20
9
27
10
14
11
2
12
12
13
3
14
5
15
21
16
9
17
17
18
16
19
7
20
12
21
14
22
13
23
13
24
13
25
5
26
26
27
15
28
5
29
9
30
18
31
17
32
8
33
18
34
19
35
10
36
6
37
17
38
26
39
13
40
13
41
12
42
10
43
5
44
12
45
5
46
3
47
10
48
8
49
15
35.99%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
22
diversityRatio
0.2802547770700637
totalSentences
157
uniqueOpeners
44
24.15%
Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount
1
totalSentences
138
matches
0
"Slowly, agonizingly, the figure reached"
ratio
0.007
48.99%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount
59
totalSentences
138
matches
0
"She was running on pure"
1
"He moved with a fluid,"
2
"He wasn't a killer, at"
3
"He didn't even look back."
4
"He just ducked around the"
5
"Her breath hitched in her"
6
"She checked her watch—a battered"
7
"It was past two in"
8
"She rounded the corner, her"
9
"He vaulted over the top"
10
"She didn't bother with the"
11
"Her knees absorbed the shock,"
12
"She was gaining on him."
13
"They burst out onto a"
14
"she hissed, plunging down the"
15
"It was heavier, cooler, and"
16
"She knew better than to"
17
"She peered around the curve"
18
"It wasn't standard Transport for"
19
"He reached into his jacket"
ratio
0.428
14.35%
Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount
123
totalSentences
138
matches
0
"Detective Harlow Quinn didn't feel"
1
"She was running on pure"
2
"Tonight, she had a witness."
3
"He moved with a fluid,"
4
"Quinn knew his file: ex-paramedic,"
5
"He wasn't a killer, at"
6
"Quinn bellowed, her voice lost"
7
"He didn't even look back."
8
"He just ducked around the"
9
"Quinn pursued, her boots skidding"
10
"Her breath hitched in her"
11
"She checked her watch—a battered"
12
"It was past two in"
13
"The streets were largely deserted,"
14
"She rounded the corner, her"
15
"The alleyway was narrow, choked"
16
"Herrera was scaling a chain-link"
17
"He vaulted over the top"
18
"Quinn hit the fence running."
19
"She didn't bother with the"
ratio
0.891
0.00%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount
0
totalSentences
138
matches
(empty)
ratio
0
87.05%
Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences
64
technicalSentenceCount
5
matches
0
"Rain hammered against the pavement of Soho, a relentless, grey curtain that turned the streetlights into smeared halos of neon and sodium."
1
"Herrera made a sharp right, disappearing down a flight of stone stairs that led toward the Underground."
2
"The iron was wrought with twisting, disturbing patterns that looked almost organic, like roots thorns."
3
"It looked at her, or through her, with a gaze that felt like ice water down her spine."
4
"She looked forward, down the long, torch-lit tunnel that sloped downward, away from London, away from the world she knew."
0.00%
Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags
13
uselessAdditionCount
4
matches
0
"she ordered, her voice hard"
1
"the figure rasped, its voice sounding like two stones grinding together"
2
"Quinn said, her thumb clicking the safety catch off"
3
"she said, her voice dropping, losing the aggressive command tone"
0.00%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
9
fancyCount
5
fancyTags
0
"Quinn bellowed (bellow)"
1
"she hissed (hiss)"
2
"she shouted (shout)"
3
"she ordered (order)"
4
"she lied smoothly (lie)"
dialogueSentences
22
tagDensity
0.409
leniency
0.818
rawRatio
0.556
effectiveRatio
0.455
70.8332%