Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMQS883XDM32V5M0BMPK77D

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Duration:
33.9s
Cost:
$0.005598
Provider:
Alibaba

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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The air inside the grove did not smell like Richmond Park. Outside the ring of ancient oaks, the London winter bit with a damp, grey chill that settled into the bones, but here, the atmosphere hummed with a heavy, cloying sweetness. It smelled of crushed petals and ozone, a scent so thick it coated the back of Aurora's throat. She paused just beyond the threshold, her hand instinctively drifting to the small crescent scar on her left wrist, a nervous tic she'd never quite shaken since the days with Evan. The memory of his shouting felt distant here, muffled by the sheer weight of the silence. "Stay close," Rory murmured, though her voice sounded thin against the stillness. "And don't touch anything." Behind her, Nyx shifted. The Shade did not walk so much as flow, their six-foot-two frame dissolving at the edges into tendrils of living shadow before coalescing again. Their violet eyes glowed faintly in the dim light, cutting through the twilight that seemed perpetual within the clearing. "The boundary is thin here, Rory," Nyx whispered, their voice sounding like dry leaves skittering over stone. "Thinner than the Veil in the city. I can hear the spaces between realms breathing." Rory tightened her grip on the strap of her delivery bag, though she carried no food tonight. Instead, her fingers brushed the cold hilt of the dagger tucked into her belt. Isolde's gift. The moonsilver felt unnaturally frigid against her palm, leaching the warmth from her skin even through her glove. It was a slender, leaf-shaped thing, beautiful and deadly, and it pulsed with a faint, rhythmic luminescence that matched the erratic beating of her own heart. They moved deeper into the grove. The ground beneath their boots was not the muddy, trodden earth of the public park but a carpet of moss so vibrant it seemed to generate its own light. Wildflowers bloomed in chaotic bursts of color—violets, crimsons, and golds that had no business existing in a British December. Some of the blooms turned their heads as Rory passed, tracking her movement with a slow, vegetal intelligence that made the hair on her arms stand up. "Time feels wrong," Rory said, stopping to check her watch. The second hand was ticking backward. She tapped the glass face, frowning. "Isolde said an hour in here could be minutes out there. Or days." "Or years," Nyx corrected, their form flickering as they stepped into a patch of deeper shadow cast by a twisting willow. "Do not linger too long, Laila. The Fae do not measure time as we do, and they do not pity those who lose track of it." Rory flinched at the use of her middle name, a relic from a life she tried to keep buried under the persona of the cool-headed delivery girl. She forced herself to breathe, to engage the logical part of her brain that had helped her navigate law exams and abusive relationships alike. assess the environment. Identify exits. Note threats. The trees here were not merely oaks; they were towering sentinels with bark that shimmered like polished silver. Their branches wove together overhead to form a lattice that blocked out the London sky, replacing it with a swirling nebula of soft, pearlescent light. There was no sun, yet the grove was bathed in a gentle, directionless illumination that cast no harsh shadows, save for the one that was Nyx. Ahead, the path opened into a small clearing dominated by a pool of water so still it looked like a sheet of black glass. Standing beside it was Isolde. The Seer had not moved since they entered, yet she seemed to have been waiting for them specifically at this spot for centuries. Her silver hair cascaded down to her waist, catching the ambient light and turning it into a halo. She wore robes that seemed woven from spider silk and starlight, shifting colors with every slight turn of her body. As Isolde turned to face them, her pale lavender eyes locked onto Rory's bright blue ones. There was no pupil, no iris, just a swirling depth of amethyst that seemed to look straight through Rory's skin and muscle, right into the frantic machinery of her soul. "You come bearing steel and stone," Isolde said. Her voice was melodic, layered with an echo that suggested many voices speaking in unison. "The cold iron of the Courts and the heated heart of Dymas. A curious pairing for a mortal girl who delivers noodles in the rain." Rory stepped forward, her boots making no sound on the flowered ground. She noticed with a jolt of unease that Isolde left no footprints. Where the Seer stepped, the grass merely bent and then sprang back, untouched. "Isolde," Rory said, keeping her tone level. "We need to know about the rifts. The Wardens say the Veil is weakening ahead of the solstice. We saw the distortions near the Thames." Isolde tilted her head, a bird-like gesture. "The Veil breathes, child. It expands and contracts like a lung. To say it weakens is to say the tide recedes. It is not a flaw; it is a rhythm. But you... you feel the pull of the deep water, do you not?" The Seer's gaze dropped to Rory's chest. Under her jacket, the Heartstone pendant rested against her sternum. Even through the layers of fabric, Rory could feel it pulsing, a warm, rhythmic thrum that contradicted the cold bite of the Fae blade at her hip. The artifact from Dymas, the realm of gluttony, reacted violently to the proximity of the Fae realm. It grew hot, almost burning, while the dagger grew colder, frost beginning to creep up the hilt and bite into Rory's fingertips. "It hurts," Rory admitted, gritting her teeth as the conflicting energies waged war against her ribcage. "The pendant. It's reacting to this place." "Opposites attract, and like repels like," Isolde recited, her expression unreadable. "The hunger of Hel and the elegance of Faerie are oil and water. You carry both within your orbit, Aurora Carter. That is why the shadows cling to you, and why the light burns you." Nyx drifted closer to the pool, their reflection absent from the black water. "She is a anchor," the Shade whispered, the wind in their voice picking up an edge of urgency. "The rituals of 1643 taught me that much. When the barriers thin, the anchors hold the worlds apart, or they drag them together. Which is she, Seer?" Isolde smiled, a expression that held too many teeth to be entirely human. "I cannot lie, Shadow-walker. You know this compulsion of my blood. But truth is a prism, and you are looking at only one facet." She reached out a long, slender finger, hovering it inches from Rory's chest without touching the pendant. "The girl is neither anchor nor hammer. She is the key. And keys are meant to be turned." A sudden gust of wind tore through the grove, though the trees above did not sway. The wildflowers bowed low, their petals trembling. The pearlescent light overhead fractured, turning a sickly shade of amber for a split second—the color of the sky in Dymas—before snapping back to silver. Rory stumbled, clutching her chest as the Heartstone flared with intense heat. The warmth spread through her veins, a sudden, overwhelming sense of hunger that had nothing to do with food. She saw flashes of sprawling vineyards under an amber sun, of grand feasts where the guests wore masks of bone, of a prince who slept while the world burned. Then the cold of the blade cut through the vision, grounding her. "Stop it," Rory gasped, doubling over. "Make it stop." "The world is pressing in, Rory," Isolde said softly, her riddles falling away to reveal a stark warning. "The solstice approaches. The Wardens monitor the tears, but they cannot seal the wound if the blood keeps flowing. You must choose which realm you serve, or you will be torn between them until there is nothing left but a shadow and a scar." Rory straightened, forcing her breathing to slow. She looked at her companions: the ageless Shade trapped between existence and nothingness, and the exiled Seer bound by truth she could not fully speak. Then she looked down at her own hands, one marked by a childhood accident, the other gripping a weapon from a court that viewed humans as playthings. "I'm not serving anyone," Rory said, her voice steadying, the cool-headed strategist reasserting control over the恐惧. "I'm just trying to keep my world from eating itself. If that makes me a key, fine. But I decide which door it opens." Isolde's lavender eyes widened, perhaps in surprise, perhaps in approval. For the first time, the Seer left a mark on the earth; a single silver leaf drifted from her hair and landed on the moss, rotting instantly into dust. "Then walk carefully, child of Cardiff," Isolde whispered, turning back to the black pool. "For the door you seek is already opening, and what lies on the other side is far hungrier than you can imagine." The amber flicker returned to the sky, lasting longer this time. The scent of exotic spices and roasting meat briefly overpowered the floral sweetness, a ghost of Dymas bleeding into the Fae Grove. Rory tightened her grip on the Fae blade, feeling its cold comfort, and stepped forward into the deepening twilight.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags14
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Isolde said softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences29
tagDensity0.483
leniency0.966
rawRatio0.071
effectiveRatio0.069
93.64% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1573
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"softly"
count1
1
adverb"carefully"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
1"carefully"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
36.43% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1573
totalAiIsms20
found
0
word"chill"
count1
1
word"weight"
count1
2
word"silence"
count1
3
word"warmth"
count2
4
word"pulsed"
count1
5
word"rhythmic"
count2
6
word"chaotic"
count1
7
word"navigate"
count1
8
word"sentinels"
count1
9
word"shimmered"
count1
10
word"silk"
count1
11
word"echo"
count1
12
word"could feel"
count1
13
word"unreadable"
count1
14
word"fractured"
count1
15
word"sense of"
count1
16
word"stark"
count1
17
word"flicker"
count1
highlights
0"chill"
1"weight"
2"silence"
3"warmth"
4"pulsed"
5"rhythmic"
6"chaotic"
7"navigate"
8"sentinels"
9"shimmered"
10"silk"
11"echo"
12"could feel"
13"unreadable"
14"fractured"
15"sense of"
16"stark"
17"flicker"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes widened"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells2
narrationSentences75
matches
0"a jolt of unease"
1"s in surprise"
47.62% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount4
narrationSentences75
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"tried to"
95.79% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences90
gibberishSentences1
adjustedGibberishSentences1
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen44
ratio0.011
matches
0"\"I'm not serving anyone,\" Rory said, her voice steadying, the cool-headed strategist reasserting control over the恐惧."
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1570
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions14
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
33.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions61
wordCount1165
uniqueNames16
maxNameDensity1.63
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity4
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Richmond1
Park1
London2
Aurora1
Evan1
Nyx5
Shade3
Rory19
British1
December1
Isolde11
Seer5
Heartstone2
Fae4
Dymas3
Grove1
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Evan"
2"Nyx"
3"Shade"
4"Rory"
5"Isolde"
6"Seer"
7"Heartstone"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"London"
3"British"
4"Fae"
5"Dymas"
6"Grove"
globalScore0.685
windowScore0.333
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences66
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"seemed perpetual within the clearing"
1"looked like a sheet of black glass"
2"seemed woven from spider silk and starlight, shifting colors with every slight turn of her body"
3"amethyst that seemed to look straight through Rory's skin and muscle, right into the frantic machinery of her soul"
72.61% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.274
wordCount1570
matches
0"not the muddy, trodden earth of the public park but a carpet of moss so vibrant it seemed to generate its own li"
1"neither anchor nor"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences90
matches(empty)
69.56% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs28
mean56.07
std22.06
cv0.393
sampleLengths
0106
116
279
377
481
535
647
758
869
990
1046
1148
1269
1350
1483
1523
1646
1758
1872
1948
2072
219
2262
2359
2440
2539
2636
2752
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences75
matches
0"was bathed"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs189
matches
0"was ticking"
1"were towering"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount3
semicolonCount3
flaggedSentences5
totalSentences90
ratio0.056
matches
0"Wildflowers bloomed in chaotic bursts of color—violets, crimsons, and golds that had no business existing in a British December."
1"The trees here were not merely oaks; they were towering sentinels with bark that shimmered like polished silver."
2"\"The Veil breathes, child. It expands and contracts like a lung. To say it weakens is to say the tide recedes. It is not a flaw; it is a rhythm. But you... you feel the pull of the deep water, do you not?\""
3"The pearlescent light overhead fractured, turning a sickly shade of amber for a split second—the color of the sky in Dymas—before snapping back to silver."
4"For the first time, the Seer left a mark on the earth; a single silver leaf drifted from her hair and landed on the moss, rotting instantly into dust."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1173
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"slender, leaf-shaped thing,"
adverbCount38
adverbRatio0.03239556692242114
lyAdverbCount14
lyAdverbRatio0.011935208866155157
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences90
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences90
mean17.44
std9.35
cv0.536
sampleLengths
011
130
218
331
416
512
64
74
824
919
1017
1115
1217
1314
142
1518
1626
176
1829
1919
2027
2110
226
236
2413
2521
2626
2727
2824
293
302
312
3218
3325
3426
3524
365
3723
3818
3920
4016
4130
428
4315
4425
4512
4612
4713
487
4925
65.56% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.43333333333333335
totalSentences90
uniqueOpeners39
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences71
matches
0"Instead, her fingers brushed the"
1"Then the cold of the"
2"Then she looked down at"
ratio0.042
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount16
totalSentences71
matches
0"It smelled of crushed petals"
1"She paused just beyond the"
2"Their violet eyes glowed faintly"
3"It was a slender, leaf-shaped"
4"They moved deeper into the"
5"She tapped the glass face,"
6"She forced herself to breathe,"
7"Their branches wove together overhead"
8"Her silver hair cascaded down"
9"She wore robes that seemed"
10"Her voice was melodic, layered"
11"She noticed with a jolt"
12"It grew hot, almost burning,"
13"She reached out a long,"
14"She saw flashes of sprawling"
15"She looked at her companions:"
ratio0.225
65.63% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount56
totalSentences71
matches
0"The air inside the grove"
1"It smelled of crushed petals"
2"She paused just beyond the"
3"The memory of his shouting"
4"Rory murmured, though her voice"
5"The Shade did not walk"
6"Their violet eyes glowed faintly"
7"Nyx whispered, their voice sounding"
8"Rory tightened her grip on"
9"The moonsilver felt unnaturally frigid"
10"It was a slender, leaf-shaped"
11"They moved deeper into the"
12"The ground beneath their boots"
13"Wildflowers bloomed in chaotic bursts"
14"Some of the blooms turned"
15"Rory said, stopping to check"
16"The second hand was ticking"
17"She tapped the glass face,"
18"Nyx corrected, their form flickering"
19"Rory flinched at the use"
ratio0.789
70.42% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences71
matches
0"Even through the layers of"
ratio0.014
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences48
technicalSentenceCount13
matches
0"Outside the ring of ancient oaks, the London winter bit with a damp, grey chill that settled into the bones, but here, the atmosphere hummed with a heavy, cloyi…"
1"Their violet eyes glowed faintly in the dim light, cutting through the twilight that seemed perpetual within the clearing."
2"It was a slender, leaf-shaped thing, beautiful and deadly, and it pulsed with a faint, rhythmic luminescence that matched the erratic beating of her own heart."
3"Some of the blooms turned their heads as Rory passed, tracking her movement with a slow, vegetal intelligence that made the hair on her arms stand up."
4"She forced herself to breathe, to engage the logical part of her brain that had helped her navigate law exams and abusive relationships alike."
5"The trees here were not merely oaks; they were towering sentinels with bark that shimmered like polished silver."
6"Her silver hair cascaded down to her waist, catching the ambient light and turning it into a halo."
7"She wore robes that seemed woven from spider silk and starlight, shifting colors with every slight turn of her body."
8"There was no pupil, no iris, just a swirling depth of amethyst that seemed to look straight through Rory's skin and muscle, right into the frantic machinery of …"
9"Even through the layers of fabric, Rory could feel it pulsing, a warm, rhythmic thrum that contradicted the cold bite of the Fae blade at her hip."
10"The warmth spread through her veins, a sudden, overwhelming sense of hunger that had nothing to do with food."
11"She saw flashes of sprawling vineyards under an amber sun, of grand feasts where the guests wore masks of bone, of a prince who slept while the world burned."
12"Then she looked down at her own hands, one marked by a childhood accident, the other gripping a weapon from a court that viewed humans as playthings."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags14
uselessAdditionCount5
matches
0"Rory murmured, though her voice sounded thin against the stillness"
1"Nyx whispered, their voice sounding like dry leaves skittering over stone"
2"Rory said, stopping to check her watch"
3"Isolde recited, her expression unreadable"
4"Isolde said softly, her riddles falling away to reveal a stark warning"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags12
fancyCount7
fancyTags
0"Rory murmured (murmur)"
1"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
2"Nyx corrected (correct)"
3"Rory admitted (admit)"
4"the Shade whispered (whisper)"
5"Rory gasped (gasp)"
6"Isolde whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences29
tagDensity0.414
leniency0.828
rawRatio0.583
effectiveRatio0.483
71.4863%