Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMR0JGRR0WHVNHWSAGHCW0Q

Run Details

Model:: Claude Haiku 4.5
Test:: Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:: Fantasy: entering an ancient ruin
Duration:: 17.3s
Cost:: $0.009627
Provider:: Amazon Bedrock

Evaluation summary

Score	Evaluator	Details Link
100.00%	Adverbs in dialogue tags	(details)
90.91%	AI-ism adverb frequency	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism character names	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism location names	(details)
50.00%	AI-ism word frequency	(details)
100.00%	Cliché density	(details)
100.00%	Emotion telling (show vs. tell)	(details)
80.75%	Filter word density	(details)
100.00%	Gibberish response detection	(details)
100.00%	Markdown formatting overuse	(details)
100.00%	Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)	(details)
83.33%	Name drop frequency	(details)
0.00%	Narrator intent-glossing	(details)
0.00%	"Not X but Y" pattern overuse	(details)
100.00%	Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)	(details)
100.00%	Paragraph length variance	(details)
100.00%	Passive voice overuse	(details)
100.00%	Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse	(details)
0.00%	Em-dash & semicolon overuse	(details)
94.31%	Purple prose (modifier overload)	(details)
100.00%	Repeated phrase echo	(details)
100.00%	Sentence length variance	(details)
71.43%	Sentence opener variety	(details)
52.08%	Adverb-first sentence starts	(details)
100.00%	Pronoun-first sentence starts	(details)
61.56%	Subject-first sentence starts	(details)
0.00%	Subordinate conjunction sentence starts	(details)
0.00%	Technical jargon density	(details)
53.57%	Useless dialogue additions	(details)
59.09%	Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)	(details)
73.2345%	Overall

Model input

System

You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue.

You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex.

Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.

User/Human

<codex>
<character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist">
  <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor>
  <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair>
  <height>5'6"</height>
  <age>25</age>
  <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar>
  <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description>
  <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card">
  <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor>
  <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height>
  <age>ageless</age>
  <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form>
  <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice>
  <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description>
  <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle">
  <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor>
  <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair>
  <height>5'5"</height>
  <age>300 years old</age>
  <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance>
  <speech>speaks in riddles</speech>
  <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints>
  <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion>
  <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description>
  <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory>
</character>

<location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony">
  <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler>
  <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor>
  <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description>
</location>

<location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)">
  <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation>
  <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones>
  <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior>
  <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora>
  <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description>
</location>

<item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas">
  <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor>
  <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial>
  <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size>
  <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior>
  <glow>faint inner glow</glow>
  <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description>
</item>

<item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts">
  <material>moonsilver</material>
  <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape>
  <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature>
  <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow>
  <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power>
  <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo>
  <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description>
</item>

<lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology">
  <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect>
  <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance>
  <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring>
  <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description>
</lore>
</codex>

Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre.

A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition.

Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore.
Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

Aurora's first breath of the Fae Grove's air tasted like honeysuckle and something older—something that predated language itself. She stepped through the boundary of ancient oak stones, and the afternoon light fractured into something neither fully day nor night. The temperature dropped ten degrees in the span of a heartbeat.

"Christ," she whispered.

Behind her, Nyx slipped through the standing stones like smoke dissolving into water. For a being of shadow, they seemed almost solid here, their form more defined. The faintly glowing violet of their eyes caught the strange amber-filtered light as they surveyed the clearing. Beside them, Isolde moved without walking, simply existing in a new location, her silver hair catching luminescence that shouldn't have existed.

"Welcome," the Seer said, her voice like wind through distant forests, "to the place between breaths."

The grove opened before them—not gradually, but all at once, as if reality had simply decided to expand. Wildflowers covered the ground in impossible profusion: night-blooming jasmine alongside spring daisies, autumn crocuses tangled with summer roses. None of them should have existed in the same season. None of them should have coexisted on the same plane of existence. Yet here they swayed in a breeze that felt warm and cold simultaneously, carrying scents that shifted with each inhale—peony, rain, cinnamon, sea salt, burnt sage.

Aurora knelt and touched a bloom between her fingers. The petals were soft as skin, warm despite the grove's temperature. When she pulled her hand back, her fingertips glowed faintly—not with light, but with a kind of absence, as if they'd touched something that existed more fully in another world.

"The Veil is thinner here," Isolde said, stepping barefoot across the flowering meadow. Her feet made no impression in the soft earth. "She remembers what it was to be one realm."

Aurora stood, her delivery-driver's trainers sinking slightly into moss that hadn't been there a moment ago. Or perhaps it had always been there. Time felt negotiable in the Fae Grove.

The clearing stretched further than the physical space of Richmond Park should have allowed. At its center stood a pool of still water, its surface perfectly reflective, yet she could see nothing in it—no sky, no trees, only a depthless black like looking into an abyss. Around it, the wildflowers grew more densely, as if drawn to the water's edge.

Nyx moved toward it with the fluid grace of smoke, their humanoid form seeming to flow across the ground rather than walk it. "How many memories does this place hold?" they asked, their whisper-voice carrying an edge of something like longing.

"All of them," Isolde replied. "The ones you had. The ones you'll have. The ones you might have forgotten." She turned her lavender eyes toward Aurora. "The Seer who walks this place sees not forward, but sideways through all possible nows."

Aurora felt the Heartstone Pendant warm against her chest. It didn't pulse—not yet—but it thrummed with a gentle heat, as if waking from sleep. She pulled the chain from beneath her shirt. The deep crimson stone caught the impossible light and held it, creating small rainbows that danced across the clearing.

Isolde's expression didn't change, but something shifted in her presence. The air grew heavier. The flowers leaned toward the pendant rather than toward the light.

"Your benefactor chose this gift with care," the Seer said. "The Heartstone remembers its origin. It remembers Dymas."

Aurora had expected that name to feel dangerous, to carry the weight of all she'd learned about Hel's realms. Instead, it merely felt like a door opening onto something she didn't yet understand. "Why would someone from Gluttony's realm give this to me?"

"Why indeed?" Isolde moved to the pool's edge and looked into its impenetrable depths. "Some gifts are made with hope. Others with debt. Still others with warning dressed as generosity." She tilted her head, as if listening to something inaudible. "The question that follows matters more than the answer."

Nyx had reached the water now, their form casting no reflection. They crouched at the pool's rim, their violet eyes scanning its surface with an intensity that suggested they saw far more than Aurora could. "There's something under it," they said quietly. "Something that was, something that is, something that hasn't chosen to be yet."

The grove seemed to hold its breath.

Aurora walked toward them, her heart moving with deliberate steadiness despite the way her skin prickled with awareness. The Fae-Forged Blade hung at her hip, cold against her thigh even through the leather sheath. She'd begun to trust that coldness—it marked something true in a world that increasingly blurred between real and impossible.

The closer she got to the pool, the more the flowers responded. They turned their petals toward her approach, not toward light now, but toward her specifically. Toward the pendant. Some of them bloomed in reverse, their petals folding inward until they became seed pods. Others opened wider, releasing pollen that glowed faintly in the amber-filtered air.

"Time moves differently here," Isolde continued, her voice taking on the cadence of something rehearsed yet never quite memorized. "An hour can be a minute. A minute can hollow out a year. The Veil is not only thin—it is worn. Like cloth rubbed too many times in the same place. Something is pressing from the other side."

Aurora stopped beside Nyx. She stared into the pool's depths, trying to make sense of what she was seeing. There was something there, beneath the black—a shape, perhaps, or the suggestion of movement. Shadows moving within shadow.

"The winter solstice is coming," Isolde said. It wasn't quite a warning. "When the Veil weakens most. Already, those bound to Hel grow restless. Already, the Wardens count their resources and wonder if it will be enough. Already, your benefactor's gift begins to burn with purpose rather than dormancy."

The pendant pulsed once, sharp and sudden. Not warmth this time, but something like hunger.

Aurora's hand moved to the Fae-Forged Blade without conscious decision. The moonsilver was ice beneath her palm, and when she drew it, the blade caught light that shouldn't exist, creating its own luminescence. The dagger seemed to quiet the grove's nervous energy, drawing it back from the edge of something that felt dangerously close to revelation.

"What do you need me to do?" Aurora asked.

The Seer smiled then, and it was not entirely a kind expression. "Oh, bright one," Isolde said, "you've already begun. The only question now is whether you'll survive completion."

Behind them, something in the pool began to rise.

Evaluation details

Result

Evaluator

Details

Meta Data

100.00%

Adverbs in dialogue tags

Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs

totalTags

adverbTagCount

adverbTags

0	"they said quietly [quietly]"

dialogueSentences

tagDensity

0.636

leniency

rawRatio

0.071

effectiveRatio

0.071

90.91%

AI-ism adverb frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)

wordCount

1100

totalAiIsmAdverbs

found

adverb	"slightly"
count	1

adverb	"perfectly"
count	1

highlights

0	"slightly"
1	"perfectly"

100.00%

AI-ism character names

Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

100.00%

AI-ism location names

Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

50.00%

AI-ism word frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)

wordCount

1100

totalAiIsms

found

word	"fractured"
count	1

word	"whisper"
count	1

word	"pulse"
count	1

word	"weight"
count	1

word	"depths"
count	2

word	"scanning"
count	1

word	"intensity"
count	1

word	"sense of"
count	1

word	"pulsed"
count	1

word	"warmth"
count	1

highlights

0	"fractured"
1	"whisper"
2	"pulse"
3	"weight"
4	"depths"
5	"scanning"
6	"intensity"
7	"sense of"
8	"pulsed"
9	"warmth"

100.00%

Cliché density

Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window

totalCliches	0
maxInWindow	0
found	(empty)
highlights	(empty)

100.00%

Emotion telling (show vs. tell)

Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling

emotionTells	0
narrationSentences	69
matches	(empty)

80.75%

Filter word density

Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words

filterCount

hedgeCount

narrationSentences

filterMatches

(empty)

hedgeMatches

0	"seemed to"
1	"began to"

100.00%

Gibberish response detection

Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)

analyzedSentences	77
gibberishSentences	0
adjustedGibberishSentences	0
longSentenceCount	0
runOnParagraphCount	0
giantParagraphCount	0
wordSaladCount	0
repetitionLoopCount	0
controlTokenCount	0
maxSentenceWordsSeen	39
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Markdown formatting overuse

Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting

markdownSpans	0
markdownWords	0
totalWords	1090
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)

Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks

totalAttributions	11
unquotedAttributions	0
matches	(empty)

83.33%

Name drop frequency

Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words

totalMentions

wordCount

855

uniqueNames

maxNameDensity

1.29

worstName

"Aurora"

maxWindowNameDensity

2.5

worstWindowName

"Aurora"

discoveredNames

Fae	4
Grove	2
Nyx	4
Isolde	8
Seer	3
Richmond	1
Park	1
Aurora	11
Heartstone	1
Pendant	1
Hel	1
Fae-Forged	2
Blade	2

persons

0	"Nyx"
1	"Isolde"
2	"Seer"
3	"Aurora"
4	"Hel"
5	"Blade"

places

0	"Fae"
1	"Grove"
2	"Richmond"
3	"Park"
4	"Pendant"
5	"Fae-Forged"

globalScore

0.857

windowScore

0.833

0.00%

Narrator intent-glossing

Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns

analyzedSentences

glossingSentenceCount

matches

0	"tasted like honeysuckle and something old"
1	"seemed almost solid here, their form more defined"
2	"something like longing"
3	"as if waking from sleep"
4	"felt like a door opening onto something"
5	"as if listening to something inaudible"
6	"something like hunger"

0.00%

"Not X but Y" pattern overuse

Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words

totalMatches

per1kWords

5.505

wordCount

1090

matches

0	"neither fully day nor"
1	"not gradually, but all at once, as if reality had simply decided to expand"
2	"not with light, but with a kind of absence, as if they'd touched something"
3	"not forward, but sideways through all possible nows"
4	"not toward light now, but toward her specifically"
5	"Not warmth this time, but something like hunger"

100.00%

Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)

Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses

thatCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"expected that name"

100.00%

Paragraph length variance

Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts

totalParagraphs

mean

38.93

std

20.05

0.515

sampleLengths

0	50
1	3
2	65
3	16
4	84
5	50
6	31
7	30
8	60
9	41
10	41
11	51
12	25
13	18
14	43
15	49
16	55
17	7
18	53
19	57
20	57
21	37
22	49
23	15
24	56
25	9
26	29
27	9

100.00%

Passive voice overuse

Target: ≤2% passive sentences

passiveCount	0
totalSentences	69
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse

Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs

pastProgressiveCount

totalVerbs

142

matches

0	"was seeing"

0.00%

Em-dash & semicolon overuse

Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons

emDashCount

semicolonCount

flaggedSentences

totalSentences

ratio

0.104

matches

0	"Aurora's first breath of the Fae Grove's air tasted like honeysuckle and something older—something that predated language itself."
1	"The grove opened before them—not gradually, but all at once, as if reality had simply decided to expand."
2	"Yet here they swayed in a breeze that felt warm and cold simultaneously, carrying scents that shifted with each inhale—peony, rain, cinnamon, sea salt, burnt sage."
3	"When she pulled her hand back, her fingertips glowed faintly—not with light, but with a kind of absence, as if they'd touched something that existed more fully in another world."
4	"At its center stood a pool of still water, its surface perfectly reflective, yet she could see nothing in it—no sky, no trees, only a depthless black like looking into an abyss."
5	"It didn't pulse—not yet—but it thrummed with a gentle heat, as if waking from sleep."
6	"She'd begun to trust that coldness—it marked something true in a world that increasingly blurred between real and impossible."
7	"There was something there, beneath the black—a shape, perhaps, or the suggestion of movement."

94.31%

Purple prose (modifier overload)

Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking

wordCount	871
adjectiveStacks	0
stackExamples	(empty)
adverbCount	39
adverbRatio	0.04477611940298507
lyAdverbCount	19
lyAdverbRatio	0.021814006888633754

100.00%

Repeated phrase echo

Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)

totalSentences	77
echoCount	0
echoWords	(empty)

100.00%

Sentence length variance

Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts

totalSentences

mean

14.16

std

7.29

0.515

sampleLengths

0	18
1	21
2	11
3	3
4	13
5	14
6	17
7	21
8	16
9	18
10	18
11	10
12	12
13	26
14	9
15	11
16	30
17	13
18	9
19	9
20	16
21	7
22	7
23	14
24	32
25	14
26	23
27	18
28	5
29	21
30	15
31	9
32	15
33	8
34	19
35	10
36	4
37	11
38	10
39	8
40	19
41	14
42	10
43	14
44	26
45	9
46	11
47	24
48	7
49	13

71.43%

Sentence opener variety

Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers

consecutiveRepeats	5
diversityRatio	0.4675324675324675
totalSentences	77
uniqueOpeners	36

52.08%

Adverb-first sentence starts

Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb

adverbCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"Instead, it merely felt like"

ratio

0.016

100.00%

Pronoun-first sentence starts

Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun

pronounCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"She stepped through the boundary"
1	"Her feet made no impression"
2	"they asked, their whisper-voice carrying"
3	"She turned her lavender eyes"
4	"It didn't pulse—not yet—but it"
5	"She pulled the chain from"
6	"She tilted her head, as"
7	"They crouched at the pool's"
8	"they said quietly"
9	"She'd begun to trust that"
10	"They turned their petals toward"
11	"She stared into the pool's"
12	"It wasn't quite a warning."

ratio

0.203

61.56%

Subject-first sentence starts

Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject

subjectCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"Aurora's first breath of the"
1	"She stepped through the boundary"
2	"The temperature dropped ten degrees"
3	"The faintly glowing violet of"
4	"the Seer said, her voice"
5	"The grove opened before them—not"
6	"Wildflowers covered the ground in"
7	"None of them should have"
8	"None of them should have"
9	"Aurora knelt and touched a"
10	"The petals were soft as"
11	"Isolde said, stepping barefoot across"
12	"Her feet made no impression"
13	"Aurora stood, her delivery-driver's trainers"
14	"Time felt negotiable in the"
15	"The clearing stretched further than"
16	"Nyx moved toward it with"
17	"they asked, their whisper-voice carrying"
18	"She turned her lavender eyes"
19	"Aurora felt the Heartstone Pendant"

ratio

0.797

0.00%

Subordinate conjunction sentence starts

Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction

subConjCount	0
totalSentences	64
matches	(empty)
ratio	0

0.00%

Technical jargon density

Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns

analyzedSentences

technicalSentenceCount

matches

0	"Beside them, Isolde moved without walking, simply existing in a new location, her silver hair catching luminescence that shouldn't have existed."
1	"Yet here they swayed in a breeze that felt warm and cold simultaneously, carrying scents that shifted with each inhale—peony, rain, cinnamon, sea salt, burnt sa…"
2	"Aurora stood, her delivery-driver's trainers sinking slightly into moss that hadn't been there a moment ago."
3	"The deep crimson stone caught the impossible light and held it, creating small rainbows that danced across the clearing."
4	"Others opened wider, releasing pollen that glowed faintly in the amber-filtered air."
5	"She stared into the pool's depths, trying to make sense of what she was seeing."
6	"The moonsilver was ice beneath her palm, and when she drew it, the blade caught light that shouldn't exist, creating its own luminescence."
7	"The dagger seemed to quiet the grove's nervous energy, drawing it back from the edge of something that felt dangerously close to revelation."

53.57%

Useless dialogue additions

Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments

totalTags

uselessAdditionCount

matches

0	"they asked, their whisper-voice carrying an edge of something like longing"
1	"She tilted, as if listening to something inaudible"

59.09%

Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)

Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags

totalTags

fancyCount

fancyTags

0	"she whispered (whisper)"
1	"Isolde continued (continue)"

dialogueSentences

tagDensity

0.5

leniency

rawRatio

0.182

effectiveRatio

0.182

73.2345%