Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMQW70MNZQZQFTQHKQ02GYV

Run Details

Duration:
58.1s
Cost:
$0.004174
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Rain hammered the pavement in sheets that turned the world glossy and wrong, each drop catching a sickly halo from the streetlamps and then sliding away, as if the city itself were trying to rinse something down the drain. Harlow Quinn moved through it with the kind of economy that came from eighteen years on the Metropolitan Police, boots grained with grit and rain, coat collar turned up against the damp that felt personal, like a weight pressing into her bones. The city smelled of iron and ozone and old stone, the way a battlefield does after a storm—clean enough on the surface to pretend nothing bad happened, but full of little, clever reminders that something had. She had been chasing a figure for blocks now, a shadow with a stubborn own will, a person who knew how to bleed into the crowd and vanish. The suspect’s breathing was a pattern she could read, a rhythm that told her when to push, when to soften, when to press the heat of her own presence into the chase. The suspect wore a hood that kept his features malleable, yet the movement of his shoulders—tense, eager, edge-of-your-seat desperate—gave him away in a dozen micro-decisions. He skittered along the edge of Soho, past lamplight that fought the rain with a mechanical stubbornness, toward a name that carried a dull, dangerous weight in the city’s underbelly: The Raven’s Nest. The Nest’s distinctive green neon sign flickered over the entrance like a misfired omen, throwing a alien-green glare across the pavement. The door opened with a sigh of warm air and music that pressed against her eardrums, a sound in which you could hear the city’s teeth grind. The suspect ducked inside before she could bracket him with a shoulder, and the door swung shut with a damp sigh that made the rain outside sound like a memory. Inside, the bar wore rain like a second skin. Maps and black-and-white photographs hung on the walls in a way that suggested someone had once traded secrets for stories, and the room smelled of dust and old wood and something faintly metallic that you could only imagine was the city’s own tremor under the surface. The green glow from the sign painted everything in a sour lime, from the chipped beer taps to the glasses that caught and bent the light into little, green flamelets. The sound of container ships on water—far away, in a sound that had nothing to do with this street—hovered over the chatter, the clink of coins, and the low hum a little too human and a little too careful. The suspect didn’t waste time. He cut across the floor to the back of the bar, where a bookshelf loomed like a door to something that didn’t want to be opened. He pressed a hand against the spines—old maps, worn ledgers, the spine of a novel that looked as if it had survived more hideouts than most people would survive in a lifetime—and the shelf gave way with just a sigh, a slow, almost shy movement as if the bar had a memory of a secret it was tired of telling. A hidden room lay beyond, cooler and darker, dust clinging to the air like fine powder. Harlow followed, her steps muffled by the carpet that had seen better decades. The scent of mildew and waxed wood thickened, and the world narrowed to the narrow corridor that ran behind the shelves, a tunnel of whispered breaths and the kind of quiet that swallows sound when you’re not supposed to be listening. Her quarry moved with a practiced ease, a little too calm for someone who ought to be running for their life. The hidden room opened onto a stair that descended into the bone throat of the city: a service tunnel, narrow and dripping, with pipes that hummed a flat, metallic song. The light here was a cold, sickly blue—an industrial pall that made everything look half-true, as if the truth were slung on a peg and left to hang in the rain until it forgot its name. Down and down they went, the air growing cooler and heavier as the earth pressed in on either side. The city went quiet here, or perhaps it was the rhythmic drip of water punctuating the moment, a metronome for fear. Harlow could feel the history of the place in the damp on her knuckles, the way the concrete walls breathed with something almost alive, a subtle tremor that reminded her how thin the line could be between law and something older, something unspoken. The suspect’s breath came in short, sharp bursts now, but he kept moving with that long-legged, no-quit stride. He didn’t glance back. He didn’t need to. He knew she wouldn’t stop, not now, not when the chase had left the street’s weather behind and walked into a space where maps couldn’t help you, and where the city’s ordinary rules dissolved into a different, more clandestine logic. A low, familiar whisper rustled along the tunnel, a breath of wind that didn’t come from wind but from the passing of something else, something patient and ancient, something that watched with interest the chase where a detective pursued a man who might be the one who fed the clique’s quick medicine to the city’s wounded souls. Harlow tensed, listening for footsteps that would betray a second pair behind hers, a second set of shoes that knew how to move quietly; she heard nothing but the rain in the pipes and the distant, irregular echo of the suspect’s footfalls, a rhythm that kept telling her where he would appear next even before she saw it. There was a moment when the tunnel opened onto something that did not belong to the city’s ordinary maps at all—a long, straight corridor that ran beneath London's bones, lit by a row of naked bulbs that hissed with static. The air smelled of copper and something sweeter, a scent that hovered between antiseptic and something older and more dangerous: something that suggested life could be bought, or at least borrowed, here. The walls bore the marks of old signs, not modern ones, as if someone had scraped away the world’s present to leave a trace of a past that had learned to endure in the dark. And then, as if the city itself had decided to stop pretending, the door to a different room—one with its own rules and its own breath—slid open in front of them, revealing a space that belonged to a world where the veil between the mundane and the magical was not so much thin as non-existent. The Veil Market. The market’s entrance existed as a cave mouth of a tube station’s old shell, the kind of place you would pass by every day and never think would open into anything but rust and echo. A hush crawled through the air, and then a chorus of quiet murmurs rose, not voices so much as feelings—familiar and strange all at once. The stallholders moved with the language of their trade: a woman with beads of frost on her lashes offered a vial of something that smelled of rain on pine; a man with a buttoned-up coat counted coins the way a clockmaker counts teeth; a girl traded glimmering dust with a boy who wore a Saint Christopher medallion on a chain that swung as if to remind him of journeys past. Here, the air was thick with possibility and danger in equal measure. The market was supposed to move locations every full moon, and tonight the ceiling’s low, expansive dark held the memory of a moon that had bound this place with a quiet promise and a ready lie. A bone token, hammered from something old and living, glowed faintly on the other side of the space, a rune-marked disc that looked both sanctified and sinister. People wore tokens as if they were talismans, a shield against the unknown and a key to further corners of this hidden world. And in the middle of the market’s bustle—where the air crackled with a different language, one that sounded half-foreign and half as if it were a song the city forgot to sing—a figure stood with the cadence of someone who knew how to move between the lines of normal life and the lines that code for something else entirely. Tomás Herrera stood there, not quite in the crowd but not at its edge either, a former paramedic whose hands had learned to be careful with bodies and whose past couldn’t quite be left behind, not when the city’s hardships kept finding him in the wrong rooms at the wrong times. His warm brown eyes flicked toward the corridor from which they had come, and for a moment there was no mask, no pretense—only a wary, honest look that wasn’t there to charm but to measure the distance between two truths: the truth of a detective standing at the threshold and the truth of a man who knew how easily the door could be shut behind them both. Harlow’s breath fogged in front of her, a pale ghost drifting from a body that was all lines and stubbornness and not a single inch more of mercy than the case required. The rain’s memory clung to her hair, to the cuffs of her coat, to the edge of her jaw where the sharpness she wore like a weapon found a point of vulnerability. The bone token’s glow—the token that opened the market’s gate—cast a pale, bone-white light across the tunnel’s damp floor, drawing eyes to it, drawing fingers toward it in a way that made her skin prick with static and fear and fascination all at once. The suspect—this figure who had become too familiar with the city’s hidden rules—turned his head just enough to catch a glint of the token in his pocket, or perhaps to watch it glow in a way that told him he’d chosen the right door, given him passage to a room where those who trafficked in the city’s darkest medicine did their business with a calm that looked almost holy, almost paternal. He spoke a line in a clipped, breath-steady voice that carried more confidence than fear could buy: “You don’t belong down here, Quinn.” Her answer came with the quiet of a bullet fired into the mind rather than a sound you could hear. “Tell that to your patients,” she said, the words crisp and precise, the cadence of a soldier who had learned to name the enemy even when the enemy wore a smile and a pulse that felt almost human. The chase resumed with that same brutal economy. He moved deeper into the market’s maze, threading between stalls that sold things the city pretended didn’t exist, avoiding the gaze of watchers who seemed to appear and vanish as if they had learned their luck by living in the dark. The market’s rules flexed around them: there were no dry maps here, only whispered directions, shortcuts that opened and closed on the market’s mood, a living organism that thrived on secrets and risk. Harlow pressed, the rain-slicked world behind them replaced by a smell that was a blend of rain-soaked earth and a thousand years of unspoken deals. The suspector’s pace quickened when he thought he had bought himself a measure of safety in the market’s chaos; he darted through a line of stalls where the air smelled of ozone and resin, onto a platform that could have been a forgotten junction, if not for the market’s haunting, dreamlike hum that kept nudging you toward choices you didn’t know you would make until you made them. In a narrow moment between stalls, Tomás’s form emerged—though not in full, only a silhouette that carried the kind of weight you could miss if you blinked. He wore the Saint Christopher medallion around his neck—the symbol of safe travel, of journeys made and not all of them by road—and his left forearm bore the scar from a knife attack, the line jagged and pale under the glow of the market’s lamps. He didn’t step closer, not yet, but his presence pulled at the edges of Harlow’s memory: a reminder of his past care, a reminder that beneath the bloodless logic of this chase there lay a person who measured risk the way a medic measures injuries, by how much you can bear and still keep moving. Her mind fought a war with her instincts. The city’s rain and her partner’s memory—DS Morris’s death three years ago under circumstances that had supernatural fingerprints she hadn’t yet understood—they pressed at her from inside. She had learned to live with the questions, to guard them the way you guard a wound—let it close enough to heal, but never so completely that you forgot it could fester again. The market’s hum rose a notch, as if listening to that memory, as if it too wanted a confession. The suspect ducked behind a stall where a man offered a vial that turned smoke into small, bright motes when agitated, and a girl traded glimmering powder for a coin with the ease of one who understood that every trade in this place carried consequences longer than a night’s shadow. The suspect paused, as if calculating whether the token gave him more protection or more risk, and Harlow moved with him, careful not to betray the law’s own fear by showing hers. The chase’s rhythm altered here, slowed only by the market’s own insistence on letting a hunter and prey move through its labyrinth in a way that could feel almost ceremonial. Then the gate opened, not a door, not a wall, but a widening in the tunnel that led deeper into the underground city. Ahead, the tunnel’s ceiling arched like a cathedral’s, and the market’s murmured liturgy found a louder, more urgent cadence as if to announce to the world that the chase’s nerve was about to be tested by something far older than human pursuit. The bone token finally found its story: the suspect reached into his own coat and drew out the token, an artifact that looked both sanctified and savage, etched with runes that glowed faintly in the market’s strange light. He pressed it to a wall that looked ordinary as any brick in London, and a hiss of air—a breath of the old city—welcomed him into a gate that existed only at the hinge between this world and something beyond. The gate did not open for the crowd; it opened for the token, and, for a breath, the space beyond where it opened seemed to bend toward him like a confidant. Harlow didn’t hesitate. The gate’s light crawled across her skin, and if she felt a sting of fear, it was not for herself but for what it could mean: that the market’s power was not all crime and commerce, but something a detective wasn’t meant to see, and something the city was certainly not built to protect. She stepped toward the token’s glow, counting the distance to the threshold not by feet but by heartbeats—the drumbeat in her chest that had saved her life more times than she could count and had also failed her partner in a way that still woke her with cold fear some mornings. The moment she crossed into the gate, the world shifted. The market extended in front of her like a living thing: stalls that breathed, ceilings that glinted with stars not of the night sky but of a different, colder place, and people who wore expressions as if their faces were curtains that could be parted to reveal some other truth. The sound of rain was replaced by a soft murmur, a chorus of voices with no particular language but a shared intent: to trade secrecy for survival, to barter with danger for something they called information, to measure the price of life with the same care a doctor uses a patient’s pulse. Tomás kept a few paces ahead, the Saint Christopher medallion catching the market’s light and throwing it into small, fleeting halos around his neck. The scar on his forearm was visible now in this pale glow, the line of it a reminder that he had felt the city’s violence on his own skin and carried it forward, not as a shame but as a map. He looked back once, a look that wasn’t a threat but a quiet confirmation that he knew this world as well as he knew the shared, battered humanity that kept him alive. Harlow’s decision sat on her like a stone in her boot. The rule of the city—never trust a place that thrives on secrets, never follow a man who knows the streets more than you do, never descend where you cannot see what waits—these rules had saved her, and they had saved others who wore coats and carried guns and carried their heartbreaks like armor. But tonight those rules felt both too clean and too brittle to apply to a market where the line between guardian and thief blurred into something unrecognizable. The clique was here; she could feel it—the network, the quiet power that moved the city’s pieces as if it were playing a game of chess with knives instead of kings. If she stepped back, she risked losing not only the suspect but the city’s heart. The choice pressed down on her, precise as her own weaponmaker’s craft. If she followed, she would enter a world where miracles could be bought and sold, where alchemical substances walked the street in plain sight, where information crawled through cracks in the walls like a tide, and where the supernatural coiled in corners like a sleeping predator waiting for someone to wake it with a single careless step. If she stayed, she would admit that the crime she hunted might be beyond the city’s law to solve, that the clique’s network ran deeper than she could reach with warrants and chalk lines and a stubborn sense of “this is where I belong.” Her gaze found the suspect again—Tomás, yes, moving through the market with the same laconic efficiency you’d expect from someone who had learned to improvise life-saving care in a war zone, now translated into a different kind of battlefield. He moved toward a stall that gleamed with knives and vials and small boxes that looked like they had learned to imitate the shape of life itself. The owner, a woman with eyes like frost on glass, studied him as if she were already calculating the toll his choices would take. Tomás glanced toward the path ahead, where a corridor branched off toward a door that could open into something else entirely, and he paused just long enough for Harlow to realize the door was not mere architecture here, but a hinge to some larger door into which the city would either walk or be walked through. Harlow’s hand stayed ready at her side, her fingers aching with the memory of the past—the partner who had fallen, the case that had gone supernatural, the feeling of being watched by something older than a human’s fear. She stepped after Tomás, her boots quiet on the market’s strange flooring, a floor that could be any hallway in a city, or none of them, depending on how you looked at it. She kept her breath even, kept her pace measured, kept her eyes on his back, which was the only thing in this world that looked as if it had nothing to fear, as if fear itself were a tool in his hands and not a weapon aimed at him. The chase closed in on a quiet moment, a pause that felt almost choreographed in this place where every shadow was a potential seller and every whisper could be a lie told with care. Tomás raised his head to look down a corridor that glowed with a pale blue, not unlike the light of a hospital corridor faintly echoing through the market’s more magical architecture. He paused, not out of caution but out of a stubborn sense of what came next—the final act of a pursuit that had become less about catching him and more about understanding what he was trying to deliver to the underworld’s heart. “Quinn,” he said, not loud but intentional, turning so that his face could be seen under the pale light. The Saint Christopher medallion flashed once, a metal memory of roads traveled and people saved, and his eyes, warm brown, held hers with a calm honesty that was almost jarring in a place where honesty came at a premium. Harlow’s jaw tightened, not with anger but with the precise, almost surgical decision she always made before stepping into danger: what do I owe the truth here? The truth was not something she could pin down quickly, not in a market where every transaction promised a new version of reality. The truth was the memory of DS Morris’s partner’s face, the way the supernatural origins had unsettled her, a question about what the city would endure when faced with forces it had not yet named. The truth was that this might be the moment to reveal a line she would not be able to un-cross, a line between her duty and the city’s most feral heart. Tomás angled his head toward the back of the market, where a narrow stair ran down toward a hatch that looked more a mouth than a doorway. The air here tasted metallic, with a hint of old hospital linens and something else—something that reminded her of bad weather and worse secrets. He spoke again, a quiet invitation that was not an invitation at all but a dare: “If you want to end this, you’ll have to go deeper. If you want to stop me, you’ll have to decide what you’re willing to give up.” The bone token hung at the edge of her vision, a stubborn, ancient thing that pulsed with a pale glow, as if it contained a whole city’s worth of whispered bargains. The token’s light tugged at something primal inside her, a reminder that this world was not a place to be trifled with, not a place to pretend danger could be kept at bay with a straight face and a warrant. The token’s glow deepened as if lending her courage and warning her of what she might find in the market’s deeper arteries. Her breath hitched, not from fear but from resolve. The detective who had fought so long to keep this city’s teeth from biting down on the innocent now faced a choice that would either seal her fate as a guardian who could stand the rain and the night, or prove she was just another person who would leave safe streets for the sake of catching a suspect. The decision carved itself into her mind with the quiet certainty of a blade sliding free from its sheath. She would follow. Not because chasing down a single man would fix everything, not because she believed she could tame a market that thrived on the edge of reason, but because to stop here would leave the city with a truth she could not live with—that some things in London thrived precisely because they walked between the known and the unknown, and some lines, once crossed, altered the shape of everything you’d ever believed about yourself as a protector, as a witness, as a person who still believed in rules in the night. She stepped closer to the market’s gate, toward the pale, bone-white token that hovered in the air as if it had a will of its own. She could feel the rain’s memory on her skin again, the way it clung and wouldn’t let go, the way it asked for something in return for its cleansing. She did not look away from Tomás’s back as she moved, not yet, not while he stood at the gate’s threshold—a doorway to a world where the city’s most guarded truths lived in the raw, unpolished light of a market that did not pretend to be anything but exactly what it was. The gate’s whisper pressed into the tunnel’s hush, a sound only the truly committed might hear—the sound of a choice being made, of a life being weighed against a city’s safety, of a line between law and survival shifting from a point on a map to something permanent etched into a person’s very bones. And then Harlow Quinn, Detective, pulled her coat tighter and stepped forward after the man who would lead her into a world where magic walked with clinic lights, where the clique’s power pulsed beneath every stall, and where the rain’s memory would keep time with every breath she drew as long as she continued. The door—no, the mouth of a tunnel—gnawed at the night, and she went, not sprinting now but walking with a pace that told the market’s denizens she was not here to bargain, but to claim what she believed to be hers by right: the truth, even if the truth asked her to walk into the Veil Market’s living, breathing heart. Behind her, the green neon sign of The Raven’s Nest faded to a pale hook of light on the wall, the door sealing itself with a sigh that sounded almost like relief, and the rain itself finally surrendered, as if the city had conceded that tonight it would tell its secrets to someone who would not pretend they did not exist. The market breathed in, breathed out, and the night became a long corridor toward a decision that would make every rain-soaked step of this chase worth the weight the city had placed on her shoulders. The chase, the belief, the memory—the city’s heartbeat—pushed her forward, into the market’s waiting hush, where every shadow might hold a patient, every whisper could be a confession, and every token could be the key to a door that no one could pretend existed outside the city’s most guarded dreams.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
0.0000% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags2
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"she said, the words crisp and precise, the cadence of a soldier who had learned to name the enemy even when the enemy wore a smile and a pulse that felt almost human [almost]"
88.6801% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)
wordCount4417
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"completely"
count1
1
adverb"precisely"
count1
2
adverb"quickly"
count1
3
adverb"truly"
count1
4
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"completely"
1"precisely"
2"quickly"
3"truly"
4"very"
100.0000% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.0000% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
52.4564% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)
wordCount4417
totalAiIsms21
found
0
word"flickered"
count1
1
word"flicked"
count1
2
word"glint"
count1
3
word"clandestine"
count1
4
word"sinister"
count1
5
word"loomed"
count1
6
word"calculating"
count2
7
word"unspoken"
count2
8
word"unsettled"
count1
9
word"weight"
count4
10
word"footsteps"
count1
11
word"echo"
count2
12
word"echoing"
count1
13
word"etched"
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highlights
0"flickered"
1"flicked"
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3"clandestine"
4"sinister"
5"loomed"
6"calculating"
7"unspoken"
8"unsettled"
9"weight"
10"footsteps"
11"echo"
12"echoing"
13"etched"
100.0000% Cliche density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"air was thick with"
count1
highlights
0"the air was thick with"
100.0000% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences127
matches(empty)
100.0000% Filter word density
Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences127
filterMatches
0"look"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"tend to"
100.0000% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount6
totalSentences127
matches
0"understood that every"
1"mean: that the"
2"admit that the solve, that the"
3"was that this"
4"conceded that tonight"
31.0645% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs41
mean106.22
std27.48
cv0.259
sampleLengths
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1118
278
3124
4161
587
683
766
8115
9107
1058
11130
12157
13118
14108
1594
1658
1782
1893
19127
2087
21112
2265
23109
24108
25112
2697
27137
28113
29146
30120
31107
3258
33116
3494
3593
3667
37112
38107
39168
40146
100.0000% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤5% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences127
matches
0"was supposed"
1"was replaced"
2"being watched"
3"being made, being weighed"
100.0000% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs650
matches
0"were trying"
1"were playing"
2"was trying"
88.0000% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount4373
adjectiveStacks2
stackExamples
0"pale, bone-white light"
1"pale, bone-white token"
adverbCount118
adverbRatio0.026983764006402927
lyAdverbCount30
lyAdverbRatio0.00686027898467871
100.0000% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences127
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.0000% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences127
mean34.29
std16.47
cv0.48
sampleLengths
039
142
236
328
432
525
633
721
827
930
109
1146
1230
1339
145
1526
1660
1716
1813
1941
2021
2130
2236
2319
2421
2543
2618
274
284
2940
3057
3158
3240
3332
3435
3555
363
3735
3825
3970
4012
4136
4227
4323
4459
4551
4667
4732
4832
4944
27.1654% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats29
diversityRatio0.1968503937007874
totalSentences127
uniqueOpeners25
0.0000% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"she said, the words crisp and precise, the cadence of a soldier who had learned to name the enemy even when the enemy wore a smile and a pulse that felt almost human (say, learn name wear feel almost)"
1"he said, not loud but intentional, turning so that his face could be seen under the pale light (say, see)"
75.7274%