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Run: 2026-02-17-01KHMRSHYRTP51QWN6P3ERHWCX
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Model:
Claude Sonnet 4
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Thriller: chase through city streets
Duration:
39.1s
Cost:
$0.025836
Model input
System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
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Meta
AI
The rain hammered London's streets with relentless fury, turning the asphalt into a mirror that reflected the neon bleeding from shop windows and streetlights. Detective Harlow Quinn pressed herself against the brick wall of a narrow alley, her breath forming ghostly clouds in the frigid air. Water dripped steadily from the fire escape above, each drop finding its way past her collar despite her best efforts. Fifty meters ahead, Tomás Herrera ducked beneath a scaffolding and glanced back over his shoulder. His Saint Christopher medallion caught the light from a passing car, a brief golden flash before he disappeared around the corner onto Camden High Street. Quinn cursed under her breath and pushed off from the wall, her worn leather boots splashing through puddles as she gave chase. She'd been tracking Herrera for three weeks, ever since his name surfaced in connection with a series of strange medical supply thefts across North London. Hospital-grade morphine, surgical equipment, rare blood types—the kind of inventory that didn't just walk out of NHS facilities without inside help. The fact that Herrera had lost his paramedic license made him the perfect suspect, but something about this case felt different. Wrong. The same wrongness that had surrounded DS Morris's death three years ago. Quinn rounded the corner and spotted Herrera weaving between late-night revelers stumbling out of pubs. His olive skin glistened with rain, and that scar along his left forearm was visible even at this distance as he pushed through the crowd. She quickened her pace, her sharp jaw set with determination. Eighteen years on the force had taught her that suspects who ran usually had good reason to. A double-decker bus roared past, its headlights cutting through the downpour and temporarily blinding her. When her vision cleared, Herrera had vanished. Quinn sprinted to where she'd last seen him, scanning the street with military precision. Camden Market's entrance
loomed
to her left, its iron gates locked tight for the night. To her right, a narrow passage led between two Victorian terraces toward the old railway cutting. Then she saw it—a flash of movement in the shadows near a boarded-up entrance that shouldn't have existed. The wooden planks that should have sealed the opening hung at odd angles, as if they'd been
carefully
repositioned to appear intact from a distance. Quinn approached
cautiously
, her hand instinctively moving to the radio on her shoulder before stopping. How would she explain this to Control? That she
was chasing
a suspect into what
appeared to
be a sealed tunnel based on a hunch? She peered through the gap between the boards. Darkness stretched beyond, but she could hear
footsteps
echo
ing from somewhere deep underground. The sound had an odd quality to it, as if the space beyond was far larger than it should be. A musty scent drifted up from the opening—old earth and something else she couldn't identify. Something that made the hair on the back of her neck stand up. Quinn checked her
watch
. Twenty-three forty-seven. If she called for backup now, Herrera would be long gone by the time they arrived. But going down there alone violated every protocol she'd learned in her two decades of service. The smart play was to set up a perimeter and wait for him to surface. Another
echo
drifted up from below, followed by what sounded like distant voices. Multiple voices, speaking in languages she didn't recognize. This wasn't just a suspect fleeing through an abandoned tunnel—this was something bigger. She thought of Morris, found three days after he'd gone missing, in an alley not far from here. The coroner had ruled it a heart attack, but Morris had been thirty-four and fit. No history of cardiac issues. No explanation for the look of absolute terror frozen on his face or the strange symbols carved into the wall above where they'd found his body. Quinn pulled out her mobile and typed a quick text to DI Crawford: "Following suspect into tunnel system near Camden Market. Will report in when possible." She hesitated before hitting send, knowing Crawford would have her head for going in alone. But some instinct deeper than training told her that whatever was down there
was connected
to Morris's death, to the medical thefts, to all the cases that had started making less and less sense over the past three years. She sent the message and squeezed through the gap in the boards. The tunnel beyond was wider than she'd expected, its walls lined with old Victorian brickwork that disappeared into shadows beyond her phone's flashlight beam. The air grew warmer as she descended, and that strange scent intensified. Not just earth now—something organic and metallic, like copper pennies left in rich soil. Her
footsteps
seemed to
o loud in the confined space, but she could still hear movement ahead. The tunnel curved to the right, and as she rounded the bend, a faint glow became visible in the distance. Not electric light—something older, more primitive. Torchlight, maybe, or candles. The voices grew clearer as she approached, though the languages remained foreign. Spanish mixed with what might have been Latin, punctuated by English phrases spoken in accents she couldn't place. Quinn pressed herself against the tunnel wall and crept forward, grateful for the shadows that concealed her movement. The tunnel opened into a vast circular chamber that shouldn't have existed beneath Camden. Gas lamps mounted on wrought iron posts cast
dancing
shadows across stone walls covered in symbols that hurt her eyes to look at directly. Dozens of people moved between makeshift stalls, examining goods she couldn't identify from this distance. The air thrummed with barely contained energy, making her teeth ache. And there, near a stall selling what
appeared to
be bottles filled with glowing liquid, stood Tomás Herrera. He
was speaking
animatedly with a woman whose pale skin
seemed to
absorb the lamplight, and in his hands was a small cloth bag that he exchanged for something Quinn couldn't see. She fumbled for her radio, then remembered she was probably too far underground for it to work. Her phone showed no signal bars. Whatever this place was, she was
completely
cut off from backup. Herrera turned toward the tunnel she'd emerged from, and Quinn pressed herself deeper into the shadows. But his warm brown eyes swept past her hiding spot without recognition, focused on something behind her. Footsteps
echo
ed from the tunnel entrance—multiple sets, moving with purpose. Quinn's blood turned to ice as she realized she
was trapped
between whatever
was coming
down the tunnel and whatever this underground market represented. Her hand moved instinctively to her warrant card, then stopped. Something told her that her authority as a Metropolitan Police detective would mean nothing in this place that shouldn't exist. The
footsteps
grew closer, and she had seconds to decide: retreat toward whatever
was coming
down the tunnel, or step into the impossible market ahead and confront mysteries that might finally explain what had
happened to
Morris. Quinn checked her
watch
one last time—23:52—and made her choice.
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.0000%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
0
adverbTagCount
0
adverbTags
(empty)
74.7687%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)
wordCount
1189
totalAiIsmAdverbs
3
found
0
adverb
"carefully"
count
1
1
adverb
"cautiously"
count
1
2
adverb
"completely"
count
1
highlights
0
"carefully"
1
"cautiously"
2
"completely"
100.0000%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
24.3061%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)
wordCount
1189
totalAiIsms
9
found
0
word
"loomed"
count
1
1
word
"dancing"
count
1
2
word
"footsteps"
count
4
3
word
"echo"
count
1
4
word
"echoed"
count
1
5
word
"echoing"
count
1
highlights
0
"loomed"
1
"dancing"
2
"footsteps"
3
"echo"
4
"echoed"
5
"echoing"
100.0000%
Cliche density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
0
maxInWindow
0
found
(empty)
highlights
(empty)
100.0000%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
72
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Filter word density
Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
2
hedgeCount
5
narrationSentences
72
filterMatches
0
"watch"
hedgeMatches
0
"appeared to"
1
"seemed to"
2
"happened to"
100.0000%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
0
totalSentences
72
matches
(empty)
60.5777%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
22
mean
53.32
std
19.3
cv
0.362
sampleLengths
0
66
1
62
2
80
3
67
4
67
5
83
6
69
7
53
8
34
9
64
10
80
11
12
12
50
13
46
14
48
15
64
16
50
17
34
18
43
19
54
20
37
21
10
100.0000%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤5% passive sentences
passiveCount
2
totalSentences
72
matches
0
"was connected"
1
"was trapped"
100.0000%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
4
totalVerbs
200
matches
0
"was chasing"
1
"was speaking"
2
"was coming"
3
"was coming"
100.0000%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
1176
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
28
adverbRatio
0.023809523809523808
lyAdverbCount
15
lyAdverbRatio
0.012755102040816327
100.0000%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
72
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.0000%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
72
mean
16.29
std
7.79
cv
0.478
sampleLengths
0
24
1
22
2
20
3
15
4
25
5
22
6
25
7
21
8
21
9
1
10
12
11
15
12
25
13
10
14
17
15
15
16
7
17
14
18
15
19
16
20
18
21
25
22
15
23
7
24
18
25
8
26
13
27
20
28
15
29
13
30
4
31
2
32
16
33
16
34
15
35
13
36
8
37
13
38
18
39
15
40
5
41
26
42
41
43
39
44
12
45
24
46
12
47
14
48
16
49
20
82.8704%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
2
diversityRatio
0.5138888888888888
totalSentences
72
uniqueOpeners
37
100.0000%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
0
fancyCount
0
fancyTags
(empty)
90.7366%