Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMR64HBYAPYB5XMSF045EJ9

Run Details

Duration:
17.0s
Cost:
$0.006488
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The transition was not a physical step so much as a sickening lurch in the inner ear. One moment, Rory’s boots had been sinking into the damp, decaying mulch of Richmond Park; the next, the air turned cloyingly sweet, thick with the scent of overripe peaches and roasting meats. She stumbled forward, her hand instinctively flying to her left wrist, rubbing the small crescent-shaped scar there as she tried to find her bearings. Beside her, the air curdled. Nyx bled out of the shadows, their seven-foot silhouette lengthening and snapping back into a solid humanoid form. The Shade’s violet eyes pulsed with a low, rhythmic light, casting long, jagged flickers across the ground—ground that was no longer British soil, but a carpet of vibrant, succulent moss that felt like velvet underfoot. “This is not the grove,” Rory whispered. Her voice felt heavy, as if the very air were trying to feed her. “We have slipped past the Seer’s garden,” Nyx’s voice drifted over her like a cold draft through a graveyard. “The Veil is thin today, little Malphora. We have drifted toward a heavier shore. This is Dymas.” Rory looked up, and the breath died in her throat. Above them, the sky was a bruised, magnificent amber, the color of honey held up to a candle. There were no clouds, only swaths of deeper gold that swirled in slow, lazy cycles. In the distance, mountains that looked like jagged teeth of obsidian rose to meet the horizon, their slopes covered in sprawling, terraced vineyards. “Gluttony,” Rory murmured. She felt the Heartstone Pendant beneath her shirt pulse against her skin. It wasn't the frantic throb it gave when a portal was nearby; it was a steady, rhythmic warmth, like a purring cat. Isolde Varga moved past them then, her silver hair trailing behind her like a wake of smoke. The Half-Fae’s feet left no impressions on the moss, her weight seemingly ignored by the law of gravity. She tilted her head, her pale lavender eyes reflecting the amber sky. “The vine seeks the fruit, and the fruit seeks the belly,” Isolde said, her voice a melodic riddle. “We walk where the hunger never ends, yet the plate is never empty. Watch your step, child of Cardiff. To eat here is to stay.” Rory tightened her grip on the hilt of the moonsilver dagger Isolde had gifted her. The Fae-forged blade was bitingly cold against her palm, a necessary anchor in a realm designed to melt the senses. They began to walk, following a path paved with crushed almond shells that wound through an orchard of trees Rory couldn't name. The trunks were translucent, like spun sugar, and the leaves were broad, shimmering shards of emerald glass that tinkled in a non-existent breeze. As they moved deeper, the sensory assault intensified. To their left, a waterfall cascaded down a marble cliff, but the liquid wasn't water—it was a thick, iridescent cream that pooled into a lake of froth. The sound wasn't the roar of a torrent, but a rhythmic, bubbling sigh. Rory saw figures in the distance, draped in silks of saffron and crimson. They were hunched over long stone tables that groaned under the weight of silver platters. These were the contracted souls, the master chefs of Earth bound to Belphegor’s whim. She watched one man, dressed in a tattered toque, meticulously carving a bird made entirely of pomegranate seeds. He didn't look up as they passed; his eyes were wide, bloodshot, and fixed entirely on the symmetry of his creation. “They don't look like they’re suffering,” Rory noted, though a chill that had nothing to do with the temperature crawled down her spine. “Suffering takes many forms,” Nyx replied, their form flickering into a more ethereal state as they passed through the shadow of a giant pear tree. “In Dymas, the torture is the reaching. To taste perfection and know that tomorrow you must surpass it, or be consumed by the hunger you serve.” The path opened into a grand courtyard where the air hummed with a low, vibrating frequency. It was the sound of a thousand people chewing, a wet, rhythmic percussion that made Rory’s stomach churn. In the center of the courtyard sat a fountain that sprayed fine mists of wine. The droplets caught the amber light, turning into falling rubies. Rory stopped at the edge of a garden where the flowers were made of delicate, shaved ham and petals of crystallized ginger. The sheer excess was dizzying. “Why would the Heartstone lead us here?” Rory asked, pulling the crimson gem from beneath her collar. It was glowing now, a deep, angry ruby light that cut through the honeyed atmosphere. “The pendant belongs to this soil,” Isolde said, turning a slow circle. Her silver hair caught a stray breeze, fanning out like a halo. “It yearns for the Prince’s hearth. A gift given is a tether tied, and you, Aurora, are the trout on the line.” The unease Rory had been feeling sharpened into a cold, hard knot of dread. She looked at Nyx, but the Shade was staring at a rift in the reality ahead of them—a shimmering distortion in the air where the amber sky of Dymas met a jagged tear of pure, starlit blackness. “A rift,” Rory whispered. “The Veil is torn here.” “Belphegor does not like fences,” Nyx whispered back. “He prefers his guests to wander in... and his influence to wander out.” As they approached the rift, the lush beauty of the gluttonous realm began to sour. The fruit on the sugar-trees hung rotten and weeping; the velvet moss turned to slick, black grease. The smell of roasting meat became the stench of char and copper. Rory drew the Fae blade. Its moonsilver glow intensified, casting a pale, defiant light against the oppressive amber. She felt a vibration in the ground—not the rhythmic chewing from earlier, but a heavy, thumping footfall. From behind a thicket of obsidian vines, something began to emerge. It was a creature of impossible proportions, its skin the color of a bruised plum, draped in gold chains that rattled with every movement. “The Wardens watch the gates of Earth,” Isolde said, her voice dropping an octave, losing some of its whimsical lilt. “But here, the shadows have their own hounds.” Rory stepped forward, her boots finally finding purchase on stone rather than moss. She felt the quick, out-of-the-box thinking that had saved her in London kicking in. She wasn't an athlete or a mage, but she knew architecture, and she knew leverage. She looked at the translucent trees, then at the heavy gold chains of the approaching horror. “Nyx, the shadows of the vines,” Rory commanded, her voice steady. “If you can anchor them, I can cut the weight.” The Shade didn't argue. Their form exploded outward, a wave of darkness that rushed toward the obsidian thicket, stitching the creature’s shadow to the ground. The beast roared, a sound like a furnace door slamming shut. Rory didn't wait. She lunged, not for the creature, but for the towering sugar-tree beside it. The cold moonsilver sliced through the crystalline trunk as if it were warm wax. With a deafening crack, the tree tilted. “Move!” Rory yelled to Isolde. The Half-Fae drifted back as the massive structure collapsed, the glass-shard leaves raining down like a thousand daggers. The tree didn't just fall; it shattered, burying the tethered beast under a mountain of razor-sharp emerald fragments. Rory stood panting, the Heartstone pulsing hot against her chest. The amber sky above flickered, the honeyed light dimming for a fraction of a second, revealing the terrifying, cold void of the space between realms. “A temporary feast,” Isolde whispered, stepping over a pile of broken sugar. “But the Prince will know we have sampled his garden without an invitation.” “Then we should find what we came for,” Rory said, wiping a bead of sweat from her forehead and sheathing the cold blade. “Before he decides to make us the main course.” She looked toward the shimmering rift, the dark tear in the golden world. Ahead lay the unknown, but as she looked at her companions—the ancient Shade and the ageless Seer—Rory felt a strange, flickering confidence. She was a delivery girl from Cardiff, a law school dropout who had fled a broken life, but here, in the heart of Hel’s excess, she was something else. She was the one holding the blade. They stepped into the rift, the amber light of Dymas swallowed by the cold, silent dark of the Veil.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags15
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Nyx whispered back [back]"
dialogueSentences25
tagDensity0.6
leniency1
rawRatio0.067
effectiveRatio0.067
96.51% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1432
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1432
totalAiIsms29
found
0
word"lurch"
count1
1
word"pulsed"
count1
2
word"rhythmic"
count5
3
word"velvet"
count2
4
word"pulse"
count1
5
word"throb"
count1
6
word"warmth"
count1
7
word"weight"
count3
8
word"marble"
count1
9
word"chill"
count1
10
word"down her spine"
count1
11
word"stomach"
count1
12
word"churn"
count1
13
word"crystallized"
count1
14
word"oppressive"
count1
15
word"footfall"
count1
16
word"whimsical"
count1
17
word"lilt"
count1
18
word"crystalline"
count1
19
word"structure"
count1
20
word"shattered"
count1
21
word"flickered"
count1
highlights
0"lurch"
1"pulsed"
2"rhythmic"
3"velvet"
4"pulse"
5"throb"
6"warmth"
7"weight"
8"marble"
9"chill"
10"down her spine"
11"stomach"
12"churn"
13"crystallized"
14"oppressive"
15"footfall"
16"whimsical"
17"lilt"
18"crystalline"
19"structure"
20"shattered"
21"flickered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences81
matches(empty)
72.31% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount4
narrationSentences81
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences91
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen38
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1426
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions9
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
62.43% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions60
wordCount1199
uniqueNames21
maxNameDensity1.75
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory21
Richmond1
Park1
Shade4
British1
Heartstone2
Pendant1
Varga1
Half-Fae2
Isolde7
Fae-forged1
Earth1
Belphegor1
Nyx5
Dymas2
Fae4
London1
Seer1
Cardiff1
Hel1
Veil1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Shade"
2"Heartstone"
3"Varga"
4"Half-Fae"
5"Isolde"
6"Earth"
7"Nyx"
8"Dymas"
9"Fae"
10"Seer"
11"Hel"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Belphegor"
3"London"
4"Cardiff"
globalScore0.624
windowScore0.667
42.86% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences70
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"felt like velvet underfoot"
1"looked like jagged teeth of obsidian rose"
2"ss, her weight seemingly ignored by the law"
59.75% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.403
wordCount1426
matches
0"not the rhythmic chewing from earlier, but a heavy, thumping footfall"
1"not for the creature, but for the towering sugar-tree beside it"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences91
matches(empty)
90.88% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs34
mean41.94
std19.63
cv0.468
sampleLengths
049
182
221
336
466
537
647
743
880
948
1081
1123
1251
1359
1427
1532
1646
1751
189
1921
2062
2152
2228
2358
2421
2536
2637
275
2836
2935
3025
3132
3271
3319
96.60% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences81
matches
0"were hunched"
1"were made"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs200
matches
0"were trying"
1"was glowing"
2"was staring"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount6
semicolonCount5
flaggedSentences10
totalSentences91
ratio0.11
matches
0"One moment, Rory’s boots had been sinking into the damp, decaying mulch of Richmond Park; the next, the air turned cloyingly sweet, thick with the scent of overripe peaches and roasting meats."
1"The Shade’s violet eyes pulsed with a low, rhythmic light, casting long, jagged flickers across the ground—ground that was no longer British soil, but a carpet of vibrant, succulent moss that felt like velvet underfoot."
2"It wasn't the frantic throb it gave when a portal was nearby; it was a steady, rhythmic warmth, like a purring cat."
3"To their left, a waterfall cascaded down a marble cliff, but the liquid wasn't water—it was a thick, iridescent cream that pooled into a lake of froth."
4"He didn't look up as they passed; his eyes were wide, bloodshot, and fixed entirely on the symmetry of his creation."
5"She looked at Nyx, but the Shade was staring at a rift in the reality ahead of them—a shimmering distortion in the air where the amber sky of Dymas met a jagged tear of pure, starlit blackness."
6"The fruit on the sugar-trees hung rotten and weeping; the velvet moss turned to slick, black grease."
7"She felt a vibration in the ground—not the rhythmic chewing from earlier, but a heavy, thumping footfall."
8"The tree didn't just fall; it shattered, burying the tethered beast under a mountain of razor-sharp emerald fragments."
9"Ahead lay the unknown, but as she looked at her companions—the ancient Shade and the ageless Seer—Rory felt a strange, flickering confidence."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1215
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount25
adverbRatio0.0205761316872428
lyAdverbCount9
lyAdverbRatio0.007407407407407408
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences91
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences91
mean15.67
std6.99
cv0.446
sampleLengths
017
132
224
35
418
535
67
714
819
917
1010
1118
1215
1323
143
1512
1622
1717
1818
1912
2018
2125
2215
2320
2422
2523
268
2727
2813
2913
3015
3114
3218
3321
3423
3525
3626
3716
3818
3915
4010
4122
425
4317
4415
4512
4612
4722
4814
4937
56.78% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats5
diversityRatio0.37362637362637363
totalSentences91
uniqueOpeners34
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences78
matches(empty)
ratio0
91.79% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount25
totalSentences78
matches
0"She stumbled forward, her hand"
1"Her voice felt heavy, as"
2"She felt the Heartstone Pendant"
3"It wasn't the frantic throb"
4"She tilted her head, her"
5"They began to walk, following"
6"They were hunched over long"
7"She watched one man, dressed"
8"He didn't look up as"
9"It was the sound of"
10"It was glowing now, a"
11"Her silver hair caught a"
12"She looked at Nyx, but"
13"Its moonsilver glow intensified, casting"
14"She felt a vibration in"
15"It was a creature of"
16"She felt the quick, out-of-the-box"
17"She wasn't an athlete or"
18"She looked at the translucent"
19"Their form exploded outward, a"
ratio0.321
36.92% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount66
totalSentences78
matches
0"The transition was not a"
1"She stumbled forward, her hand"
2"Nyx bled out of the"
3"The Shade’s violet eyes pulsed"
4"Her voice felt heavy, as"
5"Nyx’s voice drifted over her"
6"Rory looked up, and the"
7"She felt the Heartstone Pendant"
8"It wasn't the frantic throb"
9"Isolde Varga moved past them"
10"The Half-Fae’s feet left no"
11"She tilted her head, her"
12"Isolde said, her voice a"
13"Rory tightened her grip on"
14"The Fae-forged blade was bitingly"
15"They began to walk, following"
16"The trunks were translucent, like"
17"The sound wasn't the roar"
18"Rory saw figures in the"
19"They were hunched over long"
ratio0.846
64.10% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences78
matches
0"To their left, a waterfall"
ratio0.013
32.02% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences58
technicalSentenceCount9
matches
0"The Shade’s violet eyes pulsed with a low, rhythmic light, casting long, jagged flickers across the ground—ground that was no longer British soil, but a carpet …"
1"In the distance, mountains that looked like jagged teeth of obsidian rose to meet the horizon, their slopes covered in sprawling, terraced vineyards."
2"The trunks were translucent, like spun sugar, and the leaves were broad, shimmering shards of emerald glass that tinkled in a non-existent breeze."
3"They were hunched over long stone tables that groaned under the weight of silver platters."
4"It was the sound of a thousand people chewing, a wet, rhythmic percussion that made Rory’s stomach churn."
5"It was a creature of impossible proportions, its skin the color of a bruised plum, draped in gold chains that rattled with every movement."
6"Their form exploded outward, a wave of darkness that rushed toward the obsidian thicket, stitching the creature’s shadow to the ground."
7"The cold moonsilver sliced through the crystalline trunk as if it were warm wax."
8"She was a delivery girl from Cardiff, a law school dropout who had fled a broken life, but here, in the heart of Hel’s excess, she was something else."
58.33% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags15
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"Isolde said, her voice a melodic riddle"
1"Rory commanded, her voice steady"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags13
fancyCount7
fancyTags
0"Rory whispered (whisper)"
1"Rory murmured (murmur)"
2"Rory noted (note)"
3"Rory whispered (whisper)"
4"Nyx whispered back (whisper)"
5"Rory yelled (yell)"
6"Isolde whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences25
tagDensity0.52
leniency1
rawRatio0.538
effectiveRatio0.538
72.0427%