Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMQVHK8F4P1QXHY8WZ90Z5W

Run Details

Duration:
56.1s
Cost:
$0.003650
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The bone token felt unexpectedly cold in her palm as Harlow Quinn stepped beneath the cracked-white glare of a ceiling long since abandoned to damp and rumor. The Veil Market lay in wait like a rumor given flesh, a breath of warmth bending around the old Camden tube tunnel where no one should linger after dusk and the full moon was still a rumor on the horizon. The air carried iron, cinnamon, and something else—sour, electric, the ache of a memory not fully resolved. The station walls wore the market’s heat as if they’d spent years pretending nothing was wrong, and the wrongness didn’t sit on the skin so much as it whispered in the marrow. She moved with the economy of a man who’d learned to count every heartbeat in a room. 18 years on the Metropolitan Police gave you a rhythm—spoken softly enough to pass as confidence, present enough to force underlings into line. The left wrist wore a watch, worn leather, a patient companion in moments when seconds mattered more than explanations. Her eyes—a patient brown—took in every sign, even the one that wasn’t there. The Market breathed. A murmur of voices proposed deals from stalls that looked as if they’d been assembled from an auction of memories. The lanterns flickered not with flame but with a pale, supernatural glow, each glow threading through the room as if it knew which eyes to invite and which to burn away. The crowd drifted in and out of sight with a precision that felt rehearsed, a choreography of long coats and quicker glances designed to hide more than they revealed. And everywhere, the damp, copper smell rose from the floor like a warning. Beside her came Eva Kowalski, the best friend who’d become an occult researcher with a master’s diploma tucked into the binding of a well-thumbed notebook. Eva wore her curls in a riot that somehow stayed coherent, green eyes bright behind round glasses that made the world look a touch more legible than it deserved. Her satchel swung with her step—the worn leather full of books she could cradle like a shield. She was the kind of presence a crime scene forgot to anticipate: a quiet insistence that what one object meant did not exhaust what it could mean. “Quinn,” Eva said, and the name came out as a careful balance of ease and caution. “You’ve got the token. Good. The Market accepts only the bone token—and only from hands that can pretend to know the difference between fear and hunger.” Harlow gave a tight nod. The bone token rested between her index and middle finger, a small relic carved in a way that felt almost ceremonial, if ceremony hadn’t become such a dangerous word here. She clipped the token into a pocket; the door behind them—no door as such, just a seam in the wall—swung inward as if the Market itself had exhaled and found them suitable. The knees of her jeans hit the damp rung of stair, and she began to descend, Eva close on her heel, her satchel thumping softly like a heartbeat. The lower tunnel opened into a chamber where the market’s light settled with a different gravity. Stalls lined with curios—enchanted trinkets, banned alchemical substances sealed behind glass like something fragile you weren’t sure you wanted to trust—cast reflections that didn’t align with the bodies in front of them. There was a stillness here that looked back, a predator’s stillness, as if every vendor knew to pretend the moment hadn’t happened even as the moment arrived in their lungs. In the center, a stall lay silent, its awning torn and its wares abandoned as if the night itself had frightened them into stillness. A vendor slumped at the table, a body that looked too still to be simply dead, eyes closed not so much in sleep as resignation. A syringe lay on the floor near a shard of glass that hadn’t shattered so much as bloomed, like a flower of the wrong season. The blood—if there was blood at all—was a rumor now. There were no footprints in the dust, no drag marks that would have traced a retreat, and the ground beneath the corpse held a sheen that wasn’t natural, a glaze that suggested something else had touched this place. The absence of ordinary evidence drew a line in Harlow’s mind, then traced it again with a fingertip. The Market was supposed to be a place where edges blurred—where the illegal and the magical blurred into a single transaction—but this scene demanded a higher fidelity to the ordinary to have any meaning at all. It begged to be explained with the same lens she used on routine homicide: how someone could die with a weapon and yet leave behind nothing that a forensics team could consume cleanly. The body’s stillness was too complete; it suggested a moment seized and suspended, not a fight that had ended. Over by a curtained alcove, Eva knelt, her satchel open as though she were about to unfurl a map of the stars. The glow from the lamps fell across her freckled cheeks, catching a glint of copper from her hair. She did not look up as she spoke, as if the words were weapons she did not want to waste on the wrong ears. “The marks on the wall,” Eva said, voice low, almost a whisper carried by a draft that didn’t belong to the station. “They aren’t random. Not in a place like this. The sigils aren’t just decorative—someone drew them to seal or unlock something, maybe both. The pattern is old, Quinn. Old enough to cross memory into a whisper you can’t always pin down.” Harlow stepped closer, eyes narrowing as she bent over the scene. The marks on the wall were not ramshackle scribbles, but deliberate, a language etched in chalk and chalky residue that glowed faintly with the Market’s unsteady light. They formed a circle that enclosed a smaller glyph, then a line of script that looked at once familiar and wrong—like a language you could read if you stood very still and listened for the right heartbeat. “The circle isn’t just for ritual,” Eva continued, pointing to a corner where the creases of the curtain hung. “It’s a boundary of protection, but also a trap. If you lean too close without a key, you’re not just stepping into a danger—you’re stepping into a memory you’ve never lived.” Harlow’s jaw tightened. If there had been a time when her job leaned more on force and less on interpretation, it had ended in a case that had stretched 18 years into something far messier than a standard confession room. She felt the old wound of DS Morris—the partner she had lost three years ago in a case with a supernatural origin she could not yet name—open again at the edge of her ribs. The break in the memory came with something like a breath she wouldn’t allow herself to take aloud: a reminder that memory, like the Market, could be manipulated. Her eyes softened when she looked at Eva. The younger woman smiled with an anxious curl of her lips, tucking a strand of curly red hair behind her ear—the nervous habit that often betrayed her nerves more than it calmed them. “Let’s not pretend this is just a homicide we can solve with a chalk outline and some fingerprints,” Eva said, straightening. “This is a map with a missing piece, and someone left it here deliberately. The Market doesn’t tolerate amateurs, Quinn. It feeds on a particular kind of fear, and it thrives on the idea of control.” The idea settled over Harlow like dusk. She reached for the Veil Compass, a small brass device in the shape of a compass but with a face more like a rune-carved shield. The casing bore verdigris in its patina, and the needle moved with a slow, deliberate confidence, pointing toward the wall behind the curtain. The compass’s face markings—protective sigils—seemed to glow faintly as if aware of the presence of something listening. “The compass is pointing us toward a rift,” Harlow said, almost to the instrument itself. “Or toward something trying to pretend it’s a rift.” Eva stepped closer, her breath catching in a way that wasn’t entirely about the cold. “Shade artisan, Quinn. The Compass is a piece of Shade craftsmanship. It’s attuned to energy, not to people. It’s telling us where power flows inside the Market—where someone could have manipulated a doorway, or created a doorway where there wasn’t one.” The detective studied the corner Eva indicated. Behind the curtain, the air seemed thicker, as if the room had drawn a deeper breath and held it in. Harlow slid a gloved hand along the curtain’s edge, parting it just enough to reveal a seam that was less a seam and more a hinge—an entry to something not built for ordinary passage. A narrow corridor, darker than the tunnel’s own shadows, opened and closed with the Market’s irregular heartbeat. “The Market moves,” Harlow said, more to herself than to Eva. “Every full moon, it shifts, but not in a way you can predict. It rides a current, like a ship’s keel sliding across water you didn’t know existed. This corridor didn’t just appear. It was opened, and someone left a trace.” Eva tapped the corner of her notebook against her breastbone. “If the killer wanted to stage a death to look ordinary, they would have avoided making it ritual. Unless the ritual is the point. In a place like this, where every sound carries more than one meaning, a ritual can be a statement. It says: We know what you fear, and we want you to fear it in a specific way.” Harlow picked up a shard of glass, not broken from the stall’s glass case but from a second, separate glimmer of light that had fallen on the scene and left a mark. The shard’s edge caught the pale Market glow, and for a heartbeat the shard reflected not just the room but a memory in her mind: the look on DS Morris’s face when something supernatural brushed him from behind in a way that didn’t leave a physical wound. A memory she hadn’t invoked in a long while, but which came forward now with the ache of a ruined partnership. “Stop it,” she told herself, though not aloud. Then she looked at Eva, the colleague who stood with the quiet courage of someone who believed the truth could still be found in a place like this. “The Shard,” Harlow said, mostly to Eva, “could have a message carved on it, a call to something else. If I was staging a death, I’d want the body found where it would make the most sense to the living. But if the killer wants to tell us something—if they want to drive us to the ‘rift’—they’d plant something that persuades the wrong conclusions. The wounds aren’t consistent with a weapon; the eye tells you the body didn’t die from a single strike. It’s almost... playful, in a way you don’t expect from a human killer.” “Or a being,” Eva added softly. “If you’re in a place where the walls listen, a killer could manipulate a crowd by letting them watch someone die in a way that looks like an ordinary homicide while actually serving a ritual purpose. The token may have opened the door, but it’s the energy around it that did the actual answering.” Harlow looked toward Eva with a steadiness that hadn’t left her even when the world itself had tried to erase it. The detective’s breath fogged in the cold, the way her memory of Morris did when the past pressed in with a question neither of them quite knew how to answer. The Market’s hum grew louder in her ears, a chorus of whispers that suggested there was more to the scene than met the eye. The compass needle trembled, then moved with purpose, toward the corridor. Harlow stepped closer to the seam and pressed a gloved palm to the curtain, feeling the pulse of something foreign beneath the fabric, a warmth that rose at the touch and slid away as if the curtain held a life of its own. Eva watched the fabric edge breathe as if the Market itself exhaled in relief when the right pair of hands claimed the space. “Quinn,” Eva whispered, “the gate isn’t here for you to step through into a world of danger so you can put a chalk line around it. It’s here to tell you that danger has stepped into you. The Market doesn’t want to be policed by lists and case numbers. It wants you to listen.” The pocket in Harlow’s coat yielded a small, unremarkable item, a folded piece of parchment someone had left behind as if to remind the scene of a cautionary tale. She unfolded it with the same care she used to unfold the truth beneath a lie. The parchment bore a single line, written in a hand she recognized from a long-ago part of her life: a name—someone who did not exist in the ordinary world, a name that felt like a rumor you’d tell a child to coax them to sleep. The name wasn’t printed; it was drawn in a way that suggested something between a script and a sigil, a language meant to bend the will of anyone who read it aloud. “This is a map,” Harlow said finally, not to Eva, but to the parchment as though it might answer if she spoke with the right voice. “Not a map to a place, but a map to a feeling—the fear the Market feeds on, the kind of fear that makes people believe a death is normal when it isn’t.” Eva’s eyes brightened behind her glasses. “Or a map to a person who knows how to wield that fear.” She reached for her satchel and drew out a small notebook filled with meticulous notes, drawings of sigils, bits of folklore, and a line of questions ready to be asked. “If this contract is old, it’s old enough to have a name with as many shadows as edges. The clique, you said. A circle of merchants who know how to press the right memory into the right heart. Maybe this ‘map’ is how they keep the Market moving—by feeding fear and collecting it in the same breath.” A hiss of wind breezed along the tunnel, as if the Market itself took a breath and exhaled a warning. The Veil Compass vibrated in Harlow’s grasp, a faint thrum that resonated with the rhythm of something beyond human control. The needle settled, not on a door or a corridor or a wall, but on a point that seemed to indicate a moment—the moment when memory aligns with a truth a human eye cannot capture. “Let’s not pretend we know the entire geometry of this place,” Harlow said, voice tight with an almost-weariness that had nothing to do with exhaustion and everything to do with needing to keep Morris’s memory from becoming another casualty of the Market’s games. “We know the Market is a living thing, Eva. It’s alive enough to devour a person’s certainty if you’re not careful. If there’s a ritual in play, it’s designed to coax you into believing you’re solving something while you’re only feeding it.” The line between cautious observation and danger blurred, and Eva’s voice found a steadier tempo in response. “Then we’ll be careful. We’ll let the Market reveal its own logic, and we’ll match that logic with a different kind of evidence—evidence that doesn’t pretend it’s a murder when it’s a gate.” Harlow’s eyes traced a path along the corridor’s edge—the seam of the wall, the flicker of the Market’s light, the glimmer of something metallic embedded in the curtain’s edge. It wasn’t a weapon that killed the man, she realized; it was a mechanism by which the Market could drain a life and redistribute fear as currency. The body was not the end; it was the beginning, a hinge on which a door could swing open to reveal a truth about the Market’s reach and the clique’s designs. “The token opened the door,” she murmured, almost to herself, then looked at Eva. “Not to a place, but to a moment when someone could orchestrate the illusion of a death and still be in control of what happens next. That’s the thing the Market wants us to miss: control of perception.” Eva nodded, the nervous habit returning to her as she tucked a strand of hair behind her ear. “If we’re right about that, then the next step is to follow the energy. The Veil Compass won’t lie about energy. It will lead us to where the most powerful memory lingers, where guilt and fear share a bed.” The corridor’s darkness deepened as they moved, the Market’s hum growing more intimate, almost personal. The needle of the Veil Compass steadied, pointing toward a door that wasn’t a door in the strict sense—more a threshold of air and heat and a pressure that hinted at something moving behind it. They gathered their breath and pressed forward, Harlow’s instincts guiding the pace, Eva’s knowledge of ancient signs providing the map. The threshold bore a mark, a symbol that wasn’t a sigil so much as a memory: a circle enclosing a figure—the kind of image you’d see in ancient temple reliefs, the depiction of a figure stepping between worlds. The air beyond was cooler, and there was a different scent—more of rain and old stone, less of copper and cinnamon. The Market’s ordinary glow faded, replaced by something colder, a pale blue that made every edge look sharper, every breath a calculation. Beyond the threshold lay a chamber that did not echo with footsteps so much as invite them, a space that felt newly created for this moment, yet somehow older than Camden itself. It resembled the backstage of a theater more than anything else—a waiting area where decisions were made before the audience ever learned a thing. In the middle stood a pedestal with a single object resting on it: a brass device that looked not unlike a compass, but with runes carved into its face, runes that glowed faintly, coaxing the imagination to stretch and see patterns where there were none. Harlow stepped closer, the Veil Compass pressed into her palm, its needle quivering with a purpose she could not quite name. Eva’s eyes widened. The two of them stood in the presence of something aligned with a scale of power that did not belong to cops or academics or ordinary criminals. It belonged to a force—the Market’s own gravity— twisting reality to suit its own needs. “Do you see it?” Eva asked, voice barely above a whisper. “The energy is coalescing here. Someone is drawing from something older than the Market, something that predates the bones and the tokens and the fences between the living and the enchanted.” Harlow’s jaw tightened with the recall of a memory she did not fully want to relive. In the back of her mind, Morris’s voice—quiet, precise, persistent—pushed through the haze of fatigue and dread. She pushed it back without letting it vanish entirely, because sometimes memory pressed you toward the truth you preferred to avoid. “We’re not alone,” she said instead, and her tone did not carry bravado; it carried the weight of a person who had learned to listen to a room’s almost-silence as carefully as to its loudest chorus. “The Market stores more than goods here. It stores fear, and it stores a memory.” Eva raised her chin. “If that’s true, your killer isn’t a man or a woman you’ll catch by following footprints or fingerprints. They’re a memory you’d need to trap with the right sigils and a careful hand. They’re a memory that wants to be remembered—needs to be remembered—so it can invite others to walk through a doorway that should never be opened.” The two of them stood at the threshold, the world beyond unsteady but not unknowable, a puzzle that did not have to be solved through force alone. Harlow watched the Veil Compass’s needle rest and then rotate, finally pointing down a corridor that wound deeper into the House of Echoes—the Market’s own interior geography, where the past and the future could meet for a moment and pretend to settle the quarrel between them. “Let’s go,” she said, a command to herself as much as to Eva. “We’ll move by the compass, not by the narrative the Market wants to tell us. We’ll listen for what the room is trying to tell us about the killer—and about the clique for whom this isn’t crime so much as choreography.” Eva stepped forward, her satchel weighty with books and theories. She offered a small, half-wry smile. “Quinn, if we do this right, we’ll walk out of here with something that doesn’t fade when the Market shifts again. Something that doesn’t haunt us as a rumor in a dark corridor. Something that stands up to daylight.” The Market responded at once, as if sensing their decision to suspend ordinary assumptions. A memory rose, a shape formed by the glow in the corners of their vision: a memory of a name, of a person who’d walked these stalls with a power and a fear neither quite human nor entirely spectral. The memory dissolved as quickly as it formed, leaving behind a sensation—no longer a fear, but a resolve. Harlow stepped forward along the corridor, the Veil Compass warm in her hand as if it recognized the intention behind her steps. The walls themselves seemed to lean closer, listening, learning. The memory clung to the edge of her mind, and for a moment, she glimpsed a thread that linked the Market’s strange geography to the clique’s influence, to the power that kept a city both safe and at risk when the night grew brave enough to pretend the day hadn’t mattered. “People get stuck on the surface,” Eva murmured, almost to herself. “They look for the killer. They don’t always look for the motive.” Harlow did not answer immediately. Her eyes scanned the corridor's far end where a door remained—unremarkable in its calm, unguarded in its simplicity. She remembered Morris’s refusal to ignore a single thread of possibility, even when it led into a place you’d rather not name. The memory steadied her, not with vengeance but with purpose. The two moved together, deeper into the Market’s labyrinth, the compass’s needle guiding them toward the point where the Market’s energy pooled and steadied, where it could be measured and thus understood. It wasn’t merely a crime scene anymore; it was a map. It was a confession, written not in ink but in posture, in the careful arrangement of wards, tokens, and a single, haunted truth: the Market did not merely sell power; it safeguarded a memory that wanted to remain alive long enough to teach those who would listen. As they vanished into the afterglow of the corridor, Harlow’s mind turned, not toward a neat arrest, but toward a new question. If the Market’s crime was a ritual that sought to teach a city how to fear, then perhaps the case wouldn’t end with a single confession. Perhaps it would end with a shift in perception—an understanding that the Market could, in time, reveal the truth by changing the eyes that looked for it. And if such a thing could be coaxed into daylight, she thought, Morris might have lived long enough to hum a note of relief at the sound of a question answered at last. The Veil Compass hummed in her hand, a small and steady possession that felt less like a tool and more like a promise: that the truth, once found, would not simply vanish when the Market moved again. It would endure, if only long enough for a pair of friends to learn to listen to the room that had chosen them to hear it.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
0.0000% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags17
adverbTagCount10
adverbTags
0"Eva said, voice low, almost a whisper carried by a draft that didn’t belong to the station [almost]"
1"Harlow said, almost to the instrument itself [almost]"
2"Harlow said, more to herself than to Eva [more]"
3"Harlow said, mostly to Eva [mostly]"
4"Eva added softly [softly]"
5"Harlow said finally, not to Eva, but to the parchment as though it might answer if she spoke with the right voice [finally]"
6"Harlow said, voice tight with an almost-weariness that had nothing to do with exhaustion and everything to do with needing to keep Morris’s memory from becoming another casualty of the Market’s games [almost]"
7"she murmured, almost to herself, then looked at Eva [almost then]"
8"she said instead, and her tone did not carry bravado; it carried the weight of a person who had learned to listen to a room’s almost-silence as carefully as to its loudest chorus [instead, almost-carefully]"
9"Eva murmured, almost to herself [almost]"
80.3536% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)
wordCount4072
totalAiIsmAdverbs8
found
0
adverb"carefully"
count1
1
adverb"deliberately"
count1
2
adverb"quickly"
count1
3
adverb"softly"
count3
4
adverb"barely above a whisper"
count1
5
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"carefully"
1"deliberately"
2"quickly"
3"softly"
4"barely above a whisper"
5"very"
100.0000% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.0000% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
72.9862% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)
wordCount4072
totalAiIsms11
found
0
word"resonated"
count1
1
word"flickered"
count1
2
word"flicker"
count1
3
word"glint"
count1
4
word"trembled"
count1
5
word"spectral"
count1
6
word"weight"
count1
7
word"footsteps"
count1
8
word"echo"
count1
9
word"echoes"
count1
10
word"etched"
count1
highlights
0"resonated"
1"flickered"
2"flicker"
3"glint"
4"trembled"
5"spectral"
6"weight"
7"footsteps"
8"echo"
9"echoes"
10"etched"
100.0000% Cliche density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes widened"
100.0000% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences136
matches(empty)
100.0000% Filter word density
Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount7
narrationSentences136
filterMatches
0"look"
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
1"seemed to"
2"try to"
3"tried to"
4"tend to"
100.0000% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount3
totalSentences157
matches
0"wield that fear"
1"match that logic"
2"understanding that the"
48.6111% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs56
mean71.8
std22.99
cv0.32
sampleLengths
0116
172
296
398
442
595
678
7122
8106
964
1063
1175
1250
13102
1441
1557
1672
1724
1856
1978
2052
2171
22100
2336
2496
2560
2675
2777
2854
29122
3058
31106
3275
3385
3450
3587
3652
3757
3870
3981
40101
4166
4242
4354
4451
4562
4673
4754
4855
4971
100.0000% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤5% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences136
matches
0"been assembled"
1"was supposed"
2"was drawn"
3"were made"
100.0000% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs477
matches(empty)
94.0000% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount3047
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"small, half-wry smile."
adverbCount108
adverbRatio0.035444699704627505
lyAdverbCount27
lyAdverbRatio0.008861174926156876
100.0000% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences157
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.0000% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences157
mean25.61
std13.6
cv0.531
sampleLengths
027
140
217
332
417
523
619
713
83
920
1031
1129
1213
1325
1429
1517
1627
1716
1826
195
2030
2132
2228
2316
2432
2530
2624
2725
2825
2910
3038
3118
3236
3333
3419
3522
3618
3724
3822
3941
4011
4127
4237
4319
4431
453
4637
4734
4828
498
37.2611% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats20
diversityRatio0.21019108280254778
totalSentences157
uniqueOpeners33
0.0000% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags17
fancyCount12
fancyTags
0"Eva said, and the name came out as a careful balance of ease and caution (say, come out)"
1"Eva said, voice low, almost a whisper carried by a draft that didn’t belong to the station (say, voice carry does not belong)"
2"Eva continued, pointing to a corner where the creases of the curtain hung (continue, point hang)"
3"Eva said, straightening (say, straighten)"
4"she told herself, though not aloud (tell does not aloud)"
5"Eva added softly (add softly)"
6"Eva whispered (whisper)"
7"Harlow said finally, not to Eva, but to the parchment as though it might answer if she spoke with the right voice (say finally, answer speak)"
8"Harlow said, voice tight with an almost-weariness that had nothing to do with exhaustion and everything to do with needing to keep Morris’s memory from becoming another casualty of the Market’s games (say, voice almost-wearines have do do need keep become)"
9"she murmured, almost to herself, then looked at Eva (murmur, look)"
10"she said instead, and her tone did not carry bravado; it carried the weight of a person who had learned to listen to a room’s almost-silence as carefully as to its loudest chorus (say instead, does not carry carry learn listen almost-silence)"
11"Eva murmured, almost to herself (murmur)"
78.4242%