Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMR44YF5P390K428RT8EW9A

Run Details

Model:: Z.AI GLM 4.6
Test:: Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:: Fantasy: entering an ancient ruin
Duration:: 48.9s
Cost:: $0.005857
Provider:: DeepInfra

Evaluation summary

Score	Evaluator	Details Link
100.00%	Adverbs in dialogue tags	(details)
73.78%	AI-ism adverb frequency	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism character names	(details)
100.00%	AI-ism location names	(details)
0.00%	AI-ism word frequency	(details)
100.00%	Cliché density	(details)
100.00%	Emotion telling (show vs. tell)	(details)
51.28%	Filter word density	(details)
100.00%	Gibberish response detection	(details)
98.42%	Markdown formatting overuse	(details)
100.00%	Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)	(details)
100.00%	Name drop frequency	(details)
0.00%	Narrator intent-glossing	(details)
24.87%	"Not X but Y" pattern overuse	(details)
100.00%	Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)	(details)
85.06%	Paragraph length variance	(details)
96.27%	Passive voice overuse	(details)
100.00%	Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse	(details)
75.63%	Em-dash & semicolon overuse	(details)
100.00%	Purple prose (modifier overload)	(details)
100.00%	Repeated phrase echo	(details)
100.00%	Sentence length variance	(details)
56.47%	Sentence opener variety	(details)
0.00%	Adverb-first sentence starts	(details)
60.00%	Pronoun-first sentence starts	(details)
20.00%	Subject-first sentence starts	(details)
100.00%	Subordinate conjunction sentence starts	(details)
53.57%	Technical jargon density	(details)
0.00%	Useless dialogue additions	(details)
0.00%	Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)	(details)
69.8449%	Overall

Model input

System

You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue.

You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex.

Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.

User/Human

<codex>
<character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist">
  <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor>
  <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair>
  <height>5'6"</height>
  <age>25</age>
  <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar>
  <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description>
  <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card">
  <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor>
  <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height>
  <age>ageless</age>
  <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form>
  <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice>
  <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description>
  <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory>
</character>

<character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle">
  <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor>
  <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair>
  <height>5'5"</height>
  <age>300 years old</age>
  <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance>
  <speech>speaks in riddles</speech>
  <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints>
  <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion>
  <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description>
  <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory>
</character>

<location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony">
  <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler>
  <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor>
  <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description>
</location>

<location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)">
  <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation>
  <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones>
  <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior>
  <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora>
  <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description>
</location>

<item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas">
  <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor>
  <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial>
  <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size>
  <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior>
  <glow>faint inner glow</glow>
  <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description>
</item>

<item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts">
  <material>moonsilver</material>
  <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape>
  <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature>
  <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow>
  <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power>
  <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo>
  <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description>
</item>

<lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology">
  <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect>
  <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance>
  <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring>
  <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description>
</lore>
</codex>

Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre.

A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition.

Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore.
Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

The air on the other side of the ancient oaks tasted different. It was clean, sharp, and carried the scent of a thousand blossoms Rory couldn’t name, all blooming at once. She stepped forward, her boots sinking slightly into a carpet of moss that was a deeper, more vibrant green than any she had ever seen. It gave softly under her weight, like a living thing. The ordinary sounds of Richmond Park—the distant traffic, the shouts of children, the barking of dogs—had vanished, replaced by a profound and humming silence.

Rory’s hand went to the Heartstone pendant at her throat. Back in the mundane world, it had been a familiar, faint warmth against her skin, a low-grade thrum that promised proximity to power. Here, in this impossible clearing, it was utterly cold. A chill, deep and sterile, radiated from the crimson gem, a stark contrast to the living warmth of the grove. It felt like a piece of Dymas, a fragment of Hel’s gluttonous heat, protesting the Fae-touched air.

Isolde moved ahead of them, her silver hair a river of moonlight against the impossible green. She left no footprints on the moss. Her pale lavender eyes were wide, not with surprise, but with a kind of serene homecoming. “The Veil is thin here,” she said, her voice like the chiming of tiny, glass bells. “A fold in the tapestry.”

Nyx was less solid. They weren’t walking so much as flowing, a humanoid silhouette of deeper shadow that rippled at the edges of the grove’s dappled light. Their voice, when it came, was a whisper that seemed to come from the rustle of the leaves all around them. *“The barrier is not a wall. It is a membrane. And we have slipped through its pores.”*

Rory drew a slow breath, trying to ground herself. She was a delivery driver from Cardiff, a woman who’d fled a broken relationship for a cramped flat above a London bar. Logic and routine were the anchors of her life. This place was the antithesis of both. Her gaze swept the clearing. Wildflowers, in colours that had no names, bloomed in tangled profusion. Petals shimmered with an iridescent sheen, like oil on water. Some glowed with a soft, internal luminescence. A vine with sapphire-blue blossoms curled around the trunk of an ancient birch tree, its bark the colour of polished bone.

She reached out and touched the moss. It was cool and damp, but beneath her fingers, she felt a faint, slow pulse, like the heartbeat of a sleeping giant. She snatched her hand back, a prickle of unease crawling up her spine.

“Do not be frightened of the life here,” Isolde said, turning back to her. The Seer’s feet were bare, yet she seemed untouched by the damp or the chill. “It is older and slower than yours. It does not mean you harm.”

Rory nodded, feeling foolish. She forced herself to focus, to be the cool-headed person her friends relied on. She checked her watch. The second hand was frozen at twelve. She frowned, tapping the crystal. Nothing. She held it to her ear. No tick. A knot of anxiety tightened in her stomach. “My watch stopped.”

Nyx’s shadow-form coalesced beside her, their faintly glowing violet eyes regarding the timepiece with detached curiosity. *“Time is a mortal construct. A river you have built banks for. Here… the river has no banks.”*

As if to prove the point, the light in the grove began to shift. It wasn’t the setting of the sun; the sky above the canopy of trees remained a soft, perpetual twilight. The light itself was changing, deepening from a pearlescent grey to a soft, golden hue, as if the grove had its own personal dawn. It happened without a source, without a sun. The light simply *was*. And as it changed, the colours of the flowers shifted with it, the blue blossons deepening to violet, the glowing ones flaring brighter.

They moved deeper into the grove, Isolde leading them toward its centre. The air grew warmer, filled with the sweet, heavy perfume of the blossoms. Rory felt the Fae-forged blade at her hip stir. The moonsilver dagger, a gift from Isolde, was always cold to the touch, a sliver of captured winter. Now, it felt different. A faint, thrumming energy vibrated through the sheath, a low hum that resonated in her bones. In this golden light, the leaf-shaped blade began to emit a faint, silvery luminescence of its own, a soft counterpoint to the glowing flora.

They came to the heart of the grove. A pool of water, so still and clear it looked like a pane of glass, occupied the centre. It reflected the sky and the impossible trees with perfect clarity, yet there was no bottom visible. The water seemed to go on forever, into another place. Willows with weeping boughs of pure white surrounded it, their long, slender leaves chiming softly in a breeze Rory could not feel on her skin.

Rory knelt at the edge of the pool, her reflection staring back at her. Her bright blue eyes seemed wider, more luminous in this light. The small crescent scar on her left wrist stood out, pale against her skin. She dipped her fingers into the water. It was neither warm nor cold, but it felt thick, substantial, like liquid silk. As she pulled her hand out, the water clung to her skin for a moment before beading and rolling off, leaving her perfectly dry.

“What is this place?” she whispered, the words barely disturbing the silence.

Isolde stood beside her, her gaze fixed on the pool’s impossible depths. “A sanctuary. A memory. A promise,” she said, her voice full of a melancholy beauty. “It is a place where what was, what is, and what could be all drink from the same spring.”

*“It is a place outside the story,”* Nyx added, their form wavering at the edge of the pool. *“A footnote between pages. A useful place to hide. Or to find what was lost.”*

Rory looked from the Seer to the Shade, then back to the shimmering water. The cold pendant against her throat and the humming blade at her hip felt like two opposing forces, two anchors pulling her in different directions. One was a reminder of the Hell she was tied to, the other a gift from the Fae she now courted. Here, in this timeless, wondrous place, she felt the immense, terrifying space between them. She was standing on the edge of a world far larger and more dangerous than she had ever imagined, and for the first time, she truly understood how small she was. And yet, looking at the impossible beauty of the grove, she didn’t feel afraid. She felt a spark of something else. Awe. And a terrifying, exhilarating sense of possibility.

Evaluation details

Result

Evaluator

Details

Meta Data

100.00%

Adverbs in dialogue tags

Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs

totalTags	5
adverbTagCount	0
adverbTags	(empty)
dialogueSentences	12
tagDensity	0.417
leniency	0.833
rawRatio	0
effectiveRatio	0

73.78%

AI-ism adverb frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)

wordCount

1144

totalAiIsmAdverbs

found

adverb	"slightly"
count	1

adverb	"softly"
count	2

adverb	"utterly"
count	1

adverb	"perfectly"
count	1

adverb	"truly"
count	1

highlights

0	"slightly"
1	"softly"
2	"utterly"
3	"perfectly"
4	"truly"

100.00%

AI-ism character names

Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

100.00%

AI-ism location names

Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)

codexExemptions	(empty)
found	(empty)

0.00%

AI-ism word frequency

Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)

wordCount

1144

totalAiIsms

found

word	"weight"
count	1

word	"profound"
count	1

word	"silence"
count	2

word	"familiar"
count	1

word	"warmth"
count	2

word	"chill"
count	2

word	"stark"
count	1

word	"tapestry"
count	1

word	"whisper"
count	1

word	"shimmered"
count	1

word	"pulse"
count	1

word	"crystal"
count	1

word	"stomach"
count	1

word	"vibrated"
count	1

word	"resonated"
count	1

word	"perfect"
count	1

word	"silk"
count	1

word	"depths"
count	1

word	"sanctuary"
count	1

word	"wavering"
count	1

word	"reminder"
count	1

word	"sense of"
count	1

highlights

0	"weight"
1	"profound"
2	"silence"
3	"familiar"
4	"warmth"
5	"chill"
6	"stark"
7	"tapestry"
8	"whisper"
9	"shimmered"
10	"pulse"
11	"crystal"
12	"stomach"
13	"vibrated"
14	"resonated"
15	"perfect"
16	"silk"
17	"depths"
18	"sanctuary"
19	"wavering"
20	"reminder"
21	"sense of"

100.00%

Cliché density

Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window

totalCliches	0
maxInWindow	0
found	(empty)
highlights	(empty)

100.00%

Emotion telling (show vs. tell)

Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling

emotionTells

narrationSentences

matches

0	"t with surprise"

51.28%

Filter word density

Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words

filterCount

hedgeCount

narrationSentences

filterMatches

"watch"

hedgeMatches

0	"seemed to"
1	"began to"

100.00%

Gibberish response detection

Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)

analyzedSentences	85
gibberishSentences	0
adjustedGibberishSentences	0
longSentenceCount	0
runOnParagraphCount	0
giantParagraphCount	0
wordSaladCount	0
repetitionLoopCount	0
controlTokenCount	0
maxSentenceWordsSeen	31
ratio	0
matches	(empty)

98.42%

Markdown formatting overuse

Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting

markdownSpans

markdownWords

totalWords

1142

ratio

0.051

matches

0	"“The barrier is not a wall. It is a membrane. And we have slipped through its pores.”"
1	"“Time is a mortal construct. A river you have built banks for. Here… the river has no banks.”"
2	"was"
3	"“It is a place outside the story,”"
4	"“A footnote between pages. A useful place to hide. Or to find what was lost.”"

100.00%

Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)

Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks

totalAttributions	6
unquotedAttributions	0
matches	(empty)

100.00%

Name drop frequency

Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words

totalMentions

wordCount

1022

uniqueNames

maxNameDensity

0.78

worstName

"Rory"

maxWindowNameDensity

1.5

worstWindowName

"Rory"

discoveredNames

Rory	8
Richmond	1
Park	1
Heartstone	1
Dymas	1
Hel	1
Fae-touched	1
Nyx	3
Cardiff	1
London	1
Seer	2
Isolde	5
Fae-forged	1
Shade	1
Hell	1
Fae	3

persons

0	"Rory"
1	"Hel"
2	"Nyx"
3	"Isolde"

places

0	"Richmond"
1	"Park"
2	"Heartstone"
3	"Cardiff"
4	"London"
5	"Seer"
6	"Fae"

globalScore

windowScore

0.00%

Narrator intent-glossing

Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns

analyzedSentences

glossingSentenceCount

matches

0	"felt like a piece of Dymas, a fragment"
1	"whisper that seemed to come from the rustle of the leaves all around them"
2	"seemed untouched by the damp or the chill"
3	"looked like a pane of glass, occupied the"
4	"seemed wider more luminous in this light"
5	"felt like two opposing forces, two anch"

24.87%

"Not X but Y" pattern overuse

Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words

totalMatches

per1kWords

1.751

wordCount

1142

matches

0	"not with surprise, but with a kind of serene homecoming"
1	"neither warm nor"

100.00%

Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)

Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses

thatCount	0
totalSentences	85
matches	(empty)

85.06%

Paragraph length variance

Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts

totalParagraphs

mean

67.18

std

30.07

0.448

sampleLengths

0	90
1	79
2	60
3	65
4	101
5	42
6	42
7	54
8	34
9	92
10	96
11	78
12	84
13	12
14	46
15	33
16	134

96.27%

Passive voice overuse

Target: ≤2% passive sentences

passiveCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"was frozen"
1	"was tied"

100.00%

Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse

Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs

pastProgressiveCount

totalVerbs

148

matches

0	"weren’t walking"
1	"was standing"

75.63%

Em-dash & semicolon overuse

Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons

emDashCount

semicolonCount

flaggedSentences

totalSentences

ratio

0.024

matches

0	"The ordinary sounds of Richmond Park—the distant traffic, the shouts of children, the barking of dogs—had vanished, replaced by a profound and humming silence."
1	"It wasn’t the setting of the sun; the sky above the canopy of trees remained a soft, perpetual twilight."

100.00%

Purple prose (modifier overload)

Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking

wordCount	1031
adjectiveStacks	0
stackExamples	(empty)
adverbCount	34
adverbRatio	0.03297769156159069
lyAdverbCount	10
lyAdverbRatio	0.009699321047526674

100.00%

Repeated phrase echo

Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)

totalSentences	85
echoCount	0
echoWords	(empty)

100.00%

Sentence length variance

Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts

totalSentences

mean

13.44

std

6.76

0.503

sampleLengths

0	12
1	19
2	25
3	10
4	24
5	10
6	23
7	9
8	20
9	17
10	16
11	7
12	16
13	16
14	5
15	4
16	23
17	21
18	17
19	9
20	22
21	9
22	7
23	5
24	11
25	10
26	7
27	21
28	7
29	22
30	13
31	14
32	15
33	13
34	4
35	14
36	4
37	7
38	5
39	1
40	6
41	2
42	8
43	3
44	16
45	18
46	14
47	19
48	24
49	8

56.47%

Sentence opener variety

Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers

consecutiveRepeats	2
diversityRatio	0.35294117647058826
totalSentences	85
uniqueOpeners	30

0.00%

Adverb-first sentence starts

Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb

adverbCount	0
totalSentences	75
matches	(empty)
ratio	0

60.00%

Pronoun-first sentence starts

Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun

pronounCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"It was clean, sharp, and"
1	"She stepped forward, her boots"
2	"It gave softly under her"
3	"It felt like a piece"
4	"She left no footprints on"
5	"Her pale lavender eyes were"
6	"she said, her voice like"
7	"They weren’t walking so much"
8	"Their voice, when it came,"
9	"She was a delivery driver"
10	"Her gaze swept the clearing."
11	"She reached out and touched"
12	"It was cool and damp,"
13	"She snatched her hand back,"
14	"She forced herself to focus,"
15	"She checked her watch."
16	"She frowned, tapping the crystal."
17	"She held it to her"
18	"It wasn’t the setting of"
19	"It happened without a source,"

ratio

0.4

20.00%

Subject-first sentence starts

Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject

subjectCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"The air on the other"
1	"It was clean, sharp, and"
2	"She stepped forward, her boots"
3	"It gave softly under her"
4	"The ordinary sounds of Richmond"
5	"Rory’s hand went to the"
6	"Here, in this impossible clearing,"
7	"A chill, deep and sterile,"
8	"It felt like a piece"
9	"Isolde moved ahead of them,"
10	"She left no footprints on"
11	"Her pale lavender eyes were"
12	"she said, her voice like"
13	"Nyx was less solid."
14	"They weren’t walking so much"
15	"Their voice, when it came,"
16	"Rory drew a slow breath,"
17	"She was a delivery driver"
18	"Logic and routine were the"
19	"This place was the antithesis"

ratio

0.88

100.00%

Subordinate conjunction sentence starts

Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction

subConjCount

totalSentences

matches

0	"As if to prove the"
1	"Now, it felt different."

ratio

0.027

53.57%

Technical jargon density

Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns

analyzedSentences

technicalSentenceCount

matches

0	"She stepped forward, her boots sinking slightly into a carpet of moss that was a deeper, more vibrant green than any she had ever seen."
1	"Back in the mundane world, it had been a familiar, faint warmth against her skin, a low-grade thrum that promised proximity to power."
2	"They weren’t walking so much as flowing, a humanoid silhouette of deeper shadow that rippled at the edges of the grove’s dappled light."
3	"She was a delivery driver from Cardiff, a woman who’d fled a broken relationship for a cramped flat above a London bar."
4	"The light itself was changing, deepening from a pearlescent grey to a soft, golden hue, as if the grove had its own personal dawn."
5	"A faint, thrumming energy vibrated through the sheath, a low hum that resonated in her bones."

0.00%

Useless dialogue additions

Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments

totalTags

uselessAdditionCount

matches

0	"she whispered, the words barely disturbing the silence"
1	"she said, her voice full of a melancholy beauty"
2	"Nyx added, their form wavering at the edge of the pool"

0.00%

Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)

Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags

totalTags

fancyCount

fancyTags

0	"she whispered (whisper)"
1	"Nyx added (add)"

dialogueSentences

tagDensity

0.417

leniency

0.833

rawRatio

0.4

effectiveRatio

0.333

69.8449%