Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMRAQPAPGPSZ9A63NY3EA21

Run Details

Duration:
2m
Cost:
$0.004201
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.

Model response

AI
The Veil Market lay beneath Camden like a wound kept damp with moth-curled light. The stairwell exhaled cold air in shallow puffs, the kind you feel more in your bones than in your lungs. Harlow Quinn paused on the last step, letting the worn leather of her left wristwatch kiss the pulse at her wrist, a small, respectful torque against the tremor of anticipation. Her partner on this call would be a spare, a colleague who thought he’d seen every trick the city could conjure. She did not look at him when he spoke; she weighed the cadence of the words the way a marksman weighs wind through a scope. The bottom of the stairs opened into a corridor that hummed with a sleepy neon murk. The air carried the tang of old copper and something else, something metallic and sweet, as if a metal shop had bled into a library. Lanterns flickered along the walls, their light catching on surfaces that did not always belong to the same world. The Veil Market did not exist in the daytime sense of a market; it existed in a memory you couldn’t quite place and in the breath of a rumor you could not quite shake from your sleeve. The body lay where the corridor opened into a larger, ash-dusted chamber—an arch of a space the market had carved for itself and then forgotten to clean. The corpse wore a cloak that once would have shouted status—velvet threaded with silver filaments—now dulled, edges curling like dried leaves. The face was pale, the skin almost waxy, as if the person had stood too long in a kiln and forgot to soften. The mouth lay slack, the jaw stubbornly still as if the creature inside had decided to stop listening to the world outside. Colleague’s voice cut through the hush, clipped as a blade. “No obvious exits from this room, Quinn. No sign of a struggle, no weapon left in reach. It doesn’t add up.” Harlow did not look away from the body. She took in the arrangement, the faint scuff marks on the tile, the way the body lay too perfectly along a seam in the floor, the way the air tasted of old coins and something faintly electrical. “No weapon, you say. But look at the wrists,” she intoned, almost to herself, and then aloud enough for him to hear, “fibers snagged on the edge of the cloak, as if someone tried to pull him forward while keeping him still.” Her finger traced a curl of fabric at the shoulder, seeing not just the cloth but the present and past of the man who wore it. She stepped closer, careful to leave the distance the scene demanded. The veins in her own hands had a tremor she would not cede to the night. Her partner—DS Morris’s old partner in another life, not to be confused with the memory she kept like a talisman—would have found the tremor telling. He would have fetched a chalk line instead of standing there like a statue. The market’s hush, though, had a way of deepening when someone lingers near the dead. It spread through the stalls with the hush of whispered secrets. The stalls were not arranged as a sane marketplace would arrange a maze of commerce; they were placed as if someone had drawn a map with a bleeding fingertip and left the page to dry too soon. The color was not color at all but the memory of color—the way a bruise remembers the hit long after the bruise becomes a rumor about you. The bone token on the floor near the vendor’s jacket caught Harlow’s eye as if it had a code carved into it she could read with the tip of her boot. The token was small, white as a bone you could not tell from animal or human without the cut of a careful eye. It lay on its flat side, edge catching the light as if it glowed from inside. “Bone token,” the colleague said again, as if repeating might anchor a theory. “Entry credential, or a trap?” “Depends on what you want the market to be,” Harlow replied, not softly but with a cadence meant to steady a partner’s breathing: measured, controlled. “The Veil Market accepts rumors, but it does not bless incompetence.” She bent down, not to touch the token, but to test the air around it. Her gloved fingertips traced the air above the token’s surface, a microcosm of what the space held: a pulse of something old and potent that clung to the bone like a memory. The market’s current location, she remembered, was beneath Camden in an abandoned Tube station, a place where the city’s gravity seemed to loosen its grip on the sky above. “The entry requires a token,” she said, more to herself than to him. “There is a token here, and it is not for a ritual opening. It’s for an import into the market—the market’s own passport. If this token is here, someone wanted to bring something in, or take something out, in a controlled way.” The colleague shifted, the movement a tell of someone uneasy with metaphors and the phrase “supernatural energy” that often accompanied them. He was a practical device, a man who trusted the more ordinary physics of a crime scene: footprints, fingerprints, the slow spill of blood that could tell the time. Harlow’s eyes travelled over the space with the economy of a soldier counting ammunition. The floor bore a line of smudges that extended toward a wall fitted with a panel of glass as if a stall had been pressed into the wall, the glass now a river of reflections. On the other side of the glass, faint signs—braids of sigils, a shimmer of something like heat haze—clung to a booth that had clearly served as a meeting point for buyers and sellers of things not found in ordinary shops. The sigils looked fresh, not washed away by rain or time, and their edges were sharp enough to cut through the silence between two breaths. Her gaze completed the circuit of the room, landing on a chair, a table, an arrangement of vendor ware that looked ceremonial rather than practical. A set of glass vials rested on a velvet pad; each vial held a liquid that looked alive—glowing with a soft, spectral light that ebbed and flowed with some internal rhythm. The scent of beeswax, old book leather, and something sour—the aftertaste of a spell that had not quite finished its work—hung in the air. The colleague coughed, a dry sound that suggested he preferred the quick, obvious conclusion. “I’m telling you, this is a staged death. The absence of wounds—no blood, no bruising—someone wanted you to think it’s either ritual or suicide. There’s something about the positioning of the body that says ‘set piece.’” Harlow’s breath fogged slightly as she studied the corpse’s left hand, palm open toward the ceiling as if offering something the heavens might want to claim. A single finger curled inward, the knuckle showing a pale, almost translucent gleam—the sort of detail you might miss if you blinked too quickly. A feeling crawled along the back of her neck, not fear but a sense that she was being watched by the market itself, a thing with veined glass eyes that did not blink. She stood, once more letting her gaze travel the room as if she could map its subsequent chapters by skimming the air with her eyes. Her mind’s eye ran a quiet parallel process, the way a trained mine sweeper follows a line of quartz with a finger, noting every and any irregularity. The silence between them grew thick, and in that thickness, she found a sort of clarity the room did not want to share. “The absence of a wound doesn’t preclude a killer,” she said, almost to the air, almost to the piece of the room that was listening better than any witness. “If a supernatural agent is used, it may be a way to sever the body’s connection to the organism that would bleed out.” The colleague’s mouth tightened. He didn’t want to hear things that sounded like fiction. He wanted a simple culprit, a narrative with a neat line at the end. He spoke again, this time slower, as if dragging a reluctant idea from the mouth of a box. “If you want to believe there’s something beyond the usual, you can point to this token’s origin,” he said, “but the token could be a decoy. The market isn’t just a place of goods; it’s a place of signals. A token left in the wrong hands can be bait. A body left in the right hands can be a beacon. The real crime is the signal the market chooses to broadcast.” Harlow turned toward him with a precise, quiet energy that could have been mistaken for calm if anyone could mistake a storm for a lull in the room’s weather. She studied his face, the lines around his eyes, the way his jaw worked when he spoke with measured caution rather than decisive action. “Who lured a victim here?” “Who would want a body found among the artifacts, among the fey-scented glass and the sigiled walls?” the colleague offered, almost as if answering his own question. “There’s a crowd that uses the market to move information, not goods. This could be a misdirection, a way to hide a password or a name in something as innocent as a token.” A flicker of a smile—tired, wary, almost affectionate toward the idea of strategy—ransacked Harlow’s features for a breath of approval. She did not indulge it. The mark of a good detective, in her opinion, was not to applaud a plausible cover story but to test it, insist on the underlying mechanics until the surface story buckled. Her gaze fell again on the body, on the closed eyelids that were now a pale mirror to the ceiling. She pictured DS Morris, the partner she’d lost to something inexplicable, something that did not ask permission to enter a room and did not leave when the room demanded its own quiet. It reminded her that there were doors you could not simply slam shut; there were doors that closed of their own volition when you came too close. She turned away from the corpse and toward the back of the room where a stall’s curtain hung heavy and dark as a bruise. Her Veil Compass hung on her wrist, the brass casing catching the dim light, verdigris patina clouding its edges like a shallow sea that did not want to wake. The face of the compass bore sigils that looked as if they’d been drawn by a Shade artisan, a craftsman who understood that energy had a body as much as a person. The needle did not point to a direction but toward a seam, a space between stalls that suggested a hidden corridor rather than a door. “Stand by the stall,” she said to the colleague, her voice low and precise, like a command issued inside a cathedral that has learned to listen to every whisper. The colleague obeyed, stepping close enough that the air between them carried the faint crackle of energy that always followed Harlow when she moved. The stall behind which she felt drawn wore a heavy curtain that did not correspond to any of the proper shopfronts—the sort of out-of-place addition that told you someone wanted secrecy. She parted the curtain with a gloved hand, not giving the room more attention than a moment’s courtesy, but enough to reveal a narrow passage, a stairwell descending deeper into the bones of the old station. The Veil Market’s architecture bent and folded in upon itself; rooms tucked behind other rooms, a corridor where the same light fell in opposite directions depending on where you stood. The market had a way of existing in a perpetual present: every doorway a past moment, every corner a rumor of a future. The passage exhaled to a quiet, vaulted space—an archive room of the market, perhaps, where the stored items slept behind glass and sigil-laden cases. The air here grew cooler, thicker with a scent that reminded Harlow of rain on copper coins. A shelf stood at the edge of the room, its contents sealed in small jars and urchin-sized vials containing powders, salt, and something that looked like dust made of starlight. On the shelf, a map lay spread out, edges curling under a feather-thin weight. The map showed the Veil Market’s current location, but there were lines that did not correspond to any known path. They seemed to twist in a way that suggested a route the market would follow during its moon-driven relocation. The lines moved as she watched, not by magic but by a force you could feel if you stood very still and listened: a constellation of tokens, traces of bone and runes—every token, she recognized, a note in a language someone hoped others would mistake for nonsense. Her eyes found a second story in the room—a small cabinet half-hidden behind the map. The cabinet door bore the same sigils etched into the Veil Compass—signs that promised protection, and perhaps, if misused, permission to step into something that should have stayed closed. The top of the cabinet hid a shallow drawer that looked robbed of its normal contents—except for one object: a second token, pristine, lying as if someone had set it down and then gone away forever. The colleague was slow to move, as if the presence of the tokens had cast a spell on him—a false calm that made him hesitant to touch anything that might belong to someone else’s plan. He spoke, softer now that they stood in this inner chamber, as if the walls themselves might hear too much and repeat it back to the wrong ear. “See how the token here is untouched, not misplaced by a hurried scavenger’s hand? The other token on the floor—clean and bright because it’s recent—suggests this space was used to stage a meeting, perhaps to exchange something for passage or to signal the return of a figure who knows the market’s hides better than most vendors.” Harlow mulled the possibility with the careful patience she’d learned in a career of surgeries and stakeouts. Her partner’s death, she reminded herself, had not come with a neat cause; it had come with a riddle in the dark—an omen she’d never fully understood. She did not want to be the detective who solved a crime by accepting the obvious. The obvious is rarely a trap; the obvious is a trap’s bait. The Veil Compass’s needle gave a tiny, almost inaudible tremor, as if the instrument itself did not wholly approve of being used in such a manner, but could not resist guiding where guidance was due. It pointed toward the back wall of the archive space, where a seam appeared as if it had always been there, a mere whisper of a crack in stone. A draft slid through the seam, a breath that did not belong to the room’s stillness. Harlow pressed a gloved palm to the seam, feeling the faint vibration of something alive behind it, something that responded to the presence of the compass, not to human hands. The line of sigils on the cabinet’s edge glowed faintly as if awakened by a secret that only the right combination of tokens could wake. She did not move the seam with her hands; she used the compass again, as if coaxing the room to reveal its other half by following the instrument’s guidance. The seam yielded to a deliberate push and revealed a narrow passage that led not upward or downward, but inward, deeper into a place where light did not reach and the market’s hum changed its pitch, becoming a kind of echo. The passage smelled of old rain, of stone that had waited centuries for someone to arrive and listen to what it had to tell. The market’s usual echo—voices echoing in stalls like coins dropped in a tin can—fell away here, replaced by a singular, measured tick-tock, as though a clock were wound by the current itself. The corridor opened into a vault of sorts, a room that had the air of a chapel transformed into a storage space. Rows of shelves bore jars filled with powders that shimmered with a mild, unsettling light, as if the jars contained not powders but small captured constellations. In the center stood a freestanding rack of metal rods topped with a glass cabinet—an improvised altar, perhaps, or a device designed to coax a 'rift' to manifest in this hidden place. On the altar-like structure sat an object Harlow recognized with a curdling mix of reverence and fear: a small brass case, etched with sigils of protection, its lid protruding slightly as if inviting someone to lift it, or warning someone to never lift it at all. The Veil Compass’s needle nudged toward the case with a patient insistence that suggested it knew the case contained the market’s true secret rather than a mere trinket. “What is this?” the colleague breathed, the word almost swallowed by the space’s stillness. “A thing that belongs to a Shade artisan, or at least to someone who learned their craft from a Shade,” she said, her voice a measured thread in the quiet. “The case houses a different sort of token.” The case was unlocked by a touch she did not give. The lid opened of its own accord, or rather the space opened around her, as if the chamber could sense a truth about to be spoken and prepared to bear it into the room. Inside lay a single item, a small whistle carved from bone—humble in size but heavy with meaning. The bone token, she realized, duplicated but with a different purpose: a signal to summon or recall a doorway, a way back from the seam to the market above. The colleague stepped closer, his breath a white whisper in the cold. “If the token summons doors, then perhaps this is a way to move something—someone—out of the market’s current location without anyone noticing. The tokens become a map to a safe exit, a path to a place where the market is not supposed to be seen in its current hour.” Harlow’s eyes narrowed, not angrily but with the arrested attention of a hunter spotting a dart sting through air. The possibility was dangerous and elegant in its simplicity. The market’s relocation schedule required timing; a window existed when the token could be used to slip out of the market’s arc of presence and into a secret corridor that was not the ordinary world. It explained how, in a room full of superstitions and goods that could melt into the background, someone had chosen a perfect moment to stage a death that looked like ritual, while at the same time moving something of greater value through the seam. The bones—token or whistle—told a double story: the body’s appearance as if posed for a ritual, and the tokens’ true function as a navigation tool to a hidden path. The “why” of it pressed against Harlow’s ribs with a slow, inevitable ache she carried from the death of her partner and the years since that loss. Why stage a death here? Why plant a token on the body? Who would gain from such a thing, and what would they do with a doorway that could break the market’s delicate balance? Her mind’s eye flicked back to what she’d been trained to do: follow the signs, not the headlines. The market’s sign, in this case, was not the body alone but the space’s movement—the way energy pooled near the seam and hummed with a frequency her senses could catch only if she stood very still and listened to the air as it spoke. If the survivor of a crime were a doorway, then the doorway needed a key. The key was a token, a specific combination of bone and glyphs. The token she held in her pocket—back at the station, back in the world—might be a counterpart to the one here, a second key that could be used to lock something away again. The colleague, still at a distance, commented with a kind of grudging awe. “So, this isn’t about whoever died; it’s about whoever used the tokens to command access. The market becomes a stage; the tokens and the case become, in effect, a script. The killer writes a line that looks like ceremony but functions like a direct route to somewhere else.” Harlow did not smile. A smile would have betrayed the careful shaping of her jaw, the controlled breath she kept even when the room’s chill pricked her skin like a trace of frost. She stepped back to the door, letting the chamber swallow her again. Her thoughts moved not in the space of a single crime but in a lattice of causation: token, doorway, death, market relocation, and the ever-present compulsion to know who stood to gain from shifting a crime into the maw of a legend the city would be slow to admit any market could sustain. She turned to the colleague, who now rose behind her as though drawn by gravity rather than by intent. “We’ll pull a cross-check,” she said. “The bone token is a concurrent signal with the market’s relocation schedule, but the timeline won’t align with the public record. The public sees the death as a ritual; I will make the ritual disclose the motive. The token here is a second key—one the killer would know, one that belongs to the market’s own system of secrecy. If we can locate the other token, we can map the path the killer used.” Her voice sounded steadier than her hands felt. She was not the type to lean on luck or fancy devices alone, even ones as potent as the Veil Compass. The compass often appeared to be a living thing, a sentinel that reminded her the world had more doors than windows and more lives than minutes in which to tell a truth. She pocketed the bone token from the floor and let the other token in the cabinet rest where it lay, waiting for a decision she would not risk making aloud yet. The map, the sigils, the corridor’s breath—all of it could be misread, could be manipulated by someone who understood the market’s language in the way a poet understands metaphor. A single misread could send them chasing a phantom, a chase that would leave the bodies of the city’s witnesses to speak for themselves. Outside the vault, the corridor’s hum resumed its low, patient note. The market's hidden architecture threaded itself around them again, as if the walls were listening and deciding what to reveal, what to conceal. The tick-tock grew a touch louder, a heartbeat that asked an unanswerable question: what if every token carried a memory of a door one should never open? What if the market’s relocation was not a merciful mercy but an enforced amnesia, designed to erase certain truths from the map? Harlow crossed her arms, the weight of her own suspicions pressing into the linen of her jacket. She looked at the body again, then past it toward a seam in the wall that now seemed less a doorway and more a hinge—an artifact made for movement, for an escape, for someone who did not want to be seen. “We’ll secure the scene,” she told the colleague, though the words sounded almost ceremonial, as if she were giving an order to someone else’s memory rather than to this room. “We’ll pull the market’s records, the token logs, the relocation schedule, and the vendor lists. Someone’s been busy knitting a false past to cover a real future. We’ll find the thread.” The colleague nodded, relief and reluctance warring in his features. He would not admit the possibility that something beyond the ordinary had walked into their case, not yet, not even in the privacy of their morning coffee. But he did not argue, either. He had the sense to stand back while she worked, to let the room reveal what it would reveal if given time, patience, and a willingness to listen to what the surface would not tell. Back at the main chamber’s entrance, the Veil Compass rested in her other hand now, its small brass face catching a stray ray of light that had survived the market’s deeper shadows. The needle flicked, a quiet shiver of silver, then steadied, pointing again toward the hidden corridor. The direction was not a guarantee but a promise: if she followed the needle, she might come to a doorway that would answer questions she’d not dared to voice aloud, and perhaps, one day, to a truth about DS Morris’s death that still haunted her sleep with the sound of something half-human and half-terrific breathing somewhere just behind the door. The candlelight of the market flickered, and a whisper skated along the edge of vision—like someone brushing a fingertip along the inside of a skull and never quite touching the bone. It felt, in the peculiar stillness of the Veil Market, as if the walls themselves held their breath, waiting to see whether the investigator would press the wrong seam and wake what slept between the world and the rumor of what lies beyond. The colon of certainty snapped into place, however, as Harlow’s mind stitched the scraps of observation into a coherent needle-trail. The tokens, the hidden vault, the seam through which a doorway might be coaxed into daylight, the relocation that would erase a crime as easily as a market forgets a seller when the moon moves again: all these pieces fitted with a dangerous elegance. It was not enough to say the market contained wickedness; it was enough to say the market invited those who could move through its language with a patient, almost ceremonial precision—the kind of precision that reminded her of a partner long gone but not forgotten, of a mind that could translate a city’s whispers into a plausible truth. Her breath steadied. The case would require the kind of work she had practiced for eighteen years—a discipline forged in the crucible of a city that refused to be explained away in a single, tidy sentence. A killer, a market, a doorway: the story would come out on its own terms, if she let it. She would follow the compass where it led, even if it led through shadows she could not call by name. When she finally spoke, it was to the room soundlessly listening to them both. “We’re not done. Not even close. The market wants the truth to stay hidden, and it will try again. We’ll be ready when it does.” The colleague offered a short, breathless nod, as if he too could hear the promise of something bending behind the walls. And Harlow Quinn—Detective Quinn, the assassin of complacency when it wore a badge and a uniform—felt that familiar, terrible pull toward the seam, toward the hidden doorway that waited like a patient authority to be acknowledged. The Veil Market would keep its own counsel until she earned the right to hear it speak. And until that moment, she would listen with the Veil Compass’s patient needle and the memory of a partner who had learned the hard way that some truths do not arrive with fireworks; they arrive with a quiet, unanswerable insistence that the world is not as it seems. She stepped back into the corridor, letting the market’s breath return to the room as she moved forward. The plan would take shape—careful, methodical, and unafraid to touch what some people preferred to leave alone. The tokens would be read, the doorway tested for its real purpose, and the truth—whatever it was—would be carried out of the Veil Market not on a rumor, but on the shoulders of a detective who had learned to listen to what the air itself was trying to tell her.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
0.0000% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags12
adverbTagCount6
adverbTags
0"she intoned, almost to herself, and then aloud enough for him to hear, Her finger traced a curl of fabric at the shoulder, seeing not just the cloth but the present and past of the man who wore it [almost then just]"
1"the colleague said again, as if repeating might anchor a theory [again]"
2"Harlow replied, not softly but with a cadence meant to steady a partner’s breathing: measured, controlled [softly]"
3"she said, more to herself than to him [more]"
4"she said, almost to the air, almost to the piece of the room that was listening better than any witness [almost almost]"
5"she told the colleague, though the words sounded almost ceremonial, as if she were giving an order to someone else’s memory rather than to this room [almost rather]"
85.3003% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)
wordCount4762
totalAiIsmAdverbs7
found
0
adverb"perfectly"
count1
1
adverb"quickly"
count1
2
adverb"slightly"
count2
3
adverb"softly"
count1
4
adverb"very"
count2
highlights
0"perfectly"
1"quickly"
2"slightly"
3"softly"
4"very"
100.0000% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.0000% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
55.9009% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)
wordCount4762
totalAiIsms21
found
0
word"beacon"
count1
1
word"sentinel"
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2
word"flickered"
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3
word"flicker"
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4
word"flicked"
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5
word"shimmered"
count1
6
word"spectral"
count1
7
word"velvet"
count2
8
word"pristine"
count1
9
word"methodical"
count1
10
word"anticipation"
count1
11
word"weight"
count2
12
word"echo"
count2
13
word"echoing"
count1
14
word"etched"
count2
highlights
0"beacon"
1"sentinel"
2"flickered"
3"flicker"
4"flicked"
5"shimmered"
6"spectral"
7"velvet"
8"pristine"
9"methodical"
10"anticipation"
11"weight"
12"echo"
13"echoing"
14"etched"
100.0000% Cliche density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
1
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
1"hung in the air"
100.0000% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences170
matches(empty)
100.0000% Filter word density
Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount4
narrationSentences170
filterMatches
0"feel"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"tended to"
2"appeared to"
100.0000% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences185
matches
0"understood that energy"
1"stalls that suggested"
52.3392% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs62
mean75.79
std25.25
cv0.333
sampleLengths
0110
197
293
331
4113
566
690
770
818
936
1076
1155
1250
13114
1480
1550
1683
1775
1852
1946
2071
2158
2260
2356
2479
25110
2653
27120
2871
29100
3080
3163
3256
3372
3480
3584
3697
3780
3874
3914
4038
4191
4261
43107
4490
45122
4661
4798
4898
4961
100.0000% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤5% passive sentences
passiveCount8
totalSentences170
matches
0"were placed"
1"been pressed"
2"being watched"
3"been mistaken"
4"been drawn"
5"being used"
6"was unlocked"
7"been trained"
100.0000% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs607
matches
0"was listening"
1"were listening"
2"were giving"
3"was trying"
94.0000% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount4108
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"larger, ash-dusted chamber—"
adverbCount117
adverbRatio0.028481012658227847
lyAdverbCount19
lyAdverbRatio0.0046251217137293086
100.0000% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences185
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.0000% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences185
mean25.4
std12.62
cv0.497
sampleLengths
014
120
230
321
425
516
625
719
837
927
1021
1123
1222
1310
1421
158
1637
1768
1811
1916
2025
2114
2215
2311
2437
2527
2631
2723
2816
2913
305
3125
3211
3315
3432
3529
3613
3742
3821
3929
4014
4135
4240
4325
4425
4531
4624
4714
4836
4926
27.8378% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats41
diversityRatio0.1783783783783784
totalSentences185
uniqueOpeners33
8.3333% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags12
fancyCount8
fancyTags
0"she intoned, almost to herself, and then aloud enough for him to hear, Her finger traced a curl of fabric at the shoulder, seeing not just the cloth but the present and past of the man who wore it (intoned, aloud hear, trace does see not just wear)"
1"the colleague said again, as if repeating might anchor a theory (say again, anchor)"
2"Harlow replied, not softly but with a cadence meant to steady a partner’s breathing: measured, controlled (reply, mean breathe measured)"
3"she said, almost to the air, almost to the piece of the room that was listening better than any witness (say, listen)"
4"she said to the colleague, her voice low and precise, like a command issued inside a cathedral that has learned to listen to every whisper (say like issue learn listen)"
5"she said, her voice a measured thread in the quiet (say, voice)"
6"pressed (pressed)"
7"she told the colleague, though the words sounded almost ceremonial, as if she were giving an order to someone else’s memory rather than to this room (tell sound almost give)"
77.8654%