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Run: 2026-02-17-01KHN0D9CAZZN7C96H16ZPWM7K
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Model:
Claude Sonnet 4
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Thriller: chase through city streets
Duration:
41.4s
Cost:
$0.025536
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System
You are an expert novelist with a gift for vivid, immersive prose. You write in tight third-person limited point of view with a strong narrative voice. Your prose is clean, precise, and engaging — you favor strong verbs, concrete details, and natural-sounding dialogue. You will be given a story bible (codex) containing canonical details about characters, locations, items, and lore. Use these details to ground your writing in the established world. Stay consistent with the codex. Write only the prose of the scene. Do not include titles, chapter headings, markdown formatting, or any commentary before or after the scene.
User/Human
<codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary.
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Meta
AI
The rain hammered London's streets with relentless fury, turning gutters into torrents and casting halos around every streetlight. Detective Harlow Quinn pressed her back against the brick wall of a Victorian terrace, her breath forming quick puffs in the October chill. Water dripped from her closely cropped salt-and-pepper hair as she peered around the corner, brown eyes scanning the narrow alley ahead. Fifty meters down, a figure in a dark coat moved with practiced stealth between the shadows. Tomás Herrera. She'd been tracking the former paramedic for three weeks, following a trail of medical supplies that had gone missing from various NHS facilities across North London. The thefts themselves weren't unusual—desperate addicts often targeted hospitals for painkillers. But the items disappearing told a different story: surgical instruments, rare antibiotics, and strangest of all, several vials of concentrated adrenaline and silver nitrate solution. Quinn adjusted her worn leather
watch
and checked the time. Half past midnight. The streets of Camden
were emptying
, leaving only the dedicated drinkers and the night shift workers to witness whatever was about to unfold. She'd lost her backup twenty minutes ago when Herrera had
suddenly
bolted from The Raven's Nest, abandoning his pint mid-conversation and slipping out through what she could have sworn was a solid wall. The memory of that impossible exit still gnawed at her. She'd been
watch
ing through the rain-streaked window, cataloging every patron in the dimly lit Soho bar. Maps and black-and-white photographs covered the walls, creating a labyrinth of shadows that made surveillance challenging. One moment Herrera had been there, his Saint Christopher medallion catching the amber light as he leaned forward to speak with someone she couldn't identify. The next, he
was gone
—not through the front entrance she'd been monitoring, but simply absent, as if the darkness itself had swallowed him. Military precision had carried her this far. Eighteen years of decorated service taught you to trust your training over your confusion. She'd circled the building, found the fire escape, and picked up his trail three blocks north. Now, as she shadowed him through the maze of Camden's back streets, that same training whispered warnings she couldn't quite articulate. Herrera paused at the mouth of a side street, his olive skin pale in the sodium glare. The scar along his left forearm was visible as he reached into his jacket, retrieving something small that glinted bone-white in his palm. He glanced over his shoulder, and for a moment Quinn thought he'd spotted her. But his warm brown eyes seemed focused on something beyond the physical world, searching the rain-soaked night for threats she couldn't perceive. She remembered the file photo from his NHS personnel record—younger then, before whatever had cost him his medical license. The official report cited "unauthorized treatment protocols and use of non-standard medications." When she'd pressed the administrator for details, the woman had grown evasive, mentioning only that several patients had reported unusual recovery rates and side effects that didn't match any known medical literature. Herrera moved again, turning down a street Quinn didn't recognize despite her years patrolling these neighborhoods. The buildings seemed older here, their Georgian facades weathered by more than just London's industrial grime. Gas lamps
flickered
between the modern streetlights, though she couldn't remember the council installing period lighting in this area. The rain took on a different quality too—still cold, still relentless, but somehow thicker, as if the water itself carried
weight
beyond moisture. Her quarry descended a set of stone steps she'd never noticed before, steps that led down from street level toward what should have been a solid foundation. Instead, the darkness below
seemed to
pulse with its own rhythm, like the slow breathing of some massive creature. The green glow of emergency lighting leaked up from the depths, but it wasn't the familiar fluorescent wash of London Underground stations. This light had an organic quality, shifting between emerald and amber in patterns that hurt to track directly. Quinn hesitated at the top of the steps. Every instinct screamed at her to call for backup, to establish a perimeter and wait for armed response units. But she thought of DS Morris, her partner of seven years, and the night three years ago when hesitation had cost her everything. They'd been pursuing a suspect through these same winding streets when Morris had radioed about strange sounds coming from beneath the pavement. She'd been two blocks away, coordinating with uniformed units, when his transmissions had cut to static. They'd found his body the next morning in an abandoned Tube station that hadn't appeared on any transport map. The official cause of death was heart failure, but she'd seen the look on his face—not pain, but wonder, as if he'd witnessed something beautiful and terrible in his final moments. The bone-white object in Herrera's palm caught the strange light as he held it up like a key or token. The darkness below
seemed to
recognize it, the pulsing glow intensifying in response. He looked back once more, and this time Quinn was certain he saw her. But instead of running, he nodded—a gesture that might have been acknowledgment or invitation—before disappearing into the depths. She pulled out her radio, thumb hovering over the transmit button. Standard procedure demanded she call it in, establish contact with control, and request additional units. But the static that greeted her attempt at transmission was the same electronic whisper she'd
heard that night
Morris died. Whatever lay beneath Camden's streets existed in a space where normal rules didn't apply. The worn leather of her
watch
strap was slick with rain as she checked the time again. Twelve thirty-seven. In eighteen years of service, she'd never encountered anything that made her question the fundamental nature of reality. But Morris was dead, Herrera was involved with something that defied explanation, and somewhere in the darkness below might be the answers she'd been seeking for three long years. Quinn holstered her radio and drew her torch instead. The beam cut through the rain like a blade, illuminating the stone steps that led down into London's hidden geography. Each step was worn smooth by countless feet, polished to a mirror sheen that reflected her light in
fractured
patterns. The air grew warmer as she descended, carrying scents that belonged in no London street—sandalwood, ozone, and something metallic that reminded her of old blood. At the bottom of the steps, a tunnel stretched away into darkness that
seemed to
absorb her torch beam. The walls were lined with Victorian brick, but symbols had been carved into the mortar between courses—geometric patterns that shifted and writhed in her peripheral vision. Ahead, she could hear voices speaking in languages she didn't recognize, the cadence musical but alien. Detective Harlow Quinn took a deep breath, tasting mysteries on the rain-soaked air, and stepped forward into the unknown.
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.0000%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
0
adverbTagCount
0
adverbTags
(empty)
91.3941%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism adverbs (57 tracked)
wordCount
1162
totalAiIsmAdverbs
1
found
0
adverb
"suddenly"
count
1
highlights
0
"suddenly"
100.0000%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
100.0000%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
74.1824%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <1% AI-ism words (140 tracked)
wordCount
1162
totalAiIsms
3
found
0
word
"flickered"
count
1
1
word
"fractured"
count
1
2
word
"weight"
count
1
highlights
0
"flickered"
1
"fractured"
2
"weight"
100.0000%
Cliche density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
0
maxInWindow
0
found
(empty)
highlights
(empty)
100.0000%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
62
matches
(empty)
100.0000%
Filter word density
Target: ≤12% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
2
hedgeCount
3
narrationSentences
62
filterMatches
0
"watch"
hedgeMatches
0
"seemed to"
100.0000%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤10% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
1
totalSentences
62
matches
0
"heard that night"
49.4962%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
16
mean
71.31
std
23.05
cv
0.323
sampleLengths
0
62
1
80
2
69
3
90
4
58
5
76
6
63
7
74
8
86
9
138
10
65
11
60
12
66
13
74
14
61
15
19
100.0000%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤5% passive sentences
passiveCount
2
totalSentences
62
matches
0
"was gone"
1
"were lined been carved"
100.0000%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤10% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
1
totalVerbs
182
matches
0
"were emptying"
100.0000%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
1153
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
31
adverbRatio
0.026886383347788378
lyAdverbCount
8
lyAdverbRatio
0.006938421509106678
100.0000%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
62
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
95.4890%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
62
mean
18.4
std
7.15
cv
0.389
sampleLengths
0
18
1
23
2
21
3
16
4
2
5
26
6
11
7
25
8
10
9
3
10
23
11
33
12
10
13
16
14
16
15
25
16
23
17
7
18
14
19
16
20
21
21
17
22
23
23
14
24
22
25
19
26
44
27
16
28
16
29
19
30
23
31
27
32
19
33
22
34
18
35
8
36
19
37
23
38
22
39
16
40
19
41
31
42
20
43
13
44
14
45
18
46
11
47
15
48
20
49
14
74.7312%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
2
diversityRatio
0.46774193548387094
totalSentences
62
uniqueOpeners
29
100.0000%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤30% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
0
fancyCount
0
fancyTags
(empty)
93.2525%