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Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMQTFB5QEKP0NCZMNABZ9GK
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Model:
Z.AI GLM 4.7
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Thriller: chase through city streets
Duration:
1m 39s
Cost:
$0.009719
Provider:
Together
Model input
System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
Model response
Messages
Meta
AI
Rain slicked the cobblestones of Camden High Street into
fractured
mirrors, reflecting the neon bruise of the night sky. Harlow Quinn didn’t feel the cold anymore; she just felt the rhythmic thud of her boots on the pavement and the burn of lactic acid in her thighs. Three years ago, a run like this would have been a warm-up. Now, at forty-one, e
very
impact jolted up her spine, a reminder of the mileage on the chassis. She kept her eyes locked on the figure twenty yards ahead. The suspect was young, hooded, and moving with a frantic, erratic energy that suggested panic—or chemicals. He vaulted a locked bicycle rack, his coat flapping like the wing of a wounded crow. Quinn hurdled it after him, her movements crisp, economical, a holdover from the military precision that had defined her early career in the Met. "Stop! Metropolitan Police!" The shout
was ripped
from her throat, lost instantly in the downpour and the distant thrum of bass from a nightclub. The boy glanced back, eyes wide and white in the streetlights. He didn't slow down. Instead, he cut a sharp left, darting between a shuttered market stall and the brickwork of a Victorian warehouse. Quinn skidded on the wet tarmac, corrected her balance, and pursued. The alleyway narrowed, choking with the smell of wet rot and discarded fast food. It was a dead end—or it looked like one. But the boy didn't stop. He scrambled toward a rusted iron door set into the pavement, a maintenance access point for the abandoned Tube station that lay beneath Camden. It should have
been welded
shut. It should have
been alarmed
. He yanked it open with impossible ease, the metal screaming in protest, and vanished into the black maw below. Quinn reached the edge of the hole. She paused for a fraction of a second, glancing at her wrist. The face of her worn leather
watch
was fogged
with condensation. She checked her pulse. High, but steady. She holstered her weapon—drawing down here in the dark was a last resort—and unclipped the heavy Maglite from her belt. She clicked it on, the beam cutting through the swirling mist rising from the depths. She descended. The iron rungs were slick with moss and slime. The air grew colder the deeper she went, the sounds of the city—traffic, sirens, rain—muffling into a heavy,
oppressive
silence. This wasn't just a storm drain or a derelict station. The air tasted metallic, like ozone and old copper. She dropped the last few feet, landing in a crouch, her flashlight sweeping the tunnel. The tunnels here were different from the standard London Underground. No advertising spaces, no tiled walls. This was raw earth, bricked up hurriedly decades ago. And there was a light ahead. Not the harsh electric white of the Tube, but a warm, amber luminescence, flickering like candlelight. Quinn moved forward, hugging the wall, her breathing shallow. She heard voices ahead. Low, murmuring. She rounded a bend in the tunnel and stopped dead. The space opened up into a cavern the size of an aircraft hangar. This was the Veil Market. Quinn had heard whispers of it in the interrogation rooms, snippets of coded talk from low-level informants terrified of the "cliques" that ran the shadow economy of London. She had thought it was a myth, a boogeyman story junkies told to scare each other. It wasn't. Stalls lined the perimeter, constructed from driftwood, old doors, and animal bones. But the goods... Quinn felt a prickle of sweat break out on the back of her neck. In one stall, glass jars held fluids that glowed with a sickly inner light. In another, a woman with skin like polished obsidian
was arranging
feathers that looked too large to belong to any bird. At the center of the commotion, the boy she had chased was on his knees, clutching his side. Blood seeped between his fingers. He hadn't
been shot
. He must have caught himself on the iron door during his descent. Standing over him was a man who didn't look like he belonged in the sewers. He wore a dark, woolen coat, open at the front to reveal a simple t-shirt. He had short, curly dark hair and olive skin that
seemed to
soak up the dim light. He knelt beside the injured boy, his movements gentle and assured. Quinn recognized him. Tomás Herrera. She’d seen his face in the file she wasn't supposed to have. The former paramedic. The fixer. The man who lost his license because the patients he treated didn't stay sick, or didn't stay human. "Step away from him!" Quinn bellowed, stepping into the light, her Maglite trained on Herrera’s chest. The market didn't freeze. The patrons—things that might have been human once, or things that never were—simply turned. Dozens of eyes, reflecting the amber glow, fixed on her. The
weight
of their attention was physical, pressing down on her shoulders. Herrera didn't flinch. He didn't even look up immediately. He finished pressing a wad of gauze against the boy’s ribs, his hands steady. A silver chain slipped out from his collar as he leaned forward—a Saint Christopher medallion, catching the light. "You’re going to rupture a vessel if you keep shouting like that, Detective," Herrera said. His voice was calm, with a lilt of soft Spanish rolling beneath his London accent. He stood up
slowly
, wiping his hands on a rag. He looked at her, his warm brown eyes
unreadable
. "And you’re trespassing." "That man is a suspect in a double homicide," Quinn said, her grip tightening on the flashlight. She gestured with her chin toward the boy. "Get up against the wall. Both of you." Herrera looked at the boy, then back at Quinn. He took a step toward her, not aggressive, but obstructing. "He’s a child, Harlow. And he’s hurt. Let me stop the bleeding." "I don't care if he’s dying," Quinn lied, though the words tasted like ash. She remembered Morris. She remembered the night her partner died, the things that came out of the dark that no police report could adequately describe. This world—the one Herrera lived in—took and took. "I am taking him in. Now." The boy on the ground groaned, a low, wet sound. He looked up at Quinn, and for a second, his eyes
seemed to
shift, the pupils dilating until they swallowed the iris. "She followed me," the boy rasped, looking at Herrera. "She saw the door." "Quiet," Herrera murmured. He reached into his pocket. Quinn tensed, shifting her
weight
to her back foot, ready to draw the service weapon if a gun appeared. But Herrera’s hand came out empty. He held up a small, carved token made of bone. It was intricately
etched
, worn smooth by handling. "He’s delirious," Herrera said to Quinn, his eyes never leaving hers. "He’s scared. Just let me patch him up, and I’ll send him to the nearest A&E. You can pick him up there." "I don't make deals with freaks," Quinn said, though her heart hammered against her ribs like a trapped bird. She looked around the market. The sheer wrongness of the place
was starting
to get to her. A stall nearby
was selling
jars of silence—literally—and she could feel the sound
being sucked
out of the air around her. She felt the prickle on her skin, the static of the unnatural. Herrera sighed. He glanced down at the boy, then past Quinn, toward the dark tunnel she had emerged from. "You found us because you’re stubborn, Quinn. That’s your gift and your curse. But you don't have a token. You don't know the rules here." "I know the law," she snapped. "This isn't London," Herrera said
softly
. "This is the Veil." The boy on the ground, seeing his chance, scrambled to his feet. He wasn't as badly hurt as he pretended. He bolted, not toward the exit, but deeper into the market, vanishing behind a stall stacked with old leather-bound books. "Stop!" Quinn moved to intercept, but Herrera stepped into her path. He wasn't a big man, maybe five-ten, but he planted his feet with a surprising solidity. Quinn grabbed his arm to shove him aside, her fingers brushing against the raised scar on his forearm. He didn't budge. It was like trying to move a concrete pillar. "Let me go," Quinn warned, her hand dropping to the hilt of her gun. "If you go past me, Detective, you enter the deep market," Herrera said, his voice dropping an octave, losing the warmth. "There are things here that haven't seen a human soul in centuries. They aren't bound by your warrants. And they are
very
hungry." Quinn stared at him. She could see the truth in his face. He wasn't threatening her; he
was warning
her. She looked past him, into the gloom where the boy had disappeared. The shadows there
seemed to
writhe, coalescing into shapes that hurt her eyes if she focused on them too long. The smell of sulfur and incense was overwhelming. She had a duty. She had a badge. But she also had the memory of DS Morris
being torn
apart by something that wasn't supposed to exist. She had stood over his body and realized the rulebook she had studied for eighteen years was a fairy tale compared to the reality of the dark. If she went deeper, she might catch the kid. Or she might never come back. Quinn’s jaw tightened, the muscle twitching. She looked at Herrera, at the medallion resting against his chest, at the calm resignation in his posture. "He killed two people, Herrera," Quinn said, her voice low and hard. "If he walks, I’m coming for you next." Herrera didn't blink. "I know. But tonight isn't the night." Quinn held his gaze for a long, agonizing moment. The rain still fell somewhere above them, a million miles away. The noise of the market returned, a murmur of haggling and whispering, indifferent to the standoff. Slowly,
deliberately
, Quinn took her hand off her weapon. She took a step back, then another. "This isn't over," she said. "It never is," Herrera replied. Quinn turned her back on the market. She kept her flashlight high, ignoring the shuffling shadows that
seemed to
reach for her coat. She walked back the way she came, toward the iron rungs and the rainy street above, leaving the warmth and the horror of the Veil Market behind. She climbed out of the hole, pulling the heavy door shut with a clang that
echoed
like a coffin lid. She stood in the alleyway in Camden, the rain instantly plastering her hair to her skull. She checked her
watch
. It was 3:14 AM. She exhaled, a long, shaky breath that turned to mist in the cold air. She hadn't made the arrest. She had let a suspect go into the wind. But as she clicked her radio to call in a vague sighting near the locks, Harlow Quinn knew she had done the only thing that kept her alive. She walked out of the alley, merging back into the darkness of the city, a hunter who had just learned the size of the forest.
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Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
88.8889%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
15
adverbTagCount
2
adverbTags
0
"Quinn lied, though the words tasted like ash [like]"
1
"Herrera said softly [softly]"
73.4748%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)
wordCount
1885
totalAiIsmAdverbs
5
found
0
adverb
"deliberately"
count
1
1
adverb
"slowly"
count
2
2
adverb
"softly"
count
1
3
adverb
"very"
count
1
highlights
0
"deliberately"
1
"slowly"
2
"softly"
3
"very"
100.0000%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
62.8647%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)
wordCount
1885
totalAiIsms
7
found
0
word
"oppressive"
count
1
1
word
"unreadable"
count
1
2
word
"fractured"
count
1
3
word
"weight"
count
2
4
word
"echoed"
count
1
5
word
"etched"
count
1
highlights
0
"oppressive"
1
"unreadable"
2
"fractured"
3
"weight"
4
"echoed"
5
"etched"
100.0000%
Cliche density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
0
maxInWindow
0
found
(empty)
highlights
(empty)
100.0000%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
151
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Filter word density
Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
2
hedgeCount
4
narrationSentences
151
filterMatches
0
"watch"
hedgeMatches
0
"seemed to"
100.0000%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
0
totalSentences
162
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
49
mean
38.1
std
20.83
cv
0.547
sampleLengths
0
76
1
67
2
24
3
45
4
63
5
19
6
72
7
50
8
15
9
47
10
25
11
64
12
64
13
39
14
58
15
40
16
16
17
40
18
41
19
52
20
33
21
31
22
53
23
45
24
27
25
24
26
33
27
69
28
44
29
6
30
10
31
40
32
11
33
46
34
14
35
44
36
60
37
54
38
15
39
24
40
20
41
10
42
36
43
16
44
5
45
5
46
70
47
24
48
81
100.0000%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤5% passive sentences
passiveCount
7
totalSentences
151
matches
0
"was ripped"
1
"been welded"
2
"been alarmed"
3
"was fogged"
4
"been shot"
5
"being sucked"
6
"being torn"
100.0000%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
5
totalVerbs
286
matches
0
"was arranging"
1
"was starting"
2
"was selling"
3
"was warning"
88.0000%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
1682
adjectiveStacks
2
stackExamples
0
"short, curly dark hair"
1
"old leather-bound books."
adverbCount
45
adverbRatio
0.0267538644470868
lyAdverbCount
17
lyAdverbRatio
0.010107015457788348
100.0000%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
162
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.0000%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
162
mean
11.52
std
6.63
cv
0.575
sampleLengths
0
19
1
28
2
12
3
17
4
11
5
16
6
16
7
24
8
24
9
11
10
4
11
19
12
11
13
14
14
9
15
5
16
24
17
6
18
5
19
19
20
7
21
12
22
11
23
4
24
3
25
20
26
15
27
2
28
9
29
20
30
10
31
9
32
15
33
10
34
6
35
9
36
6
37
16
38
9
39
4
40
2
41
10
42
13
43
5
44
28
45
16
46
2
47
12
48
3
49
14
32.7160%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
28
diversityRatio
0.24074074074074073
totalSentences
162
uniqueOpeners
39
0.0000%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
15
fancyCount
11
fancyTags
0
"bellowed (bellow)"
1
"Quinn said, her grip tightening on the flashlight (say, tighten)"
2
"Quinn lied, though the words tasted like ash (lie, taste like)"
3
"the boy rasped, looking at Herrera (rasp, look)"
4
"Herrera murmured (murmur)"
5
"Herrera said to Quinn, his eyes never leaving hers (say do not never leave)"
6
"Quinn said, though her heart hammered against her ribs like a trapped bird (say, hammer like)"
7
"she snapped (snap)"
8
"Herrera said softly (say softly)"
9
"Quinn warned, her hand dropping to the hilt of her gun (warn, drop)"
10
"Herrera said, his voice dropping an octave, losing the warmth (say, drop lose)"
85.0556%