Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMR762NQD41S8X4MSXYYHQD

Run Details

Duration:
3m 24s
Cost:
$0.077673
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
Rain stitched the night into a single, quivering sheet. It hammered the Soho pavement, hissed on the gutters, made light run like oil. Detective Harlow Quinn stood in the lee of a phone box with her collar up and her shoulders square, eyes on the green neon script haloing The Raven’s Nest across the street. The sign buzzed a low note, casting its glow over heads that turned, over umbrellas nodding like black mushrooms. The bar doors pushed out a wash of warm, beery breath when they opened. Faces came, faces went. She checked the time by habit, tilting her wrist to catch the watch face under the streetlamp's shiver—22:17. Her fingers were cold inside leather. He came out like he’d been born in wet alleyways—thin, long-limbed under a navy hoodie, head dipped. The messenger bag clipped against his hip with a dense, secret thud. Quinn had clocked him a dozen times over the last three weeks, moving in and out of the Nest, never staying long, always leaving a whisper of attention in his wake like a wake itself. The clique called him a courier; she called him a suspect. He turned his face up into the rain and scanned the street with a quick, nervous sweep. Her posture shifted. She slid off the phone box and into the sidewalk current. He sensed it. Animals did—something in the spine. He looked directly where she wasn’t and started walking and then, because she matched his pace across slick cobbles, because there was the certainty of a shadow not shaped like his, he ran. Quinn moved. Her boots slapped. Her breath timed with her feet. She cut through a gaggle of tourists and their wet shopping bags and went down the narrow slit of Berwick Street after him. He hurdled stacked crates, apple skins bright under the sodium lights, knocked a bin into her path with a clatter. She vaulted it with her hands and a curse that steamed off her lips. He took a right and a left she’d mapped a hundred times in calmer weather. She had his rhythm in her blood now, a metronome beating: left foot, right foot, van wheel spuming water at her shins, neon green reflecting like swamp water in the puddles. He dove into the underground at Tottenham Court Road. Down the stone steps, slick with rain. He jumped the barrier. Her ID flashed in her fist with a practiced flick. “Police,” she said, and the attendant went small and compliant as she ran past. He was a smear of motion on the Northern line platform, shadow among shadows. A train braked in a scream. Doors breathed open. He slipped through a gap. She lunged into a carriage as the chime scolded and the doors kissed her shoulder on the way in. The carriage smelled of wet wool and metal. People looked at her and then away. The hoodie kid was two carriages down through the inaccurate world of glass, his profile cutting and soft at once. He had the look of a stray who’d bitten before. He stared back at her through reflections, both of them doubled by the night. Quinn steadied herself, hand on the central pole, drip-drip-drip of rain off her coat. She watched his bag as if she could see through its canvas. It swung like a clock. A woman in a red coat met her eye, read something hard there, always easy to read. Quinn leaned her head back against the smeared window. The tunnels rushed by, black and absolute. She counted the stops in her bones. Leicester Square. Warren Street. Euston. The click-clack eked out the space between her heartbeat and the announcement voice. She thought, as she reached for breath, about Morris. Stupid to think of him, and of course she thought of him. How he’d laughed at one of her jokes that last week, chin tipped up so the overhead light put a halo round his hair. How she’d told him they should wait for backup, that she’d wait if he would, and how the alley where he’d gone instead had smelled like cold, damp stone and something sweet. And there had been nothing after that but the radio scratching and the way sound changed around absence. Camden Town. Doors opened, bodies moved. The suspect was fast, as if pulled on a string. He slipped into the mass, then took the stairs two at a time. Quinn followed, shouldered aside a teenager drenched in glitter and apology, and was up into open air again, into harder rain and the night rumbling over Camden High Street. He didn’t hesitate. He cut away from the light and the drunks and the kebab smoke. He slid down a side street that stank of piss and stale fryer oil, past the shuttered metal grin of a shop with a too-bright security light. His shoes splashed, and Quinn tracked him by the dirty crescents he left behind. He disappeared at the end of the cul-de-sac behind a fenced-off bit of brickwork that was meant to be forgotten. A gate that pretended to be welded shut. She saw the trick when he didn’t. He slipped through an inset iron door the color of old blood. By the time she reached it, the door had snicked back into place. The brick wall was blind. No handle. Just an iron panel flush with the world. Quinn put her palm flat to it. It was colder than the rain. She swallowed, looked up. The slope of the road cupped the sound here. The rattle of a train far below put its teeth against her bones. Her watch clicked in the hush—22:38. Her hair lay in dark wet commas against her forehead. A little box she had kept closed in her head since Morris—since the alley, since the hospital corridor with the coffee machine that would not stop churning—pried itself open. Are you really going to do this? it asked in his voice. Are you really going to follow? She took a step back. The iron door had no vantage points, no useful seam. The rain went on shouldering the world. She pressed her ear to it and heard, faint as a rumor, voices. Markets had a particular cadence no matter what they sold—haggling, the rise and fall of speech shaped by want. A scent threaded out, impossible through metal: cloves and ozone and the iron tang of blood. “Token,” said a voice behind her. Quinn turned fast, hand halfway to the fold of her coat where the weight sat. Two men stood at the mouth of the cul-de-sac. No—men would have blinked at rain. These didn’t. They had blades hung low under their coats, and the white dealing of scars round their knuckles looked knotted, deliberate. One wore a necklace of small bones polished like worry stones. The other had eyes the color of storm glass. “Don’t know what you think you’ve found,” the bone-necklace one said, London grit in his voice. He flicked his glance at her collar, at the line where a warrant card might have been. “But the door’s for those with business and those with tokens.” “Police business,” she said. The word tasted granite-solid even now. “My suspect just used that door.” Storm-glass lifted a shoulder, rain pearling off him. “Then he had business and a token. Do you?” Past them, an office light flickered in an upper window. Farther off, a siren sighed and went away. Quinn turned slightly so her body could move either direction if it came to it. She weighed the distance from their hands to their knives, the angle of the nearest escape. She didn’t recognize their tattoos, but she knew the weight of men who’d put themselves between a threshold and the uninvited. “Step back from the door, love,” the bone man said, almost kind. “Market night. Not for you.” Market. The word slid in like oil into water. They knew that she knew. Her chest was tight with the knowledge she should already have turned away and radioed the station, said words like unlawful gathering and probable dealing. Waited for a dozen uniforms under strict orders to observe and not spook. But she could see the edge of a world cut into this one with surgical care, in the way the air bent around the iron panel, and she was already walking a knife. She heard the scrape of another bolt on the other side of the door. The iron panel sighed open an inch, furrowed by light the color of a healing bruise. A tall man with a first-aid bag slung over his shoulder emerged, arguing over it with someone inside—a voice in Spanish that apologized with charm. He was thirty at the outside, olive-skinned, hair cropped in tight curls beaded with rain. A small medallion shone at the V of his wet collar. When his sleeve rode back to push the bag up, she saw the skitter of an old scar along his left forearm. He looked up and saw her and, without missing a beat of his ongoing apology, shut his mouth. “Quinn,” he said, surprise flattening to worry. “You shouldn’t be here.” The men at the alley mouth shifted toward him like dogs eased by their handler. “Tomás,” she said, because somewhere in six months of files and photographs and names scribbled on the backs of receipts, she had clocked him. Former paramedic. Off-book medic for the clique. “Open the door.” “I’m not part of this,” he said in a voice that hadn’t lost Spain even in this weather. “I patch people up so they don’t die. That’s all. And even that’s not safe for me.” He glanced at the guards like he wasn’t sure which way the knives would go if she reached. The rain drilled at them. Quinn met his eyes, and for a moment the scene collapsed into the shape of a hospital corridor at four in the morning and a man in blue scrubs pinning a cup under a coffee machine to stop it overflowing. He had the same tired compassion. The same readiness to do a thing because it was right, not because anyone would reward it. “What’s through there?” she asked, stupid question on its face. But she wanted him to name it. “Somewhere you can’t go,” he said gently. “Somewhere with rules you won’t like.” “Tell him to move,” said Storm-glass, impatience in the knife of his stance. Tomás lifted a hand without looking. “Cálmate. This is not the fight.” His eyes found Quinn’s again. Closed, opened. “You’re chasing the wrong kind of quarry in there.” “He killed a teenager two nights ago,” she said. Not proven, not yet, but the bag and the way he ran and the string of overdoses that hadn’t made sense lined up under her tongue as she said it. “He put something into kids and watched them die. Don’t tell me not to chase that.” Rain tapped the Saint Christopher at his throat like a drummer’s finger. He took a breath in through his nose. “I haven’t seen him hurt a child. I won’t do your job for you. But if you go in without a token, they’ll do it to you.” He stepped back, turned to the door. The knife-men stayed, making a screen with their bodies that wasn’t a wall. Tomás spoke into the crack of the iron panel, voice soft, hitch of a syllable her ear couldn’t place. The door opened another inch. Light pulsed around him. Voices lifted in a language that was not one she knew, mouth shapes wrong for human throats. Someone hissed. Tomás answered and whatever heat had gathered there cooled. He looked back over his shoulder. “If I let you through, it won’t be a friend’s favor. It will be because I don’t want to see you die here on the pavement and bleed down to them through the cracks. If you go in, you don’t draw your gun. You don’t shout police. You don’t make any bargains. You walk. You watch. You go out again when I tell you. Or you don’t come out at all. Decide.” His face was very open. The rain didn’t care that it had already soaked them. Quinn thought of Morris. She thought of the bag knocking the suspect's hip, the gut-deep certainty of a pattern she’d been trying to pin to the wall of her mind. She thought of the wards he’d brought to the Nest, the way guys like this courier orbited men who never dirtied their hands. She thought of being forty-one and clearer now than she’d ever been about what she could live with. She slid her palm along her coat away from the gun, held both hands where Tomás and the wardens could see them. She nodded once. “Open it.” Tomás’s shoulders lost a fraction of their tension, as if he’d been holding the answer himself. He spoke again into the door, murmuring consent, plea or promise, and then it sighed and opened. Air moved, not like a draught but like someone poured the Atlantic through a keyhole. The scent hit her again—clove and copper and something green and old. The darkness beyond wasn’t dark the way a tunnel should be. Lights hung from chains, their little suns strange colors, green-blue and bruised violet. People moved there, bending the air around them. “Token?” said Bone-necklace, one last test. Tomás reached into his pocket, pulled out something small. It wasn’t a coin. It was a sliver of polished bone on a waxed cord, old finger marks glossy along its curve. He held it out. “Borrowed,” he said to her. “You give it back.” Quinn took it between finger and thumb. It was warm from his hand. She felt something prickle in her spine where it touched her skin, as if the memory of the bone it had been belonged to more than one body. She didn’t show that. She stepped through the door. The Veil Market opened under Camden like someone had shoveled time out of the ground. The tunnel was a swept ribcage, old tile and vaulting brick quilted with soot. Stalls grew along the central platform like fungi, wired and lashed, lanterns strung like fallen stars. People had carved out their own geometries, and all of it hummed with bargaining. English threaded with Portuguese, Urdu, Irish, something that slid like oil along the ear and made her hairs lift. A man with no pupils poured silver-gray powder into a folded paper. A woman in a coat of raven feathers sold mirrors that did not reflect her hands. A child counted copper disks with prints sanded off them. On a rope, little bags of herbs dangled in bundles alongside dried seahorses. On a table, jars glowed foxfire blue, labeled in a spidery hand: winter-kite, dragon’s saliva, quiet heart. A smell like roasted sugar prickled her eyes. Quinn throttled the instinct to stare, to inventory. She let her gaze skate. The sliver of bone in her pocket dragged on her awareness like a tide. Tomás came at her shoulder, easy on the surface in a way that screamed don’t touch anything. “Keep left,” he murmured. “Don’t look at the—” A woman offered Quinn a bracelet of red twine and a look that was nothing like a look. Quinn moved left. She moved her breath where Tomás wanted it. She saw him then. The courier, hood up, threaded through the crush without touching anyone. He had slipped his bag around his front like a shield, one hand inside it. He stopped at a stall draped with blue cloth and old photographs. An old man with a scalp tattooed in tiny symbols reached up with hands that had been inking those same signs for decades. The courier set something on the table. Light wobbled. The old man’s mouth made a slow circle. Quinn’s feet started toward him without asking her. Tomás’s hand closed on her sleeve, not forceful, but firm. “No,” he said without looking like he’d said anything. “Not like that.” “He’ll walk,” she hissed back. “He’ll walk and I’ll lose him again and a kid will be dead by the weekend.” “Or you’ll move wrong in their house and you will be dead by midnight.” His eyes were not warm just then. They were flat, stainless steel. “Pick your martyrdoms carefully.” A trio of men in coats that matched only in their unloveliness slid along the periphery like loose teeth, glancing. Wardens, Tomás had called them with his posture. Enforcers of whatever laws governed this place. One of them had a smile tattooed where a scar had closed his left lip. Quinn forced her shoulders down, forced her body into stillness while something in her chest wanted to spring. The courier passed a parcel the size of a child’s lunchbox across the blue cloth, and the old man opened it, his breath hitching on wonder or fear. Smoke rolled out and folded back on itself like ribbon. Words spooled under the sound of the crowd. She read none of their lips. She read the courier’s eyes: calculating, pleased at a thing delivered. Paid. He lifted a corner of the blue cloth and palmed a smaller object from a nest of paper. His hands were quick and neat. He slid it into his hoodie pocket with a touch that seemed reverent. “Now,” Tomás said low. “Now you do what you do.” “What’s that?” she said, already angling, already measuring the line between stalls, checking the nearest faces, mapping exits that weren’t exits. “Watch,” he said. “Remember. Don’t be brave.” He peeled away from her and moved into the crowd like water in a red vein. Quinn’s mind laughed at don’t be brave and then silenced itself. She stepped through a break in the traffic, close enough to feel the brush of the courier’s hoodie against her sleeve. His head turned fractionally and he saw her, really saw her, and there it was—the thing she’d been chasing since the Nest spit him out. Not panic. Recognition. Dismissal, immediate and smooth. “Detective,” he said almost conversationally as he pivoted away. His accent was London overlaid with somewhere else, the city’s half a dozen rivers of sound. “You’ll get yourself killed for a headline.” She didn’t reach for the gun. She put out her hand and caught the strap of his bag instead. The fabric bit her palm. He pivoted with it, a dance step, used her own grip to pull her weight forward as he ducked, slide-stepped under her arm, and then there were strong fingers on her elbow that weren’t his. “Ah-ah,” smiled Scar-Lip, the tattooed grin stretching wrong. “No stripes here. No shouting. You put your hands in your pockets and you walk. Or we feed you to a train that hasn’t come in seventy years.” “Let go,” she said, quiet, her jaw too tight to be a smile. She showed her hands open. She felt for the watch on her wrist because she needed a second anchor in a crowd of unmoored rules. It was 23:02. Her breath sounded too loud to her and not at all to anyone else. The courier melted, his shoulders dissolving into cloth and bodies. He glanced back once, not a taunt, a punctuation mark. Then he was a seam that closed and couldn’t be found. Quinn drew a soft breath, calibrated her expression to bored interest. Scar-Lip held her elbow a beat longer, then let it go when she didn’t yank away. The old man at the blue cloth had shut the lunchbox again and was running his fingers over the hinge as if it was an old wound that had healed wrong. The air smelled of lightning struck a long time ago. Tomás reappeared a breath later, a paper bag in his hand as if he’d just bought oranges. He looked at her eyes, then at the empty space where the courier had been. His mouth pressed flat. “You said watch,” she said. “Sí,” he said, not triumphant, exactly. “I did.” They walked. They didn’t talk. The Market watched them watch it back. A woman with a scalpel smile offered Quinn a thimble of something black. She shook her head. A man selling birds in wooden cages lifted one and it looked at her with human severity. The whole place operated on understanding and debt, on an economy she didn’t yet know. Knowledge cost. Ignorance cost more. At the door, Tomás stopped. He took the bone token from her with hands that didn’t touch her skin. “I hope your boy didn’t kill anybody,” he said. “I hope your fear is bigger than your proof.” He looked past her then, into the Market, as if counting who had seen and who would remember. “Don’t come back alone.” “Are you offering to hold my hand?” she asked, because the gun she wanted was the joke. He didn’t rise to it. “I’m offering you a way not to die before you do any good.” He held the door. Rain came in sideways, eager, relieved. Quinn stepped out into it and felt the veined cold of the world wrap her again. The iron panel exhaled behind her. The alley was the alley once more. Sirens somewhere else. Drunks laughing. Life on this side had the idiot courage not to know. She stood with rain running over her scalp like a hand and looked at the ground. Her reflection wobbled in a puddle, went thin with every drop. Her watch said 23:19. She wiped rain from the face and let her hand fall. She had lost him, yes. She had seen a world that had taken her partner’s life and then tucked itself into the seams of London, warm and living and terrible. She had a smell in her nose she couldn’t un-smell, a color in her eye she couldn’t un-see, and a resolve that tasted like iron. She pulled out her phone, thumbed it alive, and held it until the photo of Morris lit it with someone else’s past. She didn’t make the call. Patrol could circle all night and never find the seam. This was hers now, a territory drawn in bones and rules. The Market moved every full moon, her informant notes had said. She glanced up at the sky that the rain hid and knew, bone-deep, that it was full. Quinn put her phone away and walked into the rain and out of the cul-de-sac, back into Camden’s noise. She would sleep, or not. She would come back. She would do the work slow. She would not be brave and then she would be, at the exact second it mattered.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
30.7692% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags26
adverbTagCount8
adverbTags
0"the bone man said, almost kind [almost]"
1"she said, because somewhere in six months of files and photographs and names scribbled on the backs of receipts, she had clocked him [somewhere]"
2"he said gently [gently]"
3"he said without looking like he’d said anything [like]"
4"she hissed back [back]"
5"he said almost conversationally as he pivoted away [almost conversationally away]"
6"she said, quiet, her jaw too tight to be a smile [too]"
7"he said, not triumphant, exactly [exactly]"
81.7137% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)
wordCount3828
totalAiIsmAdverbs7
found
0
adverb"carefully"
count1
1
adverb"gently"
count1
2
adverb"slightly"
count1
3
adverb"really"
count3
4
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"carefully"
1"gently"
2"slightly"
3"really"
4"very"
100.0000% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.0000% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
73.8767% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)
wordCount3828
totalAiIsms10
found
0
word"churning"
count1
1
word"flickered"
count1
2
word"flicked"
count1
3
word"calculating"
count1
4
word"calibrated"
count1
5
word"furrowed"
count1
6
word"weight"
count3
7
word"dance"
count1
highlights
0"churning"
1"flickered"
2"flicked"
3"calculating"
4"calibrated"
5"furrowed"
6"weight"
7"dance"
100.0000% Cliche density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.0000% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences302
matches(empty)
100.0000% Filter word density
Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount3
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences302
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"tended to"
1"started to"
100.0000% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount4
totalSentences327
matches
0"used that door"
1"knew that she"
2"care that it"
3"that?” she"
100.0000% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs79
mean47.94
std33.31
cv0.695
sampleLengths
0116
192
255
3114
444
5106
631
758
895
9115
1047
1128
1255
1329
1418
1570
166
1772
1844
1916
2017
2170
2217
2385
24121
2511
2615
2734
2853
2968
3017
3113
3213
3328
3455
3547
3676
3778
3815
3971
4027
4192
426
4344
4445
455
46154
4744
488
4929
100.0000% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤5% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences302
matches
0"was meant"
1"been belonged"
100.0000% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs605
matches
0"was running"
94.0000% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount3442
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"slide-stepped under her"
adverbCount91
adverbRatio0.02643811737361999
lyAdverbCount10
lyAdverbRatio0.002905287623474724
100.0000% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences327
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.0000% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences327
mean11.58
std8.27
cv0.714
sampleLengths
09
114
232
319
414
54
618
76
817
912
1035
1111
1217
133
1411
153
165
1733
182
193
206
2123
2220
2314
2415
2531
269
277
284
2910
3014
3114
326
333
345
3519
368
377
3820
3910
4014
4114
4212
435
4417
459
467
477
482
492
36.2385% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats45
diversityRatio0.28134556574923547
totalSentences327
uniqueOpeners92
59.6154% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags26
fancyCount12
fancyTags
0"she said, and the attendant went small and compliant as she ran past (say, go run)"
1"he said, surprise flattening to worry (say, surprise flattening worry)"
2"she said, because somewhere in six months of files and photographs and names scribbled on the backs of receipts, she had clocked him (say, photograph names scribbled clock)"
3"he said in a voice that hadn’t lost Spain even in this weather (say does have not)"
4"he said gently (say gently)"
5"he murmured (murmur)"
6"he said without looking like he’d said anything (say say)"
7"she hissed back (hiss)"
8"he said almost conversationally as he pivoted away (say almost conversationally pivote away)"
9"smiled Scar-Lip, the tattooed grin stretching wrong (smile tattoo)"
10"she said, quiet, her jaw too tight to be a smile (say, be)"
11"he said, not triumphant, exactly (say, does not triumphant)"
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